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Reviewer: Mkystich (Signed) · Date: October 03, 2009 04:51 AM · On: Chapter 9 The Waiting Game

What the hell is up with Jacob? I really like this story and can't wait to see what's going to happen next. Crickets work both ways. Dont take to long.



Author's Response:

lol,  your comments about crickets made me laugh. I needed that after the day I've had at work.

Hope you continue to enjoy the story. Next update should hopefully be up tomorrow.

Reviewer: nothing2do (Signed) · Date: October 03, 2009 02:16 AM · On: Chapter 9 The Waiting Game

I am so glad that they got the bad guys.  I am also saddened by the events at the end.  I always want her with Edward.....but I'll be patient and wait for what is to come.  Great story :)



Author's Response:

Thank you for reviewing. It is tough to see Bella with someone other than Edward, but I also think it's a good experience for her too.

Hope you continue to enjoy the story.

Reviewer: freakybfsfan (Signed) · Date: October 02, 2009 09:56 PM · On: Chapter 9 The Waiting Game

This is probably one of the most interesting Jacob/Bella/Edward stories i've ever read, and i've read a lot of them. I am hoping against hope that it ends up a Bella/Jacob pairing, since I think she's much better suited for him. The way you write really draws me in and helps me to imagine the situations/locations so well. Thank you :)



Author's Response:

Thank you for reviewing. I started to write this story with situations and events that I was curious to see the characters experience. I wanted to make the characters stretch a bit, emotionally.

Thank you also for the comments about my writing. This is my first attempt at writing anything and it's nice to hear.

Hope you continue to enjoy the story! 

Reviewer: wendeline (Signed) · Date: October 02, 2009 06:25 PM · On: Chapter 9 The Waiting Game

love it.



Author's Response:

Thank you as always for reviewing. Glad to see you're still along for the ride!

Reviewer: leelator (Signed) · Date: October 02, 2009 10:46 AM · On: Chapter 1- Separation

OK, so obviously, your going to have Jacob imprint on someone else, thus clearing the way for Edward without Jake being broken hearted and Bella can be relieved of any guilt for dumping him, right? Come on, you can tell me. You know I'm right. I won't tell anybody else, I promise. ;)

Reviewer: PBJilly (Signed) · Date: October 02, 2009 10:30 AM · On: Chapter 9 The Waiting Game

I liked how you included Emily's back story about the scar.  That was very interesting and something we would all want to ask about.  I am wondering about Jacob and his attitude towards Bella at the end-has he given up on their relationship?  Or has he imprinted but not really being keen on the whole thing, he tries to act like Bella's boyfriend but becomes uncomfortable???  Curious, I am....



Author's Response:

Thank you for reviewing. The story with Emily just flowed when I was preparing to have the story beta'd. I thought it was a nice addition and something that isn't touched on frequently.

Jacob's still struggling still with Edward's return. Hope you continue to enjoy reading.

Reviewer: liljules (Signed) · Date: October 02, 2009 09:06 AM · On: Chapter 9 The Waiting Game

Very well written. I wished that there had been more of a personal account of the fights with Victoria and Irina.....I think maybe you could flash back to it or show it from someone else's POV. It would be an interesting thing to read. Good job though....keep it up!

Author's Response:

Thank you for reviewing. I would love to be able to write the fight scenes, but I had no idea where to even start. I may at some point do a portion from EPOV. In my spare time of course.  lol

Hope you continue to enjoy reading!

Reviewer: Liana Kay (Signed) · Date: October 02, 2009 08:37 AM · On: Chapter 9 The Waiting Game

ugh. i dont know why jacob annoys me so much. lol. you're doing a great job. can't wait for the next chapter!!!

Author's Response:

lol. Jacob's just young. He's feeling threatened and afraid that he's going to lose the person that he loves. He's actually a great character to write, I can totally be my saracstic, snarky self.

Hope you continue to enjoy reading! Thanks for reviewing.

 

Reviewer: hisbrandofheroine (Signed) · Date: October 02, 2009 06:20 AM · On: Chapter 9 The Waiting Game

could he have sensed that Edward was lurking...hmmm...don't know why else he'd stop.  I really want them to be together, sweet delicious Jake deserves some happiness, no? ;)

Great installment, looking forward to finding out whats up with Jake's hasty departure.



Author's Response:

Thank you for reviewing. Jake does deserve some good things to happen. I'll see what I can do.  lol

 

Reviewer: janna479 (Signed) · Date: October 02, 2009 05:59 AM · On: Chapter 9 The Waiting Game

just wanting more edward, but still a good read



Author's Response:

More Edward is on the way. There is a large portion from his POV coming up after several chapters. Patience!

Thank you for reviewing and hope you keep enjoying the story.

Reviewer: Snakehips (Signed) · Date: October 02, 2009 05:24 AM · On: Chapter 9 The Waiting Game

wow.  Everyone is really stuck here.  not sure what will happen next. looking forward to more.



Author's Response:

It is a tough situation for them isn't it? Hope you continue to enjoy reading, thanks for the review!

