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Reviewer: maryalicebrandon13 (Signed) · Date: March 03, 2010 03:51 AM · On: Anna has sealed her fate
Can't remember where I last left off so sorry if this is a duplicate. I love your writing.
Author's Response: Thank you!
Reviewer: ermireallydontcare (Signed) · Date: February 20, 2010 06:13 AM · On: The Journey Begins
Personally I think you should skip ahead to WWII.
You can always do that and have North Africa, Europe and seeing Catty again as flashbacks.
And we'd get to see the family :)
Reviewer: angel_gidget (Signed) · Date: February 19, 2010 04:35 AM · On: The Journey Begins
I suppose you can take a lurker's vote for what it's worth, but... when he sees her again? I suppose I am making the assumption that would entail a jump to the present after he has all this family together and Bella in the mix, but I'm really curious about his families' reactions to Caterina, or even the memory of her. Unless, of course, something really relevant to this story happens during WWII or the North Africa/Europe trip.
I kind of picture Cariisle falling under Marguerite's influence more subtly, slowly over the course of several years... so that by the time Edward's around to read his mind, there's nothing there about Catty to read. Hence, the surprise when she shows up. But I'm still curious to see if I'm right or entirely wrong, so that's definitely the part I would want to see.
I really liked this chapter's imagery of Carlisle wearing black, and how it makes people react to him differently. I guess I didn't think too much about the fact that he tends to wear lighter colors and that there's a double reason for that. Also, the goodbyes were sweet. Even from Aro, which is both creepy AND sweet. ^_^
Author's Response: Actaully, that's what I was thinking of writing next about - Catty's return. It would be before Carlisle starts his own coven though and it would also have a couple of pivitol moments in Carlisle's life. WWII is really just fun as is the North Africa/Europe exploration.
Carlisle won't forget; Marguerite purposefully didn't target Carlisle or Caterina's brain. There are a couple of what seemed minor points in the story that will become major later on. When Carlisle thinks back on his early days in Volterra, he'll realized exactly how much he missed!
Pale skin, light blond hair, and black clothing today would instantly label someone as "Goth". So a real vampire dressing "Goth"? He'd look beautiful but terrifying at the same time!
Reviewer: ermireallydontcare (Signed) · Date: February 02, 2010 01:05 AM · On: Traitor
Really enjoying this story so far - this chapter was so sad though.
Intrigued to see where this goes next
:)
Reviewer: venus308 (Signed) · Date: January 25, 2010 12:04 PM · On: Traitor
Wow! A mystery here! Why did Catty want to leave and have Carlisle leave as well? Whats up?
Reviewer: Netemedtotrolde (Signed) · Date: January 24, 2010 02:54 PM · On: Traitor
Ohhh, you have me on pins and needles about "Catty" now. What more does she have up her sleeve? I can't wait to hear more. This is also a great seque to Carlisle leaving for the New World.
Great chapter and god writing as usual.
Author's Response: Caterina has a lot more up her sleeve, unfortunately for Carlisle. She will reappear in his life many times....
Reviewer: venus308 (Signed) · Date: January 19, 2010 02:59 PM · On: Dark Gray
Hmmm is the grey wolf Catty's husband???!
Author's Response: Ah, you are assuming that Catty's husband is still alive and she hasn't gone completely and totally insane. :-) we'll see more of the werewolves later on as will Carlisle through the years...
Reviewer: Disneyvampire (Signed) · Date: January 18, 2010 07:55 PM · On: Dark Gray
I am so glad to see another chapter today. I love this story and cannot get enough! I am happy now. Now I have to wait for the next chapter...;)
Keep those chapters coming...I LOVE the way this story is written. It is so unique, original and well written. I can just "see" what you write about, which, is not always the best thing when those gory scenes come up, but they are necessary to the story. Oh boy! :O Anna is a real piece of work. I hope they get her someday! Great villian!
Excellent chapter as always!
Disney Vampire
Author's Response: :-) I always feel like warning people with "I watch Quentin Tarantino films!" before they read but I doubt that would even help sometimes. Maybe if I warn with "If Quentin Tarantino and William Shakespeare wrote a script about vampires, I think it would be something like this"?
I'll place the next chapter in the queue some time in the next couple of days. It's going to be far more distressing that this chapter was....
Reviewer: Netemedtotrolde (Signed) · Date: January 16, 2010 01:27 PM · On: Inside Out
You are doing a superb job of telling Carlisle's early story. I can't wait to hear more - ugly or fluffy.
Author's Response: Thanks! The next couple of chapters won't be fluffy.
Reviewer: venus308 (Signed) · Date: January 14, 2010 02:06 PM · On: Inside Out
I'm curious as to how Catty knows these things? and what one is not harmed by fire? Great chapter!
Author's Response: Catty's older than Carlisle. It will be a while before we get into her history. Think of her as sort of like Jasper -she's seen the worst of the worst and is sort of happy to be in some sort of civilized company.
Reviewer: venus308 (Signed) · Date: January 10, 2010 02:08 PM · On: The Ball
Fun chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks!
