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Reviewer: Emmett_lover (Anonymous) · Date: June 30, 2009 10:10 AM · On: A Way Out

Haha. TAKE THAT JACKASS!!! I hahte James. But he IS smokin hot sexy fine licious. But I bet the driver is Esme. Hehe...



Author's Response:

soo sorry about the lateness of my reply to your review...the "review" function on this is a bit wonky...

hehe I think you were right about that!! (I promise to reply to every review, so even if it's late, I want to show that I appreciate each comment!)

Thanks again for reading and reviewing!

~Fatima

Reviewer: bella_edward05 (Signed) · Date: June 30, 2009 10:09 AM · On: The 4th of July BBQ

I'm glad that she let Edward in. I can't wait to see their date. I wonder what James is doing? P

Author's Response:

James will be making an appearance very shortly...I'm glad she let Eddie in, too! Thanks for your review, and for reading! More to come very soon!

~Fatima

Reviewer: Emmett_lover (Anonymous) · Date: June 30, 2009 09:53 AM · On: A Loss

Amazing first chapter. Really. And in that banner of yours, James is fiiiiiine.



Author's Response:

I love my banner, too. I'm incredibly proud of it, if I do say so myself... James is just yummy...too bad he's a prick in my story... hehe

Thanks again!

~Fatima

Reviewer: freckles9399 (Signed) · Date: June 30, 2009 09:50 AM · On: The 4th of July BBQ

love it !!! i missed the story ,i really am in to this one =)



Author's Response:

Thanks so much! I'm so glad you're enjoying! Means a lot!

~Fatima

Reviewer: JessicaB923 (Signed) · Date: June 30, 2009 07:41 AM · On: The 4th of July BBQ

Aww, I'm glad she started telling him some of her past.  Wonder when they'll discover Esme and Carlisle are Edwards parents?



Author's Response:

Yea, she needed to start opening up more with him...things will start coming up and revealing themselves very soon!

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

~Fatima

Reviewer: queenfrizz30 (Signed) · Date: June 30, 2009 02:48 AM · On: The 4th of July BBQ

oh yes progress, Bella has started to trust Edward, by sharing at least a part of her past with him, shows a lot of potential for them. I also love the slow build they are going through, and the I love how Edward opened up and trusted Bella as well, by mentioning that his mother had been abused.

 I just loved your version of Emmett and the twist on Edward being older. Even though Edward is the oldest vampire "child" in the books, he is always made out to be the youngest because he was only 17 when he was turned. I love that you have made him older than Emmett. Very original, because as much as I like Emmett as the big brother bear, it is quite easy to picture him as the annoying younger brother. and I can't wait to read more about him , and his relationship with Edward.

Please don't keep us all waiting too long for the next update.



Author's Response:

I love your insight. Yes, Emmett is typically the older brother, but I needed to change that to make my vision possible. You'll understand what I mean about that in a few more chapters...

I will try not to keep you waiting too long for the next chapter. Sorry about the delay!!

Thanks for reading, and sharing your thoughts! Always appreciated!!

~Fatima

Reviewer: daggers4u (Signed) · Date: June 29, 2009 10:05 PM · On: The 4th of July BBQ

Yay!!! Love it!!

*sniff* Edwards so wonderful...LoL  ;-)



Author's Response:

he is, isn't he? Don't ya just love him? :)

Thanks for the review, and for reading! It means A LOT to me!!

~Fatima

Reviewer: fightinsurfgrl (Signed) · Date: June 29, 2009 09:12 PM · On: The 4th of July BBQ

cute! Can't wait for more.



Author's Response:

more is coming in a few days! Just being beta'd now...thanks for the review!

~Fatima

Reviewer: daggers4u (Signed) · Date: June 29, 2009 08:28 PM · On: A Way Out

!@*$#&!  Stupid prick James!! Man I can SO picture him as an uncaring wife-beater!!!

Can't u have Edward & Emmett torture & eat him??? Or are the Cullen's vampires in this story??



Author's Response:

soo sorry about the lateness of my reply to your review...the "review" function on this is a bit wonky...

hahahaha that brings up some strange mental images... I think by now you've figured out that it's an all human story. Sorry to disappoint!! :P

Thanks again for reading!

~Fatima

Reviewer: daggers4u (Signed) · Date: June 29, 2009 08:07 PM · On: A Loss

WOW -- I'm hooked already

Keep writing!!! :-)



Author's Response:

woo hoo I've made you an addict!! My job here is done! *dusts off hands*

Thanks for reading and reviewing!

~Fatima

 

Reviewer: tolkien87 (Signed) · Date: June 29, 2009 08:03 PM · On: The 4th of July BBQ

Excellent chapter! Short but definitely a plot driver. Whenever I see an update for this story, I get really excited! This has been a great story to read, and props to whoever did the banner because the picture of Edward on it makes me swoon every time I see it! I can't wait to read more!!



Author's Response:

Yay! Props to me for the banner! I'm pretty proud of it, actually... ^_^

I'm so happy that I excite you whenever I update ;-) ohhh baby!! :)

It warms my heart to know my story has that effect on ya! Thanks for reading and for reviewing!!

