Ok, Bella's blood killing the vampire was pretty awesome! hehe I wish she could tell Edward about it. Keep writing. :)

Author's Response:

Wasn't that cool?!  Like...in a disturbing way?  I don't know if she'll be able to keep it from Edward and company or not.  She's got some explaining to do that I don't think will be very easy to get out of.

Thank you!

i'm, trying to hold on but it's getting rough.  i'm either going to have to skip some chapters till edward gets back or throw  up! 

Author's Response:

Oh, well, throwing up is not usually one of the reactions I hope to enduce.  That being said, you're not the first person to feel that way.  My advice:  hunker down and grab a trashcan.  You're gonna need it. ;)

'Kay, so remember waaay back when you realized you had closet fans?

...Oh hai!

Coming out of my beloved lurkdom because this chapter was just. too. good.!

Things that are deliciously confusing/astounding me at the moment: Felicity knew VAMPIRES?! Oooh she is just the most frustrating/fascinating character! And what will Victoria do when she finds out Riley bit the dust? (hehe) Does Edward know whats going on? Does Bella?! Also, remembering something from the book: Carlisle mentioned hunting witches when he was a human, will he recognize the mark at all/figure it out? GAH!

FYI, the word choice and balance were incredible, so def feel rewarded ;) Also, if you need incentive to power through the "tedium" for next chapter: 1.) This is absolutley the best portrayal of Bella I've ever seen. Better than the book. 2.) This is probably my favorite twific EVER, definitely the best action-y plot I've come across and 3.) uh, I came out of lurking for you? So brownie points for me? Pleeeeeeease?

Love love love it. Keep it goin!

Author's Response:

*rolls out the welcome mat*

Welcome to the Land of Interaction!  You will recognize many of your fellow natives of Lurkdom here. ;)

Felicity.  She is one of my favorite characters to work with becuase she knows things EVEN I DON'T KNOW.  Which is crazy.  Literally.  Lol at your pun--so appropriate.  Dude, you KNOW everything that Bella knows.  First person POV and all that.  That's why everyone's confused.  Because if Bella were the the type of person to curse and, you know, be worried that she is speaking with dead people, she'd be like "WTF is going on around here?!"  Which is why we are saying that to ourselves.

Carlisle...*smirk*

Brownie points?  No.  You deserve GIRL SCOUT COOKIE POINTS!  Which are like 8,123,988,987 times better than regular old brownie points.  I have the best readers in the entire world because you guys say the nicest things and care so much about this story.  Thank you so much.

And thanks for jumping the lurkdom ship. :D

No Jacob :( like the only chapter in this story with no Jacob. Ah well, sooo....????? Bella slept with Jacob forcing her transformation, or by sleeping with Jacob she became impure and thus lost her soul? I don't know much about witchy folklore, though I was super into during a phase when I was fourteen, something to do with Harry Potter that I'd rather not return too. Jog my memory, why did Felicity decide she needed to go? How did her dying affect Bella? or is it all part of some future chapters. Are vampires going to be her natural enemy or wolves too? She can't tell Jacob. I don't understand why it is that Bella is motivated to teleport, or why she couldn't after Riley bit her or before?

I think you pulled off a great angsty Edward this chapter. Very good.

Alright, only complaint. I haven't been checking word counts so it might be a flakey complaint, but I'm fairly positive the chapters seem shorter. It feels like either you're becoming high of cliffhangers and thus are addicted to them, lol, or maybe the trade off to shorter updates is shorter chapters. The chapters just don't seem to hold as much as they did before, or the scenes seem shorter. I don't think they've really lost the feel of the story yet, but maybe over time they will. Like if three or four more chapters were that way it would start to seem clipped. Maybe I'm reading the chapters way faster, maybe, the only thing is I feel like these last few chapters were really good, but quick to deliver. Or maybe like, there weren't as many parts to the chapter. Like maybe there should have been one more little part to this chapter. You still could have kept Bella and Jake's dramatic meeting out, but maybe a family gathering or something in the end, or Edward going a little more indepth, or like just one more little bit. Regardless, I think the chapters are so good, a rich in detial that they can carry themselves how short they are. I'm just pointing out little things I notice.

These shorts updates are too good, but don't compromise your baby for us crazy reviewers who hound you until the sun comes up. We don't know what's for our own good.