Reviewer: Disneyvampire (Signed) · Date: January 09, 2010 01:21 PM · On: The Ball
This is still one of my Top 5 favorite stories. I may not review often, but I AM reading the story religiously and enjoying it thoroughly. This is the single most original story here on Twilighted. The voice is authentic and makes the story more real in the parlance of the day. I love how the language you use to tell the story, becomes a real part of the story itself. It is as if we have stepped back a few centuies and are reading a tale written in that time and reading it in the language used by the populace then, while reading it by candlelight! :)
You have a real talent for this type of story and you are the best at it I have seen. I am reading with bated breath, because I am so interested in Carlisle's future. I want to see how he ends his stay in Europe and comes to the New World. I want to watch as he builds his family in the United States. It will be fascinating and very interesting to watch the language changes as he goes through the years, since the parlance will change through the years and countries as well. Dialects shift and the words and way he speaks will move with the times. Interesting anthropolgical view on the kchanging of language throughout time. You did not know you were writing a history and anthroploogy paper, did you? hehehe... :) I LOVE IT! You are amazing and this story too is amazing.
If you don't take him all the through in one story, you might want to do sequels to break up the time periods he is in. Might be a better way to move from one era to another. But I do SO want to see you write the whole story. I would like to see what he thinks and feels about creating a family of his own. I want to see how the story unwinds in Carlisle's thoughts and feelings all the way up to Bella and how he feels about all of the things that are happening to his family and Edward around the Vampire/Human relationship.
I have always thought that Carlisle had one the most interesting lives to write about, since he had seen so much in so many years as a vampire. His opinion and way of seeing things in a pragmatic way with his emotions carefully put aside until necessary make for a thrilling and interesting tale about the Twilight Universe, pre-Bella and hopefully (you will take us through the whole story) during Bella's time and maybe through to after Breaking Dawn and all in Carlisle's POV! What a great trip that would be! I hope you have energy and interest enough to take us through the different eras trhrough Carlisle's POV!
I am so excited about your story and apologize for not reviewing very often. I am, simply put, lazy. I was also gone for two weeks over the Christmas/New Year holidays (Disneyland is beautifiul at the holidays, we are going back soon. I am after all DISNEY Vampire!!!) and am catching up on all my fanfic stories now and just HAD to review yours because I have been so lax in doing so in so many chapters. You deserved a review for all your hard work writing this marvelous story and I want you to keep writing and writing this story!
Well, you know how I feel about your wonderful story and talented writing! I LOVE you! I love your story! I love that you can write a whole fanfic in the parlance of the time you write about. Not many can do that or would take the time and research necessary to do so. YOu are my fanfic hero! <3
Looking forward to so much more, so many more chapters or sequels to cover the whole Saga. I am not greedy, am I? ;) I just think you can do it better than anyone else! Absolutely 100%, yes, you can write it better than any other writer here with this story!
Disney Vampire
Author's Response: Awww, thanks. :-D And thank you so much for your very long review! It really makes me smile when I see that other people are enjoying my story. I am trying my hardest to keep it true to the time period. Considering I was both a history and an anthrology major uh...yeah. ::hangs head:: That might explain a few things, huh? ;-)
What the plan is, so far, is for the story to gloss over the trip to the New World. Carlisle will explain that he met a lot of other vampires in the old world and about his journey but, for the most part, the story won't pick up until about 100 years later. I'm going to do a few brief chapters of the 19th century and early 20th century until we get to World War II. By then, Carlisle has (most of) his family and is living rather comfortably in the mid-west. I can't say more now, only that there is still a bit to go in this story for a lot of things to make sense later on.
Although it's belated, Merry Christmas and Happy New Year!
Reviewer: maryalicebrandon13 (Signed) · Date: January 06, 2010 04:04 AM · On: Questions and Immortal Children
I dislike Lettice but think you wrote her well. This has a good old feel to it, much like I imagine Carlisle would be.
Author's Response: Thank you! Don't worry, Lettice doesn't continue through the story for long. There are far worse troubles on the horizon.
Reviewer: maryalicebrandon13 (Signed) · Date: January 06, 2010 04:02 AM · On: Sister?
The history details were nice, I like historical stories.
Reviewer: venus308 (Signed) · Date: January 01, 2010 12:17 AM · On: Vampires & Werewolves working together?
Good chapter!
Reviewer: maryalicebrandon13 (Signed) · Date: December 14, 2009 11:55 AM · On: Chapel
Good, I like this. My only suggestion would be to put the years in. Sometimes it's hard to tell when it's set when it jumps around.
Reviewer: venus308 (Signed) · Date: December 13, 2009 12:52 PM · On: Stregoni Benefici
Wow, she's a tricky bitch that Anna! Great chapter.
Reviewer: venus308 (Signed) · Date: December 10, 2009 09:25 PM · On: Coming or Going
Wow, alot of action here, I wouldn't worry too much about Caterina thou sounds like she can hold her own better than Carlisle even.
