Still great. However, I could have done without the Tanya slut. XD I must say, that is out of character for Edward in my opinion. Edward equates love with lust, so I got the sense that he would feel no desire for anyone unless he loved them. Actually, if I remember correctly, he all but said that when he had the virgin discussion with Bella.

Other than that part, I really liked this chapter. John was funny. Poor Edward, with his sensitive nose and the farts.

Still brilliant! I am even surprising myself by liking the flashbacks!

I was so thinking that the sun was going to prevent Edward from getting to Dorothy on time.  I love how he emerged from the water in order to talk to her to make sure she kept this scene on the DL.  Naming him... so cute.  I see what you mean when calling this chapter light-hearted, sorta.

Alice tried to warn him, "don't forget" about the glasses.  I don't really think he forgot, as just like he says, he  likes the idea of her getting to know him... taking off his glasses was just a subconcious step to allowing that to happen.  (or so i think)

The suggestion that Bella left Renee before Renee had a chance to leave her is so heartbreaking.  Bella's fear of this really gives substance to so much of her personality and insecurities.

Again, loving the story.

This is an incredible theme. Gimme more PLEASE

Can't wait for the next chap! (:

Which version of the movie MP do you like best?  Rozema's or the BBC?  Just curious...and Coolest Banner EVER!  It's amazing!

First human, first patient, first Bella chat.  Nice.

I kinda love the way Edward left Carlisle.  He was so indifferent and yet accusatory and cocky.  It's so complex.  Also complex - John the angry, fat, gay man. 

Edward nodded. “I wanted to hear your thoughts.” - excellent double meaning.

That Tanya vid reminded me so much of that skanky vamp in Hope Home.  Ew.

I really, really loved Ch 2.  I'm so enjoying the split chapters of past events tying into current events.

Really like it!

I love how detailed you are, and really appreciate the notes at the end of the chapters.  Thank you so much for the update!

Another excellent chapter...so much to get into.

I'm so glad he saved the little one...

So, did she expand her story...and it became a bestseller when she grew up? ;)

Lovely, sad, funny...your story has it all...

Thanks for sharing...

Kathie

Michellephants has been on my ass for a couple weeks to come and read.  I like Twi better - so I wanted to wait for it to get a bit further along, but she assured me that the chapters are so long, that reading 1 is like reading 4.  She's wasn't kidding.  :-)

Edward searching for his next victim was incredibly well done.  I don't tend to reada lot of Edward's rebellious years fic, but when I have - the vernacular is missing and there doesn't seem to be a true "hunt" involved, he just stumbles upon a rapist.  But finding this guy and his empty confessions was poetic.  Especially when Edward returns to the church to light a candle - but for the bum.

I really like how he's making an effort to do something with his life for redemptive purposes, rather than just do the high school/college thing for decades.  Although, I suppose that he has been doing that... will we see more between 30s and present day? 

Jasperspeak cracks me up.

Edward taking the same care with researching his patients as he did in for his prey in the 20s is excellent.  I loved the way Emmett and Jasper give him a hard time over more-than-bloodlust for Bella.   Oh, and the impact of the bloodlust was very cool - requiring the guys to keep a grip on him. 

I look forward to reading more:-)

 

 

So good!  I like the flashback to give us insight on Edward.

 

I like the story except for the Tanya parts and some Jasper ones. Keep up the awesome work.