I just wanted to throw out another kudos for Edward. In the woods, in the bedroom. and you know I always love yoru Leah. I love how bothered the whole situation seemed. You have old age prim and proper Edward, and intense new age swear word loving Leah. I loved that situation right off the back. I like how she's there, protective, like how she was protective over Jacob in breaking Dawn even though she didn't want to be there. I like how you stay so in character and keep in a paralell with the books. I'm sooo excited for Bella to discover herself, but I'm crossing my fingers. I hope her soul going to Jacob somehow ties her to him. You'll know I stick with it through the end, you write so well, this story has been amazing; but Edward better back the hell off Jacob's girl. I can't hate him though, I'm still very Team switz even though I love Jacob ten times more then Eddy, I still like Edward/Bella. This stories tearing me every whichway, you can't write every character amazing, because then I won't care which way you decide to ship.

Besides the fact I'm in severe Jacob-seperation-anxiety mode, thank you for an amazing chapter and the quick update! and killing Riley. Just so you know I quite the internet for a week and a half as not to get to anxious for the update. I've never been so addicted to a story. :)

Author's Response:

I really shouldn't have read your review in a public place. lol.  I'm like surpressing my giggles into my coat and nodded vigurously at the screen like a crazy woman.

Mkay.  Yes, I missed Jacob to. *sniffle*  But one of the things that bothered me a little about the Twilight series was that it wasn't a book about Bella, even though SM would say it is.  It's about "Bella and Edward."  Once she met Edward he was either directly referenced or alluded to on almost every freakin' page.  And I think that really contributed to why their relationship seemed so obsesive.  I don't want that for Jake and Bells.  I think it's more natural for a girl not to be thinking about her boyfriend every second of the day.  If I were SM, I would have had Jacob find her in the woods, but unfortunately I'm not.  So hence the slight Jacob haitus.

lol, you have lots of question about the witch thing, which I cannot answer at this time because I think you'll enjoy it more if you find out while reading for yourself.  It will become clear-er in the future. (I do have to say, however, that you are very much correct in pointing to a correlation between Bella sleeping with Jacob and her new-found wierdness.)

You liked my Edward?!  This is AMAZING.  You know how I struggle with him, and his and Bella's relationship is in such a precarious place right now, that this chapter was a real nail-biter to write.  *sigh of relief*  Oh, yes, the tension between him and Leah is electric, no?  If that were anyone else but Bella between them, he or she would probably just jump out the window cuz it'd seem safer.

If YOU are that conflicted over Jacob and Edward, imagine how poor Bella feels! yikes!

Okay, so I glanced back at some of my old chapters to look at their lengths and this is the trend I found:  The first like 7 chapters are around 8 pages on Word.  Then the next chunk are about um 14 pages with a couple that stand out one way or the other, and then these last three chapters or so have been sitting around 12 pages.  So you're right in that these last few have been shorter the ones leading up to them.  I think that, yes, part of it me tyring to stick to this two-week turn around, but I also think that a bigger part is that the action has increased in the last few, and I've wanted to keep certain events seperated.  Also, these chapters are faster paced and a quicker read because they have more dialogue and action and less of Bella doing internal monologues.   I'll try to keep length in mind as I continue.  Thanks for pointing it out to me.  I'll discuss it with my beta.

Haha, I'm causing internet strikes. Awesome. ;)

Thank you as always for the thoughtful feedback.  It makes my day.

Loved the chapter. There is alot of mysterious goings on here. My theory is that Bella is a descendent of werewolves and is some kind of hybred. Hopefully Bella and Jacob are imprinted on each other and meant to be together. I am tired of stories where Bella quickly falls back into Edward's arms and all is forgiven. This is really a fascinating story. Keep the chapters coming as quickly as possible.

Author's Response:

Uh, oh.  You said the dirty word: imprint.  *gasp* lol.

I can promise you that there will be no imprinting for Jacob.  That's one of the things SM and I most definately did not see eye-to-eye on.

I like your theory.  A lot.  In fact, it might be cooler than what I actually have planned out. (You'll have to let me know.)

I'll do my best to be timely, but I'm starting midterms soon, so not much time to write. :(

Thanks!

The chapter turned out beautifully, so you don't have anything to worry about. I am completely intrigued, because I cannot quite figure out which direction this story will take. The devil stole Bella's soul, and the black handprint is the price to reserve a place in hell?!? OK, I am at a complete loss here...

