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Reviewer: sistergrimm (Signed) · Date: December 31, 2009 10:46 PM · On: Scarring
god,i could actualy feel the tension in the air when they were in the parking lot....
amazing. when will the next updat be?
Author's Response: There was definately some "The Good, the Bad, and the Ugly" dueling music going on there at the end, and I think Jacob might have given Edward the Clint eye ----> ~_*
Well, I'm ashamed to say that I'm a very slow updater. The way I go through the writing process isn't very conducive to weekly updates. But right now I'm on break from school, so hopefully I'll submit the next chapter before I fly back on the 10th. *fingers crossed*
Reviewer: Jessisreang (Signed) · Date: December 31, 2009 08:20 PM · On: Scarring
Thankyou for the quick update! Good chapter, I made a noise when -enter Carlisle- and my fiance says wtfJess? lol so I think I have to read in a room by myself now. I think you did a good job with Carlisle!! and Charlie!! I like how you're sort of paralelling reactions, like with the sex talk, and how Edward and Jacob face down at the school(althoughbackwards this time :) ) I think everything is going amazing, I think you're doing an amazing job with Bella. I forgot to tell you this in my several thousand reviews, but it only occured to me just when I was reading this chapter. Your story is the only Bella POV I have ever read and followed, because honestly I loved reading every POV but hers. You do such an amazing job at writing her, it is so close to SM version, that I didn't even notice this until just now. Your chapters are very fluid too, they move into eachother so you don't have to read back, you sort of fit in small recaps, but they're very well disguised. Kudos! I like how you're keeping Bella true to form, Edward has returned, and she is just as obsessed as ever. It's irritating, but it's how it would be, and it's how SM would write Bella. I think, though she hasn't been with Jacob long, that she should show some more dedication to Jacob though. I've never imagined Bella as rational, I mean she falls in love with this guy in four months and is willing to throw away all of her relationships but his, to give up her humanity, and become a vampire forever. I like to think though, from being in a relationship with Jacob, and going through as much as she had, that by now she might be a little more practical and rational enough to say 'okay, this is what I have with Jake, this is what I had with Edward - and the downside'. I don't know that this really fits yet with your story, and it seems you'll build into it, I liked how she was silently warring with herself while with Carlisle, and I think as the drama unfolds, there should be more of that. I love your style of writing, and you're a great author, that was just one tiny suggestion, and your story would probably be better off anyway, you do such a good job already. Happy New Year! and thankyou for a awesome awesome drama gooey center filled hot Jacob on a motorcycle chapter :) btw Jacob totally didn't take the bait on that bubblebath joke, what the heck Jake she set herself up and everything? haha :)
Author's Response: OK, we need to seriously put a limit on the amount of nice things you can say to me. My head is THIS close to exploding, lol!
The hidden recaps are a tottal by-product of being on my high school speech team (state champs two years in a row, represent!) where you had to constantly remind your audience what you already told them. That, and I used to watch soap operas, where they do that kind of thing excesively.
What? Bella's being irritatingly devoted to Edward!? That's like so OOC for her. ;) Ha ha, don't worry, we'll see some allegience to her choice next chapter.
OMG, I for sure had a bubblebath joke writen and then got rid of it because I thought I'd played on that one too much already. lol, guess not. Note to self: No such thing as too many sexual bath jokes.
Thank you for the writing suggestion. I so rarely get constructive critisism on that sort of thing, so it really is helpful.
Till next time, bb!
Reviewer: DazedNCnfused (Signed) · Date: December 31, 2009 07:38 PM · On: Scarring
I'm proud of Bella for being able to steer clear of Edward. She's stronger than she gives herself credit for. :)
I was sad there wasn't more Jacob/Bella interaction. But I'm sure there will be more of that to come. Can't wait for the next one!
Author's Response: I was waiting for someone to point at that. No, there wasn't much J/B action, sorry! Fo sho more next chapter.
Yes, Bella didn't dissolve into hysterics, but she's still riding along the river of de-Nile when it comes to Edward's motivations. I think an Edward-Bella conversation is order for the near future.
Thank you!
Reviewer: wendeline (Signed) · Date: December 31, 2009 06:57 PM · On: Scarring
love it.
Author's Response: :) I'm glad.
