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Reviewer: steflynno (Signed) · Date: July 20, 2009 04:16 PM · On: Chapter 8- Jealousy
I found this story today, and it is absolutely wonderful. Bella throwing a fit was priceless, but definately worth it. Edward needs to be murdered. For the fact that Bella was attempting to make the best out of her situation, and he did something like that. Please update soon!!!!
Author's Response: I'll try, I promise! I'm so glad you found this story and that you are liking it, it's a wonderful reward! :)
Reviewer: femflorest5 (Signed) · Date: July 20, 2009 04:13 PM · On: Chapter 8- Jealousy
yeah really the cliffie sucks...lol. So what exactly is Bella if not a collectible...!
Author's Response: We'll find out soon enough... ;)
Thanks!
Reviewer: diamondtopaz (Signed) · Date: July 20, 2009 04:09 PM · On: Chapter 8- Jealousy
I want to murder both you and Edward, that's true. Unfortunately, that would mean no more updates and no more lemons, so I guess I'll have to plan some other action. :D
Please update soon!
Author's Response: Ha ha ha! I'm glad you are sparing us to continue! Thank you, your review gave me a huge smile! :)
Reviewer: benafsha (Signed) · Date: July 20, 2009 03:20 PM · On: Chapter 8- Jealousy
oh please update soon. and to answer all the questions: NO. i don´t think any sex or murder scene was necessary ´cause then it would have been hard to focuss on bella's pain and anger. you made it real and i liked it.
Author's Response: I'm so glad! Thank you so much! :)
Reviewer: IrishLove (Signed) · Date: July 20, 2009 03:17 PM · On: Chapter 8- Jealousy
Another great chapter. I hope you update soon!
Author's Response: Thank you! :) I'll try!
Reviewer: BethyBoo (Signed) · Date: July 20, 2009 03:06 PM · On: Chapter 8- Jealousy
My dear, your story is captivating. I totally love it. Please update again soon!! :)
Author's Response: Thank you, thank you, thank you! :)
Reviewer: trutwilightfantasy (Signed) · Date: July 20, 2009 02:46 PM · On: Chapter 8- Jealousy
She should've taken advantage of the party to find a way out! I am not suprised at Edward's actions however. That whole situation makes my stomach turn. I am suprised that with all of Bella's hopelessness at the beginning of the chapter that she didn't try to use the shattered glass to her advantage of trying to just take her own life instead of giving him the chance. Fuck, I probably would have! That BASTARD!!!
Author's Response: I hated Joseph for getting Edward out of the way, he deserved to get his head split in two! BUT, give him a chance, he is all confussed and scared and troubled!
I'll update as soon as possible so you can start forgiving him, and start fearing for his life!
Reviewer: kenziemorton (Signed) · Date: July 20, 2009 02:41 PM · On: Chapter 8- Jealousy
i love it. i can't wait for the next chapter. i would like to see edward get a little jealous..lol
Author's Response: I think Edward gets jealous over the sheets on Bella's bed cuz they get to hold her through the night ;)
Thanks for reading ! :)
Reviewer: Calling_Siren (Signed) · Date: July 20, 2009 02:08 PM · On: Chapter 8- Jealousy
No murder, don't worry! :) I'd like just to look a little in Edward's head, to try to understand his behaviour...I'm intrigued...And what exactly does Mary mean when she says that Bella is not one of the many? I don't think it's just because she's a prisoner and the enemy's daughter...Well, I guess, I hope, I'll find out sooner or later, so I'll just wait for an update! :)
Author's Response: Ha ha, yeah, not much to do but wait. Sorry! I'll post as fast as I can!
Thank you!!! :)
Reviewer: KelseyJane (Signed) · Date: July 20, 2009 02:01 PM · On: Chapter 8- Jealousy
Of course Edward has another play thing. Why wouldn't he? I would've done the same thing as Bella. It's fun destroying a room!
Haha. I didn't even notice I didn't comment about who you wrote it about. Now that i'm thinking about it, I could see Gerard as a gangster. Although, Edward makes it seem so much sexier. How does that happen?!
