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Reviewer: sorrowfloats44 (Signed) · Date: May 15, 2010 07:59 PM · On: Chapter 1
amazingly intense beginning, I'm hooked!
Reviewer: tina_cullen (Signed) · Date: May 15, 2010 11:59 AM · On: Chapter 19
I was scared that he's relapse, but it was probably clear. I can't wait for more
Reviewer: mallmouse (Signed) · Date: May 15, 2010 10:48 AM · On: Chapter 6
Great job at showing the “pride and shame” Edward feels. I wish we could find out more about Daisy for some weird reason. Maybe we will now after his beer/sneer incident?
As for Edward’s flashback, omg. I understand he feels terrible about it, and it wasn’t who he was, but what if he does go back to being that monster again? It’s stuff like that that makes me love WT even if it doesn’t have a traditional B&E HEA. Again, I never thought I’d say this, but I wouldn’t rule out Jacob as the better option.
Also, I *loved* the explanation for the change in his neighbors’ complaints, how they’re not afraid of him anymore. I wonder what his post-chapter 18 condition is like hmmm. The way he was hoping the girl at the supermarket had sb who thought she looked good in khakis (lol@the canon reference), awwww, so sweet.
Reviewer: white_witch (Signed) · Date: May 15, 2010 10:30 AM · On: Chapter 19
What an intense final image....I'm heartbroken.
I love your plot and the way you write.
Reviewer: mallmouse (Signed) · Date: May 15, 2010 10:17 AM · On: Chapter 5
lol@ “the ability to myopically focus on one subject, one task, one person is a thing at which I've always excelled”. Yep, story of all of us Twihards’ lives.
His subtle reaction to Bella telling him about her PhD reminded me of the heart-wrenching ‘I can’t do better and I can’t see how she could do worse’ line. Also, Edward watching her closely and “like a whipped puppy” after he told her Jasper’s the sponsor broke my heart. I've also been wondering if by Jasper's "Bella can help you" words had double meaning...
Reviewer: twifancgs (Signed) · Date: May 15, 2010 09:12 AM · On: Chapter 19
Again I don't like this Edward at all and I am hoping that this story will end with a happy ending for Edward and Bella but part of me doesn't think it will.
Reviewer: mallmouse (Signed) · Date: May 15, 2010 09:09 AM · On: Chapter 4
ha, one of the few kinda funny lines of this story: "Ending sentences with prepositions bothers me, but I'm sure as shit not going to write "Every girl with whom I've been sexually involved" on a stupid list."
I liked how going into the bookstore on one of the days he wasn't supposed to was taking him off his schedule. Nothing compared to how the girl working in there would mess up your routine Ed. And of course the way they *both* started obsessing with each other (Bella's crush and Edward's orgasms) is pure win
Reviewer: mallmouse (Signed) · Date: May 15, 2010 08:39 AM · On: Chapter 1
ok, after a ridiculous mix-up I can log-in again, and, yes, I'm not ashamed to admit that I'm re-reading this story. It's SO weird to read how Edward used to be now that I know what will happen. Such an intense first chapter
Reviewer: twifancgs (Signed) · Date: May 15, 2010 08:25 AM · On: Chapter 18
THis sucks! I am so mad at him.
Reviewer: sara540 (Signed) · Date: May 15, 2010 12:00 AM · On: Chapter 19
wow! this fic made me laugh, think, cry and in the end broke my heart! wow that are a lot of emotions....i hope that u have an EPOV for the next chapter...i can't wait to see what the boy has on his mind!!! anyway GREAT JOB !!!! keep on girl!!!!!
Reviewer: vedette1121 (Signed) · Date: May 14, 2010 05:53 PM · On: Chapter 1
Wow.... I am speechless. This is freakishly fantastic! Great writing... can't wait to read more- Don't like to see Edward this way but I am glad he's doing something about it...
Reviewer: Flightlessbird11 (Signed) · Date: May 13, 2010 05:49 AM · On: Chapter 1
Hello there! I just wanted to drop by and let you know that I've posted a review of With Teeth over on PIC FanFic Corner, along with a banner that I made for it.
Here is the link to the review:
http://picffcorner(dot)blogspot(dot)com/2010/05/professor-plum-gets-taste-of-edward-and.html?zx=6ae02f9a9543f3c5
with actual dots in there of course. I wasn't sure if twilighted works the same as FF.
Reviewer: Snuze (Signed) · Date: May 13, 2010 04:17 AM · On: Chapter 19
great chapter, i don't want it to end!
Reviewer: ksbell (Signed) · Date: May 12, 2010 07:54 PM · On: Chapter 8
I am in love with this Edward. Your character speaks in a way that makes me feel like I'm going thru withdrawals, and trying to stay sober right there with him. I love how he's vulnerable and a little weak but strong at the same time.
You are a brilliant writer. And this is an amazing story.
Kim
Reviewer: tnmebd101 (Signed) · Date: May 12, 2010 03:26 PM · On: Chapter 19
Wow. Just... wow. This chapter broke my heart. You really do have a gift. Thanks for sharing it with the rest of us. :)
Reviewer: grabadietcoke (Signed) · Date: May 11, 2010 07:05 PM · On: Chapter 19
Oh - crushing. His reaction, that he's drinking, that he would do that there - probably knowing why she would be there. Hating him right now. Loved this line " I'll be his something less if I can't be his something more." - he doesn't deserve either right now...
Reviewer: jo43 (Signed) · Date: May 11, 2010 06:08 PM · On: Chapter 19
I was so looking forward to this next chapter....can't wait to see the next one. Nice to see how she was "trying" to get on with her life but knowing how she was just going through the motions. Great character development of her trying to get on with her life. Glad you mentioned Edward in this chapter because I didn't want to wait much longer without any mention of him which I thought you might do. Hope we get a EPOV of what he went through knowing he pushed her away for her own good...