Reviewer: leelator (Signed) · Date: December 31, 2009 06:00 PM · On: Scarring
BTW, this whole "You aren't going to do anything I don't allow" is what REALLY turns me off of Edward. Horrible behavior and no one should be in such a relationship. Just one more reason Bella is far better off with a precious little wolfie. ;)
Author's Response: IDK, Bella seems to like that domination stuff. As a third party not on the receiving end of Edward's evil eye, I find the ferocity kinda hawt.
Cuz I am a bad, bad person.
Reviewer: leelator (Signed) · Date: December 31, 2009 05:54 PM · On: Scarring
Hey Baby! What a great chapter! I absolutely loved it, particularly the Jake/Edward confrontation on the motercycle. It just smoked with tension! We'd like more, please. You are on break, aren't you? Okay, no excuses. Get busy before we loose you again to unimportant time wasters like school!
Author's Response: Yes, yes. I'm on a break. The plan is to have the next chapter submitted by the time I fly out on the 10th. BUT if I don't get a chapter of HTSW by then, I just might not make that deadline. *evil smirk*
Bwahaha! Let it be known I am NOT above blackmail.
Thanks, bb.
Reviewer: MischievousMe (Signed) · Date: December 31, 2009 05:09 PM · On: Scarring
aRE WE GONNA SEE BELLA'S INNER SELF COMING OUT PRETTY SOON? I WOULD LOVE TO SEE THAT SIDE OF HER AND HOW THE GUYS ARE GONNA REACT TO THE NEW BELLA.
I LOVE THAT ALICE STEPPED IN TO MAKE EDWARD BACK DOWN TO LET JACOB AND BELLA LEAVE. SO UNLIKE HER TO STEP IN WHERE JACOB IS CONCERNED
Author's Response: Yes, Alice never really hid her dislike in the series. But here, she's not really in the position to be nasty toward Bella's new beau if she ever wants to get back in her good graces. Bella hasn't welcomed her back with open arms, and Alice is more that a little unsettled about that. Of course, stopping Edward in the parking lot probably had more to do with not letting Edward making a scene in front of a bunch of people.
YES! I am SO hyped for the transformation. I can't wait to write it! gah.
Thank you! :)
Reviewer: danimcket (Signed) · Date: December 31, 2009 04:56 PM · On: Scarring
Love it! Keep the chapters coming. I hope Bella stays with Jacob.
Author's Response: Thank you! You're not alone.
Reviewer: klarsen117 (Signed) · Date: December 31, 2009 04:46 PM · On: Scarring
i just love how eddikins thinks he can tell bella what to do. thanks for the chapter, love this story and its killing me that she still loves ed. i hope she doesnt end up with him at the end, or anywhere else in the story
Author's Response: I want to tell you...things. But I can't. Because I swore to myself when I started this story I wouldn't give away the ending. BUT IT'S SO HARD!
*Sigh* Thank you, and please stick around.
Reviewer: novelista26 (Signed) · Date: December 31, 2009 04:44 PM · On: Scarring
omg omg omg words can't express how much i loved this chapter!!! i love jealous & overprotective edward!! i love jake!
update soon kay?
Author's Response: I cannot lie. I think jealous/overprotective Edward is kinda hawt. *blushes* GUILTY!
Lol, glad you enjoyed this chapter.
Reviewer: KayCullen 2009 (Signed) · Date: December 31, 2009 04:38 PM · On: Scarring
i luv th way ur doing things but a hope soon bella rely lets go of edward so she can rely b with jake an cany wait for her powers to come in2 its gona b so gd
plz plz update soon
luv ur jake 2
=)
Author's Response: I'm anxious for her powers too! And I'm afraid that there's going to be some more angstyness ahead before the relationships settle down.
Thanks!
Reviewer: Daylen (Signed) · Date: December 31, 2009 04:24 PM · On: Scarring
Multiple "show downs" in one day :)
So... Bella's healing seems to have accelerated somehow, and we're still not sure about the 'teleporting' thing... I loved Jessica's lines (for a change hehe)
Although I do wonder how much Edward and Alice have "seen" of what their departure did to Bella, with their respective gifts.
Looking forward to the Meeting, and wondering if Bella's going to insist on being included given it's got a lot to do with her.
