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Reviewer: grayskiesatdawn (Signed) · Date: June 15, 2010 06:43 PM · On: Something Wicked
OOOhhhh! This story really does get better! Squee!
Reviewer: grayskiesatdawn (Signed) · Date: June 15, 2010 06:13 PM · On: Leah's Advice
I love Leah! But don't tell her that, I'd rather not be called something foul. Awesome.
Author's Response: Hehe, Leah frightens us all.
Reviewer: ElisabethDanoff (Signed) · Date: June 15, 2010 05:21 PM · On: His Hand
Your story is amazing, I'm so curious to see where you're going with it...can't wait!
Author's Response: I'm glad you plan on sticking around. :)
Thank you!
Reviewer: leelator (Signed) · Date: June 15, 2010 03:24 PM · On: His Hand
Okay, I'm your 1,000th review! I want my prize! Is it a toaster?
Author's Response: No, but you do get...THIS:
Reviewer: leelator (Signed) · Date: June 15, 2010 03:23 PM · On: His Hand
Hey Love! You certainly do deserve our devotion and adoration! We love your story. We can't help it. :) This was one wild ride of a chapter. Glad to finally have some of this freaky shit explained. And what an explanation, girl. You have an imagination that surpasses all!
Okay, so I gotta know: if the smell of the witches is very enticing to vampires as well as poisonous, couldn't the witches just march into Voltura and have all of the Volturi bite them? Seems to me like they wouldn't have to do much to kill a whole bunch of vampires.
This really puts the kibosh on Bella ever becoming a vampire, doesn't it? What happened with the James/Bella confrontation? Did James and Edward never bite Bella? I don't remember if you ever talked about that. Do all of the witches have familiars? (I'm sure none of them are lucky enough to have one that resembles Jacob!) Hmmm, so many questions you have stirred up with this one, you little dickens!
Loved the chapter and can't wait to hear more. Thanks, angel!
Author's Response: Aww, listen to you. ^_^
Okay, so the blood thing. Yes, their blood attracts (human-drinking) vampires more than other blood. But remember Bella's confrontation with Riley in the woods? He resisted the urge to jump her for almost a full two minutes, and he's a new born. Imagine how much time a vampire like Aro, who is in the know when it comes to witches, would have to react violently. Aro would order their necks to be snapped the moment they arrived. Plus, vampires aren't exactly carefull when they drink, so it would be a suicide mission for a lot of them (not even most witches can planesbend and those who can can't planesbend an indefinite number of others). I actually just wrote about Vanessa kind of explaining this to Bella in the next chapter. Maybe that will help clarify.
James and Edward both drank from Bella prior to her "awakening." There's a moment after she gets the mark when Edward comments on her blood smelling differently. That was the physical change she underwent after the sex. Now she is quite poisonous.
*sigh* I'm still trying to find a good way to work in the "familiar" explaination. I think I'll get Leopold to introduce it next chapter (because I'm tired of hearing Vanessa talk, lol). So that shoudl help with all of your questions. :)
Thanks, hon!
Reviewer: grayskiesatdawn (Signed) · Date: June 15, 2010 03:04 PM · On: Ashes to Ashes
Wow, I should have started reading this story when I had more time. I simply cannot stop reading it. I always had a feeling that Bella should be more than a human. Why else are vampires and werewolves attracted to her? You are such an awesome writer! Words cannot describe how fantastically good this story is.
Author's Response: It's so great following your progress as you read. I can tell you're really enjoying it (and you're saying the nicest things). :D
Thank you!
Reviewer: spockdatabones (Signed) · Date: June 15, 2010 02:22 PM · On: His Hand
i've skimmed through this story very quickly. however you are right. i am team edward and this story makes me nervous. you can kill all the wolves you want, but leave my vampires alone! edward and bella belong together no matter what universe.
