so your drama kinda became a primetime sitcom in this chapter, and i mean that in the best way possible. I could seriously watch the Cullen Show just as easily as i watched the huxtables as a child. Alice is super mischevious and so is my favorite vamp, Emmett.  

Oh, and did i say i love the more obvious sexual teasing in this chapter? 

A few of my favorite parts:

 

Rosalie gave Emmett a hard shove when his mouth dropped open. Because Rosalie had caught him off guard, he ungracefully fell right off of the sofa. 

"If you know what's good for you, you won't say another word," Rose hissed at Emmett in a lethal tone, but her mouth twitched in amusement. She placed one stiletto-heeled foot at the base of his throat as he gazed up at her from the floor. His eyes darkened with lust as he watched her slowly lick her lips. Emmett knew that Rosalie liked being in a dominant position, and damn if it didn’t make him hotter than a June bug in July.

"I'm at your mercy, babe, please do your absolute worst," Emmett crooned, and his voice was thick with raspy pleading.

It's august and i'm still a hot junebug after reading that. you dont say too much but its just enough to imply some panty-ruining-action, lol and then you know, i kinda love this couple for obvious reasons.

 

Bella looked over at Edward again, and she felt very naked under his smoldering gaze. There wasn't a hint of anger in his face as he stared her down. The heat she felt coming from him was a strikingly different kind of heat than she had encountered from him before. Goosebumps broke out across her body in response, and she backed up a few steps toward the front door.

“You’re bluffing,” Edward said in a low voice that rolled across her skin like silk.

 She let the tip of her tongue peek out of the corner of her mouth, and bit down on her bottom lip almost hard enough to draw blood. She hooked one thumb into the waistband of her jeans at her hip, and pulled out the hot pink string of her bikini panties. “I never bluff.”

She heard him inhale sharply, followed by a low rumble that erupted from his chest.

 

hmm.. yeah i think i like hotNbotheredward a lot!! 

Thanks for such an awesome read, still my favorite chapter so far!

 

Author's Response:

Mari - thank you so much. Your favorite parts were of course some of my favorite parts. ;) And if you liked the Cullen family sitcom in this chapter - the next one Guys and Dolls has even more family fun. I have determined that the Cullen kids are just a crazy bunch. Although, if you live with someone that long - you're bound to know ALL the right buttons to push.

~Lisa

loved it had a lot of heart to i

Author's Response:

Thank you so much. Esme is the essential mom. She deserved a little face time. I appreciate the review. =)

~Lisa

I think it was cool, i think it would be cooler if you post more soon!

Author's Response:

Aw, you say the sweetest things. I'm working as hard as I can to get more out sometime this week. =) Thank you so much for reading and leaving a review. I appreciate it.

~Lisa

Thank you so much this chapter.  This scene between Esme and Bella was quite the gift.  This was exactly the sort of character development that was missing from New Moon, and I for one, really needed to see this healing for Bella and the deepening of her relationship to Esme.

Author's Response:

You're welcome, although I have to admit that I had such a block on this chapter as it wasn't supposed to happen like this. It was only when I finally stopped trying to force the chapter that Esme quietly spoke up and told me this is what needed to happen. I have to agree. It turned out helping so many of the characters to heal and become more open to each other. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thank you so much for letting me know your thoughts, I deeply appreciate it.

~Lisa

I thought that Bella liking Somewhere in Time was a perfect choice for her oddly paired romance with Edward.

Author's Response:

Thanks. It's one of our favorite movies and it was the wedding music to seat out guests at our wedding. You're correct - it's one of the best old fashioned romance movies out there. I appreciate the review.

~Lisa

I doubt very much I'll be disappointed with the chosen venue. As soon as she said what was on the undies, I knew that it wasn't printed on the backside. That was incredibily naughty, I loved it.

Author's Response:

Hahaha - yes, Bella is developing the naughty side (in part because of Alice's influence) and is enjoying the effect it has on Edward.

