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Reviews For Zenith
Reviewer: Hespera (Signed) · Date: January 24, 2010 04:23 PM · On: Agreement

It's confession time: I, Hespera, a Greek nymph, have been a closet fan of this story for several weeks. I am no longer sure when or where my fall into fandom began, but I am in far too deep to stop before I have finished this story, and discovered the mystery of Felicity Swan who was born in 1588 and died in the 18th century still looking young and fresh. A witch? Yes, probably, but I want to know more details...

I also must know if Bella and Edward will become a couple again, or if she decides to stay with Jake.

I have officially outed myself, and offer my heartfelt mea culpas for my previous lack of reviewing. In the 21st century, even Greek nymphs have boring days filled with work and other mundane necessities. I would much prefer watching the Quileute boys and the Cullen men dance around a giant bonfire with very little clothing...Talk about stimulating and enriching cross-species activites....!



Author's Response:

I love your name!  It's so beautiful. :)

You know what?  I think you're the first person who pointed out the dates on the tombstone.  If anyone else has caught on to that, they haven't mentioned it.  So, props to you for being observant!

Well, I can't give away the end pairings, so you'll have to stick around for that part. ;)

Ooh, I like your idea about enriching cross-species activites.  It sounds like it would be a very valuable experience.

No need to appologize!  It's just great to finally meet you.  Thanks!

Reviewer: leelator (Signed) · Date: January 24, 2010 03:24 PM · On: Agreement

Thanks for the SOB Awards, sweet pea. (I returned the favor.)

Author's Response:

:D

Reviewer: Jessisreang (Signed) · Date: January 24, 2010 02:54 PM · On: Agreement

Okay so :) Favorite part was definitely the whole dancing around bonfires holiday thing, I laughed SO hard. It seemed so perfect for him to say that, because I'm pretty sure that's definitely a Jakey thing to say. AHmazing lol.

I have some mixed feedback. WOAH. lol I felt a little out of sorts reading the beginning, I still can't really put my finger on it, It was good, don't get me wrong, but I think for as high as you've set the bar with this story it wasn't like as good as it could have been.  I think maybe though I agree Edward is more agressive, he is more clever and less brute and I think he came off a little brute. Though he's over protective, and I think you hit that on the nail, I think it might have been more in character if Edward hard adressed Jacob, instead of Leah regarding the whole shebang. Edward always knew how to press Jacob's buttons in the book, and Jacob knew how to play it cool most of the time, i think it would have pissed Leah off equally as much, and the same point would have been carried. Just some imput. I definitely think Edward is much more careful and he seemed almost reckless. I like every other character portrayal here, especially Alice and Bella, AND Leah AND Carlisle AND okay I mise well just say everyone instead of naming them all off. I think you have a very good grasp on writing Edward, but I do think he needs to be a bit more him and bit less angry, if he's trying to win Bella back, and if he's trying to be as clever as he was in Eclipse AKA trying to come off as the good guy. I understand at the same time he needs to be pissed about some things, but I think all pissed off ness should be focused on Jacob unintentionally almost like how he always came off as jealous towards Jacob, but he wasn't trying too. I don't know, I have a hard time of conveying what I mean. Bottom line, it was awkward for me to read for a moment because Edward almost seemed childlike instead of the mature one, which would go with the role reversal, but I still couldn't see him acting childishly in any situation. ???????

I definitely loved Carlisle's little bomb drop about the volatile thing, Niiiice. Haha I was like OOOOHno he did not. lol.

I like reading the reviews for this story, they always bring up good points, and I have to admit I didn't realize how Alice had act when they had returned in New Moon, like nothing had happened.  It made me mad she was acting that way too, but whe nsomething mentioned that's how she was in the book, I realized it was true. Sometimes we get so wrapped up in fanfiction we forget it's fanfiction XD I need to go reread bad! I'm think Eclipse tho because it's my favorite probably. Man! my whole perspective on Alice is changing, because of this story. again. WOAH. lol and that's not a bad thing.

