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Reviewer: EliseShaw (Signed) · Date: October 05, 2009 02:14 PM · On: Chapter 2: The Angel's Digs

This is BEAUTIFULLY done. You capture Bella's voice especially well, with her sense of hopelessness in the beginning. She's had an awful existence thusfar. The word choices are especially nice, infusing the chapter with the right mood, and I loved the section in the middle when Edward rescued her.



Author's Response:

Oh, I so appreciate your lovely reviews! 

You always single out things that you especially like, and that's very helpful feedback for a writer.  You notice certain nuances in a story -- things like word choice and mood. 

I'm also very happy with your comment about my portrayal of Bella!  And yes, she has indeed had an awful existence up to this point.  That will hopefully change, now that she has found Edward.

Also, since you're an old-fashioned romantic like me, you enjoyed the part where Edward rescued her.  The vampire knight in shining armor!  Lol.

Thank you so much for being a faithful reader/reviewer!!  (And of course, thank you for the stars!!!!  =D)

Reviewer: ddcdragonfly (Signed) · Date: October 05, 2009 01:51 PM · On: Chapter 4: Bloodlust

that was interesting ... still wondering what's up with Bella



Author's Response:

Stick around!  You're definitely going to find out.  Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: smileyirish14 (Signed) · Date: October 05, 2009 10:50 AM · On: Chapter 5: The Hurtful Truth

ME lUUUUVE!! haha, great!!

 



Author's Response:

You're so funny!  Thanks for the starred review!  =D

Reviewer: justjo (Signed) · Date: October 05, 2009 10:47 AM · On: Chapter 5: The Hurtful Truth

Nice idea!

 

What next!?



Author's Response:

Thank you!  Just make sure you hang around, because there's more good stuff coming!  :)

Reviewer: dazzled eyes (Signed) · Date: October 05, 2009 10:11 AM · On: Chapter 5: The Hurtful Truth

That was another great exchange. There was some great chemistry between Edward and Bella. It reminds me of Beauty and the Beast. I look forward to your next entry.



Author's Response:

I love your comments, especially the one about "Beauty and the Beast"!  I know that's why I am fascinated and enchanted by dark heroes like Edward and the Phantom of the Opera; "Beauty and the Beast"  is the underlying, archetypical pattern for these characters, as well as for any other vampire heroes created by such writers as Christine Feehan, Amanda Ashley, L.J. Smith, and Nina Bangs (and many other talented writers).

Once again, thank you for reading, and another starred review!!  :)

Reviewer: dazzled eyes (Signed) · Date: October 05, 2009 09:52 AM · On: Chapter 4: Bloodlust

It was nice to meet who Edward regularly interacts with and that make this new life possible. Jack Quinn seemed like a friendly guy that you would meet in a pub. I liked how Edward covered Bella's scream and his howl by telling Jack that it was the horror flick that he watching. As for Alex, I wonder what type of person knows you are a vamp, provides with blood and only wants money and paintings in return. The exchange between Edward and Alex was really humorous, especially how Edward played on his fear at times to get what he needed from him.

I wonder if it really was Edward's facial expression that made Bella scream or if she was reacting to some trigger in her memory about the murder. This is a really great story. 



Author's Response:

Wow!  Your comments are just great, and very insightful, too!

Alex really does like Edward, in spite of the fact that he knows what Edward is.  I think I might have to change a couple of words here and there in the chapter, in order to reflect this.  Furthermore, he believes in the vampire's talent.  Edward has been quite succesful so far, so Alex is counting on the fact that those paintings he's been collecting are going to be worth a heck of a lot of money someday...

In spite of their friendship, Alex does indeed feel a healthy respect for Edward  He's not quite sure what would happen if he were to cross a vampre, after all!

Thank you for your comment about how Edward covered Bella's scream and his howl.  He's got state-of-the-art TV and stereo systems, of course, so he can get very, very realistic sounds from them.

As for the reason Bella acreamed, it's a combination of both of the factors you mentioned.  Excellent observation!

Last but not least, thank you for your compliment on the story.

Thank you so much for following this tale, and continuing to give me starred reviews!!  You've been making my days!!!  =D

Reviewer: dazzled eyes (Signed) · Date: October 05, 2009 09:18 AM · On: Chapter 3: Breakfast Time

Oh my! This really is interesting. I really enjoy their interaction and the push and pull between his hunger and his growing feelings for this girl.



Author's Response:

Yes, he is very conflicted, isn't he?  I love psychology, and this scenario has allowed me to really delve into Edward's inner torment to my heart's content!

Thanks for reviewing, and for the stars!!

Reviewer: dazzled eyes (Signed) · Date: October 05, 2009 08:45 AM · On: Chapter 2: The Angel's Digs

Bella's back story was intriguing. I would love to know more, but it explained why she was trying to kill herself. I like that Edward is a painter. It seems the perfect outlet.



Author's Response:

I really appreciate your comments about Bella and Edward!  In regards to Bella's background, there's more to come, of course.  I've only scratched the surface so far.