Great chapter hun!
Author's Response: Ha ha ha, yes, I'm sure it would be a blast to destroy a room Edward so carefully decorated himself! He had a cow over it, btw.
Oh yeah, Edward is the superior bad-ass gangster here, no competition!
Thanks! ;)
P.S. I don't want to do it cuz I'd hate leaving everyone hanging like this, but I so miss my other story, KJ! And I simply do NOT have the time for two stories... I miss Jaime!
Reviewer: lord periperi (Signed) · Date: July 20, 2009 01:59 PM · On: Chapter 1- Imprisonment
came back after i calmed myself. ;)
just wanted to add this: the most fascinanting thing (although, i read it once, and in total shock, so maybe i read it all wrong) but the rage was bc of the other woman..i really hope it helped her clear and express some of her frustration with other things, but i doubt it did:it would be much stronger and lasted longer.
the betrayal is epic-epic. to have someone kidnapp you, rape you, trick your body-and yet, bella likes him(like, as i couldn't think of better word-it's late here in my corner;). if i were edward (and thank god i'm not!!) i would either be slightly grateful, as it is obvious he does need her on some level (even if it's still just sexual) or in wonder why she acts like she does. and there he goes, humiliating her in worst possible way-it's like direct message:"i took your everything, and made you willingly give me yourself, and guess what? you are not enough, and i don't really want you. you're a toy, like everything else in here."
i know, i know, he has some hidden agenda and/or it's not what it seems at all...but i really don't want to think about it right now, as i'm sure i'll come with more ideas "how to kill edward" during the night. ;)
oh, i'm still pissed. the thing is, i shouldn't be surprised-no matter the name, he still is criminal, and a cold person (on the surface at best).
i can't wait for an update!
Author's Response: You are killing me tonight, Lord Periperi! But you are absolutely right, about everything. Bella did channel ALL that hatered into destrying her room, the room Edward himself decorated. It simply didn't last longer because Edward and Joseph walked in on her, but I think it could have gotten real bad for much longer. She hates herself all over again, and she hates him all over again.
Now, just one small clue. Edward was not planning for Bella to find out. His instructions had been she should remain locked in her room for the night... This was all about proving something to himself, rather than her. Well, maybe a little to her too ;)
You can keep reviewing as many times as you'd like, I'll love every one of them!
Reviewer: mayams (Signed) · Date: July 20, 2009 01:22 PM · On: Chapter 8- Jealousy
Actually, I don't want to murder anyone, but would have loved to be able to throw something at someone like Bella did, who? all of them probably.
So she is hurting and Mary and Joseph know and were probably waiting for something like this to happen. Trashing the room was a good idea, it caused a comotion in the house and gave Joseph the chance to "really talk with Edward".
Something is going around in my mind, and you will probably half answer, but still I have to try, Joseph said the door wouldn't be locked the next night, did Bella do something with that comment? Or did she wait and Edward came back before she took the chance?
Edward was enjoying his time with one of his collectibles, whom acording to Mary won't be coming back to the house. That doesn't mean he won't see her again. How many of those does he have? And if Bella doesn't fit in that category, where does she fit?
How long until someone goes talk to her?
Author's Response: It kills me I can't answer any of your questions!!!! Not one!!!
No, wait, I can answer one: how long until someone goes talj to her? Four hours, almost exactly four hours. If only I could update as fast, huh?
So, did you like it at least?
Reviewer: anna123 (Signed) · Date: July 20, 2009 01:05 PM · On: Chapter 8- Jealousy
Yes, murdering Edward doesn't seem like such a bad idea right now! Yes, I know he's supposed to be the bad guy, and 'cheating' (I doubt he sees it like that) on Bella isn't exactly the worst thing he's done to her in this story, but I still want to kill him for it! I hope Bella won't just try to forget this and act like nothing happened or something like that. I hope Bella will manage to resist him better now (at least for awhile; until he's earned her forgivness), 'cause as much as I love Edward and want them to be together, he definitely doesn't deserve her right now (and he won't ever unless he gets his act together!)!! Plus, I really want to see him grovel for forgiveness! ;) Looking forward to read more! :D
Author's Response: Wow, what can I say? Yeah, he is a dick, a major dick! Will he get his act together? That deppends on your definition. But he will get a good ass-kicking... more than once. Maybe you'll forgive him when you see how much he'll pay?
