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Reviews For Zenith
Reviewer: TeamJacobYeah (Signed) · Date: April 19, 2010 09:52 AM · On: Ashes to Ashes

Curiouser and curiouser!!  Please, please, please don't let Bella fall back into Edward's arms like she did in the books!!  She and Jacob have come so far! You really have me worried!



Author's Response:

I wont.  Bella's done some maturing in Edward's absence.  She's a little more grounded I think.

Reviewer: TeamJacobYeah (Signed) · Date: April 19, 2010 09:40 AM · On: Kept Promises

Ok.....WHAT????  I do not get it!!  So, what is going on???  You are driving me crazy here!  Oh, BTW, I love this story, just sayin!



Author's Response:

LOL, read on!

Thanks for the love. :)

Reviewer: TeamJacobYeah (Signed) · Date: April 19, 2010 07:55 AM · On: Agreement

OK, I've been reading this over at Fanfiction.net, and when I came here and saw that there were lots more chapters, I squeed like a little girl!  I am NOT an Edward fan, and I am not happy that he came back.  Although, if the Cullens can help defeat whatever the heck is coming, I will be glad.  I guess I am a dummy, but I don't exactly get what is going on in Bella's dreams yet.  Some kind of a permonition?  And what did Carslyle mean when he said that Bella healed "remarkably fast" from her injuries?  It would be cool if Bella was some sort of mythical person in her own right, with the ability to help the pack and herself.  And hey--you like Karl Urban too??? Sweet!!



Author's Response:

Hey there!  I'm glad you found your way over here and decided to partake in some discussion.

Aw, give Edward a chance.  He isn't all that bad once you get to know him. :)

Bella's dreams are vague and mysterious for a reason at the moment.  You'll learn more as your read, I think.

Yeah, what was with her speedy recovery??? That certainly was strange...

I LOVE Karly Urban.  He's so scruffy and handsome. Yum.

Reviewer: JBC719 (Signed) · Date: April 19, 2010 06:31 AM · On: Act II

Okay, so I really don't have time to review this chapter as it deserves (know I spent that time reading above mentioned chapter), but I loved it. And btw, you mentioned to read "How to Seduce a Werewolf" by Leelator. One of my absolute favorites, hands down. It's great and I can't wait to read more, which makes me all the more grateful for Zenith! ; )

Reviewer: peregrin (Signed) · Date: April 19, 2010 06:18 AM · On: Something Wicked

Harry Potter, yeah!

Author's Response:

lol...don't even go there.  When Vanessa says the school doesn't exist, she means it.  I promise you no Hogwarts. Or wizards (because I can't take that title seriously).  But witches n' warlocks are a go. :D

Reviewer: JBC719 (Signed) · Date: April 19, 2010 06:07 AM · On: The Morning After

It takes no small measure of talent to walk the fine line between keeping someone else's characters true while carefully manipulating them according to a different plotline, a different objective. I'm honestly impressed.

And a personal note: I love that you 'had' Jacob clean and change Bella's wounds. Unless you've been there, it's really hard to grasp how vunerable it can feel to be so exposed, but you've done a great job of expressing the level of trust required of Bella and using it to further their relationship.

Author's Response:

Yes, that line is very fine indeed.  As an author, you want to be able to develop the characters according to the circumstances you put them in, but you also want them to develop in a way that's true to their cannon chaaracter.

Dr. Black appreciates your positive feedback on his doctoring abilities. :)

Reviewer: gredelina1 (Signed) · Date: April 19, 2010 04:06 AM · On: Something Wicked

Grrrr, I'm all caught up now and have to wait for an update! Not happy! This story has completely sucked me in and I just can't get enough.

The talk between Bella and Edward made me cry. I still have this dull ache in my heart and I know that you're probably going to crush me in the future. No matter what happens, someone I love is going to get hurt.

As much as I hate waiting for an update to find out more about this Vanessa, I will patiently wait and I wish you all the luck on your finals!

Thank you for writing such an amazing story and sharing it with us lucky, 'slightly' obsessed Twifans!



