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Reviewer: My Friend Alice (Signed) · Date: October 17, 2009 09:37 AM · On: Chapter 20 - Hold It In
now I know how Bella reacted...I know she didn't go see him in the hospital. Hmmm what will she do?
Reviewer: My Friend Alice (Signed) · Date: October 17, 2009 08:42 AM · On: Chapter 19 - Recovering
Will we get to hear from Bella next chapter? I'm worried about her. I can't believe the Cynthia hasn't driven to Alice & Bella's apartment to explain what happened yet. I look forward to reading more.
You think you had alot of stories to recommend...I have 64 favorite stories with about 58 of them still being updated. Yes, I am obsessed with reading what you brillantly talented writers are doing with Stephenie's characters.
Reviewer: My Friend Alice (Signed) · Date: October 17, 2009 02:43 AM · On: Chapter 13 – Sunshiny Day
I love this story!!! I agree with Deb on Cocktails and Dreams. May I suggest a couple to you...Branded and Pieces but let me warn you to get the Kleenex ready before hand.
Reviewer: My Friend Alice (Signed) · Date: October 17, 2009 12:32 AM · On: Chapter 10 – Round Two
Still loving the story!
Reviewer: My Friend Alice (Signed) · Date: October 16, 2009 05:36 PM · On: Chapter 7 - The Call
Great Chapter!
Reviewer: My Friend Alice (Signed) · Date: October 16, 2009 03:45 PM · On: Chapter 4 - Day Five
They even made me nervous!! I can't wait to read how their first time to speak to one another goes.
Reviewer: My Friend Alice (Signed) · Date: October 16, 2009 02:55 PM · On: Chapter 3 - Bella
I know this may be hard for some people to read but, at the same time it may help others.
Your doing a great job of writing from both E & B's POV.
Reviewer: My Friend Alice (Signed) · Date: October 16, 2009 02:06 PM · On: Chapter 2 - Edward
Awh...Poor Angela! I'm curious to find out if Bella knew her and that is how James found and raped Bella. My question should be answered in the next chapter, right?
Reviewer: latinabeauty70 (Signed) · Date: October 15, 2009 04:23 PM · On: Chapter 26 - Mystery Solved
What a fantastic chapter and from the bottom of my heart - EXCELLENT WRITING!!!!!!
Reviewer: Azlady (Signed) · Date: October 15, 2009 03:57 PM · On: Chapter 26 - Mystery Solved
wow cliff hanger i never saw tayna being in this story please update soon.
Reviewer: jparker160 (Signed) · Date: October 15, 2009 01:20 AM · On: Chapter 26 - Mystery Solved
That's not very nice!!!! Waiting for the rest......
Reviewer: be_my_escape (Signed) · Date: October 14, 2009 09:35 PM · On: Chapter 26 - Mystery Solved
Great chapter. I'm glad Ted's helping and they're case is slowly building. Hope they can find a way to get over the Tanya hurdle. Can't wait to read more. Please update soon.
Reviewer: Aille (Signed) · Date: October 14, 2009 09:27 PM · On: Chapter 26 - Mystery Solved
OMG! Well that is a way to pull Tanya into this... wow... I wasn't expecting that curve ball. I'm looking forward to seeing where you go with this.
Reviewer: juliebee (Signed) · Date: October 14, 2009 08:48 PM · On: Chapter 26 - Mystery Solved
This was a great chapter that progressed things along nicely I think. First off, welcome back Cynthia! I know I'm not he only one who missed her. Her relationship wth Edward seems a combination of playful banter and great friendship, yet deep down you can feel that they each have deep love and affection for the othe, not to mention respect.
Carlisle is such a wonderful father figure for Edward. It's good to see that he's got more and more people surrounding him with support. If I contrast from the beginning, it was like nobody was there for him, at least not anyone he wanted to acknowledge or let in. He was so alone at the beginning of the story - he had Emmett and Cynt, but still he was in self-imposed exile. It's good to see him let other people in.
I'm liking the direction that you're going in that you're mixing some crime-drama elements into the story now. It just keeps the story so darn interesting!!!! Ted's profession is gonna come in handy.
I am exhausted - and barely awake trying to type a coherent review. I suspect I'm failing. Great job sweetie and can't wait to see what happens next!
Author's Response: Great to have you back, sweetie. Missed ya! Your reviews are always insightful.
Reviewer: ttcub (Signed) · Date: October 14, 2009 06:12 PM · On: Prologue
Very good twist in the story. Can't wait for more to be posted. I hate cliff hangers LOL. Now I am going to pull my hair out till I find out more.