Thanks for reading, Anna! :)
Reviewer: mandilm14 (Signed) · Date: July 20, 2009 01:05 PM · On: Chapter 8- Jealousy
No murder here. I'm just glad Bella went all postal on his ass. I found it quite amusing.
Author's Response: Me too! Loved writing that scene! Thanks so much for reading and reviewing :)
Reviewer: sherylb (Signed) · Date: July 20, 2009 12:54 PM · On: Chapter 8- Jealousy
The more I think about this, the more I can't see any kind of a future for these two, even if there are some genuine feelings/attraction......At this point, Edward doesn't want to give up his other women, and Bella(obviously) is not a woman who could put up with that......There would have to be a tremendous amount of change...................
Author's Response: Awww Sheryl! I almost want to send you a draft of the next chapter, I hate to see you suffer over these two silly kids! I'm sorry I'm making it painful for you, I love my angst, what can I say? Things will get better... then they get bad again... then good again. Sorry for the rollercoaster. Will you stick around?
Reviewer: justareader (Signed) · Date: July 20, 2009 12:50 PM · On: Chapter 8- Jealousy
While the lack of sex was a bit hard to take, I don't think I'm quite at the murdering stage. Josef seems so conflicted, trying to figure out who he should be loyal too. I felt so bad for Bella when she saw Edward, not to mention livid with Edward. I hope that we find out what Josef and Edward were arguing about (not that I don't have some ideas) and see some quality Bella and Edward time next chapter. I'm also curious if Bella managed to send out a message through Edward's unlocked office, guess I'll have to wait and see. Great job on another magnificent (if lemon-less) chapter!
Author's Response: I know, I was annoyed about writing lemonlessly, lol! And did you notice there is almost NO Edward in this chapter! WTF! It's like New Moon, all over again! ;) I'm so glad you guys stuck with the story, even sans lemons and almost-sans Edward. Apparently, Bella delivers!
Thanks so much JR!
Reviewer: Iamnotobssessed (Signed) · Date: July 20, 2009 12:41 PM · On: Chapter 8- Jealousy
Great story !!!
Author's Response: Thanks! :)
Reviewer: dreampills (Signed) · Date: July 20, 2009 12:36 PM · On: Chapter 8- Jealousy
All your characters are conflicted. Bella: wanting Edward vs. wanting freedom. Edward: keeping Bella vs. power. Charlie: getting Bella vs. power. Mary/Joseph: being parental vs. loyalty to Edward. Robbie: Bella vs. Edward.
It is all very fascinating. I don't understand why Bella is so opposed to the lifestyle while she was with her father. Yet, she doesn't seem to care as much when it comes to Edward. Charlie was a murderer, but Edward is one as well. Her "hatred" seems much stronger when it comes to Charlie than Edward. Is the tramatic experience and her attraction to him cloudying her judgement. I'm glad to see that Bella is considering an escape!
Great chapter!
Author's Response: I love the way you see my story, DP! You make it sound much more interesting than it actually is ;)
I love the subject you bring up about Charlie vs Edward as far as Bella's hatred is concerned. If you'd like, we could talk about it in the forums? I'm not sure how much I can talk about the subject without giving too much away...
Thank you! :)
Reviewer: keola (Signed) · Date: July 20, 2009 12:33 PM · On: Chapter 8- Jealousy
yeah i fucking hate edward now
Author's Response: In the really hate, I never want to know anything about him, I will never read this stupid story ever agin, way? I hope not, I hope you stick around! :)
Reviewer: twilighter767 (Signed) · Date: July 20, 2009 12:31 PM · On: Chapter 8- Jealousy
Murder Edward i suppose!!Great chapter...i do wish she hit him before Joseph steped in though...cant wait for the next update!!
