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Reviewer: cmcjpr (Signed) · Date: March 04, 2010 08:56 PM · On: Inquisitions & i-Pods (v)

I was so happy to see that you updated! More soon please! =0) I just started getting into 30 seconds to mars...it's weird because I had a crush on Jared Leto when he was on My SO Called Life and now it's like 10 years (at least!) later... how the time does fly. =0)

Reviewer: myimm0rtal (Signed) · Date: March 04, 2010 05:13 PM · On: Inquisitions & i-Pods (v)

I jogged back to the house and was met on the back porch by my father. He sat in one of Grandma Esme's lawn chairs, hands folded casually in his lap.

"Do I have a curfew now?" I asked, trying to keep the ire out of my voice.

"You do need to sleep," he said, not really answering my question.

Rather than start another potential argument, I just nodded and walked toward the back door...

I went inside and up to my room, feeling a little like a prisoner in a very luxurious cell.

I'm still trying to get my mind around the fact that Ness is barely five conventional years old, although overall she's closer to age nineteen.  And while I can understand her bout of rebellious adolescence, as Edward would refer to it, I feel sympathetic towards Edward as well, and the apprehension he must be feeling.

I wonder if the Cullens view Ness' interest in a human as a risk of exposure for them, and if that just adds to Edward's anxieties as far his having to trust his child to know how to care for herself in the face of potentially being taken advantage of, or having her heart broken.

I love the last line of the chapter, by the way.  So typical angst-ridden teenage girl, LoL!

Reviewer: EmoryB123 (Signed) · Date: March 04, 2010 05:12 PM · On: Inquisitions & i-Pods (v)

Thanks for the update! Good chapter!

I am thinking that Ness doesn't know about the imprint yet. I have a feeling it will come up in an argument or something. But I will wait to see what you decide!

Love Ness! Someone other than Daddyward with angst!

Reviewer: kmddeprez1122 (Signed) · Date: February 14, 2010 03:27 PM · On: Friends & Fries (v)

This is a great story are you still updating it?

Reviewer: twi-nighter (Signed) · Date: February 07, 2010 08:52 PM · On: Friends & Fries (v)

First- I hate that Ness is dating someone other than Jacob and that this guy seems nice! It would make it better if he was bad because then I could hate him and wait for Jake to come back in the pic.

Anyway... my first date was the typical date out to the movies with the guy I was crushing on... it was great!

Reviewer: wuogkat (Signed) · Date: January 24, 2010 10:55 AM · On: Friends & Fries (v)

No one expects the Parental Inquisition!  Our chief weapon is surprise, surprise and vampirism... Wait!  Our chief weapons are...   ;-)

Oh... Edward is so not happy... ;-)

Poor brother-dad.  I'm about to break into a rendition of "I am my own Grandpa."

 

Reviewer: wuogkat (Signed) · Date: January 24, 2010 10:20 AM · On: Uncharted Territories (v)

Okay two songs...

One is from a memory of this guy Terrance who was only interested in being my friend when I had a crush on him.  He sang it in the car when we would drive home late after work or play rehearsal (both of which we had together - I spent some serious time with this guy) I don't know the name but "Piano Man" reminds me a bit of it: I'm the piano player down at the local bar, and Rachel she's the waitress who dreams of becoming a star... She swears she's gonna make it someday... 

The second is the only time I've ever actually had a song with someone and that's Derek.  At the end of our first first date we watched "The Wedding Singer" and the song "I Wanna Grow Old with You" has always been special to us.  Fitting isn't it?

Love the chap.  Bella's got a pretty good handle on Edward but poor Jake... ugh... I like that he's got competition.  He really should have to earn her love a bit.  :-)

Reviewer: wuogkat (Signed) · Date: January 23, 2010 08:27 PM · On: Party Animals (v)

Um... yeah... ask me in private... seriously.

;-)

and now Luke knows that she's 19 - kind of... ;-)

Reviewer: wuogkat (Signed) · Date: January 21, 2010 01:21 PM · On: Frustrations (v)

Printed this off and read it in the Doctor's office today.  ;-)

Oh... Nessie is a teenager and Edward isn't dealing well at all!  ;-)

Love it!

Reviewer: wuogkat (Signed) · Date: January 19, 2010 07:06 PM · On: Breaking Out (v)

"My name is Tyler, nothing rhymes with that."

Courtesy of DH's BFF.

