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Reviews For Dawn of Day
Reviewer: lindaneale (Signed) · Date: January 16, 2010 01:52 PM · On: Chapter 14 - Helpless

Thoroughly enjoyed.  Still have questions.

Reviewer: lindaneale (Signed) · Date: January 16, 2010 01:35 PM · On: Chapter 13 - Return

Yay!

Reviewer: lindaneale (Signed) · Date: January 16, 2010 01:29 PM · On: Chapter 13 - Return

Yay!

Reviewer: lindaneale (Signed) · Date: January 16, 2010 01:20 PM · On: Chapter 12 - Wonder

So very beautiful.  You've done a marvelous job of keeping the love, tension and emotion alive in this off canon story. 

Reviewer: Sattinson (Signed) · Date: December 05, 2009 11:44 AM · On: Chapter 14 - Helpless

This is a great story. It doesn't require fluff or sex scenes, but I appreciate your explanation. Some stories are better with the sex, but this is perfect just the way it is. I also enjoy the poetry. Thank you.

Reviewer: tneb2009 (Signed) · Date: December 02, 2009 08:08 AM · On: Chapter 14 - Helpless

wow, that was SO GOOD! I want to hit next really bad. I am so happy Edward is coming around and Bella and Jake are ok. I can't wait for more!

Reviewer: sconnolly318 (Signed) · Date: December 02, 2009 06:15 AM · On: Chapter 14 - Helpless

Thansk for updating. :-)

 

I love how this is panning out....

Reviewer: mcamastow (Signed) · Date: December 01, 2009 02:06 AM · On: Chapter 14 - Helpless

still not getting a full picture yet,

Reviewer: Dulcinea21bella (Signed) · Date: November 30, 2009 04:02 PM · On: Chapter 14 - Helpless

This was so heartfelt and sincere.  Poor Jacob was willing to sacrifice everything for Bella.  It was a profound moment when they let eachother go at the end.  Very well done.  That was a profound moment for Edward, as well, realizing that Bella's heart truly belongs to him- exclusively.  Excellent chapter!

Reviewer: Akelarre (Signed) · Date: November 30, 2009 12:01 PM · On: Chapter 14 - Helpless

A beautiful, bittersweet chapter.  

P.s.  Don’t worry ,if a story has a good plot and is well written we sure can survive without lemonade.

 

 

 

Reviewer: leelator (Signed) · Date: November 29, 2009 07:39 PM · On: Chapter 14 - Helpless

Thanks so much for the great update! Wonderful chapter. I can't tell you how glad I am you didn't kill off poor Jake. Who turned Bella? I always assumed it was Aro.

Reviewer: anais mark (Signed) · Date: November 29, 2009 03:42 PM · On: Chapter 14 - Helpless

Oh, and, you do a delicious job of picking poetry that distills the emotion of your chapter down to whatever fix we're about to get.  It helps me get my head in the right place.  Thanks for the e.e. cummings 'warning' that came with this one.

What hurts more than the image of another set of hands or lips doing what you wish most your's alone have done?  I think that's more fodder in favor of not having to write graphic sex scenes to get the idea across sometimes.

 

Reviewer: anais mark (Signed) · Date: November 29, 2009 03:35 PM · On: Chapter 14 - Helpless

Terribly painful read, love.  Perfctly in-character, though.  Bella can't NOT ask Jacob for what she needs-- even at enormous expense to him.  And where Edward is involved, she spares no one.  You nailed their exchange.

I am from the very old-school 'less is more' camp, whether we're talking about sex scenes or scary ones or just plain old bliss.  We'll always imagine it better than it can be explained.  The most horrifying monsters are the ones you haven't seen.  You can't even plan for that!  I may have been the only BD reader not disappointed by the lack of detail during the honeymoon.  I know the version in my head wouldn't make a PG-13 movie.  LOL.  Do what works for you-- epoch-length dissertations address impressionism.  We're as addicted to the residual effects as the graphic stuff.

You steal my heart, as always!! 

Reviewer: Cynthia35 (Signed) · Date: November 29, 2009 03:16 PM · On: Chapter 14 - Helpless

You are magic. This chapter is so touching. Raw and simple, it transcend words, and the emotions flood directly to my soul.