Reviewer: lain16 (Signed) · Date: October 14, 2009 05:14 PM · On: Chapter 26 - Mystery Solved
the plot has definately thickened , glad that edward and bella are getting the support that they need ,especially from carlisle
great story ,love it
thanks elaine
Reviewer: we live for love (Signed) · Date: October 14, 2009 04:34 PM · On: Chapter 26 - Mystery Solved
Oh my. I hope they take Tanya down as well. This story is getting so good. I can't wait for the next chapter.
Reviewer: vampgirl138 (Signed) · Date: October 14, 2009 04:23 PM · On: Chapter 26 - Mystery Solved
OOH! The plot thickens!
Reviewer: themoose-within (Signed) · Date: October 14, 2009 04:21 PM · On: Chapter 26 - Mystery Solved
I don't remember the last time I reviewed - sorry for that :(
but I do really appreciate your story; it's interesting. But this really really bothered me... so I'm going to go ahead and comment on it. Love the chapter, love the plot twist with Tanya's involvement. But I think the chapter would have been only about 3 times better if you had left it with Cynt talking, and cut out the "FUCK ME!" thing. it just seemed strange and out of place. and don't think that I have a problem with the language.... because jesus, it's almost a requirement of my life.
But it was just.... so out of place, and just made the whole thing so much more immature.
Keep the rest of it up though! Because aside from those 2 WORDS I do love it!
Author's Response: The chapter was from Edward's point of view and those last two words were the last words that went through his mind when Cynthia dropped her bombshell. It is completely in character for Edward to think like that. Bella on the other hand would never have thought those words. The opening of the next chapter will make those two words make sense and they will seem more appropriate.
Reviewer: romancaholic (Signed) · Date: October 14, 2009 03:00 PM · On: Chapter 26 - Mystery Solved
Great information. Conspiracy now as well as assult and sexual assult. It is going to bring in a lot of his family this time. The sample was not ran because it wasn't contaminated, but would prove to match James's DNA. Very interesting twist of the plot. Carlisle is supporting Edward as a son now with his mental breakdown, but what will happen when he finds out that Bella is a victim of James and that due to the horric incident in his office after James's case, that Edward will be providing evidence to the DA to help convict James for his crimes? Will he be understanding or treat him as his own father does? Which we all know is terrible, unloving, and unkind. A virtual cold-hearted, hard-ass man. I really feel for his wife to stay with such a demented and frozen man. Glad to see Bella back at work. I love when they steal hand squeezes at the cafe. It's so cute and sweet. Awesome Cynthia gave Edward such a hugh complement of being a brilliant lawyer, even better than Rosalie. With all the legal expertise involved on DA's side, I don't see how James will be getting away with any more crap. Wonderful about Cynthia's husband what a loving heart. To give his time to help Bella. Knowing the entire situation and the fact that Cynthia is crazy about both Bella and Edward. She keeps Edward in line both at work and personal, but loves him to pieces too. Love this story. Excited about seeing James' lose it in court when convicted to show the judge and jury just what a sick puppy he is inside. Shock the whole district. Place shame on the whole Cavanaugh clan and their dirty dealings behind the scenes to corrupt evidence, conceil and hide evidence of a case, interferring with a police investigation in Bella's case. Calling in old college favors for a rotten, evil, twisting, and sick son. Looks like James's sister isn't any better than her brother. Want to find them all doing long time in prison being bitch slapped every day. Or a someone told me, James should be placed in an all wood structure, naked, with member nailed to wall, the structure placed on fire, only solution to getting out alive is to use the axe and chop the member off. Sounds good to me now and first time I heard it. Isolation with only bread and water and forget the bread isn't quite as good, but it's a thought that might cross a victim's mind. Keep up the excellent work and the realist portrayal.
Reviewer: BellaS (Signed) · Date: October 14, 2009 02:20 PM · On: Chapter 26 - Mystery Solved
updateupdateupdate! soon! I should have seen it coming but I didn't. Now I need, yes need, to know what happens next!
Reviewer: I Punch Werewolves 4 Fun (Signed) · Date: October 14, 2009 01:29 PM · On: Chapter 26 - Mystery Solved
you left it there?????? are you tryin to kill me???? pr make edward kill cynt??? im in shock monster, freakin shock.... WAIT is she married to james or is she his sister???? .... confused and in shock!!
Reviewer: campcathryn (Signed) · Date: October 14, 2009 12:54 PM · On: Chapter 26 - Mystery Solved
love it
Reviewer: VictoriaCullen (Signed) · Date: October 14, 2009 12:08 PM · On: Chapter 26 - Mystery Solved
I knew the DNA was compromised, but I didn't see the Tanya thing coming. You write the best stuff!
Reviewer: hc4metal (Signed) · Date: October 14, 2009 11:22 AM · On: Chapter 26 - Mystery Solved
great cliffy
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