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Reviewer: adirondackmommi (Signed) · Date: April 10, 2015 08:54 PM · On: Chapter 25

Loved the story, guess you changed your mind on the Epilogue.  Thanks for all the work you obviously put into this, it was a good read.

Reviewer: adirondackmommi (Signed) · Date: April 10, 2015 02:27 AM · On: Chapter 13

Awww. Clearly he is meant to turn her, duhh Edward.

Reviewer: adirondackmommi (Signed) · Date: April 08, 2015 11:57 PM · On: Chapter 8

Oh HELL NO ! He better put that back in his pants...... or take matters into his own hands. But please, not Tanya. Ughhhh

Reviewer: RavenFlyer (Signed) · Date: March 29, 2015 06:44 PM · On: Chapter 25

where's the epilogue?

Reviewer: willowguess (Signed) · Date: April 25, 2013 06:26 PM · On: Chapter 24

finally!

Reviewer: JD Thorn (Signed) · Date: August 13, 2012 06:46 PM · On: Chapter 25

I don't know why you were worried about writing Lemons, You do them rather well.
Your A/N said Epilogue to follow, but this story is marked as complete. Is There an Epi? Loved this story very much.

Reviewer: shanno716 (Signed) · Date: April 16, 2012 06:29 AM · On: Chapter 25

enjoyed the story

Reviewer: Tabitha Finch (Signed) · Date: March 26, 2011 07:45 AM · On: Chapter 3

So, is Edward picking up a bit of clairvoyance, since he anticipated "something" coming soon?  And why would he call Bella "this strange girl" before he even met her?

I'm hooked.  Thanks for writing!

Reviewer: Tabitha Finch (Signed) · Date: March 26, 2011 07:35 AM · On: Chapter 1

Oooh, this Edward!  I want to say, "Pot, meet Kettle."  He complains about humans not recognizing and being grateful for what they have.  Well, use that vampiric vision to check out yourself in that mirror, buddy!

He really is so seventeen, isn't he?

I'm already intrigued by your story.  Thank you for writing!

 

Reviewer: partygirl209 (Signed) · Date: February 27, 2011 11:40 AM · On: Chapter 25

i loved this story!!

it's so sweet!! and the confessing of love was so romantic!!

Reviewer: sam604 (Signed) · Date: February 03, 2011 07:14 PM · On: Chapter 25

what a great story, loved it.

Reviewer: sain84 (Signed) · Date: January 28, 2011 07:20 PM · On: Chapter 2

Interesting comment on the girl's scent. I would imagine that having cancer that resides in the blood would cause her smell to change. 

Reviewer: sain84 (Signed) · Date: January 28, 2011 06:54 PM · On: Chapter 1

Great start. Thanks for writing. 

Reviewer: Gods_Littlest_Angel (Signed) · Date: January 12, 2011 06:12 AM · On: Chapter 1

It's not a problem. I wasn't sure if you knew or not so I tried to be helpful. Sorry if it didn't turn out that way.

Author's Response:

Oh no worries. I just remember them being like 30 minutes. idk. it's been awhile. sorry you have to have full body scans. that's not fun, I imagine. 

Reviewer: Gods_Littlest_Angel (Signed) · Date: January 03, 2011 04:32 PM · On: Chapter 3

In this chapter you said that a MRI lasts around 40 mins. And though you didn't say weather it's a full body scan or not normal MRI's anywhere from an hour to an hour and a half. I know this because I have had to have MRI's done all throughout my life so far

Author's Response:

Um, sorry? It's been awhile since I've had an MRI, like not since 2003 while, and I didn't research to get super specific. I tried to be vague with most medical stuff so not to look like a dumbass. 

I just remember MRI's suck. especially as an 8 year old. So sorry you have to have them too. 

Thanks for reading. 

Reviewer: andersse (Signed) · Date: January 03, 2011 04:26 AM · On: Chapter 2

I love this sentence: "Annoyance, it seems, is a strong foundation for a friendship, as long as it is not directed at each other."

Reviewer: andersse (Signed) · Date: January 03, 2011 04:17 AM · On: Chapter 1

Wow - just started reading this and I'm very impressed!  I love how you really explore Edward's feelings. You've got a different take on this that I haven't seen in any other fic yet. And it's beautifully written -- no sentences ending with prepositions, no apostrophe abuse, no random quotation marks that don't belong in the sentence!  This is very refreshing!

Reviewer: sstair (Signed) · Date: November 19, 2010 11:47 AM · On: Chapter 1

I am loving it so far!!!

Reviewer: aechorp (Signed) · Date: October 25, 2010 01:32 PM · On: Chapter 25

I love this story. I think it is the 2nd time i have read it;) You are so good with the funny stuff and I was crying at the furneal(sp). I'm going to check out your other stories.

Reviewer: amyat (Signed) · Date: October 22, 2010 06:42 AM · On: Chapter 2

It might be the mood that I'm in right now, or the fact that I'm battling cancer myself, but I find this story very intriguing and Edward's mood quite understandable, and oddly comforting.

 

Excellent beginning, and I am quite intrigued at what is to come.

 

A

Reviewer: modern_audrey (Signed) · Date: October 17, 2010 09:20 PM · On: Chapter 12

I am still reading, but I have to say that whole interlude with Tanya really took away from the story for me.  It made Edward seem immature and callous, and completely unconcerned with the feelings of a very old friend.  Frankly, it was out of character behavior.  I don't buy the excuse of his emotions being confused by Bella.  If it were another guy, perhaps, but Edward's character has been well established.  He would never react to the temptation of Bella by throwing out morals that have been 100 years in the making, much less with a woman he has been friends with (and rejected) for years.  His reaction would be much more in line had he simply acted rudely and resented any type of intrusion on his solitude.  But even more glaringly, Edward's extra-sensory perception would never allow for that type of substitution with a woman.  As a vampire, his senses rule him.  Scent and body temperature as well his inability to shut off his mind reading, would never allow him to get caught up in a fantasy of a human while with a vampire.  It just wouldn't happen.

I'm sorry, and this isn't a negative review--it's just my opinion.  I continued reading for several chapters, trying to hold my tongue so to speak, but it is still really keeping me from enjoying the fic.  Frankly, I found the whole thing to be in bad taste and a really awful sideline to an otherwise enjoyable story.



Author's Response:

Listen, he's a stand up dude, no doubt, but he's still a guy. He's trying to convince himself that this strange dying girl doesn't mean anything to him. He's trying to delude himself into believing it. All in all, it was just a kiss. Sure, there was nakedness, but it was just a kiss. 

Anywho, it's just fanfiction. 

Thanks for reading.

Reviewer: VampireinBetsey (Signed) · Date: August 27, 2010 09:51 PM · On: Chapter 24

Finally! I'm so glad Edward told her about the hospital. I believe in the future Bella will ask more questions about those first days they got to know eachother haha. So sad the story is ending. You did a great job!

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Reviewer: VampireinBetsey (Signed) · Date: August 26, 2010 11:13 PM · On: Chapter 23

wasn't expecting that at all! I want to know more about Bella's power. she better stay!!!

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Reviewer: VampireinBetsey (Signed) · Date: August 26, 2010 10:50 PM · On: Chapter 22

For some reason im thinking something will go wrong at baseball. will james be there? claim his interest in bella before edward can? I hope not! just guessing

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Reviewer: VampireinBetsey (Signed) · Date: August 26, 2010 05:04 PM · On: Chapter 19

he better tell the truth next chapter! I wish she would remember their relationship better. why doesnt she remember having feelings for him?

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