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Reviewer: sherylb (Signed) · Date: July 01, 2009 08:11 PM · On: Relenting

WOW. WELL, YEAH, PROBABLY MORE REALISTIC FIRST TIME SCENE. I'M HOPING YOU'LL HAVE BELLA CALL EDWARD ASAP SO HE DOESN'T FEEL HURT OR REJECTED-REALLY, NEITHER OF THEM NEED THAT! ALSO PLEASE GIVE THEM A MUCH BETTER FOLLOW UP SEX SESSION. I'M WONDERING IF EDWARD MIGHT BE A BIT MORE SYMPATHETIC TO ALICE AND JASPER, SINCE IT WAS BELLA WHO HAD TO REMIND HIM TO USE A CONDOM! I'D LIKE TO SEE THEM BE REALLY LOVING AND SUPPORTIVE OF ONE ANOTHER AND BE A REAL COUPLE!



Author's Response:

I'm glad you found it realistic, thats what I was going for :)

Don't worry, it all gets figured out in the next chapter which is all EPOV btw!

Thank you for another awesome review sugar, I heart you hardcore!

xx

Hal

Reviewer: icrodriguez (Signed) · Date: July 01, 2009 08:09 PM · On: Relenting

Oh how I cried for our beloved Edward. His pleas with Bella were so heart breaking that I definitely could never fault her for surrendering herself to him. Who wouldn't? 

I thought this chapter was beautiful.....up until the part where Bella walked out. Didn't she just tell Edward that she wouldn't leave him? Yes, he fell asleep. BAD THING TO DO. But the man was emotionally destroyed and had been drinking heavily. He practically begged her to want him and not leave him. So our Bella loses her virginity to Edward (all be it quite painfully...very realistic by the way), and then ups and leaves him like a one night stand? This is just something a guy would do. 

I truly hope that when Edward wakes he doesn't demand to know why she left him when she said she wouldn't. Please, can we just skip that? I'm already cringing. I can't wait to see just how much he remembers, if at all? Will he regret taking Bella's virginity, or will he seek her out to make her his for good? 

Please oh please post more asap. This story is exceptionally powerful and addictive. Bravo to you!



Author's Response:

Eep, funny thing here... I got your first review and then poof it was gone. And now its back... and its more detailed and it makes me super happy :)

So yes, Bella leaving was total bullshit on her part, but she's also a flighty person... kinda takes after her mom. When things get to overwhelming she freaks and her first reaction is to run. Shame on her. I'm so glad you thought it was realistic, that was the part that worried me the most.

And don't worry, there is no freak out part from Edward to Bella, at least not a bad one. The next chapter is funky cause... massive ammounts of alcohol+ morning after= very confused Edward! Don't worry, it all gets explained in the next chapter which should be up shortly.

I am so glad you are enjoying the story and it means a lot to me that you reviewed :)

xx

Hal

Reviewer: kvgamble (Signed) · Date: July 01, 2009 08:02 PM · On: Relenting

i really like this story, we all know that edward is going to think she does not want him. But I really hope that he goes to her when he realizes she is still not at his house. They need eachother to heal from their loses. Please update soon.



Author's Response:

I'm so glad that you are enjoying it! Edward goes through a lot in this story, but... his reaction is not what people think it will be. And don't worry... little secret... he goes to her :)

They need each other, but they don't seem to realize how much. Right now, they are spiraling... badly.

I plan on updating very soon! Thank you so much for your review!

xxx

Hal

Reviewer: Ammage (Signed) · Date: June 25, 2009 03:29 PM · On: Coming undone

Gah! I think I fell in love with Edward a little bit more in this chapter.

Amazing add, I was honestly having to hold back my own tears when Edward broke down...

Can't wait for the next chapter x



Author's Response:

I fell in love with Edward in this chapter too, and in the next one and the one after that lol. Aw hell, I've been in love with him all along, he owns me.

I likes to make my readers weepy, it's nice to know that I can pull out emotions

And as always, thanks for the review :)

xx

Hal

Reviewer: JazzHands (Signed) · Date: June 25, 2009 01:59 PM · On: Coming undone

That is so evil!! I wasnt even paying attention to how many chapters I had left or how close I was to the end of this one and it totally caught me off guard. I really like the story so far but it gets me a bit weepy to read, because I recently lost my friend and grandad 2 days apart. I think you said you had also lost someone and I hope writing this is helping you thru it. Lots of lofe for you and this story, cant wait for more-

J



Author's Response:

I don't mean to make you weepy :( Sorry to catch you off guard as well.