Author's Response: So, from SM's ending of New Moon, we know that Alice doesn't see much of Bella after they leave. I think she says something about seeing bits and pieces (and cliff diving, obviously). Also, Alice hasn't had any heart-to-hearts with Charlie or Bella in this story like she did in New Moon, so she doesn't have too much insight about what life was like for Bella. Edward on the other hand has had some sort of "conversation" with Edward that we don't know much about beyond what Jacob has willingly revealed to Bella. There is a good chance that Edward has gleaned images/memories of how Bella was from Jacob's mind and the minds of her classmates after a day at school. But we only know what Bella knows, and she's not only in the dark, but she's also in denial.
Meeting should be exciting. So of course Bella will need to be there so we can see first-hand how things go down.
Thank you for reading/reviewing!
Reviewer: blusaphyer (Signed) · Date: December 31, 2009 03:51 PM · On: Scarring
I really digged this chapter.
Author's Response: Good to know. I was worried that the lack of Jacob/Bella interaction would turn people off.
Reviewer: flibbins (Signed) · Date: December 31, 2009 03:10 PM · On: Scarring
I've just caught up with this story and I'm totally engrossed. I, for one, am rooting for Jacob all the way. I love how supportive and patient you've made him. And of course I'm madly curious to know what is happening with Bella and her supernatural-ness.
I think you've created a compelling story and I'm anxiously awaiting your next update! Thanks for sharing your talent.
Author's Response: Ah, well thank YOU for letting me share my talent with you. :)
Yay for Jacob's character development! We like it, no? I think most people are rooting for Jacob at this point, or the people who are cheering for Edward just aren't letting me know.
I'll try to update speedily!
Reviewer: wordslinger (Signed) · Date: December 31, 2009 03:03 PM · On: Scarring
This was a great chapter. I'm going to vent for just a sec though. Where does Edward get off trying to stop Jacob from driving off with Bella? He's such a hypocrite, and frankly it's hard for me to believe he has Bella's best interest at heart. It seems more likely that he has his own self-loathing, melodramatic, and masochistic interests at heart.
Ok, sorry. Really though, this is well written and I think you are being true to the characters. Good job! :)
Author's Response: Edward is being Edward, yes. I agree. And he's overprotective, and melodramtatic, but I also don't think it's fair to say he has ulterior motives. Were his actions possibly inpart motivated by his desire to keep her away from Jacob and not just the bike? Heck yes. But it's important to keep in mind that this story doesn't ignore everything that happened in Twilight and about half-way through New Moon, and we've seen Edward prove his character when it comes to Bella's safety. He LEFT her to keep her safe. And I know he ended up coming back, and that shows that he has weaknesses like any other character. But while this story includes everything in the series up until Alice's visit in New Moon, everything after that is suject to change. We don't know if Edward is going to fight to get Bella back. Sure he stuck around in SM's version, but in that version Bella miserable and clinging to Edward for all she was worth. She's not like that this time around. Maybe Edward will see what Bella has with Jacob, and he'll let them be. Maybe not. I know it's hard to keep fanfiction and the actual series seperate, but the only things I take from the Eclipse, Breaking Dawn, and the end of New Moon is insight into everyone's characterization and facts about SM's universe. All actions from those parts never happened for the purpose of this story.
So, I guess what I'm saying is that while, yes, Edward is being a protective ass, he really hasn't done much else (in my opinion) deserving of scorn (aside from leaving in the first place, and--considered scorn worthy to some people--coming back). Of course all of this is moot if it's really his core character/personality that you don't like. In that case, criticize away until he does somthing to change your mind. ;)
Lol, and you thought what you did was 'venting.' Thank you for sharing your thoughts with me. I like knowing what's going on in my readers' minds.
Till next time!
Reviewer: Vampire_luva (Signed) · Date: December 28, 2009 04:20 PM · On: Act II
You need to write more!! I wanna know when Bella finally realizes she is a witch. Its gonna be so awesome. like she gonna ba all beast mode. And she can kill Victoria all be herself. It will be like totaly awesome!
Author's Response: LOL, believe me, I am writing. Hopefully I'll be able to submit the next chapter in a couple of days. And actually I am SUPER excited about Bella's powers too, so I'm gunning for them to be awesome but realistic (lol, as realistic as these sort of things can be). It wont happen next chapter because of serious character drama that needs to be delt with, but it will be soon.
Thank you!
Reviewer: candygirl (Signed) · Date: December 28, 2009 05:30 AM · On: Crutch
This story is fantastic!!! Please keep updating! More Bella superpowers!