Omg, yet again, mad props for Leah AGAIN. the 'I'm sorry' seemed to totally fit her character, I felt so sorry for Bella though, I was embarrassed for her. AHHHH

NOOOOO don't take Bella's soul!! What's gonna happen I NNNNEEEEDDDD to know! Who's grave is that? It was Felicity's right? Crap. SOMETHING COMING? What? lol Victoria's coming. lol. Ughhh I don't know this sotry makes me crazy excited.

Jake and Bella are going bowling!! lol there better be some gooey BellaJakey next chapter. This is where I would wiggle my eyebrows persuasively. haha. Edward and Alice are in the next lane, Jacob and Bella are going at each other's face. GIVE UP EDWARD! that would be the sign I would be holding in the background. HA Please? Shameless begging.....

MAN! You can't go talking about the last chapter and face palming and cryin. WHAT? Lol, I seriousl better still be nineteen when this ends, if we're talking 153 then I don't know, at one or two updates a months I'll probably be married and kids by then and I don't know if I'm ready to be a Twimom. lol. AHH godd chapter, they just keep getting better and better. I can't wait for Edward to pour his guts out to her, and I can't wait for Bella to be so friggen confused that I just want to scream. I think you could honestly go either way and I'd still probably like your ending, though I probably won't cry if she ends up with Edward and we all know you want us to break down balling. :) I think Bella's wising up anway, would she still want Edward if she was a witch? What would that entail? Is she going to be immortal? AH you're killing me.

 

Thankthankthankyou for the speedy speedy update. and the email alert. !!!! I really appreciated it. I know a great valentines day gift you can get me : D lol Holidays are probably your worst enemy with me. ANYWAY Thank you again! Good chapter. amazing Jacob, because I know I haven't told you that in a while. When you finish this story you need to write some more Jacob stuff. Jacob fluff. whatever you know :)



Author's Response:

Oh, Edward, when will you stop giving me so many woes! *sigh*

So, here's my Edward plan:  Right now, he is NOT trying to win Bella back.  Quite the opposite.  He's actually trying to distance himself from her (he doesn't have any classes with her and he hasn't showed her any warmth beyond their initial meeting in the woods).  This all stems from his self-sacrificing nature.  When he returned to Forks, he really didn't have a plan.  It was more of a desperate move to be near to her in some capacity.  And then he realized to what extent she is involved with the wolves and he has mixed feelings (imagine! lol).  He does not like the danger the wolves pose, but he can't find it in himself to deny Bella the chance at the normal human life he'd wanted for her.  Is he jeaouse?  Sure.  But he's also really torn.  I guess that's what I was trying to show this chapter.  He had to fight to keep the indifferent faccade up.  And then when for the first time he saw (from the wolves thoughts as they recalled the memory after Carlisle brought it up) exactly what happened to Bella, he kind of lost some of that control, which we've seen before in the actual series.  I think he had the right to a protective freak out (I really do feel bad for his current position because it's real shitty).  Anyway, that's what I was going for, and I will continue to work on it. *gives my Edward the evil eye*

Haha, Carlise did give them a very polite slap in the face, didn't he?  I love that man. :) I'm glad you enjoyed Jake's dorkiness.  It's always good for a few snorts.

What's coming?  You'll have to wait until next chapter to find out! (but you can probably guess, lol)

Oh, there will be plenty o' BellaJacob gooeyness.  Plenty. No persuasive eyebrow wiggling necessary. ;)

I really want to get to the gut pouring too.  That's gonna be a HEAVY conversation.  Don't worry, there wont be a 153 chapters.  Just 152. :D

My lips are sealed about witch attributes until Bella figures it out herself. (lol, that could take a while).

You're welcome!  I actually AM working on a short-ish fic right now that is Jacob-centered.  It will probably be about three parts long.  At the moment it's pretty light-hearted, but there's drama to come.

Thanks, bb! I'll e-mail you before my next update.

 

Reviewer: happylauren15 (Signed) · Date: January 24, 2010 02:22 PM · On: Agreement

Ooh! I love this story. I think its because you keep Edward and Jacob EXACTLY in character. You're not choosing sides exactly. It makes me really want to see what happens. I also love how you incorporate the packs humor in there. You know "Quilembry". Lol. I'm so excited to see what happens next! 