Author's Response: I always find this type of attitude very intriguing (being polar to one Team or the other). Do you mean this literally? Like...in a universe where Edward is an unrepentant child molester, would he still belong with Bella? If so, is it not his actual character that matters, but rather his name? If I gave Edward all of Jacob's characteristics who would you support? Is it the "idea" of Edward, or his physical apearance, or what? I'm not asking to be rude, just because I'm curious. What makes Edward "Edward"? :)
Reviewer: Olirin (Signed) · Date: June 15, 2010 02:14 PM · On: Crutch
This sounds wonderful so far!
Author's Response: Thank you! I hope you enjoy it as you read more.
Reviewer: klarsen117 (Signed) · Date: June 15, 2010 01:26 PM · On: His Hand
love it
Author's Response: Thank you so much. ^_^
Reviewer: Gwilwillith (Signed) · Date: June 15, 2010 01:10 PM · On: His Hand
this is getting more and more mysterious!!
Author's Response: Haha. This was supposed to be the "enlightening" chapter. Guess not. ;P
Reviewer: byakuya (Signed) · Date: June 15, 2010 12:35 PM · On: His Hand
love it been waiting for a new chapter and cant wait for the next one!!!!
Author's Response: Aw, thank you! Hopefully you wont have to wait very long. :)
Reviewer: JBC719 (Signed) · Date: June 15, 2010 12:32 PM · On: His Hand
Oooooo...... *squeal*
LOVED IT! I still consider myself somewhat new to ffiction, so I've only recently (last few months)found myself in the position of reading stories by each update, rather than the whole thing at a time. This might be the first time I've HATED it. 8 ) Actually, I love it (as you can see) I just hate that the chapter came to an end.
I appreciate your a/n at the beginning. Taking the time to write it should be, in a perfect world not required (we've all become a little too pc IMHO), but we do not live in an imperfect world, therefore it is always best to make sure your intentions are clear and in no way reflect anything o any importance. In other words, it's always good to let people know to relax, it's all good. 8 ) Way to think ahead.
Love the time you've taken in delving into Varius's story. I felt like you spent enough time to make sure the reader understands, but didn't spend so much time on it as to lose focus on your main plotline. I won't lie, I'm still a little confused as to that storyline, but I assure you that has far more to do with interuptions and ADHD. 8 ) Gives me a great excuse to go back and read that section again.
I do have a question. Is there a reason Bella senses the supernatural (I'm thinking of the wolves in this case) with a sensation of coolness? Does it only happen some of the time? I'm thinking it does, but I'm not sure if I'm remembering that correctly or not. Is there any significance to that?
Can I say that I miss the pack right now? I hope they appear soon, although, if we are to be traveling to Italy in the next chapter, I'm afraid it will be a while before they make another apperance. 8 (
And for those readers who don't dig Jake....that's okay. It's all good. I on the other hand, LOVE 'EM! Yes, he's slightly overprotective. That's okay, my personal experience shows that can be normal for guys (and yes, I do mean slight protectiveness, not weird 'hey honey, let me turn the page of your book so you don't get a papercut' kind of protectiveness....that's just creepy).
And for your last question, I believe I have an account with ADF and have been there at least a few times, but that's been about it. Mostly because (and again, I'm sure this is me) I've had a hard time navigating the site. Which sucks bc I hear how so many people just love it. I just have to take the time to actually sit down and play around there.
Enough of this terribly long and boring review. Suffice to say, I really really really really really like it (man I REALLY need to get a thesarus...seriously... this is so freaking sad). Can't wait to read more! 8 )
PS disregard any typos, don't have time to check it right now.
Author's Response: You know what? I don't think I've ever started a multi-chapter fic that was already completed. I bet those are very convenient to read. I would love not having to wait for updates (although, it is a fun part of the fanfiction experience). After Zenith is over, I should go try to find one. Any suggestions?
I decided the AN was important to have after some concern was expressed over the previous chapter. It's just better safe than sorry, I think. And you're right, it's a nice way of people at ease.
The backstory is complicated, I agree. I think part of it is that I couldn't afford to go into great detail (I could have written Varius an entire book, lol) and that it take a big leap of the imagination. It's not all purely logical. It's fantastical. Which I think makes it harder to comprehend.