I did lose someone about four months ago, one of my very best friends. Writing this has helped me a lot and while I see a little of myself in Bella, I see more of me in Edward and the way he's lashing out. That's why his side goes better for me.

I'm glad you are enjoying it though and I appreciate the review :)

xx

 

Reviewer: readergoof (Signed) · Date: June 25, 2009 01:54 PM · On: Coming undone

Oh you live under a veil of vile evil Hal. No wonder you were pushing me to read this chapter. *Humph*

I really let loose on the thread so others can share. "Woman you'll be the death of me!"



Author's Response:

I know, I am evil :) I was pushing, just so you could get to the end and go WTF heather... what is wrong with you... lol

I noticed you let loose on thread, I saw that, it was insane.

I still love you

xx

Reviewer: AndraLee (Signed) · Date: June 24, 2009 05:22 PM · On: Coming undone

Coming Undone... that's exactly what is happening to your poor all-teased-up readers, like moi  :P



Author's Response:

Aww poor bb, I's sorry :(

I make it up to you with next chapter yes?

I heart you!

xx

Reviewer: Swangirl666 (Signed) · Date: June 24, 2009 12:36 PM · On: Coming undone

I love this story. It's really well written.

Please update soon! I know if I was going to Edward's room I would be doing....well lets just say lots of very naughty things hehe.

xxx



Author's Response:

Thank you for the kinds words :)

I know what I'd be doing in Edwards room as well *wink wink*

Thank you for the review

xx

Hal

Reviewer: Snakehips (Signed) · Date: June 24, 2009 11:36 AM · On: Coming undone

still a great story!  Poor Edward seems so damaged.  can he ever be fixed?  looking forward to more...



Author's Response:

I will be giving you more soon :) Edward is really damanged in this, he's probably the most broken character. But if you look at it, he lost both of his moms, his whole family is getting through life with the new things that are happening to them and he just feels like he has nothing. Bella always makes it better :)

I look forward to having you read more, thanks for the review!

Reviewer: steph86red (Signed) · Date: June 24, 2009 11:10 AM · On: Coming undone

I listened to the song while reading and it made the words really powerful. I love this story, and my heart really broke during this chapter for Edward. Hopefully Bella can give him the peace he needs. You are a great writer, and I hope you update soon!!



Author's Response:

I thought the words to that song tied in perfectly to Edwards pov, and I always cry for Edward :( He's so broken and sad and Bella is going to fix him, I promise. They are going to fix each other.

I appreciate the great writer comment, its so nice to hear something like that, and trust me, I do plan on updating soon :)

Reviewer: graceisgone (Signed) · Date: June 24, 2009 11:05 AM · On: Coming undone

i can't believe you left it like that. update! :)



Author's Response:

I'm sorry :( The chapter was really really long though and honestly it would have come out to like thirty five/ forty pages and I doubted anyone would want to read that much. Next chapter should be up tomorrow though :)

Thanks for reviewing, I appreciate it as always!

Reviewer: sherylb (Signed) · Date: June 24, 2009 09:50 AM · On: Coming undone

OMG!!!!YOU ARE SO EVIL!!!!!!!DAMN!!!!WHAT A CLIFFHANGER !!!!!!!!!!!PLEASE.....THESE TWO NEED SOME LOVING AND "SEXUAL HEALING"!!!!!!!!!

I WILL SAY, HOWEVER, THAT I LOVE THAT BELLA WAS THERE FOR EDWARD IN HIS EXTREME PAIN AND LONELINESS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!



Author's Response:

Haha, your review made me giggle... really really hard lol. Sexual healing... yeah cause that does the trick lol :)

I'm glad that enjoyed the chapter and I can't wait to see your thoughts on the next chapter which should be up by tomorrow. Thanks as always shery, you rock mah socks off!

