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Reviewer: Sonia Mari (Signed) · Date: June 22, 2009 03:53 AM · On: Chapter 11: Reality Check

ROFL Moments: Emmett's crack about Bella being more entertaining than cable & the Bella BadAss Show. & OF COURSE... Edward freaking Cullen falling out of a tree. Too funny.
Love what Bella did to him thru her window, I had a feeling she knew he was there. Glad he at least stayed outside & thrilled 2 death that he seems to really see the error in his ways.
Yet another awesome chapter.
~Sonia



Author's Response:

Edward falling out of the tree definitely seems to be a favorite moment for people so far. It still makes me laugh when I think about it. He deserved it though. ;) Emmett, well you gotta love Emmett. He just filter himself at all and I think it's a blast to watch what he says and does in reaction to Bella's new attitude - and how what he says and does effects others.

Thanks for reading and leaving your thoughts. You know I'm loving it. You're almost caught up now...

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: Sonia Mari (Signed) · Date: June 22, 2009 03:07 AM · On: Chapter 10: Learning to Listen

Where to start... LOVED the bit w/the garlic, that was great! I really expected her to 'go vampire' on his ass a little more... Not to say that it wasn't well played - It most definitely was.
Edward... I think he'll prove that you can in fact teach an old dog new tricks; but I suspect Bella's gonna have to 'rub his nose in it' a time or two before he catches on.
Great chapter!!
~Sonia



Author's Response:

I'm thrilled you enjoyed it. With Edward - Bella took the "walk softly but carry a big hammer" approach. Yelling and screaming at him wasn't going to make her point and it would be more of what he would be expecting. Her calm approach has him thrown a little and it's going to be fun watching him try to figure things out. You're though, he will learn.

Thanks for continuing to read and leave such pretty reviews. I adore it.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: Sonia Mari (Signed) · Date: June 22, 2009 02:06 AM · On: Chapter 9: Bitch Slap

Holy crow! She ripped into Rosalie righteously! Definitely my favorite part. May those badass shoes R.I.P.
She was a little rougher on Esme & Carlise than I expected her to be; but she could've been worse...
Awesome chapter! Must get to the ExB :))
~Sonia



Author's Response:

Hahahahaha - yes, she definitely gave Rosalie a bit to think about. ;)  Carlisle and Esme - well, people are torn on that one. Some people think Bella was too hard on them while others think she wasn't hard enough. Regardless Bella isn't quite finished. She'll have some more emotional encounters with them down the road.

Thanks for reading and leaving your thoughts - it's a great way for me to start my day.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: Sonia Mari (Signed) · Date: June 22, 2009 01:09 AM · On: Chapter 8: Skipping Rocks

I love Jacob, he's such a good friend to Bella.
LOVED this chapter. Dying to read the next one! :)
~Sonia



Author's Response:

Oh, I'm so glad. I was worried when I wrote that chapter that people would think it was just a filler chapter. I've always thought the friendship between Bella and Jacob was great and also that it's important for Bella to have.

Thanks for continuing to read and leaving your thoughts - I'm loving it.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: Sweetpea123 (Signed) · Date: June 21, 2009 05:17 PM · On: Chapter 12: Moves and Countermoves

this chapter was a very satisfying coninuance of the last one. I was very excited to see you updated, and please do so again quickly!!



Author's Response:

The next chapter is done and being submitted to the validation queue in the morning. With luck it'll be up soon. I'm glad you're still along for the ride.

Thanks for continuing to read and leave your thoughts on each chapter. You know I appreciate it.

Much love,

~Lisa

 

Reviewer: kschelte (Signed) · Date: June 21, 2009 10:11 AM · On: Chapter 12: Moves and Countermoves

Please hurry with the next couple chapters...I can't wait to read more!!



Author's Response:

The next chapter is finished and I'm planning to submit today as this last chapters took over nine days to get approved. I'm working with a sub-beta and the poor thing is so overloaded. Hang in there with me. I'm as anxious for the next chapter as well. =)

Thanks for reading and leaving your excited thought. I appreciate it.

Much love,

~Lisa

 

Reviewer: samt915 (Signed) · Date: June 21, 2009 09:35 AM · On: Chapter 12: Moves and Countermoves

I love how you keep teasing Edward with things Bella is doing.  I just wonder how much longer is she going to be able to keep herself together around him to keep it up, him being able to dazzle her.  Oh I can just see her getting all upset right after him trying to end this "game" of hers my completely and utterly trying to dazzle his way out of it.  I would like to see him buying her things, the types of things that he has always wanted to buy for her, a new car??  Can Rosalie pay Bella back by destroing her truck, and help Edward out by by letting him buy her a new car??  Only time will tell.



