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Reviewer: Trillion (Signed) · Date: May 06, 2013 06:47 AM · On: Epilogue: Destiny
Whatever, i don't get why you are trying so hard to keep edward 'in character'. He is far removed from the prude edward that was in SM's version, with the makeout sessions he and bella seem to be having ever chance they get. So why keep his stupidity going?. And if your going to keep his stupidity going, why not give him better reasons for keeping her mortal?. B/c I swear the original reasoning was/is beyond retarded!.
I see that JB is mos def going to be a problem, with the 'nice guy suffering' act. Bella is going to fall for that nonesense hard. Especially w/ 'she was supposed to be w/ me routine he is thinking of. She is not that smart to see around things. Especially using destiny and all that jazz to prove her points.
Seriously, give Edward and ultimatum; and end the arguements for good.
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Post script: MN Seriously need to get a beat down.
Author's Response: LOL, I loved reading all your comments. It may not seem like it now but there is some method to my madness in my writing. I have 4 books to show that. And MN does get whats coming to him and the B/JB thing will be different and a surprise.
Reviewer: Trillion (Signed) · Date: May 06, 2013 06:07 AM · On: 24: Stalemate
Edward is a selfish bastard, alway holding immortality away from bella; and doing it w/ b.s reasons. [her soul, lack of understanding, blah blah] Sure his immortal life was a miserable one, and he never learned to love himself till bella, but hse shouldn't hold that against her. He needs to stop making decision for the both of them. His 1918 mentality is the reason he keeps making stupid decisions on what he belives to be chivalrous. His time growing up watching his parents during that time, fuels his need to be a 'protector' and 'main decision' maker. But the takes things to the ulitmate and goes overboard. Which then lead to him making stupid decisons on the behalf of both of them.
Bella should tell him "IF you don't want to change me , fine!. I will ask someone else. I would've preferred my MATES venom coursing through me, but clearly you prefer not to be that close to me. So, I will find someone else. And if they mess up and I end up dead, don't follow me for a 100 years. I don't want to be near you for the first hundred years of my afterlife!. Because it would be your fault that I ended up dying. You and you ridiculous B.S. reasoning, ending destroying us, all because you were too much of a BITCH to MANUP and and do your FUCKING JOB!".
Reviewer: Trillion (Signed) · Date: May 05, 2013 06:19 PM · On: 15: Interruptions
Thnks for the pic. I am harding a hard time reading this version of Bella 2.0. I don't see how he will be able to seperate himself from his twinsoul later on, but whatever.
I like this new confident Bella. I guess when you know who are the fake ppl in your life, it makes it easier.
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She had 2 conversation w/ esme, and only seen carlise. This is very rude it seems. She has been cursing up a storm in the cullen home, and making all sorts of drama. But she is edwards made, so she gets pass. She clearly makes him happy.
Reviewer: Trillion (Signed) · Date: May 05, 2013 04:26 PM · On: 14: Torture
Good, edward is not such a prude. His kisses are not so chaste as it was in the book. I don't really see him leaving Bella in book 2 but I did skip ahead and it does happen leaving her open to JB. But she doesn't seem the type to fall for his nonesense, but a heartbroken and vengeful bella might 'feel' the need to use another man to get over her issues. Sucks, but edward would deserve to lose the priviledge of being first, since he gave it up!. She should give it to another. But it would be crushing to read if she did.
Reviewer: Trillion (Signed) · Date: May 05, 2013 01:24 PM · On: 12: Dream
hahaha, something tells me that wasn't a dream bella. LOL.
Reviewer: Trillion (Signed) · Date: May 05, 2013 11:55 AM · On: 11: Dazzle
Dazzle or no, I don't feel any love between them. I know there is love b/c the say it alot, but they just act like an old married couple. Like your definition of soulmate, they are suppose to cherish the small things, even SM got that. I only see big events over looking the small things or not explaining the small touches and stares in enough detail that would make the reader (me) believe that this is more than anything anybody else could have. I don't read soulmates here, I read a boy and girl in any relationship I can see on the street.
Reviewer: Trillion (Signed) · Date: May 05, 2013 11:48 AM · On: 10: Proof
What an idiot. Edward 'faked' kissed bella to 'prove' point to MN of all ppl. Idiot. You don't use your soulmate to make any point to a spurned suitor is ridiculous.
Reviewer: Trillion (Signed) · Date: May 05, 2013 11:43 AM · On: 8: Killer
I got no feeling of romance here. Just acceptance of their fate.
Reviewer: Trillion (Signed) · Date: May 05, 2013 11:42 AM · On: 7: Three
Good for her, putting MN in his place. He needed to get beaten off w/ a stick. Im glad she told alice that she knows, now she just has to wait for emoward to figure it out, if he hasn't alrdy. I wonder who else was next to alice when she figured it out.
Reviewer: Trillion (Signed) · Date: May 05, 2013 07:14 AM · On: 4: Together
Edward was really pitiful in his reasoning for keeping his distance.