Author's Response: Thanks for the encouragement! The next chapter is well underway and should be submitted in the next couple of days. I'm anxious for the powers too, so I wont be able to hold off much longer.
Thank you! :)
Reviewer: musicaddictedslasher (Signed) · Date: December 19, 2009 07:39 PM · On: Act II
I adore this story. I've only recently started reading Twilight fan fic. This is likely the best Bella/Jacob's I've read, of which I have read several recently. I hope classes and/or work allow you to update soon!
Author's Response: Well, thank you! And welcome to the Twilight fanfic universe! There are several J/B stories I would definately recomend reading if you haven't yet: Then Direct You into My Arms by blueandblack, Dreaming of Butterflies by slider aka stretch, Breathe Again by ysar, and How to Seduce a Werewolf by leelator. If there are other pairings or story types you're looking for, let me know, and I can make some other recs.
I'll update as soon as possible. Maybe MAYBE by the end of this week.
Again, thank you for commenting!
Reviewer: danimcket (Signed) · Date: December 19, 2009 04:21 AM · On: Act II
Bring the next chapter on. I am enjoying your story line.
Author's Response: I'll do my best to be prompt about it, promise!
Thank you for leaving some love. ;)
Reviewer: Jessisreang (Signed) · Date: December 18, 2009 08:19 PM · On: Act II
Clever werewolves! Clever author! They're all back? poo. It's gettign harder and harder denying the Edward/Bella side of this story, but I have my fingers crossed and twisted so much I might be mailing you a docters bill pretty soon. Please Please Please - Jacob/Bella? Please! Err, shameless begging aside, this was another great chapter. I don't know your update patterns, I'm guessing every three weeks? I don't know if I can handle another fanfiction that only updates once a month XD I think all you authors are conspiring against me, or else, I'm really good at fidning fanfictions that update at the same time and leave me getting all my stories jumbled throughout the month. Regardless, I think you should know by now, and I know by now, I'm hopelessly in love with this story, and it will be at the top of the list of the stories that I get online everyday for and check the update status, even though it only updated four days ago. Suck. lol. I love how protective Jacob is, especially how worried he is about Bella's relationship with Leah. I think other stories make him too protective, which is almost out of character when you consider that Bella really liked Jake, because he was reckless and always didn't look out for what was best for her. Though I think now they're developing more as a couple he should become protective, and I think you've found the right level of overprotection, where it isn't overbearing, and you can't compare it to the amount of overprotectiveness that Edward had over Bella. Speaking of which, not that I'm complaining, but where is he sulking around? Oh man, getting good. Don't keep us faithful reviews hanging, maybe a early Christmas present sooner then later would be pretty appreciated and just awesome. ALSO, I wanted to thanks for the longs chapters, I love an author that can write them, keep them intresting and detials, and boring-free. Just another mad props to be given. Merry Christmas!! Hopefully my 17 reviews will garner a little more attention for this amazing story.
Author's Response: You just gave me the best Christmas present ever! For serious, I'm touched (not the crazy kind like "touched in the head" but the warm gooey kind like "touched my heart")
And I totally just spent like two hour responding to all your reviews cuz I'm that much of a dork (and I get easily distracted--meaning I get up to dance when a good song comes on my mp3 player, lol). I'm so glad that you see where I'm coming from with character development, because OOCness is something I can't stand seeing in my own fics. Sorry about being so slow at updating. I'm awful and It's just how my brain works (I agonize over every little thing I write).
Thank you, thank you, thank you. Your reviews are so inspiring and motivational. I'll see what I can do about that Christmas present. :D
(Oh, and Edward is out and about contacting peoples and getting things settled so that the Cullens make a smooth transition back to Forks.)
Reviewer: Jessisreang (Signed) · Date: December 18, 2009 08:12 PM · On: The Morning After
Drumroll please. This was MY FAVORITE chapter, amazing, the perfect way I've read Bella ever admit to Jake that she loves him. Not corny, not overdone, but subtle enough to to scream instead of talk, just prefect for their characters. Also, I like your twist, scratch that, love your twist on how Bella finds out about why Edward is back. I never thought of it happening this way, or ever read another fanfiction where this happened. Your originality is the reason why I love this story so much, and how it's honestly my favorite of all the ones I've read. I think once it truly takes off, you're going to start a trend and have a lot of copy catters. Seriously, I can't say enough how amazing this story is, you're amazing a writing, and the way you build a plot is seriously an art. Thankyou!
