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Reviewer: Queendel (Signed) · Date: July 27, 2009 01:10 PM · On: Chapter 10- Regret

Good update. I despise traitors and Joseph is a big one. It is a shame that he allowed his boss to be dragged in such a vulnerable manner from his haven.  I could understand that he might have sympathise with Bella and wanted to help her but he could have done so without giving over his boss and I dare say friend (since he could argue with him) to the enemy...the depth of  his betrayal to Edward  is unforgivegable.

I hope that Bella is able to help Edward to escape, and that those thugs don't damage my Edward or hurt him in any way.

Update soon.



Author's Response:

I'm glad you think the update was good, even with treacherous Joe. I know, it was a hard decision he took. We'll see what becomes of it...

Will he be hurt? I'm affraid so. But just to put your mind at ease, I will not kill him and the story is essentially HEA, k?

Thanks for reading, Queendel :)

Reviewer: evabell (Signed) · Date: July 27, 2009 01:09 PM · On: Chapter 10- Regret

oh cmon. how can you leave us hanging like that. and yes bella had a good plan.. can't wait to see what happens next.



Author's Response:

Sorry, you guys must help me with my evil cliffies, but they are necesarry to build up the suspense, right? And that is what this story is all about! Well, that and Edward porn ;)

Thanks for reading :)

Reviewer: Gem-dawg (Signed) · Date: July 27, 2009 01:07 PM · On: Chapter 10- Regret

omg!!! loved it!! do i have to wait long for the next chapter??? ^__^ xxx



Author's Response:

Thanks! And hopefully not, I'll try to work on it as soon as I possibly can! Thanks for the review! :)

Reviewer: Stellarrose (Signed) · Date: July 27, 2009 01:06 PM · On: Chapter 10- Regret

Ahhhhhhhh!!!!!!  Such a precarious situation.  How to help Edward??  And who is the note from?  Edward? (Unlikely) Joseph? (Possibly) Mary? (Could Mary and Sarah be related and willing to help both of them??)



Author's Response:

Your review is just like my chapter, one question after another! Love it! Thanks for reading :)

Reviewer: mayams (Signed) · Date: July 27, 2009 01:01 PM · On: Chapter 10- Regret

Joseph is safe, where? We might never find out, but at least he is safe. What about Mary? I understand her father wouldn't care for the people in Edward's house, but I hope she is safe too.

The help in a house, the best allies and enemies there are... both sides always. Who is Sarah working for? i guess we'll eventually find out.

Poor Robbie, drugged, it's logic though but still. Poor guy!!!!

So Edward will eventually be taken to the house where Bella is right now. She is really, really smart and even if she says this life isn't for her, she is part of it. How would she have thought about the poem if not?

Charlie said Bella rescued herself, that he and his guys only helped a little, could that be all the truth? Or is Charlie trying to make Bella feel better? Will someone tell all this to Edward? I was surprised it seems Charlie will agree to Bella seeing him, especially from what his men did or didn't tell him as to how and where they found Bella.

My thoughts are a big mess and questions are jumping from one part of the chapter to another, it was just great, answered questions but of course brought more.

Will Bella come clean with Charlie or Edward? Will she stay in this life? Or try again for a normal one? How much does Charlie guess of what happened? and very, very important, why did Sarah refer to Edward as "the boy Edward"'



Author's Response:

Hola Chica!

Did you notice that Robbie had to be sedated this time but not last? ;)

Ok, I'll answer a couple:

Did Charlie say what he did to make Bella feel better? In one word: no. But that's all I'm saying

Will someone else tell all this to Edward? No need...

Will Bella come clean with Charlie or Edward? Yes. I'm not elaborating

Will she stay in this life? That is a very existential question. I'm kidding ;) But I seriously can't answer that!

How much does Charlie guess of what happened? My guess? Too much.

Aaaaaaaaah the 'boy Edward', I knew you'd pick up on that! It does tell you she's known him for a while, huh?

 

Seriously Mayams, how can you stand me? My story is one huge question mark and my answers to you are cryptic at best. But I can't give too much away, right? Thanks for giving me your honest review as always :)

Reviewer: fanficobssesion (Signed) · Date: July 27, 2009 12:57 PM · On: Chapter 10- Regret

OH my dear Lord!!! what is going to happen in that chapel?? ah??? I bit all my nails reading this!!! and the "go to the matresses" phrase! genius!!!  you portrait your characters so well!!

Please update soon... this is a very good story ... all those questions that Bella ask herself ... I think are the same questions that all of us, your readers, are asking too!! 

keep on the good work.. and most of all keep on giving us this amazing story!

