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Reviewer: rogiari (Signed) · Date: July 04, 2009 01:58 AM · On: Pressure
Hi dear! Very interested with your story so far...only a niptick. Why didn't you end this chapter on a "Rob Cliffhanger"?;) I would have been a bit stronger, I guess.
Keep on the good work, I really like the language!
I go on to next chapters!!
Kisses
Roberta
Reviewer: readergoof (Signed) · Date: July 04, 2009 12:39 AM · On: Timberwolves At New Jersey
I really like it but wish it was updated more often
Author's Response: More is coming your way very soon!
Reviewer: tatie87 (Signed) · Date: July 03, 2009 09:02 PM · On: Timberwolves At New Jersey
I love that we're getting to see the famous Hardwicke home auditions; I can't wait to see Rob's. It was so cute to see Rob and Kristen interact over her fallen bagel into the pool. Michael W. totally bombed the audition, he is so not Edward Cullen.
Author's Response: Thank you for your review!
Thank you for saying you liked the Catherine audition scenes. When I first started this story I was like "I totally have to do the call backs at Catherine's". I heard all this talk about the auditions and thought it was such a cool idea, but in all the R&K i've but no one ever did them!!
So I took it upon myself. ^_^
And Mike is definately no Edward Cullen. Only Rob,lol
Reviewer: jodieisabadmum (Signed) · Date: June 16, 2009 12:35 PM · On: I've Just Seen A Face
:) lol loved it
liked the way you described him but i think he would of tried to crack more jokes cus he was nervous
brilliant though x
Author's Response: Thank You For Your Review!
Reviewer: BellaEdwardFan2009 (Signed) · Date: June 13, 2009 09:21 PM · On: Promise
Hey! It's me agian! I really loced this chapter! It was really, really romantic and sweet! They're suce a cute a couple! I'm glad you did this chaoter like this! Well, I g2g! Big, long, tiring, and EXTREMMLY BORING day 2mrrw!
-BellaEdwardFan2009!
Reviewer: laurelbarnes (Signed) · Date: June 13, 2009 06:48 AM · On: Promise
waiting for more please write more please please please!!!
Reviewer: laurelbarnes (Signed) · Date: June 13, 2009 06:13 AM · On: Classifieds
I am loving it keep writing more!
Reviewer: laurelbarnes (Signed) · Date: June 13, 2009 05:53 AM · On: I've Just Seen A Face 11
SO cool! Keep writing!
Reviewer: readergoof (Signed) · Date: June 13, 2009 05:45 AM · On: Promise
well we can do without him again unless its her breaking up w him
Reviewer: laurelbarnes (Signed) · Date: June 12, 2009 11:22 PM · On: I've Just Seen A Face
Love it!!!
Reviewer: laurelbarnes (Signed) · Date: June 12, 2009 10:59 PM · On: Pressure
Loving it!
Reviewer: HeyThereEliza (Signed) · Date: June 12, 2009 12:19 AM · On: Classifieds
OMG it's so awesome that you had Kristen listening to Taking Back Sunday!
They rock!
Reviewer: obsessed668 (Signed) · Date: June 11, 2009 05:01 PM · On: Promise
awww
cute
love it
cant wait for more
Oxo
Author's Response: Thank you!!
Reviewer: tatie87 (Signed) · Date: June 11, 2009 03:40 PM · On: Promise
Michael and Kristen were alright, but I prefer to not. Can't wait for Rob and Kristen. You went into such detail about M/K's date, but there was suprisingly not much intimacy or touching.
Author's Response: Haha,. Yeah. That was kind of the whole point. They are not the very lovely-dovey types. They keep a distance. Tottally opposite of how her and Rob are.
^_^
Reviewer: Forbidden Twilighter (Signed) · Date: June 11, 2009 03:08 PM · On: Promise
Bring on Rob!
Lol
Author's Response: haha. Do not worry. He'll be back next chapter.
^_^
Reviewer: BellaEdwardFan2009 (Signed) · Date: June 10, 2009 08:26 PM · On: Classifieds
Hey great story! Can't wait 4 the nxt chapter! Hope u get it up soon! Keep up the great work with the story and goodluck with the rest of it! Well, like I said, great job, keep it up, and gooduck with the rest of the story! I enjoy reading ur work and when my friends ask what's a good twilight fanfiction site, I say "twilighted.net" and then they ask if there r any stories I recomend for first-timers to "twilighted.net" I say "Captivated" by Paulette! They tell me that they can't wait to read it b/c most of the time if I recomend a story/fanfic to read, it almost always a good one. I've had friends come back to me after they've read it and tell me that I've once agian made an excellent recomendation, which is saying something b/c usually I will not recomend a story if fit's not a really good one, so goodluck, and keep up the great work! If you want to contact me outside of this website, just e-mail me at dancer_chick_1995@yahoo.com, dancer_chick_1995_lovesdancing.9513@yahoo.com, p.cody99@yahoo.com, or ashton07@bellsouth.net. But I'll most likely be on either the first or the third, so if you really want to tlk to me, I would suggest one of the two that I said I'm on most of the time! The first two have underscores(_) where the big spaces are! Sorry ab that! I had no clue that it would do that! Bye!