Author's Response:

I just gave the largest sigh of relief in my entire life.  My largest concern with this chapter (with this entire story, really) is capturing Edward and Bella's relationship.  I've always been a J/B writer, so their's is a relationship I'm pretty comfy with.  I READ a lot of Edward/Bella but so many E/B stories have the characters OOC, so it's hard for me to get a good model to work from when it comes to removing their relationship from the series to a fanfic environment where the circumstances have changed.  So, to hear that their interaction moved you emotionally, it such rewarding knowledge. This is why I'm so thankful for readers who take the time to leave reviews.

I'm not gonna lie.  There will be hurting.  I'm not SM.  I wont tie the ending up in a pretty red bow where everyone (but Leah) is happy.  But I think...it's still a good ending.  I mean, I've come all this way from the first chapter, and I've yet to decide to change my original endgame for this story, so I guess that says something.

Thank you for all of the fantastic feedback you have left me over the past few days.  I cherish it. :)

Reviewer: gredelina1 (Signed) · Date: April 19, 2010 03:23 AM · On: Precarious

That scholarship to a school in Salem of all places came at opportune time didn't it? Alice couldn't see the woman? Maybe we'll finally get some answers to the mystery? I'm not holding my breath though. You'll probably give away a few more cryptic pieces of information and leave me even more confused ;)

"his hands supporting the bottoms of my things" - really? The bottoms of my things is what you want to go with? *smiles*

All kidding aside. Creative writing definitely seems like the perfect choice for you! This story is one of the most intricate, fascinating, creative and beautifully written fanfics I've ever read! Given your level of creativity and insight into relationships within the parameters of given characters I can only imagine what you would do with your own original characters. I wish you all the luck and hopefully I'll get to read a published work of yours one day!



Author's Response:

LOL, thanks for pointing out the typo. It kind of worries me that so many other readers let that one slide...

More confusion? You bet! But there should be LOTS of answers next chapter. In fact people are probably gonna be sick of 'em by the time it's over.

I cannot even begin to tell you how excited I am to start thinking about creating characters of my own. It makes me shiver. But I won't even let myself think about anything orginal until Zenith is over. It's one of my insentives to keep the ball rolling. ;)

Thank you...again.

Reviewer: gredelina1 (Signed) · Date: April 19, 2010 02:01 AM · On: Leah's Advice

I love Leah!!!

"Looking between the two, I shook my head in disbelief.  Victoria was out there building an army of vampires, I was inexplicably teleporting around Forks, and a vampire had just crumpled to ash after drinking my blood, and they wanted to argue over who cared about me more?" - to summarize; MEN!!!



Author's Response:

Leah is the shit. End. Of. Story.

Reviewer: twirl1 (Signed) · Date: April 19, 2010 01:16 AM · On: Something Wicked

I just knew this woman had something to do with Bella being a witch... update as soon as you can...I so can't wait..



Author's Response:

Just you wait.  Shit will hit the fan...

...as soon as I'm done with finals. :)

Thank you!

Reviewer: mizbiz (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 08:32 PM · On: Something Wicked

and of course..........

 

YOU LEAVE US AT THAT FOR A LONG TIME!!!

 

I understand though... I've been so busy I've left mine for about a month now... or more. =/



Author's Response:

I think I've gotten better at it.  I used to go almost two months without updating(!).  And then I found that it was healthier for everyone if I put out shorter, but more frequent chapters.  But sometimes reall life doesn't like to be ignored. *sigh*

Good luck with your next chapter!

Reviewer: klarsen117 (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 08:27 PM · On: Something Wicked

AAAARGGGGG.... I hate cliffies!!



Author's Response:

But doesn't it make you all excited for the next chapter? I personally have a love/hate relationship with them.  They're good for me as an author because they motivate me to get started writing the next part.  But I also understand the frustration of not knowing what to expect next. :)

Reviewer: tatie87 (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 06:46 PM · On: Something Wicked

Okay, what the hell is going on. What path is Bella being led on; I hope Edward can go with her.