~Lisa

Lisa ~

Oh my gosh - having been distracted by the kids I forgot about writing how much I love Emmett teasing Edward about the panties in Ch. 13 - can't believe I forgot!  I have now, of course, read the last two chapters in rapid succession and quite enjoyed the mayhem in the snow that ensued due to the hot pink ones and the aftermath with Rosalie and Emmett!  Too funny - but glad Edward won even if Rose helped!  :)  Those panties are all so funny and it has to be killing Emmett and Edward both, although for different reasons.  My fave so far is Bite This and fangs!

I love this Edward - this story of yours just makes me fall for him all over again!  *swoon!*  I loved their nostalgic date and the kiss and *ahem* other smooth moves by Edward.  Keep it coming, please!  :)  Looking forward to the group date!  Also, I love how Bella is helping Jasper and how he is growing because of it.  When you first mentioned they would all be in the Suburban, I thought to myself, "geez, I hope she's having Jasper drive!" LOL

I actually love Fern Gully as well and that she has the same name (although doesn't he spell it Crysta? - I also have green eyes and dark hair although having had three boys in five years, I don't have that pixie-like figure anymore!  It sounds like your hubby is good people too and funny to boot!  Now, I am going to go write as your story has inspired me to get back on that horse (or computer as the case may be!)

Can't wait for an update - but no pressure!  :)

~Krista

Author's Response:

Three boys in five years? Oh my Krista, you're a stronger woman than me. My kids are three years apart and apparantly God has decided that's all we need. ;)  You know, I'm actually not sure how they spell Krista in Fern Gully - but I think you're right. I think it is Crysta or something. Still, it's a pretty name and now I'll always have the mental image of her in my head when I hear from you. =)  The message panties have become quite the tag line for this story - totally not my intention, but funny nonetheless. I get emails and message from readers all the time asking me where to find message panties, or telling me about pairs they have come across or own in real life. It's so funny. I even had one reviewer tell me that she has so many stories in her favorites that she often forgets the plot lines, but when she sees my story pop up as updated she immediately knows it's the panty story. hahahahaah She called me the Official Twilight Underwear Author. Ooops - who knew panties would be so popular? ;)

I'm glad you're inspired to get back to the keyboard and work on your story again. I hope it goes well. I'm sending creative writing energy your way.

Until next time,

~Lisa

Lisa~

I'm sorry!  I didn't mean to skip Ch. 13!  The boys had just woke from nap and when I got back to the story later, I went straight into the next Ch.!  Why *shock* - did you have a lot of people skip reviewing it? 

 

I loved the kiss (of course) even if Alice did seem to interrupt at a bad time!  Plus, I like when Charlie gets all protective - reminds me off the shotgun scene in Twilight!  :)  Plus, I liked how you took Edward down a notch by having him just show up (arrogantly assuming she would be waiting), only to realize she was out with another guy (not on a date!) 

In other responses - when I write, I seem to write faster if I pick a song from my playlist that goes with the chapter and then play it over and over (talk about mental - it about drives my hubby crazy!  He's not nearly as supportive as yours sounds to be!)

Maybe I will take your advice and listen to my muse instead of fight with him over what's happening...although it will seriously mess up the conflict in the story, I must say.  Hmmm...how will I get around that?

Thanks again for the wonderful writing - like most readers on here, when the Saga was over and I had reread it 4 times, I felt a void.  One that has been nicely filled (to overflowing) thanks to all of you excellent writers on Twilighted!