 



Author's Response:

Oh, I am soooo naming my first child Quilembry. *cackles*

Your complimenting my characterization?!  Thank you!  That's the most important part to all of this for me.

Yay for excitement!

Reviewer: sistergrimm (Signed) · Date: January 24, 2010 01:51 PM · On: Crutch

still can't believe alice has the nerve to act like nothing happened and everything is the same. i hated that in the real series to.



Author's Response:

Oh, girl, I am right there with you.  It STILL hits a nerve for me.

Reviewer: sistergrimm (Signed) · Date: January 24, 2010 01:26 PM · On: Agreement

GAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!! can't wait for bella to kick some ass!!!!!!



Author's Response:

Okay, so I clicked on my review and the layout suddenly expanded to huge proportions, and I was like, "WTF?"  And then I scrolled down and saw this huge line of HHHHHHHHHHHHHH going across my screen and I laughed. :)

I FEEL your frustration/excitement/anticipation!  I can't wait for some but-kicking either. *giggles*  I have a hard time picturing Bella kicking anyone anywhere.

:D

Reviewer: Dulcinea21bella (Signed) · Date: January 24, 2010 01:24 PM · On: Agreement

I love it.  Excellent update!



Author's Response:

I'm rhapsodic (cool word, huh?) that you loved it so much.  Thanks!

Reviewer: twirl1 (Signed) · Date: January 24, 2010 01:18 PM · On: Agreement

Awesome chapter... I'm so glad they were able to stop Edward from attacking Leah... that would not have been good... Its good that Bella and Jake are going out it gives them the chance to be normal teenagers... I so can't wait for the next chapter... Its time!!! omg... update soon...:P



Author's Response:

Can you imagine Edward and Leah getting into it?! I don't think I could take the CLASH OF THE ANGSTY! lol.

A real date.  Isn't that nice? *smirk*

I'll try to update ASAP.  Thanks!

Reviewer: Mia210 (Signed) · Date: January 24, 2010 01:14 PM · On: Agreement

shhhhhh a closet fan here.... shhhhhh ...lol



Author's Response:

HAHA! *opens closet door and waves into the darkness*

Welcome into the light of day.  And look!  No sparkles! :)

Nice to meet you.

Reviewer: Gwilwillith (Signed) · Date: January 24, 2010 12:57 PM · On: Agreement

i still cn't work out wha is ocming for bella aor calling her to change! Is sh a witch or something else especially witht he reference to "losing her soul".  Its great!



Author's Response:

If you don't mind me telling you...she will be becoming a witch.  But the soul thing will be REALLY important later.

Thank you, dear!

Reviewer: dkgors (Signed) · Date: January 24, 2010 12:39 PM · On: Agreement

The more we get into this story the better it gets!  Soooooooo many questions!

What's the deal with Bella's dreams? I can't wait to find out what it is that they are trying to tell her, or, get her ready for!

I'm so loving Jacob in your story....he's just perfect!

I still don't trust Edward,,,,,,

Up-date soon, if your excited for the next chapter, I certainly am too!



Author's Response:

Oh, to dream a dream...

*holds pile of shit while glancing up at the cieling fan*

lol! So...I'm glad you're keen on Jacob.  I'm partial to him myself. ;)

Could your problem with Edward have something to his the whole grim/disatisfied/stoney/distanced thing he has going on at the moment?  Sorry, Edward, I wasn't the one you chose to make you such an angsty character. *shoots SM a conspicuous look*

I'll try to be timely about my next chapter. Thank you!

Reviewer: twilight goddess (Signed) · Date: January 24, 2010 12:07 PM · On: Agreement

I want bella and edward to get back together, let Jacob imprint or something

 



Author's Response:

Edward and Bella really need to work some things out, don't they?  Bella needs to stop being all self-deprecating and Edward needs to stop being so self-righteous.  I promise that they have a heart-to-heart coming soon.  Hehe, Jacob wont be imprinting (that's a naughty word in my vocabulary) but I wont rule out the 'something'.

Thanks for reading and taking the time to review!

