I love your writing! This chapter rocked! I love the way you capture each character strengths and weaknesses..it's quite good..lol! Keep up the good work and I can't wait for the next update! I will be checking my email daily..lol..till next time!

Author's Response:

Well, to help with your email checking schedule, it will most likely be sometime next week before the next chapter is ready. Thank you for the pretty words. They made me smile. I appreciate your review each and every time. =)

~Lisa

Hafta respond to your review, since we're talking about the possibility of underwear fettishes...

It could just be that your mother, like mine, told you to wear nice underwear in case you got in an accident so you'd get the good E.R. doctors.

I wish I was making that up. 

 

Reviewer: Phae (Signed) · Date: August 18, 2009 08:01 PM · On: Chapter 18: Guys and Dolls

 

26 pairs of message panties? Twenty six??  Do you realize that Bella could go for nearly a month without having to wash her underwear?  And then there's the question of where she puts it all.  That many pairs has got to take up most, if not all, of a drawer.  And then there's the question of matching bras... I'm telling you, Bella has an underwear fettish.

I'm curious about the group date.  I'm not sure what Edward has up his sleeve.  Could be just about anything, but I'm leaning towards a sporting event.

I have two favorite parts in this chapter.  The first was Edward's thoughts about pushing around a grocery cart for Bella.  The second was Bella's thoughts about how the hole in her chest is gone.

Author's Response:

Haha - yes 26 may seem a little excessive. I only have about 6 pairs of message panties myself. However, I do have about thirty pairs of underwear in total - maybe I have an underwear fetish? I always match my underwear to my clothes and then I have lots of solid color bras so I can mix and match. It does take up an entire drawer in my closet though. ;)  I'm glad Edward's plans have piqued your curiosity, but I can confirm that it's not a sporting event. I'm so glad you mentioned Edward's trip to the grocery store with Bella. I loved that part and no one has mentioned it yet. His contentment of just walking up and down the aisles with her, pushing the cart, watching her pick out items - was just such a peaceful moment for me. I loved it, I'm glad you did too. And yes, Bella realizing the hole in her chest was just about gone was a nice revelation as well. Thank you so much for your review. It made me smile, and also wonder if I in fact have an underwear fetish. hahaha.

~Lisa

Author's Response:

HAha - well my bio-mom and I never had that kind of relationship. Undergarments weren't discussed, or much else personal for that matter. I think my underwear interest is because my husband loves to read them. ;)

~Lisa

Lisa,

The loving sibling rivalry between Alice and Edward is a touch of genius and I truly enjoy that aspect of this story. Rather than just being there for each other, they challenge one another in a way that only the two of them appreciate and I love that.

Jasper too is so enjoyable to read from your perspective, you've made him a believable character with more depth than SM ever gave him.

As always, I am looking forward to your next post!

Jess

 

Author's Response:

Again, thank you for your kind words, Jess. They mean a lot. I have to admit that I always felt SM's portrayal of the family relationships was lacking. She provided the blueprint, but I felt it was important to flesh it out further. I wanted to show that even immortal families will bicker and pick at each other; perhaps even more than human families as they have so much more time to get on each other's nerves. Jasper was another character that is near and dear to my heart. I wanted more than the hint of a bond between him and Bella that SM portrayed in the books. And unlike most stories, I never got the impression it was a sexual bond in any way. Those stories bother me as I feel they are completely missing the essence of that relationship. A bond doesn't have to be sexual. Sorry for the babble, but I read your words and get drawn into why I love these characters so much. I appreciate your reviews so much.

~Lisa

I hate Jacob. I was hoping this story didn't have him in it at all.

Author's Response:

I'm sorry you so completely dislike Jacob, but considering he is an important part of Bella's life I felt he needed his place in this story. However, it's a much less front burner role AND there is no love triangle in this story. He is her friend. That's it. Period. Still, the wolves cannot be ignored, especially as there is the large Cullen family is such close proximity - not to mention that we haven't heard the last from Laurent or Victoria. I hope you hang in there and give the rest of it a chance. Thank you for reading and reviewing - even if it has a character you prefer not to read about. I appreciate it.

~Lisa

See now if Edward is smart he'll ask her if she would like ot spend time with him on the weekend. Let her pick the activity. I like the way the story is starting to take on a more hopeful tone. *glances over both shoulders* Don't say anything but I like your Bella and Edward better than SM's. One of the many problems I had with Bella from New Moon was that she forgave Edward so easily and I definitely agree that the relationship they had was extremely unhealthy.

I'm very interested to see if and how you will work in Victoria, the Volturi, and the revelation regarding Jacob's phasing.