As for the fact that Edward's a painter, you're so right -- it IS 'the perfect outlet'.  Painting can be a very cathartic experience, especially if one is feeling strong emotions.  Besides, I have the necessary knowledge to make this believable, whereas, if I had made Edward a pianist, I would have had to research musical terms, for instance.  The character might not have been so credible, then.

Thanks for the stars, as well as the review!!   

Reviewer: dazzled eyes (Signed) · Date: October 05, 2009 08:28 AM · On: Chapter 1: Midnight Encounter

That was one great introduction. I love the guys dropping the knives after Edward growled and snarled at them. It piqued my interest and I don't read Darkwards.



Author's Response:

Wow!  i really appreciate your comments!  Yeah, I sure wish I had my own personal vampire to watch out for me at night...  :)

Thanks for the stars, as well as the review!!

Reviewer: hc4metal (Signed) · Date: October 05, 2009 06:27 AM · On: Chapter 5: The Hurtful Truth

I hope she turns right around and goes back

love the story



Author's Response:

Yes, I hope she does, too!  But...let's see what my muse says.  I'll try to convince her to bring Bella back, but, you know that muses can be rather temperamental and difficult... 

It's so wonderful to hear a reader say that they love one's story!!  Thank you!!

Thanks as well for the stars and the review!

Reviewer: lavishone (Signed) · Date: October 05, 2009 04:23 AM · On: Chapter 5: The Hurtful Truth

While I can sense the emotional conflict that Edward has between his different aspects, I am a bit conflicted at how easily it seemed for him to let Bella leave.  Or is it?  Will he end up shadowing her to make sure she is o.k.?  Will Bella end up coming back to him?

So many questions swirling in my head- eager for answers please...



Author's Response:

I'm so glad your curiosity is piqued!  Yes, there's a lot of inner conflict in this tale...  It's caused by one thing: Edward's and Bella's self-hatred.  They have that in common.  His inner turmoil mirrors hers, and vice versa.  That's part of the attraction they feel for eath other.  While this could make for a pretty sick relationship, there's also the potential for mutual inner healing here.

The answers are forthcoming, never fear! 

Thank you so much for the review and the stars!

Reviewer: elislyn (Signed) · Date: October 05, 2009 02:33 AM · On: Chapter 5: The Hurtful Truth

Poor Edward, wanting to hold onto her, but not able to make her stay. I wonder how long it will be before she returns this him.



Author's Response:

Aww... yes, I empathize with him, since he's essentially a good guy, in spite of everything.

Just keep reading!  You'll see how my muse develops the story!

Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: venus308 (Signed) · Date: October 04, 2009 11:48 PM · On: Chapter 5: The Hurtful Truth

Oh Boy! I'm hooked. Its in my Fav list now. Hope to see more chapters soon. This one is really good!



Author's Response:

Wow!  Thank you so much for the stars, and for faving my story!  Yes, there's definitely more coming.

I appreciate your taking the time to review!!  :)

Reviewer: ddcdragonfly (Signed) · Date: October 04, 2009 09:32 PM · On: Chapter 2: The Angel's Digs

this chapter is just plain fun ... makes me smile



Author's Response:

Yes, this is Edward the big, happy kid!  Paradoxical, I know... but I just couldn't resist portraying his more childlike, innocent side.  This is the REAL Edward, the part of him that's still human.  This is the part of him that Bella has brought out to the light.  It's always been there, of course, but she's somehow able to call it forth.

I'm glad the chapter made you smile.  Thanks for reading and reviewing!  :)

Reviewer: ddcdragonfly (Signed) · Date: October 04, 2009 09:04 PM · On: Chapter 1: Midnight Encounter

this could be interesting ... on to the next chapter



Author's Response:

Thank you!  Hope you'll continue to find it interesting!  :)

Reviewer: snowgood (Signed) · Date: October 04, 2009 08:28 PM · On: Chapter 5: The Hurtful Truth

That MUST have been confusing for Bella!  I can't believe he kissed her-and what a kiss!  If I were her, I'd probably be standing outside his door right now arguing with myself about going right back in there!  I mean, she must be curious as to what he is talking about with all the monster talk and the pull he feels towards her!  I hope you update soon, they need to have another kiss!



Author's Response:

Oh, I definitely agree!  They DO need another earth-shattering kiss!  Lol.  And I also concur with your little scenario of Bella arguing with herself outside his door.  After such a kiss, I would want to know myself whether the 'monster' could be tamed, hee, hee!

I'll sure try to update ASAP, so we can all get our romantic curiosity satisfied!  (You see, I'm just as much in the dark as everybody else, until my muse decides to enlighten me... )

Thank you so much for your lovely review! 

Reviewer: TransylvaniaOrange (Signed) · Date: October 04, 2009 07:56 PM · On: Chapter 1: Midnight Encounter

I'm really enjoying the story.  I like angsty Bella.  Will Edward find out about the murder charge soon?

