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Reviewer: Lilly9999 (Signed) · Date: May 07, 2009 03:16 PM · On: Chapter 9 - Damsel in Distress
Enjoying the story. Can't wait for more!
Reviewer: demeterloves2 (Signed) · Date: May 07, 2009 01:39 PM · On: Chapter 9 - Damsel in Distress
This really is just too adorable. I'm quite excited for THE meeting! I can't wait for the first kiss either! :D lol
Reviewer: jasperluv (Signed) · Date: May 07, 2009 06:53 AM · On: Chapter 2 - First Taste
your chapter is exactly like the movie. unfortunately i have seen it ..........nothing new
Reviewer: queenfrizz30 (Signed) · Date: May 07, 2009 06:23 AM · On: Chapter 9 - Damsel in Distress
i love how you alternate from one point of view to the other, especially since you cover the same events, it lets us know what everyone is thinking and gives a clear idea about where things are heading.
Glad you got this chapter up so quick , I hope you havea fantastic holiday and update as soon as you get back, Please.
Reviewer: LordXeenTheGreat (Signed) · Date: May 07, 2009 05:29 AM · On: Chapter 9 - Damsel in Distress
Nice
Reviewer: roadkill2105 (Anonymous) · Date: May 07, 2009 12:01 AM · On: Chapter 9 - Damsel in Distress
well i don't really like it when the same stuff happens just from different POVs i prefer it to overlap a bit then move forward,
update soon
x x Cassie
Reviewer: Bella_Cullen884 (Signed) · Date: May 06, 2009 09:38 PM · On: Chapter 9 - Damsel in Distress
Great chapter. I loved seeing what Edward was thinking.
I can't for the next chapter. Please update soon?
Reviewer: sherylb (Signed) · Date: May 06, 2009 09:22 PM · On: Chapter 9 - Damsel in Distress
"ONLY THING BETTER WOULD BE IF SHE WAS IN THE FRONT" Very FUNNY-LOL!
Reviewer: goldeneyedgirl (Signed) · Date: May 06, 2009 09:09 PM · On: Chapter 9 - Damsel in Distress
I like it, but way too much of the last chapter, not enough new...I would have cut to his POV of them in the meadow and move on to a bit of the house...I feel like I just read the same chapter over again.
Reviewer: hc4metal (Signed) · Date: May 06, 2009 09:00 PM · On: Chapter 9 - Damsel in Distress
Thank you for updating so fast. I can't tell you how much I love this story. As I said before, horny Edward is too funny!!!
Reviewer: Sarahcini (Signed) · Date: May 06, 2009 08:56 PM · On: Chapter 9 - Damsel in Distress
I do love this but I do have ONE complaint.
I feel like spending a chapter on Bella's POV and then doing the next chapter on Edward's POV seems like a waste because it's just the same stuff. Maybe doing one half of the chapter in Bella's POV, and then continue the second part of the chapter with Edward's. Just something that was bothering me. But other than that..I am in love with this!!!! :) You are a very talented writer!!
Author's Response: While I see your point on rehashing the chapters, I feel it is very important to show both POVs. In the future, I might break the scenes up more between varying POVs to make more exciting. Though that might make it more confusing. But I intend to show each POV for evry scene no matter what. Basically, if Edward and Bella are in a scene together, I will write the scene twice. I don't know if you have noticed but I have changed some of the descriptive terms not just the thoughts to give variety. Anyway, I'm glad you like my writing and hope you understand as we get deeper into the story why I chose to write like this. Here's a hint: if I didn't write it this way, you would end up HATING Edward later and we wouldn't want that!
Reviewer: lavish1 (Signed) · Date: May 06, 2009 08:54 PM · On: Chapter 9 - Damsel in Distress
I am loving this story! The alternating POV keeps it fresh and it's so fun to get the different takes on the same situations.
I know you just posted, but can we have more please?
Reviewer: ptoricanjewel (Signed) · Date: May 06, 2009 06:25 PM · On: Chapter 8 - Free Falling
I'm not one to review stories...but I have to say that your story is great! I get so excited when I see an update...I can't wait for the next update
Have fun in Jamaica (i'm sooo jealous)
Reviewer: Lisa Jo (Signed) · Date: May 06, 2009 05:41 PM · On: Chapter 8 - Free Falling
Ok first I gotta say...BOOOO!!!! You are not posting the next chapter until a week from today? That so sucks! But love your story so far. The meadow scene was perfect, you were right, didn't even miss the lemons. Have a blast in Jamaica, can't wait to see where you take this. Keep up the great work!!!
Reviewer: teacher (Signed) · Date: May 06, 2009 04:35 PM · On: Chapter 8 - Free Falling
I really like the spin on things you have written in the chapter!!!!! GREAT JOB! Have fun on your vacation!
Reviewer: crackupmonkey (Signed) · Date: May 06, 2009 01:38 PM · On: Chapter 8 - Free Falling
Oh I love how this is coming along - can't wait to read the next chapter!
Reviewer: goldeneyedgirl (Signed) · Date: May 06, 2009 01:07 PM · On: Chapter 8 - Free Falling
yea! I like this story. Can't wait for more.
Reviewer: JessicaB923 (Signed) · Date: May 06, 2009 12:54 PM · On: Chapter 8 - Free Falling
Aww. Have fun on your trip, but please update when you can :)
Reviewer: Kirbs (Signed) · Date: May 06, 2009 12:20 PM · On: Chapter 8 - Free Falling
Ah so close to a confession, but you are forgiven as you gave us a wet half naked Edward, can't wait for Alice.
Reviewer: kng1986 (Signed) · Date: May 06, 2009 10:38 AM · On: Chapter 8 - Free Falling
This should be interesting. Bella is meeting the family before she knows what they are. I like the way their relationship is progressing.
Enjoy your vacation.
Reviewer: Viridis73 (Signed) · Date: May 06, 2009 03:47 AM · On: Chapter 8 - Free Falling
Looking forward to the EPOV.
Reviewer: cinemapersians (Signed) · Date: May 06, 2009 02:51 AM · On: Chapter 8 - Free Falling
This story is absolutely adorable. I'm really enjoying reading it. So cute!
Reviewer: jewelryjunkie (Signed) · Date: May 06, 2009 12:12 AM · On: Chapter 8 - Free Falling
Ah, I loved the way you sped things up a bit! And when Edward asked Bella to be his girl? So cute! I can't wait to see what's coming up next! I hope you also have fun on your vacation to Jamaica!!! Maybe some unexpected inspiration will hit you? I can totally see Emmett donned in rastafarian gear belting out some Bob Marley haha :)
Reviewer: MrsDoctor (Signed) · Date: May 05, 2009 11:40 PM · On: Chapter 8 - Free Falling
that was so good!!!
Reviewer: blooddrinker (Signed) · Date: May 05, 2009 10:37 PM · On: Chapter 8 - Free Falling
More Please!
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