Leah is really coming around though, and I think she genuinely cares for Bella. It's hard for her to show positive emotions (she's not an emotional vacuum, because she does show anger and aggression), but it's tough for her to demonstrate her tender side. I am glad to see her displayed/characterised in a better light; she always seems to get the short end of the stick, and it's not fair.

Author's Response:

I CAN HARDLY CONTAIN MY EXCITEMENT.  I want everyone to know what's going on so we can you know be enthusiastic  together, but at the same time I love the suspense, so I'm working very hard to stay tight-lipped.

Isn't it great how Leah shows her caring side?  She actually choose to stay in the stinky house with a vampire just so that she could stay with Bella (thought Leah would never admit to that reasoning).  Character development makes me so happy to witness.  I'm glad that you approve. :)

Thank you for the feedback!

Ag! I love your story! I might have to stop reading until it is finished because the following has happened. I start from the beginning Team Edward. I read this story and I like Jacob so much, and you write them so well, I'm all hey, this is great. This is the way it should be. But then I start reading again and I remember, wait!, Edward is the way it should be. But now I'm thinking even if they did get back together he can't change her or he'll turn into a dust bunny. Crap. Maybe they can get a syringe of venom and stab her with it Pulp Fiction style...

Author's Response:

See, all of this business aboiut "teams" puts people in the wrong mindset I think.  It's not like in football where if you root for the Colts you can never say a nice thing about the Patriots.  It should be OK to like characters based on what they do in different stories and on how different authors develop them.  I think you'll feel alot better if you just kinda let go and see where these characters happen to take you in the end. :)

And, lol, Edward totally beat you to the whole syringe thing in Breaking Dawn. Great minds! ;D

Thank you!

Wow, another ace chapter. I must admit I'm a little confused, but I'm willing to wait because it's all so exciting!! This is my no.1 favourite story at the moment on Twilighted. :D :)

 

Author's Response:

You guys can't SAY things like that! GAH.  I'm grinning like an idiot and the people around me are starting to stare.

But, really, thank you.  Bunches.  I'm soooo glad that you're enjoying this ride, including the drops (which happen to be my favorite part of ANY ride). :D

The end was little confusing. They were back in Forks? And that ink shape was real or just a hallucination? And Emmet and Embry were really there or was Bella just dreaming? And that vamp was Riley?

Author's Response:

Yeah, that's one of the down sides about fanfiction WIP's. When something confusing happens, you don't get the immediate resolution by flipping to the next chapter like you would in a completed book.  You're correct about Riley, and all of your other questions will be answered next chapter. :)

Thank you!

I just started reading this story the other day. and now I'm all caught up.
I got tired of reading the "Bella-falls-in-love-with-Edward-the-end" stories. i love this story. I don't really like Jacob [I'm just not a fan of Jacob in any story] this is a good story. I never thought I would feel different about the Cullens. hahaa.
and is it Riley?
i really want to know what is happening to Bella. i have thought of 3 things. 1 she just unconscious and is dreaming everything. 2 she is a vamp already and for some strange reason nobody knows. 3 uhhh i have no idea. im so confused. yes i know all my theories are WAAAAY off but I can't wait until the next chapter! Keep writing and update soon :D

Author's Response:

Welcome to the story!!!

lol.  That's okay.  You don't have to like all of the characters to enjoy a story.  I mean we're human so we ENJOY hating people. ;)

Correct on the Riley front. Bravo.

Ugh. I reeeeally want to tell you, but...that would spoil the next chapter. So stay tuned!

Thanks for taking the time to give me some feedback and insight into your thoughts. :)

AWwwwwww wwwwwwwwwwooooooooooooooow so glad about the sex scene and I think it's Riley........I also think she may notbe dreaming - someone took her outside, safely away from fighting Embry and Emmet and had to leave for some trouble?!

Author's Response:

I'm glad that you were cool with the lack of an actual "scene" per say.  And you're right about Riley. :)

And thanks for sharing your theory with me.  You'll have to see how it plays out next chapter!

riley?  aggggg...cliffhanger

Author's Response:

Correct!  Thank you. :)

Yeah, ok, so I hate to admit this, but I am as lost as Bella.  Can't wait for an update!

Author's Response:

Believe me, you're not alone.  That's how these first person POV's work. :)

Thank you!