poor Rose!  I feel sorry for her

I hope he starts to show some interest in her before she explodes with sexual frustration :D

Author's Response:

LOL! I hope so, too. Thanks so much for the review!

Thank you for continuing to share this story.  I'm enjoying it so far!

Author's Response:

Thanks so much!

Thanks for the update! Great chapter. Poor Rose! I can't even imagine what it must be like for her. I loved the conversation with Esme--she really has been there, and it's good for Rose to get that point of view. Please update soon!!!!!

Author's Response:

Thank you so much! I hope to get chapter 10 finished and to my Beta, but it'll take about a week from when i get it to her to when it gets published on twilighted, and i"m still writing it! Sorry for the delay! but as always, thank you so much for your consistent reviews!

Great chapter!  I always thought Rosalie would visit her old family as well.  I wrote it into my story, knowing she had the toughest time with the change. 

Update soon!

Author's Response:

Thanks! Is that in Fate is a Cruel Harpy? i'll have to catch up, really!! and I totally mean to! I'll try to update soon.

I'm really enjoying this story - I've read loads of E/B pairing stories so it's really nice to read one focusing on different characters instead.

It's keeping me interested and I'm looking forward to seeing how it develops.  Well done!  Keep writing :-)

Author's Response:

Thank you so much! I love that you like it!  I'm glad you're enjoying it as much as I am! Thanks for reviewing!

Okay - I'm not going to oreo it this time but I do have a few impressions. I liked the idea of Rose watching her human family to see how they've moved on/grown up etc. However, I was caught off guard by her resentment initally. I had felt from reading the book that while, yes, her mother encouraged her to dress nicely to take her father's lunch to the bank that day - that Rose was thrilled with the idea of being married to Royce. My conclusion from your writing is that because of what happened to Rose at the hands of Royce she now resents her family's push for a good marriage. I guess she blames her human parents for her death as much as she does Royce - but she let them live. Interesting.

I really enjoyed the playful banter between Emmett and Rose - and it certainly shows that down the road it will be a lot of fun to read their relationship develop. I will say that I've seen the use of the word "cockblock" by a woman; it's usually between guys when they swoop in on the female their friend is interested. This is the second chapter (I think) where Rose has used it directed at Edward and while I don't disagree he is blocking Emmett's cock from getting close to Rose's pink parts - it still reads out of place to me. Edward's response was cute though.

Continue writing, each chapter improves and the story is becoming much more three dimensional.

~Lisa

 

 

Author's Response:

whoohoo... nothing gets by you does it? your beta skills must have some "kickassedness" to borrow your term, lol. You do not miss a beat.

I actually went back to clear up her feelings about her parents just now. Its not a large resentment, and she totally blames royce for her death, BUT these last two years of contemplation also leads her to believe that maybe if they didnt meddle in her life, it would be different, so she cant help but feel a little disappointed in them. She's always stuck in the what ifs.

You know i had to hold my mouth to keep from chuckling out loud at the cock and pink parts comment. As for the cockblock comment i guess i was trying to be funny. I realize thats mostly a guy's term but I actually belong to a super cool crew where the term is used "unisex-ly", for lack of a better word, lol.

Thanks for your diligent reviews. To quote a cold skinned gold eyed hottie,  they are "like a drug to me," my "own brand of heroin."

Sincerely,
Mariecel

Well you have me hooked. I just got done reading "Will you be ready when it comes?" by hopefulwager So i am changing pace from post breaking dawn to pre twilight. Rosalie is not my favorite character in the series but for some reason the way you portray her has got me hooked. I also almost pooped my self when i read your beta's name KariAnn that is my name minus the capital A.

Author's Response:

Why thank you! I'll be honest, Rose wasn't my favorite either! But I didnt want to start with a B/E fic like everyone else, and Rose and Emmett seemed to have some promise, so I chose her.  Now I like her and end up getting a bit defensive when I read other fics that make her sound awful! lol. I'm glad I got you hooked!

Haha, So that makes you the 2nd Kariann that I've met on Twilighted! Thanks for the review!

Oooooo... I CANNOT wait to see what Rosalie does when she hunts alone with Emmett!

The relationship you have created between Edward and Rosalie is just how a brother sister duo should be... friendly and helpful and then the next moment getting on each others nerves.