( i am sorry if my english is not very good.. but i HAD to review this chapter!)



Author's Response:

You english was PERFECT and I loved your review! I was fearing I overdid it with the million questions Bellas asked herself, but how could she not? Poor thing, her life right now is one big question mark...

Thanks for reading and for letting me know what yoy thought! :)

Reviewer: steflynno (Signed) · Date: July 27, 2009 12:53 PM · On: Chapter 10- Regret

great chapter.



Author's Response:

Thank you :)

Reviewer: didodado (Signed) · Date: July 27, 2009 12:51 PM · On: Chapter 10- Regret

 

 

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OHHHHHH!!!!!!

 

How could you do it again!!!! You always let me begging for more!!!!

 

Don’t get me wrong I love Joseph and I love the way he and Mary take care of Bella during her hostage. But I’m a little surprised about the betrayal of Joseph against Edward. I mean, I always thought that Joseph will find a way to save Bella but by selling Edward to his worst enemy, knowing what Charlie will do with him….Always thought that despite their differences with the Bella’s issue. The loyalty of Joseph towards Edward was unshakeable. Maybe it is all a set up….? Maybe Edward understand very well the meaning of the poem that he was delivering to Charlie?

 

Mary is safe and sound, doesn’t she?

 

And I really really, really hope that the paper that Sarah gave to Bella with the location and the hour is a meeting with Edward…. I know that is very improbable but  I need to know that he is fine and that He forgive her. PLEASE!!

 

I know that I’m saying the same in everyone of my reviews but I’m saying anyways. PLEASE updated soon. Keep writing the magnificent story and I love the twist of every chapter that only make to increase the suspense.

 

I know that is a lot of pressure to keep updating every week I hope that all the good reviews that you’re receiving gives you forces to keep doing it.



Author's Response:

Did I reply to your review over at FanFiction already? I'm pretty sure, or I might have done it in my head and not actually writen it... I do that sometimes.

Anyway, first, thanks for reviewing, I missed you last chapter ;)

Second, Joe's actions will be explained, that doesn't mean he is either right or wrong... I can't say anymore without giving everything away. Mary too will make a cameo.

As for Edward, he can take care of himself, as can Bella, as you've seen, so don't worry about either one of them. Well, maybe a little, but they'll be all right in the end :)

Oh, absolutely! The reviews help me in more ways than one. They also make me very happy!

Thanks, didodado! :)

Reviewer: maddylyn (Signed) · Date: July 27, 2009 12:46 PM · On: Chapter 10- Regret

Wow this story has so many twist and turns.  It keeps you guessing and wanting more.  Great Job!



Author's Response:

Thanks, I'm so glad! :)

Reviewer: twilightbrunette23 (Signed) · Date: July 27, 2009 12:44 PM · On: Chapter 10- Regret

THIS IS A VERY WELL THOUGHT STORY. PLEASE HURRY WITH  THE UPDATES!!! THIS WAS A BRUTAL SPOT TO STOP!! THANKS FOR SHARING YOUR TALENT.



Author's Response:

Thanks for your note, I'm very flattered by your words :)

I'll post as soon as possible!

Reviewer: kaybebaby (Signed) · Date: July 27, 2009 12:39 PM · On: Chapter 10- Regret

Great chapter! It explains Bella's out-of-character behaviour in the previous chapter, so I am glad you posted this right away afterwards! Very curious to see what happens in that chapel.... and no worries about no Edward... this chapter was important. It's good how you portrayed the lack of relationship between Charlie and Bella through his mis-use of her name.... well done!!

Look forward to reading more! You deserve all the success you get with this story! :) xx



Author's Response:

Oh, please, 'deserving' is not a fair term. I'm not being falsely humble when I tell you you are a far superior writer. It has to do with luck and getting the story out there. This story became much more popular after I posted it on FanFiction. But, having said that, I really appreciate your words :)

I'm glad you liked, and I know it would bother you, helps with the plot, AND he will be back, of course!

Thanks hun, I love the fact that you have kept reading. Oh, and I'm posting a chapter for Fortune's Fool this week! :)

 

Reviewer: twilighter767 (Signed) · Date: July 27, 2009 12:39 PM · On: Chapter 10- Regret

Love this story....i do my own happy dance when i see it has been updated!!

Are we gona find out what happened to Mary/Joseph and will they be in the story again?

Cant wait to see what happens next!!



Author's Response:

Well, I do my own little happy dance whenever it gets good reviews!

Yes, we'll see Joe and Mary again.

