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Reviewer: jfk06 (Signed) · Date: July 05, 2009 10:02 PM · On: 9: Trust
Hmm, why wouldn't they play baseball? It's what the Cullens love to do for fun :-) And it fits with your story, since you seem to be following Twilight pretty closely... except this time, Bella can read minds too!
I can't wait to see what the Cullens think of Bella now! ;-)
Reviewer: Goddessa39 (Signed) · Date: July 05, 2009 09:45 PM · On: 9: Trust
I really like this. It's sorta different and the same as canon at the same time save for the obvious reading-of-minds, disgust with Mike, and, well, the get together was the same but the pre was kinda funny.
Reviewer: St0pSmackinMe07 (Signed) · Date: July 05, 2009 09:31 PM · On: 8: Killer
Reviewer: St0pSmackinMe07 (Signed) · Date: July 05, 2009 09:31 PM · On: 7: Three
interesting story. i like it so far. update again soon.
Reviewer: Bellinda (Signed) · Date: July 05, 2009 09:24 PM · On: 9: Trust
thanks for the update :))
Reviewer: laurelbarnes (Signed) · Date: July 05, 2009 09:23 PM · On: 9: Trust
very cool I love she told him all the silly things she thought about him to cute. Loved this chapter and I am looking forward to more.
Reviewer: tneb2009 (Signed) · Date: July 05, 2009 08:36 PM · On: 9: Trust
Yay for quick updates!!! Great chapter, still loving the twists.
How about the nomads crash the dance, that would be original :)
Looking forward to more! :)
Reviewer: BlueAngel145 (Signed) · Date: July 05, 2009 08:21 PM · On: 9: Trust
nah sick with baseball but if u really want to change it football.. good story
Reviewer: Nova (Signed) · Date: July 05, 2009 07:54 PM · On: 9: Trust
Baseball. I really love that scene. But, I really, really love baseball. I'm sure something else could work, but it really fits the Cullen dynamic. Can't wait to read more!
Reviewer: tneb2009 (Signed) · Date: July 05, 2009 07:54 PM · On: 8: Killer
I love how this follows twilight with a twist, I can't wait to see what happens next :)
Reviewer: truelove4ever (Signed) · Date: July 05, 2009 07:41 PM · On: 9: Trust
can you not make it to focused around james and all them, but i like baseball
but this is still an amazing story i love it soooooo much
x
Reviewer: Senda Rozalija (Signed) · Date: July 05, 2009 07:30 PM · On: 9: Trust
I think you could make the baseball scene very fun from Bella's mindreading perspective :)
I wonder how she'll react to james' thoughts towards her ...
Love the story so far!
Reviewer: IrishLove (Signed) · Date: July 05, 2009 06:21 PM · On: 9: Trust
Great chapter! I would love to see an interaction between Bella and the entire Cullen clan. As for meeting the nomads, I vote for not doing baseball, because thats been done a lot. But I don't know what to suggestion, a game of water polo, maybe curling..... just kidding.
Reviewer: leahswings (Signed) · Date: July 05, 2009 06:16 PM · On: 9: Trust
I've always liked tephenie's baseball scene, and always wnated to wrewrite it to my own taste, so I say go for it. I'm curious to see hwat you come up with.
Two chapters in one day? I'm feeling spoiled.
Reviewer: binki (Signed) · Date: July 05, 2009 06:13 PM · On: 9: Trust
I say leave the ballgame in. I so love that Edward and Bella have told their feelings to eachother!! I can't wait to see how this story goes!
Reviewer: kng1986 (Signed) · Date: July 05, 2009 06:09 PM · On: 9: Trust
Thanks for the update - cute chapter. Nothing works as good as baseball.
Reviewer: bellaislikeme (Signed) · Date: July 05, 2009 06:09 PM · On: 9: Trust
I really really really like this update ASAP
Reviewer: KiddyWiddy (Signed) · Date: July 05, 2009 05:30 PM · On: 9: Trust
Love the update! I was elated when Bella forgot to give the coat back! Hm, another sport, you can try football or soccer. Hockey wouldn't really work. Also with Basketball.
It also depends if your setting it in the clearing or not.
Reviewer: lostluggage (Signed) · Date: July 05, 2009 05:18 PM · On: 9: Trust
someone in twilighted is spoling us!
another chapter posted?! that is just making the holiday weekend too good to be true!
another great chapter! but now i'm afraid with such a short turnaround- it will be a long time till an update?
nooo!
baseball- definitely...
be kind- update soon! or send us a little edward to our doors to distract us!
Author's Response: A little Edward huh...that gives me an idea for a picture!!
Reviewer: steflynno (Signed) · Date: July 05, 2009 04:50 PM · On: 9: Trust
Another great chapter. That was a very quick update. I think you should stick with baseball. You've followed the events in "Twilight", I think you should continue. Whatever you decide though I know it'll be great.
Reviewer: silly sad sarah twilighted (Signed) · Date: July 05, 2009 04:47 PM · On: 9: Trust
hmmm They could cuddle in the medow. Get a knock at the Cullen door nomads curious to the veggie vamps. Meet the Cullens out and about while they are hunting and they smell human on them. Track Edwards scent to her home. Either way the story rocks and I look forward to whatever is to come!
Reviewer: Sweetheartwithfangs (Signed) · Date: July 05, 2009 04:43 PM · On: 9: Trust
baseball, soccer, oo - basketball!
Reviewer: peachykeenbean17 (Signed) · Date: July 05, 2009 04:08 PM · On: 8: Killer
hehehe ohhhhh that was really good!
can't wait for more!
Reviewer: nothing_is_as_it_seems (Signed) · Date: July 05, 2009 03:30 PM · On: 8: Killer
Loving this - liked this chapter ten stars for you this fine evening - like ur style of writing =] having trouble including thought the way you do in my fic =] but u do it so well =]
NIAIS
Reviewer: AJ04 (Signed) · Date: July 05, 2009 02:42 PM · On: 8: Killer
Wow this is definatly picking up...LOL...seems like it took Edward long enough to figure that one out.
“Which of us is the predator and which is the prey?” Hmmm I think Edward better watch out, If Bella can already hear minds as a human, I bet dollar to pesos that she'll be the predator.
I can't wait to read the next installment of your excellent writing skills. =)
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