Reviewer: Disneyvampire (Signed) · Date: December 09, 2009 09:55 AM · On: Coming or Going
This story just keeps getting better and better and more mysterious. Anna is a shadow of a character, taking humans that Carlisle loves! That is horrible. And Catty, she is such a wonderful and beautiful character. I like her.
I admire you for sticking with the difficulty of writing in the voice of the time. That is so difficult to do and sustain and you are doing it most admirably.
That is what makes this story so good, the language of the times fits the times you are writing about and it makes it so much easier to "see" the action and characters. You are a great writer. I love this story and it is one of my Top 5 favorites because you do well with it.
Thanks for continuing to write it and I look forward to more chapters and the later years as Carlisle goes to the new world and becomes more "modernized".
It will be interesting read the chapters once he gets to America and when he changes Edward and Esme. The tone of the story will change, or you could it as a sequel. I would love to follow Carlisle all the way through to where Bella is introduced and even after, watching Edward and Bella through Carlisle's eyes. It would be cool to read the relationship from his point of view! I know you will do it great justice and write it well!
Disney Vampire
Author's Response: Anna does seem to know who to pick on, doesn't she? :-D
Thank you so much for reading it! One of the reasons I decided to write this story was to make something that truly was historically accurate (or as clsoe to it as possible). I hope that's being achieved.
Carlisle is so much fun to play with. He's so sweet but he is definitely not naive. I'm thinking of skipping around a bit once Carlisle leaves Volterra. I was considering doing a WWII sequel to all this (Carlise, Esme, Edward, Rosalie, and Emmett) that could be fun. I'm still not sure about that though...
Reviewer: earelen (Signed) · Date: December 01, 2009 06:06 AM · On: A Few Years Late
very interesting! i'll be looking forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response: I'm working on it now. :-)
Reviewer: fleur24 (Signed) · Date: November 30, 2009 09:07 AM · On: Sister?
That waS SO COOL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Reviewer: venus308 (Signed) · Date: November 26, 2009 06:17 PM · On: Forgive Me & Your Horse
OH my poor Carlisle! of all things he had to eat Catty's horse! LOL
Author's Response: When you live forever "never hear the end of it" takes on a whole new meaning. That, and vampires have perfect recall. It really makes those old family disputes really really amusing. Every time Catty and Carlisle will get into a fight, Catty will simply bring out the "why don't you eat my horse too!" Guilt trips. Gotta love 'em when you only have observe 'em.
Reviewer: venus308 (Signed) · Date: November 20, 2009 10:28 AM · On: Gypsies!
Great chapter! Will we find out who Caterina's husband is?
Author's Response: Not for a while yet. Assuming that Stefano just isn't in on the joke and trying to confuse dear Carlisle, of course. ;-)
Reviewer: mysticsavantpixie58 (Signed) · Date: November 19, 2009 09:06 PM · On: Gypsies!
i love the story. but just out of curiosity, what's the name of the girl on your banner? i have the name in my head somewhere, it's just i can't think of it at the moment. enlighten me?
Reviewer: Disneyvampire (Signed) · Date: November 19, 2009 06:22 PM · On: Gypsies!
This story just keeps getting better and better. I LOVE the writing and old style. I can just "see" what you are describing. I have always loved to read in the older languages and style of writing and it has always been more colorful and enjoyable for me. What a joy to read your story! :D
I like the track the story is taking and I like the character of Caterina very much. Carlisle is learning much from those at Volterra and his sister of the night. I can just picture him in the wig and hat and fancy duds. :D
Thanks for writing this and continuing to update regularly. I love it when I can follow a story on a regular basis and you are doing a fantastic job at keeping my attention. I ALWAYS look forward to new chapters of your story! It surely is one of the best here! I am looking forward to where we go with Carlisle.
Do you plan to continue his story when he leaves Volterra to come to the Americas and then later when he meets each member of his family and changes them? I do hope so, for I love the way you write and you can change it up as the centuries go by and keep him in the times. That would be fantastic if you could follow him through the years and follow the language changes and the changes in his life. If anyone can write it, you can. You have the talent and creativity to do so.
Bravo!
Disney Vampire
Author's Response: Thank you! Carlisle is learning a lot about the world he really exists in. Our poor favorite vampire doctor will make it out, eventually, but he'd got to go through a heck of a lot until he learns that Volterra just isn't for him.
The plan, for now, is to go from when he leaves Volterra to Post-Breaking Dawn. The story starts with Carlisle reminising over his time in Volterra while he's in his study in Forks. The timeline is basically right as BD ends, I'll start it back up again. It's not like there isn't always something happening in the quiet little town of Forks!
Although I'd like to go over everyone he ever met, it would take a very long time. He didn't head straight to the Americas. He did go through Egypt, then back up through Morraco to Spain, and then to England again only to quickly head to Ireland...meeting all sorts of his own kind along the way like Amun, Siobhan, ect. Even once he got to the Americas, Carlisle's curiosity got the best of him. Like Jacob said, his people already knew about the vampire leader before the treaty was made. Carlisle had been there before.
I'm re-writing the next chapter and hope to have it up by next week. Thank you again for your review!
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