Author's Response: klodfhj klojavljma;sevbjkopihyqe 89yhtaeokitpowui m[pedfgdiot7-q02348609u 4nq73dfjkl;g nuqaow jawp[945780-48[3 u;'ldkpga m0[ahg;lej r'niwun 4boj2hout`1j[pip iojdfgp ojf; joweio7f890PU[ N430[7[GW84=RTQUJV;AKWJECRQ;EKL;GTJ[QP8O U <------ This is code for lots of grateful, humbled, gleeful expressions of joy.
You just killed me softly with your words.
*dies*
Reviewer: Jessisreang (Signed) · Date: December 18, 2009 08:08 PM · On: Returns
One name: Leah. again, yay for bring her back! Haha I love what she 'told' Edward! Go Leah! Realizing that Edward didn't actually appear until this chapter, made me think that next time i should just review as I go along, but again, LAZY! anyway, I really really really love your story.
Author's Response: Leah says the things that I want to say after spending several hours trying to figure out how to acurately write Edward's character. *grins*
Reviewer: Jessisreang (Signed) · Date: December 18, 2009 08:06 PM · On: Constellations
For a moment there I was like 'is Embry going to imprint on Bella?' because that would be screwed up, but when I thought about it, I was like, how come no one's ever thougth about the fact that another pack member could have imprinted on Bella and started some pretty chaotic events? So I decided I wouldn't have been disappointed, but then when nothing happened and I realize I way over think things, i still wasn't disappointed, because I love Jacob/Bella stuff every since Taylor Lautner's amazing acting skills gave me a whole new spin on how much Jake really dersevres to be with Bella, and she really kind of ripped her heart out the same way Edward ripped hers out, and how I basically jumped the Swissship, and now I'm here scowering(?) the internet for alternative endings to New Moon. Sad life? maybe lol. But Anyday where Jake takes Bella on a beautiful in character date, which I don't think was overdone at all, so kudos to you, is pretty fun to read. I'd have to say, another favorite chapter. Though Edward skulking in at the end there made a little angry, a little curious, a little excited, and submissive, becaue he has to come back, and it's your story, and you ultimately get to choose who Bella goes with. I think you did a good job with Edward's reactions, I think I have to get a little more monologue in there before I can judge rather or not he's as as great as the rest of your characters (which are amazing) but I wiould be perfectly contented if he just disappeared and Bella admited her hopeless undying love for Jake. hehe just saying.
Author's Response: So I totally agree about Taylor Lautner and his amzingness, because in the scene in the rain in New Moon where he breaks up with her, I just about DIEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEDDDD! For serious, I was like: "look at that boy's angst face! LOOK AT IT DAMN IT! I mean, Pattinson did pretty good in his break up scene (his face when he kissed her on the head deserves some props) but Taylor totally blew him away in the chemistry department. Because whenever Bella was around Edward in the movie, she looked nervous as hell and was all incoherent and making me feel uncomfortable. The Edward/Bella kisses look PAINFUL and unnatural, and even though you hear Bella say she loves Edward over and over like a broken record, she never says why and the audience never SEES why because they're just awkward around one another and it's not because of sexual tension. But when watching the movie you could SEE that Bella loves Jacob and you can see why. He makes her smile and seem like a teenage girl and there is FREAKIN' LOADS of sexual tension. At the end of the movie, people who hadn't read the books, were like: "Wait, so why didn't she choose Jacob? I don't understand." The movie made alot of Team Jacob fans, I think.
But this isn't the movie 'verse or SM's 'verse (obviously or Jacob would have imprinted on a cat or tulip by now), so we'll see how things go...
Reviewer: Jessisreang (Signed) · Date: December 18, 2009 08:00 PM · On: Human
I don't think there was a chapter of this story I didn't even half not love.
Author's Response: My face HURTS from smiling at your reviews.
Reviewer: Jessisreang (Signed) · Date: December 18, 2009 07:59 PM · On: Into the Woods
and this is where you made fall hopelessly in love with Embry. and my heart broke because of Jacob and how bad he felt. and where I wish I had some painkillers as hardcore as Bella does right now (but I'm aweful at filling prescriptions, oh man, real lazy huh?) and basically, poor Embry.
Author's Response: Embry and I are secret lovers.
That. Is. All.
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