Thank you, you are quite an artist.

kisses from Argentina

Reviewer: tazz (Signed) · Date: November 29, 2009 11:49 AM · On: Chapter 14 - Helpless

OKAY WE GOT A FEW ANSWERS NOT MANY! THIS IS GETTING FRUSTRATING- BUT I AM IN FOR THE LONG HAUL!

TAMMY

Reviewer: UrbanAngel (Signed) · Date: November 29, 2009 10:04 AM · On: Chapter 14 - Helpless

still think she owes edward one hell of an explanation. even though he forgives her...i couldn't (well i know it doesn't really matter what i can or cannot do) but, yeah, this pain and uncertainty and self-doubt that does obviously not vanish in a couple of days. in my mind she has a lot of messed up stuff to take of of and she has to do a bit more than saying "i love you" to edward. yeah, but that's just me...

love that you updated - i really love this fic (even though i'm constantly bitching about bella)

Reviewer: mittap (Signed) · Date: November 29, 2009 08:52 AM · On: Chapter 14 - Helpless

Aw, how sad. No more Jake and Bella. So sad that Jake almost had to be killed to save Bella, yet again. Still the mystry lives on..... What was the threat? Waiting to see. Love Bella and Edward getting to know each other again. Wonderful, wonderful story. Thanks.

Reviewer: SammyJo (Signed) · Date: November 29, 2009 08:48 AM · On: Chapter 14 - Helpless

Still confused, but its getting better.  Can't wait for the next chapter.

Reviewer: Scorp112 (Signed) · Date: November 29, 2009 08:22 AM · On: Chapter 14 - Helpless

Soo sad!!! I loved the friendship between Bella and Jake; the fact that he risked everything for her and now to have to walk away from each other. I understand it, but it's still so sad.

Great chapter. Really looking forward to more!

Reviewer: Eidelweiss (Signed) · Date: November 29, 2009 07:06 AM · On: Chapter 14 - Helpless

Fantastic chapter. I don't mind the no-sex because you more than make up for it with your fantastic writing and just the way you suck people in. Every time I finish a chapter I feel like I have to come up for air.

Can't wait to read the next. And so happy that Edward and Bella are together.

Reviewer: sherriecherries (Signed) · Date: November 29, 2009 06:48 AM · On: Chapter 14 - Helpless

can't wait for more

Reviewer: lavishone (Signed) · Date: November 29, 2009 05:48 AM · On: Chapter 14 - Helpless

Now that Bella has seen Jacob and his last promise to her fulfilled, will Edward and Bella be able to move on?  More importantly, will Edward be able to forgive Bella?

There is no shame in being unable to write lemons.  Everyone has a gift for certain things.  Remember too that the suggestion of something can be even sexier than the nitty gritty.  Sometimes just mentioning the state of the sheets can be as hot or hotter than describing how they got that way...

Wondering where your story is headed next.

Reviewer: clairesuter (Signed) · Date: November 29, 2009 05:21 AM · On: Chapter 14 - Helpless

Oh, that made me want to cry! So what will Edward do with this information, will he finally really forgive Bella and Jacob, and will he seek revenge? Sure hope not but I know better than to assume it! Love your story!

Reviewer: Twilightedaddict (Signed) · Date: November 29, 2009 05:11 AM · On: Chapter 14 - Helpless

I liked it, and I appreciate the progress.  And the no-sex thing is no big deal-- there's so much sex in so many fics that its almost boring to read at this point.

I wish we could have some answers though-- I figured that the danger hinged on Bella being changed-- that had pretty much been revealed already.  But why did she have to keep it from Edward?  Why were the wolves and Cullens in danger?  Why did she pretend for months not to love Edward and then make him think she left him?

 

Reviewer: nothing2do (Signed) · Date: November 29, 2009 03:53 AM · On: Chapter 14 - Helpless

Wow, this is so hard that no one remembers or knows enough to make Edward and Bella whole again.  I hope she can remember and I am glad Jacob found love with someone who understands him. 

Can't wait to see what's next!!!

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