Yes, there is a reason Bella gets "cold" vibes from the wolves. They're going to get sucked into the witch storyline as well. Prior to the transformation Bella mentioned them feeling cold on several occasions, and then after the transformation she makes one or two references to getting a "cool" or calming feeling in her chest. This significance will come up in a bit.
Don't worry. Italy isn't a booked flight. I plan on getting both teh Pack and the Cullens into the next chapter.
Actually, a few days ago ADF got updated with a new layout. A lot of the navigation was improved. So maybe give it another go? It would be nice having a friend there. :)
Thank you so much! I'm glad you really really really really really liked it. ;)
Reviewer: wordslinger (Signed) · Date: June 15, 2010 12:22 PM · On: His Hand
"...and the Volturi did not possess the…talent for finding people then that they do today." - Love this. Those Volturi bastards.
"Vanessa tipped her head in agreement. “Holy fuck indeed, Mr. Black.” " - This made me laugh. A lot.
"Arms crossed over his chest, Jacob frowned. “Wow, she’s like a magic eight ball: obnoxious and inaccurate. You think if I shake her, she’ll give us a different answer?” " - Wow, you continue to amuse me with your Jacob quips!
Another cliffy. It's ok though. I can find you on twitter. ;)
Author's Response: Haha. "Volturi bastards." That's an official title.
I cannot help it. Jacob is just so darn quipy!
Uh oh. I've never had to worry about Twitter harrasment before. I think I might enjoy it. :P
Thank you!
Reviewer: sistergrimm (Signed) · Date: June 15, 2010 11:27 AM · On: His Hand
loveitloveitloveitloveit!!!!!
cullens?????
Author's Response: The Cullens will make an appearance next chapter. Promise!
Thank you. :D
Reviewer: zimphella (Signed) · Date: June 15, 2010 11:05 AM · On: His Hand
I really, really like this story particularly because it is very unique to other stories out there. That and I totally love Jacob. Can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: It's strange; you would think that in Twilight fanfiction something like this wouldn't be considered "unique," but I'm discovering that fewer and fewer stories retain supernatural elements. Which I think is a real loss.
Thank you!
Reviewer: LoriAnne (Signed) · Date: June 15, 2010 10:54 AM · On: His Hand
Great Chapter! I am thinking that with Bella becoming more supernatural, Jacob and Edward may both decide she is just too high maintenance and creepy and this will eventually become a Jacob/Edward story! Seriously...Jacob totally makes this chapter worthwhile. He never lets anything get to complicated or bogged down. I mean Vanessa is all serious, mysterious, and gloom and doom and Jacob calls her out on it every time. Favorite Line: "Wow, she's like a magic eight ball...." or "We're still waiting for you to get to the "helpful" part of your visit". I just can't decide between the two!
I agree with your other reviewer "Thunder Cake" is a great piece of writing and well worth reading.
Author's Response: lol. Jacob/Edward, huh? Poor Bella would have to settle for Leah. ;)
I love that Jacob is so down to Earth, too. He keeps things grounded, which I appreciate and which Bella really needs.
So glad you had a chance to read "Thunder Cake" and enjoyed it.
Thank you.
Reviewer: grayskiesatdawn (Signed) · Date: June 15, 2010 10:52 AM · On: The Morning After
Aww, Jake's too honest for his own good sometimes.
Reviewer: tracey (Signed) · Date: June 15, 2010 10:52 AM · On: His Hand
Well, that was sure interesting. Update soon. :)
Author's Response: I'll do my best. Feeling preyty motivated at the moment. :)
Thank you.
Reviewer: zee97 (Signed) · Date: June 15, 2010 10:27 AM · On: His Hand
so is jacob and bella is mint to be together is he her soul mate and with there powers put together will they be able to kill victoria and the voltur
Author's Response: Well, I guess it depends what you mean by "soulmates." But on a supernatural level, I would say "no." But I do feel that they have a very strong relationship.
