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Reviewer: baby_pau (Signed) · Date: May 18, 2010 10:08 AM · On: Unbound
I love it!!! thanks for the update!!!
Author's Response: Thank you!!
Reviewer: missyninz (Signed) · Date: May 18, 2010 09:18 AM · On: Unbound
Nice...though I couldn't be more pissed with the ending--it's not bad, but I want more. Haha..
I like it this version of Edward--it's the closest thing to SM's Edward..and it's nice to be true to the source of inspiration. I've read other fanfiction featuring Edward as a rash, needy, pot-mouthed sex addict..and yes, some of them ARE entertaining, but what I love about your writing is that you represent the fictional Edward Cullen we know & love. Sure, lemons are great, but one could always appreciate a clean, solid && fiercely true(to the books) fanfiction piece.
And yes, I think you should add more chapters. Maybe up until the time Edward && Bella argue over her decision to go to Volterra alone.. A chapter or two about the heated argument and a good resolution would be interesting.
Extented epilogue for final confrontation for Volturi would be great too..
Good luck!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review!! Like you, I read a lot of very different Edward's from this one!! But I have really worked so hard to keep this Edward true to the one we all originally (and still do) love :)
Reviewer: RedSummer (Signed) · Date: May 18, 2010 06:08 AM · On: Motherhood
A very touching moment between Mother and son - you captured Esme's feelings very well here it was quite an emotional piece. x
Reviewer: RedSummer (Signed) · Date: May 18, 2010 05:31 AM · On: Love
I wonder if Edward had said that he didn't want the baby at all when Bella asked what her reaction would have been? I'm really enjoying this x
Reviewer: RedSummer (Signed) · Date: May 18, 2010 05:17 AM · On: Resolve
Very interesting start - I'm intrigued to see where this goes x
Reviewer: LJ Summers (Signed) · Date: May 18, 2010 04:01 AM · On: Unbound
I so appreciate how you meld your narrative to fit the canon story! It's HARD WORK and you do it splendidly.
The mental play during the gift-giving was GREAT. Way cool of Emmett not to vocalize his thoughts in the interests of keeping the secret.
I love your presentation of Edward's quandary of how to read Bella, now? I read a fic somewhere where Edward had to learn Bella's body cues since he didn't have her mind to go by, and that was what he relied upon when he made love to her. That would be SO different, as you've expressed here, without all those visual and audio clues to go by in her new and improved body.
GREAT fade to black. Beautifully, sensually done. Brava!
Author's Response: Thanks so, so much!! These chapters, which follow straight from SM's chapters, are often harder to write than the one's I create fully myself - I find myself agonizing over each line.
I'm so glad you liked the chapter!
Reviewer: Rimlis (Signed) · Date: May 18, 2010 02:56 AM · On: Unbound
Wonderful, wonderful, wonderful, you write so beautifully. Please keep writing for as long as you want to. We, your enthralled readers, want you to keep writing so much. Please, please remember to include many more of your tasteful tender moments of Edward and Bella such as at the beginning of this chapter (gorgeous, just enough to tease and satisfy) and at the end (at last) as we have been waiting for so long for Edward to have his immortal Bella and experience the joy, happiness, pleasure, release and satisfaction of loving her in his own way. We don't need all the technical details, (you can write quite beautifully), just the comfort and release of Edward's tenderness and love after the heartache and stress of the pregnancy and the transformation. Please, it will be a balm to our own tortured souls, if you let us read of his desire and love for Bella. Thank you again for your beautiful writing.
Author's Response: Thank you so much!! I am definitely planning some more private moments for Bella and Edward (even though we faded to black, the first night in the cottage isn't over yet :) ).
Reviewer: fangrl (Signed) · Date: May 18, 2010 02:49 AM · On: Unbound
Yes, the slow burn fits with original work. Great job.
Author's Response: Thanks!
Reviewer: Tinuviel (Signed) · Date: May 18, 2010 12:18 AM · On: Unbound
This was just pergfect, as always!! I loved the cottage scenes and I really didn't mind your fade to black at the end, because it just feels right that way... I couldn't imagine a lemon in your sweet and soulfull story... it just wouldn't fit.
Thank you for sharing your story,
Sarah!!
Author's Response: Oh.."soulful" - I love that description for the story. Thank you!!!