Author's Response:

Hahaha - your request the Rosalie destroys Bella's truck as payment for her shoes made me laugh so hard. It would be a win-win for Rosalie and Edward. Somehow I don't think Alice will let that happen though. Edward's going to have to resort to more creative measures than relying on big ticket items to win Bella over. He's got mad romantics skills buried somewhere within him. Now he just needs to tap into that.

Thanks for reading and leaving your thoughts. I loved it.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: Sonia Mari (Signed) · Date: June 21, 2009 02:28 AM · On: Chapter 7: Circle the Wagons

*claps hands and rubs them together while chuckling darkly*
Ooohh I wanna say I'm ESPECIALLY looking forward to seeing Rose get hers. She's SUCH a bee-yatch.
Great chapter! :)
~Sonia



Author's Response:

Yeah - everyone that has read it to date is pretty much foaming at the mouth to see what Bella has planned for Rose. Of course, when they finally get to see what revenge she exacts.... well, I'll just say there was much rejoicing. ;)

I'm excited you're still going with the story. I love seeing your reactions to each chapter - it renews my excitment for the story all over again.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: Sonia Mari (Signed) · Date: June 21, 2009 01:59 AM · On: Chapter 6: Toture Devices

FABULOUS!
Go BELLA!!!
The packages were brilliant, I can't wait to see what else she has goin' on :)
Lovin' this story hard <3
~Sonia



Author's Response:

I'm loving the fact you love it! The packages were certainly a creative way for Bella to inflict pain in a way only she can. Physically there's isn't much she could do to hurt them - but emotionally? She's got it going on.

Thanks for leaving your thoughts as you read along. Every little word is a treat for me.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: Sonia Mari (Signed) · Date: June 21, 2009 01:28 AM · On: Chapter 5: The Pixie versus the Kitten

Alice's yake on Angry is almost as enjoyable as angry Bella herself.
I feel for the Cullens, Edward in particular; no idea what the kitten has in store for them, but I'm pretty sure it'll be good.
Yet another great chapter :)
~Sonia



Author's Response:

Yes, Alice keeps me thoroughly entertained. Actually with this chapter - both girls had me laughing quite a bit. Their antics were rather loud in my head and it was hard to get a lot of sleep when I was working on this chapter. They can be little devils.

Thanks for continuing to read and leave your thoughts. You know I adore each one.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: Sonia Mari (Signed) · Date: June 21, 2009 01:04 AM · On: Chapter 4: Thin Red Line

Hells Bells :))
So she's a little loopy... she's stronger than she thought. And that backbone looks good on her :) Angry Bella kicks ass (pun intended)
Great chapter :)
Sonia



Author's Response:

Whew - I'm glad you liked it. A lot of people get a little upset about the measures Bella took in this chapter. Sure, it's OOC for her, but it really gave her the control she was looking for - and cemented her need to get them all back.

Thanks for continuing to read and leave your thoughts on each chapter. ;) Hopefully I didn't cause you to burn anything this time.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: furious kitten (Signed) · Date: June 20, 2009 11:12 PM · On: Chapter 12: Moves and Countermoves

"“I have it on good authority that you love bad boys,”" Hahahaha.  Best part of this chapter =).  As always, I love that Bella is teaching Edward a thing or two here.  Very curious to see how he reacts to her non-date with Jake!



Author's Response:

That's probably my favorite line too. =) When I realized that was how he was going to play it - I had to push away from the keyboard for a few minutes because I was laughing too hard.

I think his reaction to Bella's non-date will run the gamut of emotions.

Thanks for continuing to read and as always leaving your thoughts on each chapter. You know I love it.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: Mom of 2 in WI (Signed) · Date: June 20, 2009 10:00 PM · On: Chapter 1: Martyr

I think I understand what you're saying.  She's got a plan. I like that. I just worry that her hormones will take over and her plan will fall apart.  Glad to hear that you've got it all worked out.  I look forward to the next chapter...really. 

 

I know she couldn't be nasty to Carlisle and Esme, but they got off pretty easy, don't you think? 

 

I love that Emmett has a newfound respect for Bella.  Sounds like Eddie Boy will be respecting his woman from now on, too.  And I love that you say Bella will be pushing all boundaries, including the physical.  How dare he be the only one who gets to decide such a major thing! 

Ok, That's it.  I just got home from a party and probably am not writing in the most coherent way, but I hope you get the gist!