I don't think Jacob and Bella are quite ready for a full frontal assault on the Volturi. She can only harm a vampire by letting it drink from her, so she wouldn't be much help in a battle. But Victoria is just around the corner and the Pack, Bella, and the Cullens will be seeing her soon.
Thanks for the review!
Reviewer: grayskiesatdawn (Signed) · Date: June 15, 2010 10:26 AM · On: Constellations
i am so glad you took the time to develop the love triangle. You can really feel the intensity, the slow burn of passion, the sheer agony in the choice. Awesome. So Edward's back. Well, mixed feelings about that but I do hope Bella doesn't let his actions off lightly. He has a hell of a lot to make up to her.
Author's Response: The love triangle is important, I agree. It's part of who Bella is and it lends a lot to the emotional density of the plot. You can bet Bella won't let Edward off the hook lightly.
Reviewer: LucyLu (Signed) · Date: June 15, 2010 08:48 AM · On: His Hand
I have been unable to login to ADF. I've tried everything and still can't so I read it here!
I have so many questions! Can't decide what I think about Vanessa, while can't decide if she is good or bad. Of course I realize everything is not black/white and there is a lot of gray in the world. I'm just not sure how she fits in. While I'm glad Bella and Jacob won't be seperated, why does Jacog need to go to Italy? What's in Italy? I don't quite understand the "sensing peope" thing, I'm sure there will be more to come. Obviously Bella is a very powerful witch and I'm sure that will be significant.
Sorry so many hate Jacob, I love him, love Edward too, but it's nice to read a well written story about Bella and Jacob that has Edward in the plot as well! However, it is most exciting to read this story because your writing continues to astond me. Your plot development and pacing, your characters, you are truly an amazing writer.
As always, thank you for sharing!
Author's Response: Oh, I didn't mean to imply that I was a VIP author over there, but there are always a lot story discussion and recing going on, and I've only ever bumped into one camper who'd read some of Zenith. So I was curious if I had any ADF lurkers hanging around here. I'm sorry you're having trouble logging in. Have you emailed the rangers? They're usually pretty helpful about that stuff.
I would definitely consider Vanessa one of those "gray" characters. Her motives are pretty genuine, but she's kind of jaded.
I hope you haven't bought your plane tickets for Italy just yet. Bella rarely does what she's asked. ;)
Sorry if the whole "sensing" thing was vague. Vanessa was just trying to probe the boundaries or Bella's abilities and she didn't do much in the way of explination. That will be cleared up a little next chapter.
Thank you, thank you, thank you for all those wonderful comments on writing. I'm glad I've managed to keep you hooked. :)
Reviewer: grayskiesatdawn (Signed) · Date: June 15, 2010 08:46 AM · On: Together
So not disappointed with that Chapter! Loved it!
Author's Response: Wow, thanks for all of these lovely reviews. :)
Reviewer: gpl993 (Signed) · Date: June 15, 2010 08:21 AM · On: His Hand
Eep! Finally we get to the explanation! lol. But seriously? Her soul is damned for all eternity? Harsh....
Author's Response: That remains to be seen actually. If Bella chooses, she can put up a fight. We'll just have to stay tuned for her choice.
Reviewer: Fadewind (Signed) · Date: June 15, 2010 08:09 AM · On: His Hand
Congrats on still going after two years!
This was another great chapter. Lots of history, but still a good read. Keep it up!
Author's Response: Thank you! It's been quite the marathon.
Yeah, this chapter was heavy on back story, but it was a necesary evil, I'm afraid. Glad you enjoyed it!
Reviewer: grayskiesatdawn (Signed) · Date: June 15, 2010 08:08 AM · On: 12 Step Program
I think that was a perfect chapter. Honestly, I don't know how anyone could make a definatively choice between Edward or Jacob. They're both good for Bella (lucky girl) and I can see no real negative to one over the other. Anyway, loved this chapter.
Author's Response: Thank you, again!
Indeed, Jacob and Edward are two very deserving men. Not an easy choice at all. I would like to have Bella's problem right about now. ;)
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