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Reviewer: LisiLisi1990 (Signed) · Date: July 15, 2009 03:26 PM · On: Chapter 4 - The Funeral
Nice start.. i really like your writing.. dont forget to post your next chapter ;)
i'll be waiting for it :)
Reviewer: beatingheartbaby (Signed) · Date: July 14, 2009 11:24 PM · On: Chapter 4 - The Funeral
Poor Leah and Seth. I hope you expand on them a bit more. It seems like Paul will be meeting Rachel for the first time. Will you have the imprinting brought in and have Jake explain to Bella?
Anyway, your story is amazing and I cannot wait to read more!
Author's Response: Paul won't meet Rachel for another few months. Jacob has to explain imprinting to Bella first. Remember, at this point she doesn't know about that part of pack life. Imprinting could have consequences for B/J, so it's a sensitive subject for Jake.
Reviewer: beatingheartbaby (Signed) · Date: July 14, 2009 11:16 PM · On: Chapter 3 - My Only Chance?
Embry is awesome! The conversation he had there with Bella was a much needed slap in the face for her to wake up. Awesome writing, as always! I can't wait for more Jacob/Bella moments!
Reviewer: vhdnet (Signed) · Date: July 14, 2009 11:03 PM · On: Chapter 1 - I Want to Try
Nice chapter :) I don't know anything about traditional funerals and what not but if you wanted to, you could have put Harry in a pod and shot him into outterspace.. Afterall, this is your story. :)
Reviewer: beaandmarco (Signed) · Date: July 14, 2009 09:29 PM · On: Chapter 4 - The Funeral
lol.. this story is great.. lol.. i love it..
Reviewer: Ash Night (Signed) · Date: July 14, 2009 07:15 PM · On: Chapter 4 - The Funeral
please write more
Reviewer: Dulcinea21bella (Signed) · Date: July 14, 2009 06:25 PM · On: Chapter 4 - The Funeral
Great update!
Reviewer: sugarvenom (Signed) · Date: July 14, 2009 06:10 PM · On: Chapter 4 - The Funeral
The imagry you have created is sensational. I think poor, dead Harry would be honored! ;)
Reviewer: sugarvenom (Signed) · Date: July 14, 2009 06:09 PM · On: Chapter 3 - My Only Chance?
Wonderfully written.
Reviewer: sugarvenom (Signed) · Date: July 14, 2009 06:07 PM · On: Chapter 2 - A Stolen Kiss
Your Bella voice is so perfect. I love how when I read her words it's like I can see her trying so hard to be strong.
Reviewer: amandamichigan (Signed) · Date: July 14, 2009 05:14 PM · On: Chapter 4 - The Funeral
No disappointment here. I think the chapter was very touching. Its nice that everyone is so affected by Harry's death. Good chapter.
Reviewer: Frzr71186 (Signed) · Date: July 14, 2009 05:08 PM · On: Chapter 4 - The Funeral
I loved the vivid description of the ceremony. I was surprisingly disappointed that there was no Jacob/Bella interaction. "The moment we've been waiting for....???" Edward?!
Reviewer: JessCullen_215 (Signed) · Date: July 14, 2009 05:03 PM · On: Chapter 4 - The Funeral
I think you did a great job with the funeral although I don't know how they are tradtionally are. The whole time I was hoping for Bella and Jake to talk so I'm even more excited for the next chapter. Good writing, and awesome ideas. Please update soon!
Reviewer: chellik (Signed) · Date: July 14, 2009 04:27 PM · On: Chapter 4 - The Funeral
this is really good.
To be honest I was a little dubious about reading another story about what could have happened if B and J had got together or if A hadn't seen the cliff diving incident. I was pleasently surprised!!
You have kept each person in character and so for that you recieve kudos 10/10 and a cookie of your choosing (only you can't have peanut butter as i'll get jealous as they are the foods of the gods, but someone up there thought it would be amusing to make me allergic! grr!)
Can't wait to see where this will end up!
chellik x
Author's Response: Mmm, snickerdoodle perhaps?
Reviewer: LJ Summers (Signed) · Date: July 14, 2009 04:26 PM · On: Chapter 1 - I Want to Try
I am enjoying this story very much. You're doing a nice weave of relationships and life and that seems very natural.
Reviewer: Sciencemom (Signed) · Date: July 14, 2009 04:23 PM · On: Chapter 2 - A Stolen Kiss
That was sweet. You go Bella- let that guard down!
Reviewer: kjayne (Signed) · Date: July 14, 2009 04:18 PM · On: Chapter 4 - The Funeral
Sweet chapter. I love the interaction between Bella and Emily.
Author's Response: I've always loved Emily...she seems like one of the strongest characters in the series, and I wish there was more of her.
Reviewer: Sciencemom (Signed) · Date: July 14, 2009 04:15 PM · On: Chapter 1 - I Want to Try
Just found this story. I like Bella and Jacob together - when Edward is not around : ). Looking forward to seeing where their relationship goes!
Reviewer: Dulcinea21bella (Signed) · Date: July 14, 2009 03:21 PM · On: Chapter 3 - My Only Chance?
Great update!
Reviewer: vhdnet (Signed) · Date: July 13, 2009 10:52 PM · On: Chapter 1 - I Want to Try
Thanks so much for sharing this story. I'm loving it!
Reviewer: LJ Summers (Signed) · Date: July 13, 2009 05:01 PM · On: Chapter 3 - My Only Chance?
Wow, Embry steps up, huh? Nice one!
Reviewer: diamondheart (Signed) · Date: July 13, 2009 02:47 PM · On: Chapter 2 - A Stolen Kiss
Mmmm. I wouldn't be waiting all that long....! Very nice. <><3
Reviewer: mrsz (Signed) · Date: July 13, 2009 11:52 AM · On: Chapter 1 - I Want to Try
Awww! Yay! Looks like you are getting some super feed-back on the story! That's what makes the writing all worth it! Loving things so far! I'll get chapter 6 to you soon, promise! I'm glad to be back in computer world, ha,ha! Hopefully all my computer woes are fixed now! Don't worry folks, chapter 3 is on the way (it was all my fault that it took so long... major virus issues for a moment. I didn't get back with her as quickly as I usually do!) Sorry! Looking forward to seeing the reviews for your lemons! Keep up the good work Ellen!
Author's Response: You rock my socks, beta baby! I appreciate YOUR hard work!
Reviewer: PeaceMusic71 (Signed) · Date: July 13, 2009 10:14 AM · On: Chapter 2 - A Stolen Kiss
LOVED IT!!!!!!!!!!!
Can't wait for the next chapter.
Reviewer: diamondheart (Signed) · Date: July 13, 2009 05:36 AM · On: Chapter 1 - I Want to Try
Very... promising! *sigh* <><3
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