~ Krista

Author's Response:

Haha - okay the *shock* was intended as a joke really. Believe me I understand about kids and mommy duty. Although since it was the a flashback of Emmett teasing Edward about falling out of the tree - I was a bit surprised you didn't have a comment. Not that I expect reviews, you have had just reviewed the chapters leading up to it. Did you know that Charlie's part was actually supposed to be an entire chapter and it was going to be chapter five? Charlie refused. See? I have to listen to the muse. I understand about your problem though - when you need to write it for the story to move forward it poses an extremely difficult challenge. I hope you resolve that block, I hate writer's block. Yes, my husband is my biggest fan, literally. Without his support - I couldn't really enjoy this passion as much as I do. He's the one pushing me to find a publisher and has even wrangled my kids into it by having them ask me when we'll be able to buy that island after I'm a best selling author. They're hilarious. ;)

Oh, and Fern Gully is one of his favorite animated movies ever. When I told him your name was Krista - he immediately said Like Fern Gully. I bet she's good people." He's adorable.

~Lisa

I'm so glad you let Esme have her way!  I love how you are fleshing out these characters so perfectly and I love that Bella and Esme now have the art connection!  You should put a "potential tissue alert" on this one as well, so that we can be prepared - it seems like anytime Bella and Esme interact that I get weepy!

Author's Response:

Ooops - sorry Krista, I always forget the tissue alert. However, I'm never sure what will emotionally touch people when I write, and what won't. So I don't want to issue a tissue warning and seem like an arrogant author that would assume people will be reduced to tears by reading the words I write. I'm glad you like Bella and Esme's connection becoming more tight knit. Thank you again so much for your lovely review. I appreciate it every time. =)

~Lisa

 

Loved it!  Everything - the calla lily and note, but especially how Bella gets revenge on four of them all at one time!  That was priceless really!  It preyed on all of their weaknesses in unison and showed them all that there really was a new Bella in town!  :)  The kiss by the river was excellent!  You have taken B/E's story to a whole new level and I love it!

In response to your other response to me about the characters taking over - I'm also writing a story (not B/E) and isn't it so cool when the characters take over?  Well, mostly.  Right now, I'm having a terrible case of Writer's Block, but it's because I have to write a chapter that one of the characters is disagreeing with - he doesn't want to do what I want him to - he just doesn't understand that he has to for the story to go on - so stubborn!  (When I talk like this to friends who aren't writer's they tell me I'm mental).  I'm stubborn, too, so I don't want to give in to him, hence the Writer's Blocak and the procrastinating by reading on Twilighted.  But I'm so glad I did - otherwise I wouldn't be hearing that your characters do the same stuff! Thanks!

Author's Response:

In chapter 4 - the cutting was something I completely didn't agree with. I tried everything I could to NOT write it. However, Bella refused to put out, so to speak, until I gave in. I've learned if I fight the muse I get nothing. It's easier and more productive for me to listen to them and follow where they want me to take the story. And yes, they can be quite loud. ;)

I'm thrilled that you like the way the story is going and I'm honored that you feel this has been taken to a new level for a B/E story. Thank you so much.

~Lisa

By far the I love bad boys panties and Edward falling from the tree were my favorite parts - brilliant!

Author's Response:

I have to admit that I actually own those panties. My husband is a cop and I just couldn't resist. ;) And when Edward fell out of the tree? I laughed until I was crying and had to push away from the keyboard for a while. I still crack up when I let myself think about it. I'm glad you loved it. =) Thanks for the review - like I said - keep 'em coming. They are my calorie free snack.

~Lisa

I'm finally stopping reading long enough to review thanks to Bella's session with Esme and Carlisle - I actually wept for Bella and Esme!  Way to go - thanks for that.  Anyway - I love this story and am going on to the next chapter!

Author's Response:

Thank you so much. The family dynamic is so important to me, I felt the SM provided such great characters, but didn't do much to flesh them out. I wanted to know more about them. I wanted to see them interact and bicker and fight like real families. Because if they will live so long they'd certainly know how to annoy each other incessantly.  As for Bella and Esme - I'm so glad you were touched by that scene. I must apologize for not issuing a tissue warning. It's been pointed out by many of my friends that I really should have. So here's a virtual box of tissues for you in case you need them in future chapters. ;) I deeply appreciate the time you have taken to not only read my story (which I'll admit is a lenghty process) but to also review. I'm humbled by your words and dedication. Thank you.

~Lisa