Reviewer: Trillion (Signed) · Date: May 05, 2013 05:28 AM · On: 2: Lapse
First off, rosalie being as kind as she is, is way ooc. So if you change that, then why did you keep all the nonsense and retarded decisions, that SM's wrote. SM's writing made bella look like a two timing skank, when she was trying to hang out w/ JB, even though she knew he was trying to be more than 'friends'.
But I really like the fact that she can read minds. IT is filtering out alot of nonsense for her.
Reviewer: Trillion (Signed) · Date: May 05, 2013 04:48 AM · On: 1: Gifted
Bella the mindreader...hmmm I think Im going to enjoy this.
But I read the comments for the others in your saga. And I dont get it. You change the facts to make bella a mindread, but you keep all the other remedial decisions that SM made, WHY?. She knows now...she has a better reasoning behind things, so why are you making the characters make the same dumb mistakes?. I don't get it. You are in AU, why are you still trying to stay canon, when you can be so much more?.
What is it...Lack of imagination?. She doesn't have to follow the path that she did in the books, bella won't be guilt tripped by jacob into a false relationship or giving up renesmee to imprinting and so on. And edward shouldn't leave her for any reason, that I could see making any kind of sense.
Reviewer: Mercedes (Signed) · Date: April 18, 2013 11:05 AM · On: 15: Interruptions
I am loving the story. Bella seems a lot more confident; she's found her strength. The only problem, I fell, is that she "nitpicks" certain things.
Reviewer: SCWillson (Signed) · Date: December 26, 2012 04:47 PM · On: Epilogue: Destiny
An entertaining twist on the Twilight story. The hunt finishing in Cancun was clever. I liked Bella being able to read minds and how it sped up her relationships with both Edward and the rest of the Cullens.
And I never did like Mike Newton either. :)
Reviewer: djwolf55 (Signed) · Date: May 15, 2012 12:08 PM · On: Epilogue: Destiny
Great story - on to book 2!
Reviewer: melanieds (Signed) · Date: May 03, 2012 12:04 PM · On: Epilogue: Destiny
Review for the story:
I really liked that Bella could read minds. It made her a stronger character. Thanks for the pictures. It really brings the clothes to life.
Reviewer: bellas_alias (Signed) · Date: August 22, 2011 05:28 PM · On: 13: Reality
HOT! very HOT!
Author's Response: LOL, thank you.
Reviewer: -Little-Melody- (Signed) · Date: August 07, 2011 05:25 AM · On: 3: White
This Story is Absolutely FANTASTIC!
Really cool!
A round of applause for the writer! :D
Author's Response: Thank you, ^_^
Reviewer: -Little-Melody- (Signed) · Date: August 07, 2011 05:04 AM · On: 3: White
This Story is Absolutely FANTASTIC!
Really cool!
A round of applause for the writer! :D
Reviewer: TheColdDamsel (Signed) · Date: July 02, 2011 05:09 PM · On: 3: White
LOVE THE LONG CHAPTERS! :D
Author's Response: Thank you. ^_^
Reviewer: Bitemeverywhere (Signed) · Date: May 12, 2011 10:38 AM · On: Epilogue: Destiny
I honestly fell in love with this story the second I found it.
I had been looking for something exactly like this for a while.
And It was a well written. [ Amazingly written really. ]
It's just perfect.
I was elated when I saw that there was a sequel.
Then i saw that you're doing all the books.
I am so happy. [ This story is truly amazing ]
You're a amazing writer.
Rating?
A million out of ten.
Author's Response: *^_^* I'm blushing, thank you for the compliments. I'm so happy to hear you love this. I feel 'love' is probably an understatement huh.
Reviewer: shadowbride (Signed) · Date: May 04, 2011 01:29 PM · On: 1: Gifted
cool. just found your takes on the Twilight saga; have been looking for some finished stories to read. so im looking forward to reading more :)
Author's Response: Thank you for looking and reviewing. This is only book 1. Book 2 - Full Moon is also done and just released chapter 7 of book 3 - Dark Sun. And yes, there will be a book 4. ^_^
Reviewer: NewDAWN (Signed) · Date: March 24, 2011 09:33 PM · On: 1: Gifted
Great first chapter! :D
I love that Rosalie is kind in this one.
Author's Response: Thanks, it gets fun too.
Reviewer: partygirl209 (Signed) · Date: February 24, 2011 02:58 PM · On: Epilogue: Destiny
very sweet story!!
Author's Response: Thank you.
Reviewer: k1942 (Signed) · Date: February 14, 2011 07:36 PM · On: Epilogue: Destiny
The prom dresses are lovely and so appropriate to each girl's personality. No doubt about it, you did a great job on this, you'd never know this was your first fan fic. So, on to the next one. I'm intrigued by you saying no birthday party and have to ask, what causes Edward to run off and leave Bella to her own devices? On to find out in the next story.
Author's Response: Actually, this is my first Twilight fic. I have several anime fic completed on my ffnet page. I'm glad you liked it so much. Like New Moon, you'll see what happens to Edward/Bella in chapter 3. ^_-
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