Reviewer: YourNameHere (Signed) · Date: June 24, 2009 09:23 AM · On: Sitting with my dead

I find it really hard to get into stories, usually. ESPECIALLY E&B ones, I'm not going to lie, I am usually here for the RP ones. This is, hands down, on of my favorites, because unlike 99% of others, it's not all pent up sexual frustration. There's real conflict going on with both of them, and it's not JUST about sex...though, it's nice ;-) Kudos, kudos, kudos!



Author's Response:

It means so much to hear you say that, I'm always nervous that people think there has to be smut in a story or they wont like it... and while this story does have sexual points, they are done in real form between two really messed up people who don't know how to be right unless they are with each other.

I'm glad that you are enjoying this story though, and it's so nice to hear that its someones favorite, you have NO idea lol.

Thanks again, it's greatly appreciated :)

Reviewer: elemirehum (Signed) · Date: June 24, 2009 03:38 AM · On: Crash and Burn

i still cant help but love edward, he is so messed up bt he is so alone, and im so glad that bella told jasper how edward must be feeling! nd it annoys me that bella just pushed edward away when she was changing his life, even thought i understand why she did, i jst wished she haddnt coz it was like 5 steps bac when there had only been 2 steps forward, does that make sense??

this chapter was hardwork to read, bt i am so attached to this story, please update soon!! x



Author's Response:

Edward is my complicated character but Alice is my most detailed, she's got a lot of depth in this story. Bella is going through a lot of stuff on her own but at the same time she's kind of the glue thats bringing the Cullens back together little by little.

It's always nice to have a new reviewer, I hope you continue to enjoy the story. Thank you for reviewing it means a lot to me :)

Reviewer: readergoof (Signed) · Date: June 23, 2009 11:22 AM · On: Crash and Burn

H --

I like Bella got to draw out Carlisle from his shell and hopefully eventually he can turn into Dad again. Just wished Edward had come down smelling those cookies, *pout*

And does this mean Eddie has broken free of the handcuffs or did you just forget to redo then. Cuase I'll never forget your promise...just trying to decide what body part I want the bow on. *raises eyebrow with inward dirty thoughts*

Loves ya, --B



Author's Response:

He escaped when I wasn't paying attention... I think he's shlummin it with Bella right now :( I know where I'd tie the bow ;)

I really liked the Bella/ Carlisle interaction, I think it was so much easier to talk to her about things because she's not really a part of his family. He doesn't need to see the same pain as he would if he were talkin to his children about their loss. Bella seems to bring things out in all of them!

Thanks for your review my lovely... I love you too :)

Reviewer: Aggie (Signed) · Date: June 23, 2009 08:46 AM · On: Crash and Burn

Hal that was an incredible chapter... So let's see what did I love the most?  Bella as a pregnancy shield was outstanding, and classic that the trips.

Edward, God help his moody soul, I wanted to punch him when he snaps at Alice. I get why he was the way he was with Jazz. Jazz would have done the same if the roles were switched.

I hated to read the part where Edward is burning himself, I wanted to slap him. I was hoping Bella would find him and slap him for me.

LOVE!!! LOVE!!!! The Bella Jazz talk. She needed to hear what Jazz was telling her about Jake. She needed to have it said to her sober. She rags on Eddie and then defends him. Loved when Jazz calls her out...

"And how are you dealing?" He asked, popping another cracker in his mouth.

 My eyes felt like they were going to break out of their sockets. "What did you say?"

 He swallowed and swiped the hair out of his eyes. "I said, how are you dealing."

 I tried to take the edge out of my voice when I answered him, but it didn't work. "Dealing with... what?" I squeaked out, my heart started beating faster.

 "Your friend," Jasper replied.

Bella dealing ummm no not so much. She has not even started to grieve, and neither has Edward. Jazz is correct and wrong I think... I bet Edward will drag Bella down, but I hope they will together, as f-up as it  will be, they will help each other.

Cookie baking was genius! I cracked up when Carlisle found her and she burned her fingers. The meal and the cooking were so moving. I hope it brings Carlisle out of his funk so he can be there for his kids.

Who was "HIM" in Alice's note? Jazz or Carlisle? I am thinking Jazz, but I think Bella thinks it Carlisle?

Can't wait for the Birthday chapter...

 



Author's Response:

The birthday chapter doesn't really get too exciting, its more of just a passing day as Bella said. She doesn't want to celebrate it, we'll see what Edward does to change her mind about that :)

I always love your reviews, they are always so detailed and so thought out. I love that you tell me what parts you liked the best and all the other things in between. I am naming you and readergoof my review queens. I heart you guys so fucking hard!

