I like it! This was a great glimpse into her head. It helped me to understand where she is coming from in a big way! I still think she is kinda a b*tch and selfish but at least now I see why she's so moody all the time! I never really understood how much we either gain or miss out on when reading from different perspectives until I read your story. It makes a big difference in what I feel and think and how I see a situation whether I'm reading from Bella's or Jakes or Rachels or Charlies ect. POV. Brilliant writing tool and you have done just awesome at giving us such a broad view of the whole story! Way to go! I love your writing, it just pulls me in!

Thats what i figured

Awe, I think Rachel matters!!! At least to Paul :p! 

That was a very lovely story.  It was nice to get some insight into Rachel's head, even if that isn't a place I would want to be very often.  :o)  Great job!

Very good.

This was great! I loved reading Rachel's thoughts on everything.

Author's Response:

Thank you!

there was one sentance that realllly stood out for me-"I tried to deflect attention by ratting Jake out for everything from that stash of porn in the garage to the time I caught him in bed with a very naked, very skanky Lisa Campman."

 

?!?!?!?!??!?!?!

any chance of you explaining that?! i thought Jake was a virgin, same as Bella?! or is this a plot twist for later on when you don't feel like using mythical, supernatural creatures?

 

other wise, i loved it, i like how you give us insight into some of the other character's minds and thoughts!

Author's Response:

That will be explained a long, long time from now.  Some of my readers seem to think Jake's a virgin, others think he's not, and I've never said anything one way or the other.  So I thought I'd throw a little hint in for everyone to freak out over.  Yes, I do love torturing my readers ;)

I am impressed with this rachel!!!  UPDATE ASAP

Author's Response:

Thanks so much!

I'm with btvsna...Lisa?? Who the heck is Lisa?! I don't know, but I don't like her. Hmph. Are you really gonna torture us by not explaining that little tid bit for a long, long time?! You can't! *cries*

I really enjoyed Rachel's insight. And I liked reading the evolution of her feelings. She's a good match for Paul, they're both emotional and quick to react. Awww, it's cute.

Author's Response:

LOL!  Yes, I am absolutely going to torture you with that little bit o' knowledge. 

I can totally understand Rachel now. Poor girl being the imprint of Paul who is a complete ass. I think I might even like Rachel now, haha. Love the side stories. They give such a full-roundedness to Breathe Again. Fantastic as always Ysar! Ever consider writing professionally?

Author's Response:

Thank you!

ohhhhhhh i see now. she's not so bad. :P

Author's Response:

Thank you!

Aww, now I understand, but I don't get why she can't just, say so to everyone. Make her do that sometime. That'd be awesome.

Like a heart to heart with Bella? I'd totally read that :)

Author's Response:

I have much bigger plans for Rachel ;)

I love it! I never had anything against Rachel because she was a member of the family and involved in the pack on more than one level, but Bella, the outsider, was treated better and more importantly. Your story put that into perspective perfectly for people who didn't see it. You also did a really great job on elaborating on her history, which only made her character more interesting, and a lot more likable. Great job!!

Author's Response:

Thank you!  I always hated that Jacob had this sister who showed back up, was imprinted on, and then barely described to us.  I figure normal siblings would have had some kind of relationship, complete with disagreements, right?