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Reviewer: epwatts_85 (Signed)
May 24, 2010 06:55 AM · On:
wow. your writing is great. you captured everything wonderfully. i almost feel like going to rehab lol
Reviewer: EdwardsBloodType (Signed)
May 24, 2010 06:45 AM · On:
I knew his POV after he saw her would be immensely difficult to read, and I sat on the edge of my seat cringing the entire time. The way it seemed in the bar was that he was just having a beer.
I had no idea that he had really gone off the deep end, and I suppose thats my lack of experience with addiction. I would very much like to know what transpired between that time he asked Bella to leave and this point. I hope we get some insight.
I love this story to pieces but I can not forsee a HEA for them together. That makes me very sad, but it is also okay.
Reviewer: jkl (Signed)
May 24, 2010 06:39 AM · On:
had to go back & reread the end of this chapter before I start the next & I just have a desperate need to tell you how impressive this bar scene is. You can practically feel it, smell it, hear it...my heart clenches for her.
Reviewer: ocd girl (Signed)
May 24, 2010 06:35 AM · On:
HOLY SHIT, this make me so so sad, I think I might be developing IBS from this story! HAHA!!
Reviewer: Nano Annis (Signed)
May 24, 2010 06:32 AM · On:
It's gut-wrenching and heart-breaking, but I love how you went for this no holds barred. I almost felt delirious being inside Edward's head - I felt a bit dizzy and disorientated and that's because of your writing; it's so vivid and punchy. The road is still dark, but we have some hope now, just a little, but it's enough to get by. Thank you for giving us something meaningful.
Reviewer: Gennell (Signed)
May 24, 2010 06:28 AM · On:
My mind keeps going back to when Charlie said something like they always go back; he may not sell again, but he will use. I really hate it when people do not want to give people hope, that once you are an addict that you can never have any hope to be a fully functioning member of society or be worthy of associating with "decent" people. I do not buy that. I have to believe within myself that we CAN overcome anything, any adversity, if we want to badly enough. I get it that Edward slipped. I get it. But I really hope that this is a story of hope in our darkest hour that ends with a journey to the light.
Reviewer: Moni_MD (Signed)
May 24, 2010 06:09 AM · On:
wow... that was painful but if could have been so much worse if it wasn't for the format you chose. like a band-aid. we went through his months of shit with a lot of details but swiftly.
You are an incredible writer, that is for sure. I don't know how you have manage that, if you just made your research very well or if all this came from empirical knowledge but i felt like i was in edward's turbulent head. it was so real. great reading experience. a rare one too.
thanks for that. :)
Reviewer: TwilightLover418 (Signed)
May 24, 2010 05:51 AM · On:
my heart seriously aches for him :( amazing chapter, as always! :)
Reviewer: jenalpz (Signed)
May 24, 2010 05:42 AM · On:
I knew a relapse had to happen, and you handled it well. Poor Edward, but you write him in a way that if tells me he might get it right, one day. He wants to get well.
Thanks for the update, you're doing a great job with this fic.
Reviewer: cassie634 (Signed)
May 24, 2010 05:36 AM · On:
Wow. That was intense. I don't know how you know what it's like to be an addict; mayve you do know. But I felt Edward's despair deep down like I was watching it on t.v. or right in front of me. I do hope he gets better, for good this time.
Reviewer: asoulenchanted (Signed)
May 24, 2010 05:29 AM · On:
wow, this is literally heartbreaking.
he was doing so bloody well :/
cannot wait for more though, i need to know what happens next so badly :)
Reviewer: Moni_MD (Signed)
May 24, 2010 05:22 AM · On:
well, we knew this was coming but it is still hard to read.
but please, please please please don't let bella use jake to get over edward. i hated bella's new moon. and i will hate yours too if she does that...
Reviewer: Mephis (Signed)
May 24, 2010 05:13 AM · On:
Thank you for this chapter. It exceeded my expectations. It was well-written and I like the way you built up the tension. Edward's POV was also well-done, and you didn't fail on conveying the inner monologue of an addict. In short, this chapter didn't hold back on what it's like to be an addict, in terms of both actions and the self-justification that an addict undergoes. As I said, I like this chapter. Thank you!
Reviewer: slayerjules (Signed)
May 24, 2010 04:30 AM · On:
Wow. Poor Edward. Some bender he went on.