 

Cheers.



Author's Response:

Hey, it's good to know that you like 'angsty Bella'!  I wasn't quite sure how she would go over. 

As far as the murder charge goes, Edward's bound to find out soon for sure!  Keep reading, and you'll see!

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!  I really appreciate it!

Reviewer: Forbidden Twilighter (Anonymous) · Date: September 25, 2009 06:25 AM · On: Chapter 4: Bloodlust

loved it!



Author's Response:

Thank you so much!  More good stuff coming!

Reviewer: lord periperi (Signed) · Date: September 23, 2009 11:36 PM · On: Chapter 1: Midnight Encounter

oh my, and here i was, cracking my head thinking about the possible reasons she screams at the sound of his name....yeah, sometimes my logic really likes to take a holiday... ;)



Author's Response:

Don't worry about it.  Maybe you sort of skimmed the end of the chapter.  Or maybe you connected her scream with the mention of his name so strongly, that's what stuck in your mind.  No problem.

I do appreciate the fact that you not only read the story, but reviewed, as well!  :-)

Reviewer: snowgood (Signed) · Date: September 22, 2009 07:25 PM · On: Chapter 4: Bloodlust

So, Edward has an agent and a pusher!  From that last statement, I'm gathering that Bella isn't going to take the news so well.  I guess Edward may have to try to persuade her afterall!



Author's Response:

Oh, I just think this is a hilarious comment:  "So, Edward has an agent and a pusher!"  Indeed!  Lol.  Well, you know how famous people get their whims catered to, and Edward is a very succesful artist in this story, so he has certain 'privileges'.  (I'm green with envy at his success, too!)

Edward will not only have to contend with his unholy thirst now, but will also have to consider what he's willing to do in order to keep Bella with him.  Will he tamper with her memory?  In this story, he does have that power.  Or will he resist?

Keep reading, and you'll see!  Thanks again for your comments!

Reviewer: snowgood (Signed) · Date: September 22, 2009 07:13 PM · On: Chapter 3: Breakfast Time

Hmmm, I wonder did she think he would cook her first?  So, this Edward still has mind reading abilities-can he read Bella's?  I can't really put a finger on his personality yet-I suppose it's due to the fact that he's kind of quirky, like an artist!  I want to know more though!



Author's Response:

I really like this comment of yours: "...he's kind of quirky, like an artist!"  Great !  That means my portrayal is an accurate one.  Thanks for that comment!  Yes, artists are quirky.  I should know -- I studied art in college.  I haven't done much with it, sadly enough...maybe I'll have better luck with writing. 

Anyway...more coming on Edward and his 'quirkiness'! 

Thanks for continuing to read & review!

Reviewer: snowgood (Signed) · Date: September 22, 2009 06:59 PM · On: Chapter 2: The Angel's Digs

Yikes!  Bella's life thus far does seem to painful to bear.  She takes her new situation in with a sort of detachment, as if to say "this really isn't happening, let's see how this plays out".  Can't wait to read more!



Author's Response:

Poor Bella is very apathetic, indeed.  She's not even trying to clear her name at this point.  All she wants is to end it all... But, she has found her 'rainbow', even if he's a rather bloodthirsty guy!  Lol.

Thanks for reading & reviewing!

Reviewer: snowgood (Signed) · Date: September 22, 2009 06:46 PM · On: Chapter 1: Midnight Encounter

Oooh, very different!  I'm interested!  Edward certainly has a different voice,  he's taking what he desires, rather than running from it.  And Bella, well-lots of things to find out about her!



Author's Response:

Yes, Edward certainly knows what he wants, and WHO he wants!  It's about time he went for it, I think!  Glad you agree.

And of course there will be more information about Bella forthcoming in future chapters. 

Thanks for your comments!

Reviewer: lord periperi (Signed) · Date: September 22, 2009 08:17 AM · On: Chapter 4: Bloodlust

the story is really interesting; human-eating edward who's grinning like a big kid? murderer edward aka talented painter? suicidal, orphan bella who's calm like nothing and then screams at the first mention of his name?

i hope we won't wait the update for long, bc i sure will be waiting for it!

;)



Author's Response:

This story is certainly full of contradictions, isn't it?  I figured the strange juxtapositions you've mentioned would make the story an interesting read, and I was right! 

I do have to point out a little inaccuracy, though, if I may.  Bella doesn't scream because she hears Edward's name for the first time.  She screams because his facial expression, when he turns to her, is absolutely terrifying.  This is the first time she's seen him in his 'vampire phase'.  Remember, Edward is extremely thirsty by this time, and getting thirstier by the minute.  So, when he turns to her, she sees the monster, instead of the nice guy she had met on the street, the previous evening.

Thanks for reading and reviewing!  I hope you'll continue to do so! 

 

Reviewer: LordXeenTheGreat (Signed) · Date: September 22, 2009 04:43 AM · On: Chapter 2: The Angel's Digs

nice



Author's Response:

Thank you!  Hope you continue to read and review!

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