Author's Response:

Don't worry - I won't say anything about you liking this Bella and Edward *whispers* better. It'll be our secret. Obviously, the New Moon Bella bothered me too, as well as the unhealthy relationship. I mean Bella wasn't kidding in chapter 12 when she told Edward there probably wasn't a whole lot they really knew about each other. They went from virtual strangers to inseparable overnight, literally. Sure, he asked her questions for two days, but I always got the impression it was all superficial crap - what's your favorite color, what did you dress up for Halloween as when you were seven, etc... And all her questions were about being a vampire. Nothing about him really. They have so much to learn. I'm glad you're interested to see how the other factors from New Moon are incorporated - and they will be - but in a very different way than the book. ;)

~Lisa

 

Hmmm... these cahracters jsut run all over you don't they. I recomend a cattle prod, gets the cows to listen and do what you want, should work for fictional characters too. Now the appropriate thing to do is to realize he does not own Bella and its not HIS first date if HE's not there. HIS first date occurs when and if Bella agrees to go out with him. The fact that she went out with Jacob again has nothing to do with him. He needs to do the talking thing.

Author's Response:

Yes, the characters certainly dictate how they want things to go. The problem with a cattle prod is that if I try to force it the way I intended on them - they just go silent and stop talking. Then I'm stuck. So I let Emmett scribble all over my outline in green crayon and listen to what they want. I have to admit that it usually works out for the best anyway, but sssshhhh don't tell them that. ;) You are correct that Bella's night out with Jacob has absolutely nothing to do with Edward - and don't worry - she won't fail to remind him of that simple fact.

~Lisa

At least he's sort of starting to get it. Yeah its gonna be hard but the one thing I think is going to help out the process is don't try to recapture the old thing. The old thing is gone and unlike in SM's story it just went straight back to what it was before with minor differences, what is happening now is new and can be really good if he gets over himself.

In Edward's defence coming from some one who is bigger and stronger than most everyone I pal around with caution is always on my mind. So while I don't let it hinder any of my relationships its still there and Bella needs to appreciate what Edward would feel if he hurt her physically. But I reiterate he needs to get over himself and realize its not just about him. Its about him and her. I think he will despite being a romantically inept moron, he's not stupid, he'll figure it out. We hope.

Author's Response:

Yes, slowly but surely he's getting it. I don't that they can recapture the old thing as it was a fast and furious blaze of infatuation that segwayed into an all consuming and pardon me - but unhealthy love. Now, time and a lot of emotional pain has changed their relationship. I think this time it will be better, healthier, and much more fulfilling for both of them. Bella does recognize that Edward's strength is a serious factor to consider, but she also has the confidence that they can find a way to be physically closer without damaging her. And while I agree with you that Edward is a romantically inept individual, so is Bella really. Neither of them have ever done this before. I'm just sayin'.... ;)

~Lisa

Where are they heading for the group activity again?  Anyway, I love that Edward stepped up to the plate even though Alice manipulated him to it. :-)

Author's Response:

Haha - sneaky. They're headed to Seattle, but it hasn't been revealed what their doing just yet. I'm working on that chapter now though. It should be a blast. ;) As always, thank you for the review. I appreciate it.

~Lisa

awesome work - I love Bella's messages hehe

Wonder how the road trip/group outing is going to play out now?

 

Author's Response:

Thanks. I am apparantly the Underwear Author now. haha The group date should be a blast. As always, I appreciate the review.

~Lisa

Wellhe has morer self restraint than I do cause I would have been through that window in two seconds flat. To be immediately followed by her pressed up against a wall and me kissing her sinfully. I would show her just how much I wanted her and to be with her. But thankfully our dear Eddie has the self restraint of a monk.

Author's Response:

I think if he hadn't fallen out of the tree - he definitely would've gone through her window. As it was, he was so shocked he actually fell, and that she had known he was watching her that he wasn't quite sure how to react after that. Believe me, he's not a monk. ;)

~Lisa

I liked this chapter building up to the group date.  Set a nice pace and let me into their thoughts and some of what would normally happen in the Cullin house!  Great job!!

Author's Response:

Thank you so much. I wasn't expecting to write it - but they all just sort of took over. It's nice to see that even immortals families bicker and pick at each other. As always, I appreciate your review so much. Thanks.

~Lisa

Great chapter and great story!

Author's Response:

Thank you so much. As always, I appreciate the review. =)

~Lisa

Awesome!  Love your story.  I actually have underwear that says Wish You Were here.  I also have a pair that say Coffee? Tea? ME?!  Keep up the good work.  I just found your story but I am sticking with this.  I was nervous at first about reading it thinking it was going to be awful and a Jacob/Bella story but you have quite the skill with writing.

Author's Response:

I'm so glad you gave me a chance and that you're enjoying the story. I actually have the I love Bad Boys pair that Bella wore in chapter 11. I like your Coffee? Tea? Me? pair - that's cute.  Thank you so much for the compliment on my writing. I'm humbled and deeply appreciative of the time you took to not only read this, but also to leave me a review.

~Lisa