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Reviewer: sconnolly318 (Signed) · Date: August 13, 2009 06:08 AM · On: Breakdown

That was awesome!

Thanks for updating! :-)

Reviewer: ash0507 (Signed) · Date: August 13, 2009 05:21 AM · On: Breakdown

Love this chapter!

Reviewer: Tiggy (Signed) · Date: August 13, 2009 05:00 AM · On: Starting Over

Bloody brilliant

i've seen withdrawell first hand its scary, i know that Edward was as cool as a cucumber through the whole thing but he must have been freaking on the inside, but he stayed calm for Bella and i would like to thank edward for that (so thank you for writting it that way)

i just want to add what i have picked up from Bella so far, Bella has an addiction to pills and she is slowly replacing that addiction from pills to Edward, in this chapter, where they are in the kitchen and he calms her that is Bella take her first hit of the real Edward

i also just want to say that i have mentioned that i love Edwards tattoo's and piercing (still love em) but i just got my 24th (! yaya) piercing and am still begging for more (im sick at the moment and my piercer Tim is all like no i love you to much to let you get an infection grumble grumble grumble)

once this is amazing i love every single letter of the chapter, of the whole god dam story

Tiggy

Reviewer: cindysark (Signed) · Date: August 13, 2009 04:45 AM · On: Breakdown

I'm glad she's finally seeing Edward a little better. I'm curious to read this from Edward's POV to see how he perceives her. I have a feeling he'll be pretty excited to see her joking and get a real smile from her. As for the medication, I'm actually on Effexor and I can tell you from experience that skipping a dose can really mess you up. It may not happen as fast as Bella felt it, but the symptoms are fairly accurate, especially the shaking and cold sweats. My doctor says it has a very short half-life so it leaves your system faster than most medicines. So good job on the accuracy!

Can't wait for more!



Author's Response:

Yeah, I sped up the reaction a bit so she would feel it at achool.  I've done it too... and it REALLY SUCKS.  You're supposed to write what you know, right?  Well... it was accurate cause I've been there and done that.

Thanks for the kind review!  Next chapter is already submitted... :o)
-NK-

Reviewer: jattyca (Signed) · Date: August 12, 2009 10:17 PM · On: Breakdown

I love your Edward! Their first encounter was scrumptious. Doesn't everyone want someone who will just listen? You don't have to be as screwed up as Bella is to want that. Ironic that it takes someone who is not human to give Bella what she really needed, a real human connection that she has been unable to get from her mother, her father, or her therapists.
Still adoring your story.

Author's Response:

YAY!  You read between the lines, and got the underlying meaning.  :o)  Congrats!

Thanks for reviewing, I love each and every one.
-NK-

Reviewer: bluemaybits (Signed) · Date: August 12, 2009 09:55 PM · On: Breakdown

This story is really great. I am truly enjoying your version of Edward, he's quite hot. Also, I find it very interesting what you did with Bella's character, in the books, I always found to be a little depressed, so I enjoy you taking her character to extremes.



Author's Response:

There was one line in the book that really stuck with me, something about how Charlie used to take the bullets out of his gun when Bella was little, but now he either thought she was too old to shoot herself accidentally and not depressed enough to shoot herself on purpose.  That line is where I initially got the inspiration for my story, because I thought she was borderline depressed too.

So, I took that... and ran with it!  Thanks for reviewing... LOVE IT!
-NK-

Reviewer: bells123 (Signed) · Date: August 12, 2009 09:49 PM · On: Breakdown

This is one of the yummiest Edwards ever!!  And it's a great story.  So sad.  I wonder how her body is keeping up with all of this.  I can't imagine she can keep it up much longer.  Your writing of the dialogue was wonderful.  I could hear it in my head - her fumbling for words and trailing off. 



Author's Response:

Thank you so much!  I love love love that you took the time to review.  As far as how her body is taking it... I'm using some poetic license with the amount of drugs she is taking.  I'm sure if this was non-fiction, she would be having issues already... but it's also only been less than two months since it got really bad.  So, I figure I'm JUST about at the point where she would be having major problems.

-NK-

Reviewer: icrodriguez (Signed) · Date: August 12, 2009 09:36 PM · On: Breakdown

I have to tell you that hearing Bella tell Edward her story brought tears to my eyes. This chapter was beautifully written. And I hope that we get to hear Edward's pov on all of this. 

Bravo.



Author's Response:

Thank you so much... it means so much to know that something I have written gives another person the same emotional response that I had... it's like... I really wanted to convey SO much emotion... and I wasn't sure if I did, but your review and a few others make me think I did.  Love that you took the time out to review!!

Thanks again... -NK-

Reviewer: lambykins (Signed) · Date: August 10, 2009 05:58 PM · On: Falling Angel

I am loving this story!!!