Reviewer: sherylb (Signed) · Date: June 23, 2009 07:39 AM · On: Crash and Burn

I think it's awful that Edward choked Jasper, but I feel so bad for Edward--he is just like Bella said--he is so alone, and in so much pain. I'd like to see he and Bella sitting down and talking, just being there for each other, and then later, kissing.....



Author's Response:

The later stuff is the best part :) Kind of... I don't know, the next couple chapters aren't light in the least. I suppose we'll find more fluff later on in the story, but for the most part, it's a lot of angst in the beginning. I want to kiss Edward and make all his hurt go away too :)

Thanks for the review shery, they make me happy!

Reviewer: JLBMOctober (Signed) · Date: June 23, 2009 05:08 AM · On: Crash and Burn

Okay, we need to get Edward some help STAT. :(

The Carlisle-Bella bonding was just beautiful.  This poor family needs therapy. I will be more than happy to assist them...in exchange for a lil Carlisle, since the other Cullens are already taken. *wink* 



Author's Response:

I'll gladly give you Carlisle, just make sure you fix his boo boo's and send him back to his family all patched up :) This family needs a lot!

Thanks for your review Lolli, I heart you!

Reviewer: HisVolvo (Signed) · Date: June 23, 2009 04:01 AM · On: When it all falls down

Excellent work, This story really is a great look into depression and life.  Keep it up.  Looking for ward to more chapters. :)

Reviewer: zahir (Signed) · Date: June 23, 2009 03:46 AM · On: Crash and Burn

i really liked this chapter.

i feel so bad for Edwards but at the same time i feel terrible for Carlisle.

Nobody is helping him to go through his pain.

i cant wait for Bella to really try to talk to Edward and maybe between the both of them they can get through this.

great work



Author's Response:

You are new... :) I love new reviewers, they make my heart super happy! Normally Edward breaks my heart the most but I really sympathize with Carlisle because she was his wife ya know. Bella and Edward will work through this together :)

Thanks for the review, I really appreciate it!

Reviewer: YourNameHere (Signed) · Date: June 22, 2009 08:03 PM · On: Crash and Burn

I LOVED this....absolutely loved it. I adore the raw emotion that seems to pour out of you. CANNOT wait for more.



Author's Response:

Personal experience has a lot to do with it sadly, seeing that I lost one of my friends not that long ago, this story is pretty raw inside me. I'm glad you are enjoying it though, it means a lot that you've reviewed :)

Reviewer: SusanL (Signed) · Date: June 22, 2009 07:32 PM · On: Crash and Burn

You made me cry, too.

Will these people ever heal?  Everyone is so damaged.  I can't wait to see how you have this plotted out.



Author's Response:

Sorry I made you cry :( I'm trying to stick with the reality of how death in a family that was once close, can tear everyone apart. I'm hoping I capture it in truth, because I know death can really screw people up.

I hope you continue with the story, it means a lot to me that you reviewed :)

Reviewer: graceisgone (Signed) · Date: June 22, 2009 07:24 PM · On: Crash and Burn

i loved the carlisle and bella talk!



Author's Response:

I think the story needed a little bit of fluff in it, especially with the way the next couple chapters are going to go!

Thanks for the review :)

Reviewer: PLV (Signed) · Date: June 22, 2009 07:14 PM · On: Crash and Burn

Yes I wanted to smack Edward as well. i like the talk Bella had with Carlisle. I think he needs to have contact with someone to. Even if it is just to tal kabout the past. Please update soon. I think Edward needs some intervention before he does something stupid. =-D



Author's Response:

Oh Edward is on a very downward spiral, but it gets worked out, I promise :) Bella is kind of his savior through all of this, she helps him heal. I'm glad you enjoyed the talk between B/C, this story needed a little bit of calm before the storm.

Thanks for the review, it means a lot to me :)

Reviewer: sg360girl (Signed) · Date: June 22, 2009 06:54 PM · On: Jack and Jinx

TOTALLY dont hate him... POOR Edward.



Author's Response:

I know :( I want to cuddle him and make all his heart hurt go away...

Thank you so much for the review :)

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