Reviewer: cinemapersians (Signed) · Date: October 02, 2009 04:33 AM · On: Chapter 9 The Waiting Game

I'm glad the threat to Bella is gone, even though I'm a bit sad that Irina had to pay the price for siding with Victoria...

It feels like Bella is forcing herself to be with Jake in a way.  That's never good.  I can't help it that I'm a Team Edward girl.  I don't want Jake hurt, but yet I want Bella with Edward.  Help!



Author's Response:

Irina, in my mind, is a person who is easily influenced and swayed by others. It's unfortunate that following Victoria led to her demise.

Hope you continue to enjoy reading and thanks for reviewing once again.

Reviewer: twirl1 (Signed) · Date: October 02, 2009 02:09 AM · On: Chapter 9 The Waiting Game

I love your story...I have been following, but I've never left a comment.. I figured I should after this great chapter.. I love the way you have captured the emotions of Bella, Jacob, and Edward... I can't wait to find out what's going on in Jacob's mind.. its like he's trying to distance himself from Bella....Wow.. It's nice to see the role reversal of Jacob and Bella in there relationship.... I can't wait to see if Edward gonna fight for Bella or accept friendship??? I hope Bella can truly love Jacob and not feel obligated to him... oh the drama...lol....Can't wait for the next chapt..



Author's Response:

Sorry for the delay in responding. Thank you for reviewing. Glad that you have been enjoying the story.

Thank you for the compliments on the writing. Thsi si my first attempt at writing, so it's nice to hear.

You shouldn't have to wait too long for the next chapter. It should be up sometime tomorrow.

 

Reviewer: Hollywood_678 (Signed) · Date: October 02, 2009 12:35 AM · On: Chapter 9 The Waiting Game

What happened? Did he smell Edward? But then why would he leave, he'd want to show off. I'm so confused. Great chapter though, I love this.



Author's Response:

I could tell you, but where would the fun be in that?  lol

Thanks for reviewing and I hope you continue to enjoy the story.

Reviewer: blobby (Signed) · Date: October 01, 2009 11:57 PM · On: Chapter 9 The Waiting Game

awsum!! hurry with next chapter please!



Author's Response:

Thanks!  The next chapter should be up sometime tomorrow.

Reviewer: LJ Summers (Signed) · Date: October 01, 2009 11:30 PM · On: Chapter 9 The Waiting Game

So did Jake hear Edward come in? That'd be unnerving.  He's in such an untenable position!

I respect that Bella means to try to work on the relationship, but you're doing a GREAT job making me wonder who gets the happily ever after... if any of them!



Author's Response:

Thank you for reviewing once again. Next chapter should be up tomorrow. Hope you keep on enjoying!

Reviewer: sweetness4683 (Signed) · Date: October 01, 2009 10:14 PM · On: Chapter 9 The Waiting Game

What's up with Jacob?  Can't wait to find out!

Reviewer: MischievousMe (Signed) · Date: October 01, 2009 08:38 PM · On: Chapter 9 The Waiting Game

I think Edward needs to leave her alone now. The chapterr was great, by the way

Reviewer: amberdale (Signed) · Date: October 01, 2009 08:26 PM · On: Chapter 9 The Waiting Game

i forgot if this is a e/b story or a b/j story but i kinds want her to go back with edward, cant wait to see what happens

Reviewer: bellaval (Signed) · Date: October 01, 2009 08:02 PM · On: Chapter 8 Growls and Golden Retrievers

 

great story - makes me wonder who she will end up with.  I am so Team Edward  u at times feel sorry for Jake.  But it is Edward who loves her more, don't you think?  Like I said, great story, so keep writing.  Thank you.



Author's Response:

Thanks for reviewing. I don't know if I can say who loves her more. I think they both love her, but in their own way. Does that make sense? They are two completely opposite male characters and I've always said that if you could blend the two together, you'd have the perfect man. Or, my preference is a Jacob and Edward sandwich.  lol

Hope you continue to enjoy the story!

 

Reviewer: laurelbarnes (Signed) · Date: October 01, 2009 06:16 PM · On: Chapter 9 The Waiting Game

she has to find out edward didn't leave before itis to late 

Reviewer: dhArma (Signed) · Date: October 01, 2009 06:08 PM · On: Chapter 9 The Waiting Game

the waiting is insane,please update sooner:D i love this story keep up the good work:D

Reviewer: Missypooh (Signed) · Date: October 01, 2009 05:50 PM · On: Chapter 9 The Waiting Game

Another good chapter. Having a hard time seeing where you are going but I guess that means I'll be surprised. Keep the updated coming and thanks for sharing!

Reviewer: Missypooh (Signed) · Date: October 01, 2009 05:50 PM · On: Chapter 9 The Waiting Game

Another good chapter. Having a hard time seeing where you are going but I guess that means I'll be surprised. Keep the updated coming and thanks for sharing!

Reviewer: hc4metal (Signed) · Date: October 01, 2009 05:41 PM · On: Chapter 9 The Waiting Game

Thank you againg for not having her sleep with the mutt. I am glad Edward finally realizes he needs to stay for her and win her back. Hopefully Bella will come to her senses and drop Jacob off at the pound.

BTW - great writting

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