Cannot wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response:

Thanks so much! I would figure that Ed and Rose would have a love/hate sort of sibling relationship as they do in the books. I just sent chapter 9 to my beta so I'll post it for validation once I get it back.

I loved the idea of Rosalie checking in on her biological family.

Author's Response:

Thanks! I'll take partial credit for that, since the initial idea of her curiosity came from my friend! Thanks for the review!

Loved the image of a long-sleeved muscle shirt!  LOL...that describes him so well!  Poor Rosalie....her panties are gonna burst into flame if she doesn't get some soon! Who could resist the studly Emmett?? not moi!! :)

Nice to see that Emmett is finally sniffing around her - literally!  It must SUCK for the whole family to know - and sniff! - when you're horny!!

FYI:  it's a "breach" of vampire law,  a "peek" at what her parents are up to, a connection to her "past" life, :)

Author's Response:

Thank you! Yes, Emmett is a hottie. It'll be a while till she gets him, but it'll also be fun to watch her try, lol. Smelling the horny: Yes I often wonder about that, and many fics always write about edward smelling bella's arousal, but how about the rest of the family? Surely they'd know too!

and thanks for the FYI... I wish either my beta or I caught those things. Spellcheck/grammar on word can only take you so far, too.  I love that you keep me on my toes!

Love,

Mariecel 

Great chapter! Please update soon!

Author's Response:

Thanks so much! I'll post Chapter 8 as soon as I get it back from my beta!

Since you seemed to like the oreo method, I think I'll stick with it:

Cookie # 1: I love how you have centered Rose's existence down to one focal point - Emmett. Everything she does, from the way she checks her appearance, to her conversations with Edward, to her insolence at being left out of the hunts - is all very on point for not just Rose's character, but also how when a change happens for them it's absolute. Loved all the little details.

Creme: I was surprised to read how blase Rose came across in the telling of what happened to her. I adored Emmet's reaction “She’s an angel,” *sigh* - but I just thought it would have been more difficult for her to share this story, especially with her growing feelings for him. Of course the truth would be revealed, I just feel that given they are just getting to know Emmett - that Rose would have been maybe hesitant to reveal the gory details of her shameful death; and it was a shameful experience for her.

Also, and this is really just a nitpick, but this line, "As I mentioned before, it wasn’t anything sexual;" - sounds like she's having an external conversation instead of thinking to herself. I re-read the paragraph to make sure I hadn't missed her actually talking to someone else.

Cookie # 2: The last two paragraphs were absolutely stunning. Your descriptive writing during her epiphany were beautiful, especially that last paragraph. I really loved it. Great job.

Again, overall I really like the way the story is developing and look forward to reading more. Keep up the good work.

~Lisa

Author's Response:

Hey Lisa!

Cookie#1: Thanks! I do think as vampires you have really nothing better to do for all eternity. Why not make Rose be all about Emmett? In later chapters she will try her best to find distractions as her attraction/obsession/affection grows, but you will find many things about her change b/c of Em regardless.

Creme: Very interesting point. I actually considered it but only for a bit that she may be hesitant, but I myself (especially in my immature dramatic younger years) tend to be a bit more open about tragic things around people I'm just getting to know if i'm interested in them. I would figure, I guess, that Rosalie is just that self-centered enough that she would be searching for attention and sympathy for what she has gone through, no matter how it hurts--especially since Emmett showed his interest in something about her for the first time since he was "born into darkness." I think I may go back sometime to rework that part and explain it better. thanks for the honest feedback! It always gives me something extra to consider

I'll be going back to also change the "As I mentioned before" sentence too. I think I added that last minute.

Cookie #2: thank you for the paragraph love! I was trying to find a way to shed light on the fact that she has fallen in love, past the shallow looks and the vampire mating magic (that i would assume happens closely to imprinting). I'm glad it left a good impression!

As always, I appreciate your thorough reviews and i'm so glad you're enjoying it. I hope that my story keeps your interest as it progresses!!

-Mariecel

 

Hi.  I wanted to let you know that I found your story today and really enjoyed it!  Rosalie's epiphany was especially touching and I'm looking forward to more--thanks!

Author's Response:

thanks so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it!