Author's Response:

A lot of stuff is gonna come out into the open next chapter.  Vanessa has a lot of answers to give.  Hopefully that will clear up some of your confusion.

Reviewer: gredelina1 (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 06:35 PM · On: Intentions

I'm so happy and proud of Bella for not instantly forgiving Edward when she realized that he did in fact love her!



Author's Response:

Someone get Bella a cookie.

:)

Reviewer: JBC719 (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 06:30 PM · On: Returns

You are so far along with this story, so I often feel a little awkward offering answers to the questions and comments you leave in the chapter notes. You ask how you have done with E's characterization. I feel like it's early for me to really tell. But so far, so good. I will have to see him a little bit more to really have an answer, but as it sounds right now, your Edward seems dead on.

Author's Response:

I always like getting feedback on characterization, so thank you for that.  Let me know if I get off course.

Reviewer: JBC719 (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 06:15 PM · On: Constellations

Augh! The suspense is killing me!

Author's Response:

Fantastic.  Yet ANOTHER dead body I have to deal with.

;)

Reviewer: JBC719 (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 05:47 PM · On: Human

Okay, you have mad fanfiction skills. I can admit it. Your kung fu is strong! ; )

Author's Response:

Thank you! I acutally have a blackbelt in fanfic writing. (Don't snort like that doesn't exist!)

Hey, weren't you supposed to be going to bed??? O_o

Reviewer: gredelina1 (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 05:35 PM · On: Ashes to Ashes

Intense chapter! Absolutely amazing!

Finally Edward got his head out of his ass and told her how he feels! Now lets see if she believes him...

Love Leah and her running commentary and the fact that she strongly cares for Bella in her own way!

So Bella's blood kills vampires? She doesn't turn into a vampire even when she's been bitten. She heals extremely fast. She has the devils hand on her shoulder. She can teleport. She's supposed to protect someone/something. Her ancestor was over 100 years according to her tombstone. A lot of clues. Missing the big picture. This is truly fascinating!

Btw - the vampire was Riley, right?



Author's Response:

You can't see the big picture because it's covered in a sheet, locked in safe, burried beneath ocean, and protected by harpoon-toting mermen. So it's not your fault.  Although you've done a good job of collecting sever of the little pieces.

Your'e are correct on the Riley front.

Reviewer: JBC719 (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 05:29 PM · On: Into the Woods

Okay, I love how you use this chapter to futher illustrate the difference btw Jacob and Edward. And I'm really, really interested to see how Edward's return plays into this story. I think you will absolutely do Edward just as much justice as you have shown Jacob (and of course, Bella).

Thanks again for writing such a GREAT fanfic!

Author's Response:

Please. Reserve judgment on my Edward abilities unitl you've seen me screw him up, er, I mean, until you've seen me write him.

Thank YOU for being such a great/active reader! I love it. <3

Reviewer: gredelina1 (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 04:59 PM · On: Kept Promises

???????????????????????????????????????????????????



Author's Response:

!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Reviewer: gredelina1 (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 04:37 PM · On: Agreement

The meating between the wolves and the Cullen's were really interesting. Bella thinks of the pack as her family now and Sam seems to agree.

I totally agree with Alice that Edward's an idiot!!! He probably thinks that Bella has made an informed choice and is happy with Jacob so he wont interfear. I assume that he knows Jacob told Bella about Edward's lies and that he still loves her. What he most likely doesn't know is that she didn't believe Jacob. She wont believe anyone besides Edward himself and that will never happen if he hardly even looks at her. Idiot! Stop being such a coward or martyr or whatever and fight for your girl!

The dreams are getting weirder and I'm starting to get a bit frustrated not knowing what's going on!



Author's Response:

Edward the martyr?!?! NEVER!

LOL, he is a bit of an idiot sometimes.  And this really is a mess.  Whatever happend to talking things out? (oh, nv, apparently that would get rid of all of the drama and this story would be completely lame.)