Reviewer: hmogburn (Signed) · Date: August 10, 2009 12:11 AM · On: Falling Angel

Bella is going to owe Edward a BIG thank you for being so patient, and pulling her out of this funk... if she ever lets him pull her out of the funk in the first place.



Author's Response:

um... yeah... most definitely.  He's got ridiculous patience when it comes to Bella... as he said himself, "If I didn’t have the patience of a priest, that little pen-tapping bit would have gotten very old very quickly."  

And I've already submitted the next chapter... so we'll see if Bella can let him in soon.

Thanks for the reviews, I really really really really appreciate the time you took!  :o)
-NK-

Reviewer: hmogburn (Signed) · Date: August 09, 2009 11:56 PM · On: Coping

I am going to go out on a limb here and say that it is quite possible that Renee is hurting more than Bella is, and Bella is acting quite selfishly.

It isn't natural for a parent to lose their child. That isn't supposed to happen... ever. That's not the way the circle of life is supposed to go.

However it is natural to lose your siblings, your friends, and your parents. It will happen eventually. But unfortunately, sometimes earlier than other.

So what Bella is going through is more natural than what Renee is going through.

I really hate that Bella is pushing Renee away like that. Everyone copes with death in different ways (Bella=denial, Renee=maybe anger). Bella is obviously still stuck in the pain stage, a different stage than Renee is (reconstruction), just because Renee is trying to move on for the rest of her family and Bella isn't... doesn't make Bella's loss and burden is any worse than Renee's.

But I don't know why I am telling you all of this... you probably already know all of that. I am going to shut up now and move on to the next chapter.



Author's Response:

OR... has Renee dealt with it at all?  We know that Bella is seeing a therapist, but we don't know anything about Renee after the accident.  I'm not sure yet myself... she hasn't told me.  :o)
-NK-

Reviewer: hmogburn (Signed) · Date: August 09, 2009 11:36 PM · On: First Week - Edward

Hmmm... a slightly more proactive Edward.



Author's Response:

I do not like passive Emoward.  He is feminine and annoying.  I like my men to take charge and go after what they want.  lol!  Isn't that the point of OOC fanfic?  :o)  We can pull their strings and make them dance.

Reviewer: hmogburn (Signed) · Date: August 09, 2009 11:30 PM · On: First Week - Bella

I never understood why Bella gets so mad at Edward for double checking her work.

I ALWAYS check my partners work if I don't know them well enough to know what kind of grades they made.

Edward would be a bad student for NOT checking Bella's work.

She always takes it so personally lol. "Im not an idoit"... well he doesn't know you, so he can't know that for sure. Can he?

Its not that big of a deal lol.



Author's Response:

HAHAHAHA... ok ok, I know.  I always did that too.  BUT, Bella is at a place in her life where she takes EVERYTHING personally.  I think it makes more sense in my story that she would internalize it than it ever did in the original.  but thats just me...

:o)  Thanks for all the reviews!  ...you're really making me think, I love it!
-NK-

Reviewer: hmogburn (Signed) · Date: August 09, 2009 11:19 PM · On: First Sight

Hmmm... I think I like your vamps better than SM's!

I love that their skin isn't like marble. I think people would be able to tell that they were different from a distance if their skin wasn't pliable at all. And I love the idea of them being able to be pierced and tatted :) Plus... I don't think kissing and having sex with a rock would be much fun.

And I like your venom idea too. Like they can turn it on and off. Some animals can do that. It make sense. Because if they were just drinking from a human... they wouldn't want to drink their own venom while they are sucking. That would be gross.



Author's Response:

That was my thing too... I couldn't ever see the appeal in Edward being stone.  So, I decided that maybe they can just heal really really well.  ha! 

Reviewer: hmogburn (Signed) · Date: August 09, 2009 11:08 PM · On: The Road to Denali

I think it is really odd that her Doctor was willing to write her scripts, when she wasn't talking at all. I also think it is odd that her mother/father aren't monitoring her meds, since she has already had one suicide attempt.

But I guess anything goes in storyland, huh? lol



Author's Response:

Um yeah... pretty much any good doctor wouldn't, BUT I had to do that to make it a better story.  ;o)
-NK-

Reviewer: hmogburn (Signed) · Date: August 09, 2009 10:10 PM · On: Starting Over

Ah geeze! lol

Bella needs to be careful. I was taking that many prescription pills once... and it caused all of my hair started falling out, my short term memory to go completely out of the window, massive weight gain, and immune system failure. Not cool.

Maybe Edward will help her kill the meds :S

Reviewer: trutwilightfantasy (Signed) · Date: August 07, 2009 06:23 PM · On: Falling Angel

I'm really suprised that he hasn't taken the liberty of goin' in her house to snoop yet. And I'm glad that he hasn't given up and is gonna make more of an effort. I hope he has balls of steel. Ha! Cause she's gonna be a tuff nut to crack. Hehe. 