Author's Response: Well, then I would have had to write six chapters alone on Edward's recuperating from having his head split in two... and that doesn't sound like much fun ;)
Thanks for the review and for reading! It makes me so happy to know people are enjoying this!
Reviewer: twilght-princessm (Signed) · Date: July 20, 2009 12:30 PM · On: Chapter 8- Jealousy
You're story is truly the most avant garde I have ever read in twilighted. I love every single chapter you have written and you totally have succeeded in writing Lords of the Gangland. Please Update!
Author's Response: Wow, your review is... I'm stunned. I'm very flattered you think so, I'm very flattered someone thinks my story is anything but silly perverted fluff.
Thank you
Reviewer: dihenydd (Signed) · Date: July 20, 2009 12:23 PM · On: Chapter 8- Jealousy
Hmm now this was an interesting chapter. The lack of sex is no problem BTW. Bella was a lot more emotional than we have seen her to date and it is nice to see her waking up to her situation. Of course I am wondering whether she managed to get a message out and what might come of that.
Edward obviously has different feelings for her than he has for most people but he is a user nevertheless giving her no commitment or even explanations. Will that change? Maybe?
It will be interesting to see the aftermath of this - whether he will punish her or try to appease her; and what her reaction will be. I would like to think that if she refuses him after this that he will not force himself on her but really we know so little of him it is impossible to conjecture. This makes it both frustrating and much more interesting. Maybe Bella feels this way too?
At the moment h has been calling all the shots in there relationship. He comes to her when he feels like it and he dominates their intercourse. I wonder if that dynamic will change a little?
Thanks for the update.
Author's Response: I don't think you realize just how nervous I get whenever I reach your reviews. I know that if I try to pull some dishonest shit on the story, you'll call on it right away. It forces me to take the story a lot more seriously than I originally did. So if anyone feels that the story has improved with the chapters, they should thank you.
Thanks, by the way :)
Reviewer: Beth818 (Signed) · Date: July 20, 2009 12:13 PM · On: Chapter 8- Jealousy
I am staring at the screen of my iPhone with narrowed eyes and feel an intense need to rip Edwards lips off. That fucker. I didn't think the rape ruined their potential relationship, but I think this definitely does. :( how is she supposed to ever kiss him again, knowing that his lips have been on another woman's willingly? Poor Bella...
Author's Response: Awwww, Beth, you just made me really really sad. Edward is very fucked up, and he is very much afraid. I know, that's a crap excuse. Trust me, he does not want our sympathy, but I still hope you'll eventually forgive him.
Thanks for reading, pain and all!
Reviewer: SnowWhiteQueen (Signed) · Date: July 20, 2009 12:05 PM · On: Chapter 8- Jealousy
no i dont want edward to die!!! i think ti would be sweet if he decided he loved her too much to harm her! and right in the middle of their moment (or a big action scene) a monkey appears at random!!!
Author's Response: Ha ha ha ha!!! I love you SWQ! You have my full permission to write the scene in question! Ha ha ha ha!
Reviewer: HeavenDust (Signed) · Date: July 20, 2009 11:52 AM · On: Chapter 8- Jealousy
Hmm... wow, what a lot of tempting choices you left out in AN there... killing Edward was probably what I wanted the most right now. *sigh* I actually felt bile rising up to my throat. Ugh.
Joseph is really sweet... I wonder how old is he? He's described as paternal so he must be someone older. In anycase, I'm glad Bella has another sympathizer, aside from Mary.
And what happened the day after Joseph said Edward's study would not be locked the next day? Bella would try to take advantage of that situation, surely. Hmmm.... questions quetions.
As per usual I love it... I can't understand Edward right now but I'm certainly intrigued! Assward is so damn irresistatble sometimes, damnit! *lol*
Author's Response: Ha ha ha! So we go from Mobward to Assward, I absolutely love it! Yes, I find him irresistible too.
I know I'm leaving you guys with a billion questions. I'm sorry, it's necesarry ;)
Thanks for leaving me your thoughts, HD. I love reading your honest feeliongs on my writtings :)
P.S. what's AN?
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