~Fatima

Reviewer: Rinna (Signed) · Date: June 29, 2009 07:48 PM · On: The 4th of July BBQ

Great story!  I just found it tonight and like it very much!!  Can't wait for more :)



Author's Response:

I'm glad you found it, and sorry it's taken so long for another chapter...it should be ready in a few days (fingers crossed)

~Fatima

Reviewer: emmettlover2 (Signed) · Date: June 29, 2009 07:43 PM · On: A Cross Country Trip

I'm loving the story and how you set up the background but when is Bella going to meet Edward?? Great story though!!!

Reviewer: twilight_lamb (Signed) · Date: June 29, 2009 07:35 PM · On: A Loss

Wow what a 1st chapter... James us just a crazzzz guy..
I like it so far....kym

Author's Response:

Thanks! Hope you've continued to read! The chapters get crazzzzzier hehe

~Fatima

Reviewer: ptoricanjewel (Signed) · Date: June 29, 2009 06:37 PM · On: The 4th of July BBQ

good chapter...nice to see Bella opening up to Edward about her past a little bit...I can't wait to read more!



Author's Response:

so sorry that it's taken this long for more, but chapter 8 should be ready in a few days (fingers crossed)...thanks for the review, and hopefully you're still sticking with me

~Fatima

Reviewer: jules_061380 (Signed) · Date: June 29, 2009 05:50 PM · On: The 4th of July BBQ

Happy Canada Day!!!!! It sucks that it's on a Wednsday, but I'm looking forward to one intense party.

 

Cannot wait for Chapter Eight!!!! (I'm also happy that rhymes..) Is it bad that I just want them to kiss already?



Author's Response:

Happy Canada Day to you, too! It's a crappy day here because the forecast calls for rain, and lots of it [and I'm working!! But time and a half isn't too shabby ;)] but yay, Canada's birthday!

And no, it's not bad that you want them to start their relationship (because it is inevitable hehe)

Thanks for reading, and reviewing!!

~Fatima

Reviewer: eileent (Signed) · Date: June 29, 2009 05:15 PM · On: The 4th of July BBQ

Write faster -- Write Faster



Author's Response:

aye aye, captain!! :)

Thanks for reading and reviewing!!

~Fatima

Reviewer: lucky4me13 (Signed) · Date: June 29, 2009 04:51 PM · On: The 4th of July BBQ

it's chapter 7 and i'm still reading. not an easy feat! haha. i'm enjoying your story, and i've even favorited it.

looking forward to seeing what's next for edward and bella! (and please, no more jacob).



Author's Response:

hi there,

Hope you're still reading...took me a while to find your review...strange Twilighted...anyway, don't worry, no more Jacob...at least for a very long while.

Thanks so much for this review, and for reading...

~Fatima

Reviewer: clairesuter (Signed) · Date: June 29, 2009 03:46 PM · On: The 4th of July BBQ

I've enjoyed your story!  Ed & Em should tell Bella who they are before it's too late for her to forgive them.



Author's Response:

hi there,

I just found your review...I do hope you're still reading...

The big reveal is coming very soon...actually in the next chapter.

Thanks for reading, and hope you're still with me!

~Fatima

Reviewer: lobster512 (Signed) · Date: June 29, 2009 03:09 PM · On: The 4th of July BBQ

Just started reading your story, and I really really like it.  Your writing is flows beautifully as well as the conversation.  I can't wait to see where you take the story next!  More please!



Author's Response:

Thanks for the kind words about my writing. I'm glad you find it flows well. That's a big worry of mine when I'm writing, to be honest...and I always make sure that conversation sounds realistic and true to character...

More coming up soon! Thanks for reading!

~Fatima

Reviewer: Jilli90 (Signed) · Date: June 29, 2009 02:20 PM · On: The 4th of July BBQ

Love it!!



Author's Response:

Thanks!! Hope you're still reading!! A new chapter is coming soon!

~Fatima

Reviewer: jkhjc1019 (Signed) · Date: June 29, 2009 02:19 PM · On: The 4th of July BBQ

Great Chapter.  I like how you move the story along and how easy flowing it is.  I am not sure I completely understand Rose's problem seems like there is more behind her "issues".  Can't wait for the next chapter.



Author's Response:

thanks for the kind words. I honestly don't like fics where Rosalie hates Bella for no reason, since she always has a motivation...let's just say that we have yet to find out hers...

Thanks for reading and hope you're still reading!!

~Fatima

Reviewer: anna123 (Signed) · Date: June 29, 2009 02:16 PM · On: The 4th of July BBQ

Very good chapter:) It's good Bella has told Edward =) Can't wait to read more!! :D



Author's Response:

This chapter was pretty great to write because I felt relief as she told him some things about herself...more to come!

Thanks for reading, and hopefully you're still with me!

~Fatima

Reviewer: HPsharpie123 (Signed) · Date: June 29, 2009 02:02 PM · On: The 4th of July BBQ

Yay! She told himm.. I loved this chapter. Although, Rosalie was kind of being a bitc- ahem, she was just being rude. Can't wait for the next chapter ! Ooh! Is Alice gonna be in it? I love Alice, she's my favorite character.. besides Jasper ;] 10/10



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review...Alice has already been in it...check back to the chapter where Bella bought her house... hehe

Glad you're enjoying the story!! More to come soon!

~Fatima

Reviewer: Jilli90 (Signed) · Date: June 29, 2009 02:01 PM · On: The 4th of July BBQ

Love it!!



Author's Response:

Glad you loved it then...hoping you're still loving it now! :)

Thanks again for reading!!

~Fatima

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