Reviewer: Tiggy (Signed) · Date: August 06, 2009 05:38 AM · On: Falling Angel

love it!

i don't know why but i love stories about drugs, what i love most about this one is that you've kept bella an average girl most people would have changed into a liar who was kicked out of home and sleeps around, that why i love this story so much. But what i love more is Edwards new look, im a sucker for tattoos and piercings.

keep up the amazing work your a talented and creative writer.

tiggy



Author's Response:

Thanks so much!  I wanted to make Bella relatable to most readers - there are alot of people with probems out there that don't get kicked out of their homes and sleep around and totally destroy everything in their lives.  Some people just deal with alot of pain and anger in very private - though destructive - ways.  I'm glad you noticed that!  She's still a 'daddy's girl' at heart. 

Ah yes, I adore my Edward... his look is one of the very few things I own!  :o) 

Thanks again for the review... hopefully I'll be able to post the next chapter over the weekend... it's my favorite one so far and I just can't wait!! 

-NK-

Reviewer: tatie87 (Signed) · Date: August 05, 2009 08:57 PM · On: Falling Angel

This story has a very interesting plot. I loke the sort of AU personalities of Bella and Edward in this story. I want Edward to help Bella, she really needs it. Can't wait to read more.

Reviewer: angrykitten (Signed) · Date: August 05, 2009 06:31 PM · On: Falling Angel

OK---I really love this story-very different. I am addicted!!LOL Please update again soon. I completely blew off working this evening because I could not stop reading the story. Oh well--Love It!!



Author's Response:

Well, I completely blow off work alot to write it!  :o)  Keep an eye out for something this weekend...
-NK-

Reviewer: EmberRayne (Signed) · Date: August 05, 2009 08:22 AM · On: Falling Angel

have no idea whats going on.... do your vampires not have special abilities or something? i don't think they do. dude, bella is fucked up, like majorly. i'm surprised she hasnt OD'ed and nearly died already with all the drugs shes takin



Author's Response:

They don't really have "abilities" per se... but like Alice has good intuition.  Jasper is the only one with something close to an ability, and that will be explained later when we hear more about his story. 

It's really hard to OD on anti-depressants in only five to six weeks.  She's taking more than the recommended dose, but not enought to poison herself - just enough to mess with her head.  The stronger drugs - the pain pills - are the ones she doesnt take as often.  The valium?  Probably taking too much - but it's fiction, right? :o)

Thanks for the questions, and for the review.  I love each and every one!  Keep reading - it will get clearer, I promise...
-NK-

Reviewer: mmc74 (Signed) · Date: August 05, 2009 07:19 AM · On: Falling Angel

I'm enjoying this story, though I'm definitely eagerly awaiting the time when B&E are actually on the same page and she's "seeing" him.



Author's Response:

Just a few more days, and we'll have ourselves an interaction!
-NK-

Reviewer: lucyv (Signed) · Date: August 05, 2009 07:17 AM · On: Falling Angel

I'm glad Edward finally can see what's wrong with Bella - now he can start trying to fix her. And I so hope he'll succeed. Interestingly, I've grown to like this tattooed Edward of yours LOL. I guess that's the way he perceives Bella (the most ... woman in the world LOL) and talks about her that makes me like him. That and the fact that he seems less sex-obsessed. He's still a guy, which is awesome (something SM's Edward lacked sometimes) LOL

I really like the story. Please update soon!!!



Author's Response:

Yeah, well he reacted in a very "guy" way - just a little bit more intense since he's a vampire.  He was drawn to her sexually at first, but the more he gets to know her (well, as much as he can learn from their little interactions) and the more time he spends around her, he starts to see the little things that he loves. 

Yes.  SM's Edward may or may not have been a guy.  My jury is still out on that one.  Just because he was from the early 1900s doesn't mean he wouldnt find women attractive at age 17... I mean, please.

Keep on reading!  Thanks for the review, NK

Reviewer: sconnolly318 (Signed) · Date: August 05, 2009 05:12 AM · On: Falling Angel

God I love the Edward you write... :-)

 

Thanks for updating!

Reviewer: Aille (Signed) · Date: August 05, 2009 02:39 AM · On: Falling Angel

I made a promise to myself that I wasn't allowed on here after 11 PM because I stay up all night reading otherwise... Well, I'm glad I broke that promise tonight... this is great & I can't get enough of it.  I was completely sucked in.  Both of their personalities are a little grating, a lot hurt & even more wanting to heal in their own way.  This will be going into my fav list & I look forward to more.  Thank you for sharing this with us.



Author's Response:

I totally do that same thing!  I have to limit my time as well - but I'm really glad you found my story, so I guess it wasn't so bad.  :o)  I'll update soon!
-NK-

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