Reviewer: lisab (Signed)
May 24, 2010 04:18 AM · On:
Wow, uggghhh! i hope it can only get better from here for him. i hope this is his "rock bottom"......i love this jasper.
Reviewer: pluekaymapropayvee (Signed)
May 24, 2010 04:16 AM · On:
this chapter has made me feel sooooo much better about Edward. i was seriously about to kick his ass after how the last chapter ended :p
Reviewer: katie_winkles (Signed)
May 24, 2010 04:02 AM · On:
God. Oh god, oh god. I literally feel sick, like ive taken every drug that Edward has taken, i feel dizzy for godssake! Your words grab me, shake me and spin me around like i'm right there inside his head. <3 it. HARD
P.s. - which ward is this??
Reviewer: bacchanalia (Signed)
May 24, 2010 03:40 AM · On:
i have a feeling this chapter is going to stay with me for a very, very long time. it was haunting, and painful, and very poignant.
and absolutely wonderful, as usual.
Reviewer: Mol (Signed)
May 24, 2010 01:52 AM · On:
Oh, this is so heartbreaking. Really well written, and conveys just how horrible it must be to feel like Edward. I very rarely feel moved to tears reading fanfiction, but this is so moving, great writing...
Reviewer: greeneyedmonster (Signed)
May 24, 2010 01:40 AM · On:
Riveted and in pain.... are you happy now? If you have any self-respect as a writer... you should be.
Reviewer: buffbroinze (Signed)
May 24, 2010 01:38 AM · On:
God I was so worried about reading this....I can't believe that he's spent the whole time away from Bella just getting high and going back to his old ways....I suppose he really does have to hit rock bottom before he can realise he never ever wants to to do that again...it's so hard to read....my heart breaks for him and for Bella...how hard must it be for her to think that he left her to just to do that shit again. But.....life doesn't have quick fixes and nor does this story..Edward has to grow up and maybe Bella did too...become a whole rounded person who could actually deal with the reality of a recovering addict.
I feel very teary right now......
Reviewer: Domysticated (Signed)
May 24, 2010 12:47 AM · On:
I know I have already left the longest review, but I just wanted to add that reading Edward's journey in With Teeth is akin to watching Bubbles' storyline in The Wire- my favourite show of all time. I don't know if you're a Wire fan but to me that's like the highest praise I can think of.
The first half of this chapter- Edward's personal descent into hell- is the written equivalent of Bubbles walking through Hamsterdam (now I know this means nothing to anyone! sorry!)
Oh and I have said it before- but it also reminds me of a German movie of a few years ago called Gegen die Wand (Head On is the english title). I think you (and anyone else who is enjoying With Teeth) would love it. In a totally angsty and heart-wrenching way, of course.
Ok enough with the random stuff. :)
Reviewer: Belli (Signed)
May 24, 2010 12:43 AM · On:
So amzingly descriptive, you just feel it.
Reviewer: dep (Signed)
May 24, 2010 12:34 AM · On:
I love to reread & reread your story With Teeth (actually, after I’ve spent so much time on this story I still don’t get it why the title is With Teeth, I’m not perceiving). In fact, I have my favourite chapters. There are hundreds of twilight fanfiction but somehow I feel very, very, very attached to the very With Teeth story. Now my favourite part is the end of chapter 19: Bar/Bella/Edward/bottle’s mouth/arrogant sneer/Jacob.
In one gulp I’ve read whole story and my wish to read further was restricted. Now I’m looking forward to next update as an addict. Therefore frequently after no update alarm I go back to older chapters. Ten last chapters are reread regularly.
I enjoy excerpts with Seth in this story. He’s real man. Constant. Like the ideal man to compare to Edward. I like the part where occurs the first Bella’s and Jacob’s encounter. They are great together but not as great as Bella&Edward. I haven’t reread their reunion after Edward said ‘they can be just friends’. But it also stuck in my mind. And I had fun reading their meeting after breaking the relationship between protagonists. Seth is like a shrink; young, uberwise man who sees bigger picture.
There are the other parts that keep me on this story while I’m waiting for update. Thanks to you the kingpin of the relationship is complicated and intriguing. These chapters have a sultry voice and I am very fond of reading them due to tremendous emotional charge.
Chapter 11. I’m constantly fascinated by your language but this chapter is better than others. I won’t forget then during Bella’s and Edward’s encounter she thought ‘where’s gone this boy who was afraid of overstepping?’
