I cried!

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Sorry I am so behind in answering reviews!

 

That is a difficult chapter, I know!

 

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Completely amazing!! This story is an absolute must read and I'm glad that I did. You are an amazing writer and I hope you write some more.

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Sorry I am so behind in answering reviews!  I'm so glad you enjoyed this little tale!  If you haven't had a chance to check out ...Becomes the Swan yet, give it a go! 

 

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I"m sorry, I just can't buy the plot of this story.. I doesn't convince me, the reason why he left is pure BS.I like how it's written and I'm looking forward to disentangle the complications, but in the back of my mind while I'm reading there's always this thought of "and WHY did he leave, again??" Because his traumatized brother ripped off her necklace and then he accidentally pushed her into glass?! I mean come ON, some apologies and some distancing from Jasper would have been enough,no one gives up the love of their life for THIS. What if he was driving and got them in an accident and she would've been really hurt? Would he have left her because he can't be trusted behind the wheel? What if they were married when it happened?? I don't know..sorry, but this is just ridiculous. I'll try to build up a better reason in my mind when I'm reading this because honestly the story is worth it.

Author's Response:

Alas, this is a canon story, if AH, so this moment was used as a launching pad.  I agree that, in RL, this is not plausible and had I been writing a completely independent story, I would not have used this reason.  However, this is meant to mirror NM as much as possible within the confines of a human world and thus some moments, whether or not they would be how * I* would have crafted them, will tie back into that story. 

 

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I just finished the whole story plus all the epic epilogues! Thank you for sharing this sweet story with us!

I was really surprised to read your final note on converting this to a standalone story. I'm having a hard time seeing how it will work. Firstly, you'll have to establish every character and their relationships and history. SM could simply define a pair as "mates" and that did most of the work, but it's a lot harder to establish in human terms. Also, and this is the biggest hurdle I think, Edward leaving and his whole family following in a human story was only barely stretched to plausibility because of the SM backdrop. You would have to come up with a much better more believeable reason for this to work outside the Twilight universe.

I think you've written a beautiful fanfic about love, forgiveness and most importantly family. My humble opinion is that it should stay as a fanfic and you should put your wonderful talents towards a truly original story on those same themes that you illustrated so well here. I wish you the best of luck with whatever you do!

Author's Response:

Oh, hun, I completely agree with the first half of your comment.  The main *plot* of the story would be what I would think about converting, *not* the way we got to that plot.  I agree that it's not plausible other than in that context and had other ideas on how to separate them.  But please don't think I am not in full accord in regard to your comments.  I still haven't decided as there are other things under my belt.

 

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I loved your vase analogy - so beautiful - so perfect here... piecing a broken vase, one by one... showing patience, passage of time, and a deeper love.

Your writing style is awesome!

 

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Aw, shucks!  Your compliment means the world!

 

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What? What is Carlisle trying to do? Kick his flash and blood out of the house and send him to a remote cottage so B can stay with them? I am sure at this point E would do just about anything for B but still... that's not right... (I think..)

Well, E can come and stay with me- for as long as he wants, ya' know!!! :-)

I wonder if Carlisle feels guilty about what happened to B (due to his bad judgement and hasty decision to leave) or he has other motives... like the granddaughter he gets out of this deal...? I don't know, I am kinda pessimist!

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No, Carlisle isn't trying to kick his son out.  Not at all.  Actually, he's trying to get them closer together.  I know it's hard, but trust me:)

 

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I think B has every right to not trust E - at this point anyway. It's too soon- she's got so much to sort through- besides, E needs to learn a lesson or two here... and since you belive in happy ending, I am not too stressed out about them getting back together.... :-)

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I think a lot of readers forgot, in their original read, that it had only been mere days in which all of this occurred.  Not to mention, Bella had not  been witness to what Edward had been through while she was going through this and were VERY angry she did what she did.  However, I felt it was the right thing, at this time. 

 

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LOL - Jasper is so crude....  I loved this chapter

"... the moronic, overly moral, pussy of a douche nozzle, that I call my brother...”

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What catharsis for ME!  I get to write all the things I'd like to say to folks that tick me off in RL that I cannot because decorum will not allow it!

 

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I liked this chapter.. all Carlisle POV . I am kind of tired of whinning E. Like Carlisle said, leave the past in the past.. E is dwelling too much- he's got to move on and fix what he's ruined.

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Yes, he does.  But keep in mind, this is all happening in a matter of days.  E is struggling and it may take him a while.  But he will overcome.

 

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E's first visit with the baby was heartbreaking... sounds like he's matured overnight- Charlie finally accepting/forgiving E was epic!

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It's strange how some events do that.  Some realizations change us from children to adults, immature to mature, in the blink of an eye.

 

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another failed part of Carlisle's plan- not letting Charlie know beforehand and not preparing him - His outburst in ICU was unnecessary and caused nothing but jeopardizing B's condition.

Author's Response:

Methinks that Charlie would have exploded on seeing Edward regardless of whether or not he knew ahead of time.  But being prepared may have helped...

 

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another heartbreaking chapter with E in B's hospital room... Seeing her like that is the biggest punishment he could ever get for leaving her - he would never forget that even if B - by some miracle - forgives him

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No, he will never, ever, be able to purge that vision.  Let's just hope that he uses it for good in the end - the consequences of losing someone.

 

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now I feel sorry for E.... he needs a hug...

loved Esme here... she is very strong and loving

Author's Response:

This is about the time where Edward begins to become symathetic again.  Not that he is "redeemed" by any means, but he's a person, a kid, who made a msitake...

 

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