Author's Response:

I'm going to work my best to not let her plans fall apart. It would defeat the whole purpose of what she's gone through to get to this point. As for Carlisle and Esme - they may have gotten off easy, but really the pain over what happened ran deep for them. Bella's going to be spending some more time with Esme in a future chapter and I think we'll see more of Esme's struggle in dealing with what happened. As for Carlisle - he'll be dealing with Bella in a chapter down the road as well, but it won't be a pleasant situation.

Yeah, I'm excited about Bella pushing the boundaries on the physical side of things too. Edward is going to have a tough time restraining himself forever...

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: Veritas Found (Signed) · Date: June 20, 2009 09:59 PM · On: Chapter 12: Moves and Countermoves

...as a real and un-fractured smile lit her face.  -  Oh-ho-ho, I see what you did there.  ;D  Love that bit.  <333  (...oh man, you can tell this one's gonna be a doozy if I'm finding something to pick out in the first sentence.  xD)  Loving the difference already in Bella; it's good to see she really is on the mend.  (Oh, the tree.  The tree!  xD)

She wasn’t the same girl she had been, but at least she was putting one foot in front of the other. Being broken by Edward Cullen hadn’t been the end of her as she had feared. Being broken had provided her the opportunity to learn that she was stronger than she had ever believed she could be, and that there were certain things she wanted from life. And no one, not even the stupid supernatural creature she was in love with, would stop her from doing things her way now.

Hallelujah, we have progress!  I can't even say how much I love that little epiphany paragraph; it's about damn time, Bella Swan!  Granted, we've seen this change in her through the story, but I love that she's finally acknowledging it.

She understood that watching her was a habit of his that would take more than one conversation to break; if it was even capable of being broken. But it didn’t excuse the fact that he should have respected her privacy.  -  And I love that she's acknowledging that, too.  Like I said on the forums: I get that things like Emoward are so deeply ingrained in him that they probably won't change, but I'm still hoping he takes at least a few notes from her over this.  C;  It's good to see that she expects this won't be easy, 'cause in all likelihood it's not going to be.  (I know, I know; we saw that in her a bit last chapter, but it's nice to see it reaffirmed.  C= )

Stalking would be a punishable act from here on out.  -  *cracks the hell up*  B-but Lisa, it's what they do!  He stalks her, she stalks him...it's how their story of Epic and True Stalking works!  xD  (You are Awesome.  Have I said this yet?  <333)

"I’m not a doormat, and I’m not going to let anyone walk all over me - including you, Jacob Black!”  -  *cheering*

She pulled salad vegetables out of the refrigerator and set about chopping them up, tossing them into a salad bowl as she did so. It was a task she had to focus on or she’d risk cutting off a fingertip, but it was something she enjoyed.  -  xD  That made me giggle so hard; totally makes me think of my Skoodles.  She can't slice a tomato without serious injury, poor girl (and she hates me talking about new recipes I'm trying, because I'm one of the ones who could slice a tomato blindfolded and she kills ¼ of China's population each time she steps into a kitchen  xD).

I love the note (though I'll admit, I did crack up while reading it; "I chose this flower 'cause it represents us: like me, it can kill you!  ☺"); classic Edward in its sweetness, with just a hint of his morbidly depressing side dashed in.  Good Ford I love how twisted these kids are.  xD  (I jest, I jest; honest, I loved the note, and the lilly.  Very nice touch on his part.  C= )  Also, love his admission to his hand in Alice's floral arrangements.

“Newsflash, Edward,” Bella said in a controlled but biting tone. “Everything in the world does not revolve around you - and that includes me."  -  *cheering again*  I love this whole bit, from how she bites at him to Jasper's "MORON!" comment - and his note that's she strategic/not stupid.  And Em!  xD  Love that he just had to pop in and give his two cents - and the shoo!  Love the shoo!  I love that Bella's got his number down so well.

Edward even heard Esme’s laughter from upstairs.  -  Are you by any chance reading JayJayHale's Dirty Dancing with the Devil Herself?  There's a bit in the reunion scene in that with the other Cullens commenting about how "Oh man, Bella's gonna rape Edward!" (one guess as to who says that ;P), and after this big long conversation Esme ends it by telling her kids: "Shut up - I wanna see Bella rape Edward!"  I love this bit here as much as I loved that bit there; when even Esme joins in to call Eddie out on his bullshit/gang up on him?  That is gold.  <3  Love that she's joining in on it here, too.