Thanks for the great review, twilighter767! :)

Reviewer: KelseyJane (Signed) · Date: July 26, 2009 11:48 AM · On: Chapter 9- Surrender

Whoa. I did not see that coming! I like that he surrendered to her, and that he's fighting with himself on what he feels for her, if anything. Hehe, 4 kids and a june wedding, I like that. I wonder if Charlie found him and that's what's going on...

If you want, pause this story for a while and continue your other story. Do you have anything written for it? I miss jamie too but I am loving this story!



Author's Response:

I have the next chapter for FF. I miss Jaime too, so much. But thing is, I get the stories confussed if I work on both at the same time. But I am so much in the mood for vampires lately, so I might pause this one for a bit (a bit!).

Thanks for the support and for reading, KJ!

Seen any vampire movies lately? Hey, are you a TrueBlood fan?

Reviewer: Ochanteuse (Signed) · Date: July 25, 2009 06:34 PM · On: Chapter 9- Surrender

 

Charlie is going to one rather pissed off daddy.

 

Another great chapter.

 

I have really enjoyed this story. Can't wait for more.



Author's Response:

Thank you, I am so glad! :)

Reviewer: Jaimee (Signed) · Date: July 25, 2009 03:51 PM · On: Chapter 9- Surrender

ahhhhhh! so good! update soon pretty please?!



Author's Response:

Almost done! Thanks for reading :)

Reviewer: twilighter767 (Signed) · Date: July 25, 2009 03:09 AM · On: Chapter 9- Surrender

God the ending was so unexpected....im in shock.....i need more i love this story!!



Author's Response:

Good, I'm glad you were surprised! I'll update pretty soon, promise! Thank you:)

Reviewer: MathGoddess (Signed) · Date: July 24, 2009 11:27 PM · On: Chapter 9- Surrender

Hahaha It's Kat. Alex doesn't review. She just reads, meh. =P

I'm reading the whole fic again.

I'm so pathetically in love.



Author's Response:

Ha ha. Hey Kat, I'm glad you are in love ;)

Tell Alex not to be lazy and let me know what she thinks too!

Thanks for reading, Kat :)

Reviewer: Vampyre (Signed) · Date: July 24, 2009 08:09 PM · On: Chapter 9- Surrender

I am sooo twisted and turned with this plot.  Such an excellent chapter - here's a good word for it:  mind-fuckery !  Thanks for the quick update!  Still loving the banner and LOOK - you've almost got 500 reviews!   Congrats!



Author's Response:

Mind-fuckery, yes, it's juts what I was aiming for! ;)

I know, I love the banner too. I have to change it though. If you notice it's missing a 'the'. Caius sent me the corrected one, but I can't remember how I uploaded the first one... ha ha.

I know, this story has gotten so much more attention than I ever dreamt. It's awsome, I'm flattered, but I am also terrified! Too many people have expetations now, lol! But it may also be that I have a very vocal audience. I have over 20k hits, BUT on the first chapter I have close to 8K, and then it goes down to 2k, and then it goes down even more. So I guess the story is not everyone's cup of tea, whcih is fine by me. I know the topic is a bit out there. Again, mind-fuckery.

Thanks for the great rating! Thanks for reading! :)

Reviewer: caylab12 (Signed) · Date: July 24, 2009 06:54 PM · On: Chapter 9- Surrender

WTF just happened??! That was so random and not expected! I love it when I'm totally shocked like that! I can't wiat for next chapter and hopefully some answers!



Author's Response:

I'm so glad you were surprised! :)

Next chapter is very close to being done. Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: erika_cross (Signed) · Date: July 24, 2009 12:16 PM · On: Chapter 9- Surrender

This is so fucked up, but I LOVE IT! Please update soon.



Author's Response:

Best compliment ever! :)

Reviewer: dihenydd (Signed) · Date: July 24, 2009 10:17 AM · On: Chapter 9- Surrender

I finally get to review!  I hope you haven’t been second guessing yourself again.

 

I found the oscillating passionate emotions at the beginning mixed with Lorca’s haunting words very moving but also detached in the way an intellectual dissects their feelings.  It reminded me of R.S. Thomas poem Song at the Years Turning.

 

Love deceived you.  What is there to say?

The mind brought you by a better way

To this despair.

 

(it may be wrong since I am writing from memory.)

 

Edward’s threats and final capitulation speak of someone who has desperately been trying to disguise (or deny) his feelings for some time behind a harsh unfeeling façade.