So... we like Luke, huh?  ;-)

Reviewer: wuogkat (Signed) · Date: January 19, 2010 06:44 PM · On: Settling In (v)

I was a bag-girl at Winn-Dixie.  And if you think that they took it easy on me because I was a girl, you're really wrong.  My record # of carts to bring in at a time was 23 and they had to make a 90 deg turn to get in the door.  ;-)

On to the next chap. because I can't wait to see Bella's reaction to the waitressing.

Reviewer: wuogkat (Signed) · Date: January 19, 2010 06:25 PM · On: New Horizons (v)

Love it!

First car 1980 Volvo 240DL in brick red.  It was a custom from Dyer and Dyer.  Unfortunately, it threw a rod on Chamblee-Tucker Boulevard in downtown Atlanta during rush hour.  I was late to work that day.

My second car was a 1980-something Mazda RX-7... I miss that one.

;-)

Reviewer: wuogkat (Signed) · Date: January 19, 2010 05:14 PM · On: Goodbyes (v)

Gosh, leaving Charlie is hard.

I love Nessie's innoscence thus far. 

You rock!

Reviewer: wuogkat (Signed) · Date: January 18, 2010 04:56 PM · On: Transition (v)

;-)

Look , I finally got to read! 

Love it!

Reviewer: pnutbutterandkelly (Signed) · Date: January 08, 2010 05:57 PM · On: Friends & Fries (v)

I absolutely love this story! It's amazing, really. I've just read all nine chapters straight, even though I'm supposed to be doing my homework, lol. Please update with a new chapter soon! :)

Great story so far!

Reviewer: jkane180 (Signed) · Date: January 05, 2010 02:17 PM · On: Friends & Fries (v)

Another great chapter!  Now I'm stuck waiting for more!  Hope I won't be waiting too liong!  :)

Reviewer: jkane180 (Signed) · Date: January 05, 2010 12:48 PM · On: Uncharted Territories (v)

Another great one!  I'm so sad that I'm almost caught up!

Reviewer: jkane180 (Signed) · Date: January 05, 2010 12:34 PM · On: Party Animals (v)

Great again!  Moving on!  :)

Reviewer: jkane180 (Signed) · Date: January 05, 2010 12:13 PM · On: Frustrations (v)

Another great chapter... on to the next!

Reviewer: jkane180 (Signed) · Date: January 05, 2010 10:59 AM · On: Breaking Out (v)

Great again!

Reviewer: jkane180 (Signed) · Date: January 05, 2010 10:48 AM · On: Settling In (v)

Hurrying off again... :)

Reviewer: jkane180 (Signed) · Date: January 05, 2010 10:33 AM · On: New Horizons (v)

Another chapter leaving me hurrying off to click next!  :)

Reviewer: jkane180 (Signed) · Date: January 05, 2010 10:21 AM · On: Goodbyes (v)

Another great chapter!  Off to the next!

Reviewer: jkane180 (Signed) · Date: January 05, 2010 10:09 AM · On: Transition (v)

That was a fantastic chapter!  Hurrying off to the next one!  :)

Reviewer: myimm0rtal (Signed) · Date: January 03, 2010 09:18 AM · On: Friends & Fries (v)

Ladyrip! ;)

Happy New Year to you and yours! Forgive me, I owe you a PM, and probably a review from last chappy as well... can't remember. I can't remember my first date, either, har har. I'm either too old, or was so turned off by it I must've repressed it.

I loved this chapter, and it absolutely was worth the wait. Of course Daddyward was gonna revert to his overprotective and somewhat overbearing qualities as soon as he found out about Ness's date. I'm actually a bit surprised that Jacob wasn't as curious as Edward and Bella were. Is it his turn to brood in his room over the impossibility of his unrequited feelings?

...I had the strangest sense of not-quite-déjà vu. Was this what I had dreamed about? Had it been a premonition, not a dream?

Hmmm, how trippy... another possible talent? Intuition? In the Saga, I'd found it intriguing how Bella would have dreams that foreshadowed her future, but haven't really found too many Twifics that explored that particular idiosyncracy in depth. All the precognition is ever only credited to Alice. For all the humor of this chapter, I think the not quite deja vu line stood out the most as far as being profound.

I know you just updated, but now I'm uber-curious for the next chappy, teehee! I probably said this before, but THANK YOU for redeeming the Nessie character (and the entire she's the imprinted one, but she has a choice situation) for me.

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