Reviewer: Rimlis (Signed) · Date: May 17, 2010 10:13 PM · On: Angel
Dear NicoleLight, thank you for such a wonderful story so far, I have so loved your writing, the care you have taken with the story and the characters, the feeling of rightness in your words as you have taken these beloved characters and brought them further into the light for readers to enjoy. I just cannot express how you have touched my heart through your words. After reading this chapter and the beauty of your writing I have just had to stop to let you know this. I have cried and held my breath as Edward has struggled with his knowledge that he may lose Bella. I caught my breath again as he first held Renesmee. Your talent is amazing. Never have I read or did I ever expect to read such an intelligent, thoughtful expression of this loved story from Edward's pov. You have made us love Edward and Bella even more. thank you
Reviewer: janna479 (Signed) · Date: May 17, 2010 09:53 PM · On: Unbound
perfect, loved it, great chapter.
Author's Response: Thank you!!
Reviewer: TwilightStorm (Signed) · Date: May 17, 2010 07:15 PM · On: Unbound
I wish you would do the rest of "Breaking Dawn" and go back and do the first part of "Breaking Dawn," too. Please!!
Author's Response: I have definitely considered going back to do the beginning of Breaking Dawn!!
Reviewer: TwilightStorm (Signed) · Date: May 17, 2010 07:11 PM · On: Unbound
I wish you would do the rest of "Breaking Dawn" and go back and do the first part of "Breaking Dawn," too. Please!!
Reviewer: missyninz (Signed) · Date: May 13, 2010 09:10 AM · On: Justified
next chapter,. can't wait!!!
Reviewer: Rimlis (Signed) · Date: May 13, 2010 03:32 AM · On: Justified
Dear Nicolelight, I don't know where to start. Words like awesome, wonderful, enchanting, delicious, exciting, beautiful, come to mind, but they are unable to express the right admiration....................your writing is excellent, your imagination prodigious. I have just read from chapter 1 in one long session and I cannot express just how enjoyable your writing has been. You have such a talent, the way you have found Edward and Bella's souls and explored them, humanised them, drawn them with a fine, fine pen until they live and breathe for us, your readers. You have filled this wonderful story with such detail, such love, until we are breathing with the characters, looking through their eyes. Such talent. Please, please keep writing. I, like you, discovered the Twilight world a little later and have completely fallen in love with it. You, Nicolelight, have a beautiful soul, otherwise you could not express with such clear perception, the emotions and feelings of the Twilight characters so compassionately, so succinctly, so clearly. I will wait impatiently for your next chapter. Please don't keep us waiting too long.....................lots of love from one of your many, many admirers.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review and all your kind words!! I'm so glad you are loving the story - next chapter is ready and should, hopefully, get up on Twilighted soon!!
Reviewer: nbell9238 (Signed) · Date: May 11, 2010 03:00 PM · On: Justified
You should complete Breaking Dawn. This was great!
Reviewer: nbell9238 (Signed) · Date: May 11, 2010 01:42 PM · On: Untruth
Great Chapter! I love it
Reviewer: izziey (Signed) · Date: April 27, 2010 04:34 PM · On: Justified
i loved seeing the full encounter between bella and jacob! poor seth. i wasn't sure how enlightening the chapters after bella's transformation would be since she was narrating it, but you added so much: all of the comments from the family and the pack, edward's view of reneesme's thoughts, bella's constant attempt to apologize. i think the most interesting was the bet. i always thought it was jasper and emmett - poor emmett, he actually bet against alice!
Reviewer: JRbtsn (Signed) · Date: April 25, 2010 03:55 PM · On: Justified
Love getting inside Edward's head and you do it so well! It's good to hear his version of what went on when Bella went for Jacob and seeing Bella with Nessie for the first time! It's all perfect! Thank you! *gushes*
Joan
Reviewer: kim1974a (Signed) · Date: April 25, 2010 09:51 AM · On: Justified
I'm sure I have said it in every review, but you are doing a great job staying in canon for all the characters.
Reviewer: Debbie1870 (Signed) · Date: April 24, 2010 05:59 PM · On: Justified
I for one would like to see you go through the entire book from Edward's point of view. You write wonderfully and it's compelling. I loved the chapter of Edward singing to Nessie.
Post soon.
Deb
Reviewer: smarie (Signed) · Date: April 24, 2010 08:57 AM · On: Permanent
I really enjoyed this chapter, especially Edward and Jacob's confrontation about Jacob's original desire to kill Renesmee. The family's reaction to the imprint was very well done. I hope we get to see Leah's reaction.
Reviewer: smarie (Signed) · Date: April 24, 2010 08:13 AM · On: Restoration
Amazing! Tender and sweet.
Reviewer: smarie (Signed) · Date: April 23, 2010 08:01 PM · On: Untruth
The confrontation between Leah and the Cullens was very well done,
Reviewer: smarie (Signed) · Date: April 23, 2010 07:17 PM · On: Consciousness
This was one of my favourite scenes in Breaking dawn and I really enjoyed it from Edward's point of view. I also liked the reconciliation(?) between Edward and Bella.
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