Reviewer: KrisB (Signed) · Date: May 11, 2010 05:50 PM · On: Chapter 19
His expression is shock, then fear, then - so easy, like nothing - his beautiful mouth twists up into an arrogant sneer. So beautiful and so ugly. And with his eyes locked with mine, and with his cruel, cruel sneer, he brings the bottle up and drinks again.
ikss recommended your story to me a while ago, and I added it to my Favorites list but got caught up in all the other demands of life (real and fanfic - writing, beta work, the inevitable drama and silliness) and didn't start it until a couple of weeks ago. I tend to review pretty regularly but lately I'd been getting bad about it (too many unrequited reviews, I guess). But this pair of chapters... in fairness, this entire story but especially these last two chapters... brought me out of my anti-reviewing shell.
Full disclosure... for much of my life, I have been a magnet for addictive personalities. Usually narcotics, sometimes alcohol, slightly less often stalkerish... when I brought my now-husband home to meet the family, my brother keep peering behind him. When I asked why, he said he was looking for the emotional baggage. I tell you this only so you understand why I am currently haunted by this story.
The description of Edward - the surprise in seeing her and knowing she sees him, the momentary fear of what she must think, what she will do, followed by the look that says "I told you I was a piece of crap, so what did you expect?" - is perfection. What immediately spiraled for me, helping me understand (possibly for the first time) that it was ME who was drawn to them and not the other way around - was my immediate assumption that Bella would dive in to fix it. Because my secondary interpretation of the sneer, after the "I told you, what did you expect" is "What are you going to do about it, because I could only hold it together with you there." Which I know is complete bullshit. But at the time, every time, I believed it was true. I believed it was my duty to save them, to help them.
I'm interested in where Bella goes with this. I have been crying and aching for days now as I realize all the years I was convinced that fate conspired against me, it was me conspiring against me. This is going to sound very strange, especially considering the fact that I'm still practically in physical pain over this, but thank you. Thank you for helping me figure out how much of those lost times were all me. I didn't think I was good enough for a whole person, so I thought if I could find a broken one and fix him, I'd be the lucky one.
Shit. I feel like I owe you a copay or something. Thank you.
Reviewer: EC fan (Signed) · Date: May 11, 2010 02:36 AM · On: Chapter 19
Wait, what??! I am so shocked. That was heartbreaking and so well written. I can so remember feeling all those things when my heart was broken. I know those exact feelings that she felt when she saw him again...like how can he look like nothing ever happened when my heart was ripped apart :( I am so glad Bella finally got on with things...but I am so shocked by the look on Edward's face when he saw her again. So can NOT wait to see what happens next. Great chapter!
Reviewer: fargoner (Signed) · Date: May 10, 2010 02:31 PM · On: Chapter 1
I've been so torn after reading the last two chapters, but Edward's sneer was unbareable! I just feel complelled to ask you to please fix this relationship!! Otherwise, what was the point of the whole story??! As with every chapter, I'm completely invested in this story and your characters. I can't believe how self-destructive Edward is. How could he do that to her and to himself? He hasn't even made an attempt in all these months? Didn't Bella mean anything to him? I want to understand, but I'm too mad at him right now...
Reviewer: panthony (Signed) · Date: May 10, 2010 09:36 AM · On: Chapter 19
Oh no. I thought last chapter was gut wrenching......this was WORSE!!!!! Hate it!!! But I've loved this story so I trust where you're taking it, and although I hate the feeling throughout and where this update ends, I love how you write the characters and the plot so I will buck up and hold on. ha! Just know that you're THAT great of a writer that I feel Bella's pain as if it were my own! Can't wait for the next chapter!
Reviewer: lou3190 (Signed) · Date: May 10, 2010 08:48 AM · On: Chapter 19
I just can say: THANK YOU, you're great, I hope you updated soon! please!!
Reviewer: mallmouse (Signed) · Date: May 10, 2010 06:10 AM · On: Chapter 19
Once again, I can't find the words to write a review. I remember AG saying how great it is for authors to read which lines we liked the most, but if I start doing that I'm gonna copy/paste soooo much. If you want to see what my (and not just mine!) favorite quotes from WT are you can check out the "favorite quotes" post on Edwardville. THough now that I think of it you don't really seem to hang out on other sites, so for this chapter you can see them here: http://community.livejournal.com/edwardville/908434.html
This chapter was so beautifully sad. Your writing is so raw and straightforward. I LOVE how you describe emotions we've all been through (e.g. how everything reminds us of the important person we lost). At least Bella has people to comfort her: Mike, her dad, and FOR THE FIRST TIME IN MY TWILIGHT HISTORY I welcome the appearance of Jacob.
Of course we all know there's more to this, that Edward died inside when he read her letter and when he saw her, and we've been wondering if the sneer was the WT way of expressing the "I don't want you. You're not good for me" NM line. 6-7 chapters only??? PLEASE tell me you have something else lined up. Do you plan on publishing anything?? HAVE you already published sth, since your Bella is a Literature PhD and all?? Please let me know if you have...
I can't thank you enough for this beautiful, beautiful story.
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Effie
Reviewer: cece (Signed) · Date: May 10, 2010 04:47 AM · On: Chapter 19
Oh so sad... and sooooo good. Cant wait for the next one!
Reviewer: nathansmomma (Signed) · Date: May 10, 2010 04:41 AM · On: Chapter 19
well this was sad...what the hell is up with Edward?!?!? bastard! should i even try to be understanding for what he's gone through? i think not. jerk!!
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