 

As in canon their attraction is unnatural, immediate and deep rooted.  Their relationship will never be conventional and it is typical that their feelings are acknowledged precipitously and passionately rather than slow gaining of respect.  This is often the way with intellectuals who become ambushed by their own feelings.

 

Of course I believe that it is Charlie’s men who have just intruded and wonder how this is connected to both Bella’s letter and her entrance into Edward’s study (maybe to use the telephone) some nights before.  Is she responsible for this rescue?  Will she start to feel remorse if Edward is tortured and punished?  Will she be able to intervene?

 

It was nice to have a little more insight into Edward’s past though it begs more questions than it answers.  Not only is his acquisition of languages eclectic but why is Russian his preferred language in this intimate situation?  His level of education speaks of a privileged youth and I am going to make a leap here and speculate that he had a very happy childhood.  I thought possibly that his mother spoke Russian to him but she taught him Italian and French.  He learnt Russian (and a local dialect) whilst in Russia and obviously has an emotional attachment to it, so maybe he had a previous wife, sweetheart, loved one who was Russian?  Maybe Charlie destroyed his idyllic life and he is bent on revenge?  Could he have lost a child to have this burning sense of revenge against Charlie’s child?

 

Since Twific is so abundant there are bound to be similarities to other fics although so far as I am aware your story is unique in plot and narration.  The comparisons that come to mind though are The Dominant and Hourglass.  The Dominant for the scene where Bella pushes him until he capitulates and finally surrenders to her still not acknowledging a 7 year obsession with her; and Houglass for the desperate behaviour of Edward (an Edward very damaged by the past)  as he fights his instincts and feelings before giving in to his feelings.

 

Well perhaps I should rein in my leftfield speculation for now.  I did make it over to your thread briefly though I am pretty allergic to the Twilighted forums.  I do appreciate you sharing your writing with us and look forward to the drama that is no doubt about to unfold.

 



Author's Response:

I was actually going to write to you and beg for a review! Ha ha ha, then I saw your post at the thread and waited patiently ;)

I think you just may be right about Bella's detachment to her emotions in the sense that she tries to dissect and separate them to understand them. Either I created a more 'intellectual' Bella (to use your term), or maybe this is just the way I perceive her in the books: with a very cerebral approach to her feelings. Or maybe it's just me... I'll have to do some soul-searching there.

I know, I always answer two questions in each chapter and present about two dozen new questions. I like the fact that Edward is an enigma, maybe a little too much, so I'm trying to hold on to that for as long as it makes sense for the story. No longer, I promise. Happy childhood? Yes and no. Edward has always been a conflicted person, even when his life was somewhat calm and good.  Yes, he does have an attachment to Russia, we'll get into that later on.

The Dominant I read a chapter and left it cuz yeah, that Edward seemed a bit too close to mine and I didn't want to be influenced. I know that's an awesome story and I can't wait to get into it. I might have to speed up my story to be rid of it and get there ;) Hourglass I've never heard of, but sounds very interesting. Very much my cup o' tea.

Have you started reading The Hunter yet? I'm sure you'll love it, it trully is wonderful and outstanding in many ways.

Let's see what you think of the next chapter... It's almost done.

Thanks as always. BTW, did you notice a HUGE error in the chapter? ;)

Reviewer: kels16 (Signed) · Date: July 24, 2009 06:41 AM · On: Chapter 9- Surrender

OMG what happened?

love the story, cant wait for the next update!



Author's Response:

Thank you! :)

Reviewer: Tarbecca (Signed) · Date: July 24, 2009 03:27 AM · On: Chapter 9- Surrender

OMG.  I just found this story.  It is the most awesomely fucked up story.  I love it.



Author's Response:

I love it when people tell me the story is fucked up, love it! Thanks! :)

Reviewer: dangerous_dreamer (Signed) · Date: July 24, 2009 03:03 AM · On: Chapter 9- Surrender

awwwww finally they were tender. i'd laugh very hard if the "four kids and a june wedding" conversation was true. AMAZING! but what happened after that? was it Bella's father? is Edward ok? UPDATE SOON PLEASE!!!



Author's Response:

He was joking... kinda. Have you ever said something as a joke and them realized it was true?

Edward is... not too ok, but alive. Next chapter is almost done. Thank you! :)

Reviewer: dangerous_dreamer (Signed) · Date: July 24, 2009 02:21 AM · On: Chapter 8- Jealousy

Just when i thought they were going to fall for each other this happens. i need to get my torch and pitchfork. not for you but for Edward. he is a dick!

RENOVATIONS! yeah Bella Good job with the decorations! she made the room look much better. Fabulous chapter and very unexpected but a good unexpected.

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