“I have it on good authority that you love bad boys,” he replied, a slight smile tugging at the corners of his mouth. - *cracking the hell up again*  So, wait, who called it again?  Shortie, wasn't it?  xD  Good Ford, I love how he slipped that in there - and his subsequent piano!smash.  xD

“Just because you always remember doesn’t mean you always pay attention,” Bella noted softly.  -  *clapping*  Those notes he needs to pick up from Bella?  That's one of 'em, right there.  <333

And the claps go on for the rest of it, too.  I love that Bella's calling him out on his bullshit - now, hopefully, he'll just listen to her.  (Though I have a feeling it'll be a repeat performance, especially with how he was already trying to contradict her during her shpeel.)  And the kiss?  Love the role-reversal there.  Very nice way to close out the chapter.

The only thing I'm gonna point out (issue-wise) is some apostrophes.  And I'm prob'ly only noticing them 'cause I was just beta-ing some stuff in my backlog, but there were a few places scattered throughout the first half of the chapter where you had backwards apostrophes.  It was just weird, 'cause I know it's a likelihood with closing quotes and sentences ending in dashes, but they were in these weird places that really had no reason to have been switched like that.  Anyway, like I said: I'm prob'ly only noticing it 'cause I still have my beta hat on, but they really didn't detract from the chapter.  Just a grammar nazi thing, I guess.  xD



Author's Response:

Hello, my dear - you just know I've been waiting to see what you would have to say about this chapter. First, the backwards apostrophe's are some weird cliche in my word program that is pissing me the hell off. I try to catch them all, but sometimes the stubborn little bastards just won't let me correct them and are determined to stay backwards. I'm trying to fix the problem. ;)

Second, I'm an accident prone nightmare in the kitchen. Oh, I'm an awesome cook - but I can't be in the kitchen without some sort of burn, cut, scald, etc.... So Bella's need to focus on her cutting task? Could totally relate.

If you loved the whole silbing conversation - Jasper's MORON comment, Emmett getting a little in Edward's face, etc. Then you'll love the next chapter where Emmett hijacked it. Promise.

I actually haven't read JayJayHale's story, but she left me a review yesterday and I was kinda blown away. Her reviews and popularity are off the chain so I was surprised to see her check this story out. I'm planning on reading her story; the only reason I've held off is we're writing in same category and from her summary it sounds like there are some similarities in our stories. I don't mean intentional or anything - but just Bella being back with a vengeance...

Shortie did call that Edward would crack first - but it certainly wasn't an apology that he cracked with. That was a big, "Oh, no he didn't...." moment for me that had me laughing for several minutes after I realized that's what he wanted said. Still cracks me up.

So the next chapter is done with the exception of a few brief revisions. You know I love you for your fantabulous reviews. My husband always plops down next to me and has me read them aloud. =) So thanks.

Much love, my dear,

~Lisa

Reviewer: Daylen (Signed) · Date: June 20, 2009 08:04 PM · On: Chapter 12: Moves and Countermoves

aww they've had their first proper kiss in a while now :)

The symbolism that Bella has been striving for in all her actions has been very good and I'm interested to see what she might do when she decides to open that window again :)



Author's Response:

I'm glad you liked the kiss and felt it was a proper kiss. An important point was the Bella pulled away; that was a big step for her. I think the window opening again will be an interesting journey - just like the rest of her actions. She's making her point to each family member in a way that's important and unique to each person - but also doesn't diminish her love for them.

Thanks for reading and continuing to leave your thoughts on each chapter. It's the favorite part of my day.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: pclo (Signed) · Date: June 20, 2009 07:56 PM · On: Chapter 12: Moves and Countermoves

I want to be this Bella! Thanks for a great story.

Author's Response:

Hahaha - can I ask why? Is it the kickassedness she possess or the taking the reins on the kissing she's doing? Or is it something else entirely???

Thanks for reading and leaving me your thoughts. If my Bella suddenly goes silent I'll keep you in mind for a fill-in. ;)

Much love,

~Lisa

 

Reviewer: kschelte (Signed) · Date: June 20, 2009 06:55 PM · On: Chapter 6: Toture Devices

This is a great chapter...Very creative of you! I loved it...



Author's Response:

Why thank you. I'm glad you loved it. That chapter has a special place in my heart. It was very emotional for me to write, but I was cheering Bella on the whole time.