-BellaEdwardFan2009
Author's Response: Awww. Thank you soo much for telling your friends about my story! That really means alot to me and I'm soo grateful for all your support and kind words. I'm,like, about to cry!!
You can reach me at: lilbrowneyedangel89@yahoo.com if you'd like.
One agian, thank you- and the next chapter is being looked over by my beta so it will be up shortly.
Thanks agian,
Paulette
^_^
Reviewer: hershortness (Signed) · Date: June 10, 2009 12:31 PM · On: Classifieds
Can't wait for what comes next. Thanks for writing this story.
Author's Response: Thank you for reading it! lol
Reviewer: twimommy (Signed) · Date: June 05, 2009 11:21 PM · On: Classifieds
Good thing she spoke up and didn't chicken out!
Author's Response: Haha,
I totally agree with you! Where would we be without Rob as Edward? lol
Reviewer: obsessed668 (Signed) · Date: May 29, 2009 12:14 AM · On: Classifieds
awwwww
so cute!!
im glad she's standing up for him,
love it
Cant wait for more
Oxo
Author's Response: hehe. Thank you. I'm glad your enjoying the story.
^_^
Reviewer: Edwardia Maven (Signed) · Date: May 28, 2009 03:15 PM · On: Classifieds
it's good so far :)
Author's Response: Thank you!
Reviewer: readergoof (Signed) · Date: May 28, 2009 03:13 PM · On: Classifieds
This is truly interesting.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your kind words.
^_^
Reviewer: magicdreams (Signed) · Date: May 28, 2009 02:00 PM · On: Classifieds
Ooh!! So glad you updated! You really portray Kristen true to form, I think. Quiet, but assertive. Playful at times. Can't wait for the next update!
Author's Response: Aww, thank you for saying you like my portrayal of Kristen. I'm trying to do her justice and your review made me feel like I did a good job.
Next Update shall be soon ^_^
Reviewer: darkling (Signed) · Date: May 28, 2009 10:04 AM · On: Classifieds
Am enjoying this story, but I do have a bit of constructive criticism for you. This particular chapter seemed to get dragged out with details that weren'[t really necessary. They didn't move the plot forward, they just served as filler. Most of this chapter could have been handled in one paragraph by hitting the facts and moving on:
My mom woke me early, which was odd seeing as she's been bugging me about not getting enough sleep. I caught a shower and got dressed in my favorite jeans and tee and she drove me to the studio to meet with Catherine and some others about callbacks. Evidently they wanted my input, which I was pleased about, but I didn't want to come off as a diva. On the drive there I tried to catch a few more z's. I did a quickfix to my hair and smeared on a little lip gloss to be presentable. Catherine and the others greeted us amicably and the meeting went smoothly with about five guys being mentioned for callbacks. Nobody, however, mentioned Rob. At the risk of sounding like a diva, I interjected, "What about Rob? Patterson? Pattinson?"
See what I mean? That was an on the fly summary sort of, but it takes the whole chapter and plops it into one paragraph without the painful minute by minute playback. She took a shower, it was warm, she liked it warm, etc.
I'm not trying to be cruel, I just wanted to point out that perhaps it would make for more effective writing to work on the pacing. I know what it is like to write fanfic, I have done so many times in the past for other storylines. There are times when it just doesn't come together easily and you feel pressured to publish even though you probably should rework it more. I do appreciate your efforts and am enjoying the story, I just wanted to be honest and let you know what I thought. Please don't take the critique too harshly, it isn't meant to be hurtful, rather helpful.
Author's Response: Thank you for your suggestions. They are really valid points and I thank you for bringing them to my attention. I'm so happy that you are invested in this story enough to offer insight and let me know what you as the reader would like to see.
It was extremely helpful
^_^
Reviewer: tatie87 (Signed) · Date: May 28, 2009 08:30 AM · On: Classifieds
I really am enjoying this story. I love how detailed the writing is and how it goes over the start of Rob and Kris' relationship.
Author's Response: Thank you so much. I'm glad your likeing the details. I try to make it believable.
^_^
Reviewer: deep_blue (Signed) · Date: May 24, 2009 12:54 AM · On: Pressure
This is an interesting story =) RPOV is okay but maybe not repeating the whole chapter? How about you continue to the next chapter in his head instead?
I hope you will continue this story to the recent happening between them.
Keep up the good work =)
Author's Response: Thank you for your review! As for your request about next chapter being in RPOV, i'm afriad that chapter is already written and it's in K-POV, you'll understand why when I post it. I've decided to only do a POV change if it's neccesary to the story.
And I don't really have a plan as to how long this story will be. I have so many ideas! Especailly with all the new drama and rumors that are flying around. I could have so much fun with that,lol.
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