Reviewer: danimcket (Signed) · Date: January 24, 2010 11:29 AM · On: Agreement

You have closet fans because this is a really great story. I am excited for the next chapter too.



Author's Response:

Aw, thank you!  I see that my excitement for next chapter is contagious. :D

Reviewer: sweetness4683 (Signed) · Date: January 24, 2010 11:28 AM · On: Agreement

I can't wait to see what's going on with Bella!  Great chapter!  I loved how you described Bella grabbing onto Jacobs wolf legs in the meeting!  Awesome!



Author's Response:

That's so interesting. My beta mentioned really liking the whole Bella-Jacob-leg thing too.  I didn't think much of it when I wrote it, but it's great that you thought it was awesome. :)

Stay tuned for the next chapter! Thanks.

Reviewer: Liz-Cullen (Signed) · Date: January 24, 2010 11:03 AM · On: Agreement

Love, love, love, love, love it. 

One of my favourite stories at the minute on Twilighted!!

xx



Author's Response:

*blushes*  Thank you.  It's great to hear that this story is bring you so much enjoyment/angst/sappyness/impatience. :D

Reviewer: DazedNCnfused (Signed) · Date: January 24, 2010 10:35 AM · On: Agreement

This was a great chapter. It gave us another look into those crazy dreams that I am oh so curious about. :) To say they're interesting would be an understatement.

And another surprise--Leah coming to stand by Bella's side! I think her very drawn out apology was very in character. :)

Absolutely cannot wait for the next one! :D



Author's Response:

Okay, crazy dreams are becoming one of my favorite things to write (behind sexy Jacob, goofy Embry, pms Leah, and perverted Quil). They will be (slightly) explained at some time in the future.

I'm glad Leah acted appropriately bitchy. ;)

Thank you for your continued feedback!

Reviewer: kng1986 (Signed) · Date: January 24, 2010 10:31 AM · On: Agreement

“I feel something.  Something’s coming. Soon.”  I sighed.  “It’s time.”  I am so excited for this to happen.  I think Bella is getting there too. 

I'm glad Bella got some input at the meeting even to the point of Sam asking her about Jasper's influence.   It shows the Cullens she can be an equal with the wolves and that she needs their respect not just protection.

I've always been a Jacob fan but not for Bella but I can't help enjoying their easy, fun relationship. 



Author's Response:

Oh, we're not getting there.  We ARE there. :)

I wasn't really that big on Bella's passiveness during the meeting in Eclipse, so I spiffied it up this time around. Reaspect:  Learned.  Earned.  Returned.  That's my motto!

Thank you much!

Reviewer: jordynnem (Signed) · Date: January 24, 2010 10:08 AM · On: Agreement

Trekkies huh? I guess that's true. Some of us are just a little more open about our obsessions I suppose.

It's almost time. I am so excited!!! Oh yeah and great chapter of course.

 



Author's Response:

It upsets me that a lot people feel self conscious about their fandoms.  I myself am a little bit guilty of this.  Bringing up Twilight in my Interp and Argument class (which is specifically about fandoms) would probably garner more than a few eye rolls.  I really shouldn't care what people think, but...I guess that's human nature. (My brother on the other hand is an avid Star Wars fan and loud and proud.)  Do you like Star Trek?  I used to watch the Next Generation all the time when I was little, and I love the new movies.

Thank you! It's great to hear how much you enjoyed it.

Reviewer: leelator (Signed) · Date: January 24, 2010 09:56 AM · On: Agreement

Wow! Not only fab but fast! How'd you pull it off, MM? I loved the Safety Council (tons!)and the scene with Leah. Great stuff! I particularly loved the image of Jacob and Leah looming over Bella, protecting her. So is Jacob going to be involved in the naked fire dancing? Can I come? Huh? Huh? Can I? Huh? Can I?

When Bella is talking about "Accidents happen, Edward. You should know that," is she talking about her 18th birthday party or was there another accident involving E and B in your story that I've failed to record in my copious chapter notes?

So when are you getting to the witch thing? Anytime soon or are you going to continue to torture us by hanging it over our heads for another 20 chapters? Hmmm?