Maybe next chapter. I’m talking about time before their ‘first time’ when they were sharing previous sex experiences. Especially Edward’s confession.
The seventeenth chapter. The writing is exquisite. I marvel over the part at Bella’s home. I admire Charlie’s attitude. I respect, too, at the confidence exhibited by the father&police officer.And the whole chapter is so intense and strong.
Perhaps in fourteenth chapter the author’s hand presented to us Edward’s bad days which ‘just happens’. Really, I don’t know why I like it maybe the comfort of the chapter sooths me. Sadly, but bad days when you permanently experience worry is really bad. Everything could trigger to convert back. Fuck, I know this feeling.
Don’t remember number of birthday sex chapter and attempts to make Bella get off. But talking about this hard-core part of story you have magnificent power to approach to this subject. As always, a pleasure to read.
At Jasper’s parents house in mountains. ‘You have to be quiet, Bella’ & ‘You love me?’ ‘Tell me’. It’s nice to be Bella.
However, the most read chapter is accidental meeting in the bar with Edward’s sneer. There are so many questions. The main is what happened to Edward? I don’t let believe myself that he gave up. Perhaps it’s true, though. Just from my addiction experience I know that first attempt is the most successful. Later, attempts are weaker and you stand on the verge of ruin. Brains work against you. You forget what will happen and commit crime against you. Do it one time and it’s almost norm. And there you succumb to temptation and starting recovering again. It’s so easy to give into temptation.
Story shows how easily people give up on themselves. In fictional life it’s so sad that after Bella’s letter he didn’t fight for sobriety. She wasn’t giving up (but smth has happened. Maybe he saw her and decided that she doesn’t want this). In that condition constant chanting (like mantra) in the ear and encouraging is better then one single letter. For me this is different because I love to push people away. I’m good at it. & I’m happy that Edward didn’t do in the beginning.
Therefore, it hurts to see his relapse. Seven or eight months are a lot. Because it’s not seven or eight months of just ordinary life, it’s about 240 days of struggle with yourself. It’s 5760 hours of fight with your inner demons. It’s life of 345600 minutes when temptation is on every corner. And suddenly you give up. The worst thing is that you stop living. All your life is about your problem. You forget other people because your issues take all time. And distractions make perfect opportunity to slip over. Addict becomes a shark.
I know the story has to have top notch depression part. And it’s his deterioration. But what will happen next? I want to expect his recovery. With or without Bella. But recovery. Because I’m like thermometer. I become obsessed of story’s mood and I want to believe that people having these problems have future. If not, I’ll have no future too.
Unfortunately, I can’t reread the first chapter. It’s like the flagman of the story, but for me it was too much even for one time. However I like the revelations of his past life to Bella. It’s a little bit untold truth.
It’s stupid to take so serious this creation but it flatters that someone is dealing with similar problems and they have nice story which goes beyond that darkness which could consume. Sadly, but every time it threatens to pull you back and completely destroy.
One more time I want to emphasize your writing abilities; it’s great writing. You are the best.
Reviewer: Domysticated (Signed)
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May 24, 2010 12:25 AM · On:
Oh My God.
When I saw the update in my inbox I almost didn't want to read- because I knew this would hurt. So much.
And it does. Edward's hurt, his emptiness, the squallor that his life has become, his loneliness and desperation and yet, ultimately, the strength to pull himself out of this hole... it's so much and so raw and so beautifully told.
I want, above all things, for him to get himself better. I almost don't care, at this point, if he and Bella get back together.
I want to believe he can get clean. I want to believe he can put his life together again.
After describing the wreckage of a life so beautifully and uncompromisingly (it takes enormous guts, as a writer, to be so ruthless wit your character), I would love nothing more than for you to write his recovery just as honestly and beautifully and painfully. I want to read hope.
Your writing is amazing, as always... you can I guess I am just trying to convey just how invested I am in this story. And this is 100% due to just how good a writer you are.
Your prose is flawless- you make the present tense work like no one else. I love your use of repetition. As many others have said, your dialogues feel real. Above all, your characters are so intensely physical and that, I believe, is what brings them to life.
I can guess by now your story is pretty much written. I am begging you, please, to post it as fast as you literally can- because I don't think I can wait 2-3 weeks between each chapter.
Thank you for sharing your enormous talent so generously with us.
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