Things start making sense around chapter 30. lol. ;)

Reviewer: JBC719 (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 04:26 PM · On: Forgiveness

You know, I like your chapter notes almost as much as the story itself. I'd say more, but I HAVE to go read the next chapter now. I should SO be doing other things right now! ; ) Okay, so seriously, next one is the last one for tonight. Really....

Author's Response:

LOL, chapter notes are where I get to take full credit for my spazziness without blaming it on the characters.

Yes, get to bed! I'm sure you have more productive things to be doing in the morning. But then come back and talk to me some more. :)

Reviewer: JBC719 (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 04:13 PM · On: Nightmares

For what it is worth (in response to your chapter notes) the chapter is a little confusing, but I think it's fairly clear that it is confusing to the reader because we are witnessing and experiencing the story through Bella. If she is confused, then we should be, too (unless, of course, we manage to figure something out 50 pages before she does).

Since I'm reading this late in the game, so to speak, I'm assuming I have a few more chapters before Edward returns and renders Bella's heart in two. ; ) Should be interesting to say in the least!

And speaking of Edward's return, I'm curious how much readers comments influence a story. I'm sure that a writer wants their story to be well received by their audience, but at the same time I suspect that many plotlines take on a life of their own and move in a direction that the author didn't necessarily foresee. Just curious. I'm sure I would get as many different answers as there are authors.

Anyway, thanks for taking the time to write such a great story and posting it to share with others. : )

Author's Response:

LOL, I think it's confusing for most people because in the Twilight series, whenever Bella was uncertain about something, the reader was 20 pages ahead of her.  You don't get that same foresight here.

You are spot on about plotlines taking a life of their own. I've mentioned before that the supernatural stuff got delayed majorly, and Edward actually showed up about six chapters later than I'd originally planed when I'd started. Also, Leah's character ended up really speaking to me on levels I didn't anticipate, so I found her role growing and transforming along the way. I also had to cut some scenes entirely (a couple that I had pre-written) because they no longer fit in my cannon timeline of events.

As far as reader comments go...they do have an impact on the story.  Not in the way that I change the plot to satisfy them, but that I use readers as mirrors for the story.  They project back to me what they've taken from each chapter and I find myself seeing things about the characters that I hadn't noticed or hadn't intended. These are things I try to take into account as I continue writing.  It impacts little details and word choice more than actual plot.

But then there are times when a reviewer says something, and I'm like "Oh, I'd really like to include that in the story!"  And short scene or nuance is born.  There's actually a character (who hasn't appeared yet) that is the product of one person's review.  It's really great fun to do these things.

Wow...I really rambled.  Sorry!  And thank you for the thoughtful review.

Reviewer: gredelina1 (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 04:00 PM · On: Taking Sides

I love when Bella's hanging out with the pack and you are writing them so perfectly! Everything including, but not limited to, their strategizing, comradery, arrogance and their constant bantering is so IC and an utter joy to read. 

“For instance, instead of saying that you were attacked by an angry, psycho werewolf, you tell people that after killing a rabid polar bear’s mate with only a stone and your bare hands, it chased you for two miles until it knocked you off a cliff into the ocean, where you had to wrestle with it until a shark happened by and snapped it right up.  Then, you killed the shark and used its fat to keep you warm in the arctic waters, where you waited for twelve hours until hitching a ride on a Russian submarine.  Oh and make sure everyone thinks you almost died.”

- that's quite the story!!! How on earth do you come up with these things? I'm seriously impressed!



Author's Response:

I promise I wasn't dropped on my head when I was a baby.  I don't know where these things come from.  It's like I've got a little Quil, Jacob, and Embry sitting on my shoulder feeding me this insanity.  All I have to do is feed them crackers. *shrugs*


The Pack have an amazingly fun dynamic to write about, that's very different from the Cullen's sense of unity. I like to explore it.

Thank you again!

Reviewer: JBC719 (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2010 03:48 PM · On: What if?

Okay, so now that I know the next chapter "will be pretty interesting and SUPERNATURAL" I can't stay long enough to write a 'real' review. I'm too excited to see what's next. Forgive me, but I'll make it up with the next chapter's review, I promise!

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