Can't wait to read the next chapter since "Something's coming." You little tease, you!

 



Author's Response:

Jacob doing naked fire dancing sounds like something more up YOUR alley. :)  So naturally we'd both get front row seats.

Yes, Bella was referring to her 18th birthday. Is it sad that we see something as miniscule as speaking up to be worthy of applause when it comes from Bella. lol, that girl can be sooooo passive.

Witch thing: next chapter. No reason to be mysterious, I guess, even though torture IS one of my favorite past times. Guantanamo and I go waaaaay back. ;)

Thanks, bb.  I'm looking forward to the next chapter of HTSW (btw, I voted for you in the SOB awards!).

Reviewer: wendeline (Signed) · Date: January 24, 2010 09:10 AM · On: Agreement

awesome



Author's Response:

Thank you. :)

Reviewer: blondebella (Signed) · Date: January 24, 2010 09:04 AM · On: Agreement

Your authors note was great. And i loved the chapter, it seems like every chapter is better than the last. and I gues I'm coming out of the closet by reviewing thiss!!!! :]]]]

actually I think I reviewed once before. Oh weeelll:]

love it. need more. BYEEE:]



Author's Response:

YES!  You're a Zenith fan!!!  Say it loud and proud, baby! ;)

It really means alot hearing that you think the chapters continue to get better.  This is my first fic of this size, so trying to maintain a certain level of quality has proven to be a good challenge.  So as long as I'm not getting worse...

Thank you for opening that door! lol.

Reviewer: waywardfool (Signed) · Date: January 24, 2010 07:48 AM · On: Agreement

I've followed this story for a while and i'm not sure that I have reviewed yet (I may have.. possibly) but I just had to say that I look forward to this update above all others. And that's a serious fact! I have so many stories on alert, from three different sites and over five different fandoms and Zenith makes me the happiest :) Does that make you feel a little crazy? Serious props to you for intriguing me so much. I want the whole thing now. Its like waiting for a new novel to come out and having to wait for a year in between!

Love your story, very much wanting for Felicity to do some hoodoo and make Bella either crazy, have some serious memory overloads or powerful in a bewitching way.

Also, I love how included Leah is in this, and the whole scars thing is pretty well written.

I'll be good and review next chapted too :)

Fool



Author's Response:

"A little crazy" doesn't even begin to describe how hearing that makes me feel.  Try "fervently rhapsodic"!!!!  It's just amazing because this story is like an little indie film compared to all of those box office smash hit stories out there, and I just love how supportive my audience has been even though we're a small community.  So thank you.

I'm sorry about how long it takes me to update, I AM trying to be better about that.  No more of those two month waits.

It seems you have a pretty good idea of what's to come, so I hope that I deliver it in a way that doesn't dissapoint.  I'm glad that you like the Leah/scar intrigue.  I've really enjoyed writing that subplot.

Thank you very much. :D

Reviewer: Leilal (Signed) · Date: January 24, 2010 07:15 AM · On: Agreement

I love Karl Urban too. Enjoying Zenith. Mahalo=TY Aloha,Leilani

Author's Response:

Aloha!

Isn't he dreamy? *sigh* I think its the accent. Yummy. :)

It's great to hear from you, and I'm estatic that you're enjoying this story. Mahalo!

Reviewer: KayCullen 2009 (Signed) · Date: January 24, 2010 06:25 AM · On: Agreement

lol so am i it seems its rely movin on a jus want th big mystery 2 cum oot in th open a rely wana kno an a so hope jake an bella gt so much closer soon

plz update soon am so impatient for this story lol

=)



Author's Response:

Things certainly are moving now, aren't they? You sound as impatient as I am. WHICH IS ALOT!

I'll do my best to be super speedy! Thanks. :D

Reviewer: Vampire_luva (Signed) · Date: January 24, 2010 05:37 AM · On: Agreement

OMG You have to update faster. She really needs to turn into a witch soon!! AHHHH! So much suspence!



Author's Response:

Update FASTER?! Are you not impressed with my speedy turn around these last few chapters?  And, omg, you're gonna like the next chapter A LOT. :)

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