Thanks for reading and leaving your thoughts. I appreciate it.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: JessicaB923 (Signed) · Date: June 20, 2009 06:45 PM · On: Chapter 12: Moves and Countermoves

Ahh, hot!  I hope there's more sexual tension between the two coming up



Author's Response:

Hahaha - oh I'm all about sexual tension. I love a slow burning build up. I think it makes the payoff so much better. =)

Thanks for reading and dropping me a note on your thoughts. I love it.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: rebmatmak (Signed) · Date: June 20, 2009 05:45 PM · On: Chapter 12: Moves and Countermoves

I too love Somewhere in Time!!!  This was my favorite chapter so far.  I love to see Edward struggle with his human emotions!  Looking forward to the next one.



Author's Response:

It is one of the most romantic movies ever! ;) Your favorite chapter so far? How exciting. You're the first to tell me that and I'm giddy over it.

Thanks so much for continuing to read and drop me your thoughts. I love each and every one.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: Sonia Mari (Signed) · Date: June 20, 2009 04:33 PM · On: Chapter 3: Pendulum

Great chapter! Almost made me burn the bread lol
Still favoring your Bella over SM's
Looking forward to reading some more in a bit :)
~Sonia



Author's Response:

Thanks. I hope the next chapter doesn't scare you away. My Bella takes a little trip on the crazy train, but she has a plan. It doesn't make sense to anyone else, but it does to her. Have faith. ;)

Sorry I caused you to almost burn your bread, but thanks for continuing to read and leave review. I'm sending fresh baked virtual bread your way.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: Sonia Mari (Signed) · Date: June 20, 2009 02:27 PM · On: Chapter 2: Voicemails

Wow... I'm multi-tasking atm, reading & cooking dinner so it's taking me a bit to read, but I LOVE this story so far!
I went from near tears to a huge grin and the words 'You Go Girl' on my lips as they listened to Bella's messages. I couldn't respect the way SM's Bella dealt with Edward leaving, but THIS... this I can respect/relate to. I REALLY like your angry Bella. Hell hath no fury...
Great chapter :)
~Sonia



Author's Response:

Too true - hell hath no fury. In fact, Fury by Little Big Town is a song on one of my chapter playlists. Off the top of my head I think it's chapter 7 - so Bella doesn't give up the anger just yet. I'm glad you're enjoying it. My biggest problem with the SM Bella, especially in NM was her lack of a backbone. She didn't fight for her love or her family. What? I just kept hearing a big, loud "Aw Hell No." in my head about it. The Bella in my head was pretty pissed and wanted to get her version out.

Thanks for continuing to read and leave your thoughts. They're the best part of my day.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: binki (Signed) · Date: June 20, 2009 01:47 PM · On: Chapter 12: Moves and Countermoves

I just sat down today and read everyone of your chapters!!  I love this story and how Bella is showing her stronger side!!  I always thought of Bella as strong and not weak.  I can't wait for your updates!!  I can't wait to see how their relationship emotionally and physically changes.



Author's Response:

Oh - I'm so glad you found my story and love it. It's a lot to read in one sitting, so sorry if you really needed to stretch your legs and rub your eyes after that. ;) Bella and Edward are certainly going to take us on their emotional journey with them. I can't wait.

Thanks for reading, joining this zoo and leaving me your thoughts. I appreciate it.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: Sonia Mari (Signed) · Date: June 20, 2009 01:31 PM · On: Chapter 1: Martyr

Just found this and started reading it today. I really enjoy your writing style and I'm looking forward to seeing where you go w/this.

Great chapter :)
~Sonia



Author's Response:

Hooray - a new reader has joined my zoo. ;) I'm glad you like my writing style and I'm excited to see what you think as the chapters move along.

Thanks for reading and leaving a review. I cherish and answer every single one.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: kaydub (Signed) · Date: June 20, 2009 01:14 PM · On: Chapter 12: Moves and Countermoves

I love the Badass Bella show. I can't wait to see how Edward reacts to Bella hanging out with Jake. 



Author's Response:

The Badass Bella show is fun isn't it? You never know quite what to expect. Edward's reaction to Bella's time with Jacob is...interesting. He's going to have to walk a fine wire to avoid erasing the progress he's made so far.

Thanks for reading and dropping me note with your thoughts. I appreciate it.

Much love,

~Lisa

Reviewer: JW11 (Signed) · Date: June 20, 2009 11:56 AM · On: Chapter 12: Moves and Countermoves

I love your characterizations of Edward and Bella. The story is melding beautifully and I feel like I am right there with them. Once again,well done!



Author's Response:

Oh, thank you so much. I'm trying to keep their voices true to the characters we know and love as much as possible while still helping them grow as a couple. I'm thrilled I was able to "take you away" and make you feel like you're in the story. The best compliment I could get.

Thanks for continuing to read and leave your lovely thoughts. I love it.

Much love,

~Lisa

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