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Reviewer: pool718 (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 12:16 PM · On: Chapter 18
Now I'm in tears.
Reviewer: Nightchill (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 12:14 PM · On: Chapter 18
Well, Damn! I hope Edward gets his head out of his ass soon...
Reviewer: sugunary (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 12:13 PM · On: Chapter 18
noooooo, its going to send him over the edge if he doesnt go get her back- typical Edward send he away for her own good. AGGGGGhhhhh
Caant wait for the next update!
Reviewer: samitdamn (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 12:08 PM · On: Chapter 18
OMG this update killed me!
Thanks for posting. I've been jonsing for an update for awhile.
Ugh, I wish Rehabward didn't let his fear take over and let Bella go. I hope he tries to still get help so that he can be better for her and not relapse... but I'm worried. Although it makes me really sad, I'm kinda glad he let her go. Bella was becoming another addiction and he needs to fix himself before he can be with her.
Alright, my heart is broken but awesome chapter. Can't wait for the next.
xoxo Sam
Reviewer: ladyvamp74 (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 12:02 PM · On: Chapter 18
NOOOOOOOOO! My heart is hurting so badly now :(
Reviewer: mothlights (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 12:01 PM · On: Chapter 18
Oy... so someone warned me this one was sad, and I'm sorry, Edward, but I immediately thought of him drinking or getting high, which honestly would have been worse for him than this. But damn, that was still hard to read.
You did a terrific job of building with small clues that E was having a difficult time dealing with her leaving. And the pressure just built as it went. It was like watching a slow motion car wreck. There are so many places where I coould see this going better if he could've opened up about his fear and anger, but of course, he wasn't able to.
Beautifully written. Thanks for posting.
Fav lines --
"I like smart ones I can make stupid," I tease.
Bella's breathing is heavy next to me, and all I want to do is get up, get dressed, and get out. But I stay. This is my atonement.
She thinks she could love me forever; she thinks this is the best it could ever be. And it is, for me. But not for her. I can't do better and it's hard for me to imagine how she could do worse.
Something in me wants to talk to her like this - in the dark where she can't see my face - but I don't say anything.
My hands fumble with her underwear and roll her onto her stomach. She immediately tips her hips up a little, knowing what I want, and although it makes me want her more, it also breaks my heart a little. I don't bother to take my underwear off, just push it down enough to pull out my dick.
This is what I can give her. I can give her my body and I can give her orgasms and I can pray that these things are enough.
He sees right through me and my bullshit, but I've never lied so brazenly before and he seems unsure of how to address this.
I don't understand this, how I can want her to never, ever leave this apartment and how I want her as far away from me as she can get.
Reviewer: NelsonSmandela (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 11:57 AM · On: Chapter 17
I really think this story is spectacular. I'm sorry I'm so fail about reviewing (but it is the only story I read on Twilighted). The realism in your storytelling is wonderful juxtaposed against the poetry of your words, and every exchange, even the minimal ones, gives me palpable feelings. I worry about these two so much; they are so new. ::scampers off to read next chapter::
NS
Reviewer: crooked smile (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 11:55 AM · On: Chapter 18
it's like silence. there is only silence after this chapter. till you make them say something else.
Reviewer: lfcpam (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 11:52 AM · On: Chapter 18
aww man I knew he would do that sooner or later please update soon
Reviewer: ebbingjen (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 11:49 AM · On: Chapter 18
This chapter makes me sick to my stomach. It was like reliving my worst break-up ever. This line painted such a stark picture of Edward's frame of mind: I can't do better and it's hard for me to imagine how she could do worse.
You've written such a powerful story. Thank you for not pulling any punches.
Reviewer: Tyranelson (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 11:49 AM · On: Chapter 18
Ooh no. :(
I know it's necessary, but it sucks.
I hope he does call to get help and doesn't relapse.
I also hope they'll be able to make it back to each other.
Great chapter.
Reviewer: Scarlett_Letters (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 11:49 AM · On: Chapter 18
Here it is...I've been waiting for it. It hurt as much as I thought it would. Damn.
Reviewer: kelley88 (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 11:47 AM · On: Chapter 18
i'm freaking devastated...so painful and so good. my chest is aching right now.
i just want to add that part of what really enchants me about your story is the cadences--of the speaking and the thoughts. it makes me realize how hard it must be to write dialogue--good dialogue. you are so gifted at this.
also, and related to the above--the economy of words and actions. so many ff writers feel compelled to write everything their characters do, say, think. you keep a tight rein on this and are able to show just enough, just what we need to know to understand the story...it's really amazing writing. thank you.
Reviewer: buffbroinze (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 11:47 AM · On: Chapter 18
Oh god..my heart can't cope...please don't let him drink again.
Reviewer: avahasflaava (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 11:45 AM · On: Chapter 18
I have this horrible ache in my chest now :/ You must update soon. Very very soon,
Reviewer: RaeCullen (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 11:41 AM · On: Chapter 18
OMG. NOOOOOO. This is not good. I feel the next few chapters are going to be incredibly difficult. I see a relapse ahead and it's scaring me. =(
Reviewer: mommy2kh (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 11:40 AM · On: Chapter 18
Oh no! You can't leave it there! Edward needs her and she needs him. I hope he doesn't spiral downward and can find a way to get some self esteem and worthiness.
Reviewer: jslpisces11 (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 11:40 AM · On: Chapter 18
God- it's like of course you know this moment or plot point is coming- it has to happen but as it was happening i thought i was going to throw up. This was written more gut wrenching than anything i've ever read.. there is a reason this is titled With Teeth- that was so harsh. I feel very personal about what just happened- always a good sign for the author. You have created something powerful doll- now I must nurse my wounds.
Reviewer: readergoof (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 11:38 AM · On: Chapter 18
I have to admit that right now I hate loath and despise you
Reviewer: ooza (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 11:38 AM · On: Chapter 18
Oh my god. <# (= heartfail)
Reviewer: RoseArcadia (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 11:36 AM · On: Chapter 18
NO! :( *sniff* Ok, I've never begged for an update before, but I'm begging now...PLEASE UPDATE SOON!
Reviewer: Spinningmadly88 (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 11:31 AM · On: Chapter 18
That was a lot harder then I thought it was going to be. I knew this was coming but I didn't think I would need some tissues. I loved the beginning when they were at the park and on the swings and I just loved when she called him beautiful boy. I did want to hit Edward but I understand why he's acting the way he is. I'm happy this chapter was his POV because I was able to understand his thoughts and feelings and if I read it through Bella's POV I would just want to cut his balls off. I'm going back to reread and wait for the next chapter. Thanks for this chapter and keep up the amazing work.
Reviewer: jhorse104 (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 11:29 AM · On: Chapter 7
I just started reading this today, it's so good! I love that their conversation at the diner is so awkward. Can't wait for their next date!
Reviewer: mzotou (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 11:29 AM · On: Chapter 18
oh my God I'm crying so much, my heart is aching :(
This was beautiful and painful at the same time ;( ;( ;(
Amazing chapter, his pain, desperation and love for this girl are mindblowing :(
Reviewer: Angel_on_Wheels (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 11:28 AM · On: Chapter 18
This made me so sad.
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