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Reviewer: Jynxx (Signed) · Date: May 18, 2009 08:22 PM · On: Chapter 11 - Spanish Inquisition
Ohh, nice. I don't think I've seen a story that mentioned obervant Bella noticing no heartbeat.
I can't wait to find out how he gets out of this one, or if she will even be brave enough to ask...
Reviewer: bubbadoghouse (Signed) · Date: May 18, 2009 08:20 PM · On: Chapter 11 - Spanish Inquisition
Edward is putting it all out there WAYYY to fast. Slow him down, please. I need for my fanatasy life to be believable.
I Do like that this Bella has sense enough to be afraid.
I am really enjoying the story. Hope I didn't offend by my suggestion above.
Reviewer: hc4metal (Signed) · Date: May 18, 2009 07:21 PM · On: Chapter 10 - Impending Doom
So love this story
Reviewer: BethyBoo (Signed) · Date: May 18, 2009 07:13 PM · On: Chapter 10 - Impending Doom
But what if we WANT Alice to do our hair? lol. I can't wait for the next chapter! :)
Reviewer: folm (Signed) · Date: May 17, 2009 09:36 PM · On: Chapter 5 - Flirting With Disaster
The absolute best was Jasper (who is never my fav) in this chapter. I can really see him pulling Edward into the bathroom and asking him about all the different emotions Edward just experianced in a 5 minute span as compared to the last ninety years! So true! (well true for a fictional character, haha)
The locker scene was just great, too. Though poor Edward isnlt too discreet when he was checking out Bella, I thought it was funny!
Reviewer: AlliYoyo (Signed) · Date: May 17, 2009 09:27 PM · On: Chapter 10 - Impending Doom
It wouldn't matter if Alice came near my hair, I think it's shorter than hers! (and I'm talking canon, not the wig Ashley Greene was wearing in the movie)
This had me almost peeing myself with laughter. Especially Bella's comment to her breasts!
Reviewer: folm (Signed) · Date: May 17, 2009 09:10 PM · On: Chapter 4 - Perchance To Dream
Great Chapter. First, I love what you did with Tanya, which was "humanize" her, I suppose. Usually she is a slut/comic relief, but she is a vegetarian vamp (though, "vamp tramp", haha...That was funny!) so she is one of the good guys. It was nice that you gave her an important role here by having her give some great insight.
Edward thinks he would want to hear his mates thoughts? Ahhh, he is just a naive 17 year old after all...
Reviewer: folm (Signed) · Date: May 17, 2009 08:43 PM · On: Chapter 2 - First Taste
Sarcastic Bella is HILARIOUS- she makes me laugh out loud!
Loved the "alternating between a...stinky leper...can I have fries with that ?" line. Pure genius!
And she noticed Edward was acting seductive in the office. All this time I thought Mrs Cope was the pervert, but really it was Edward acting all "Don Juan"! Your Bella really cracks me up! Keep it up
Reviewer: folm (Signed) · Date: May 17, 2009 08:27 PM · On: Chapter 1 - Aural Stimulation
Great first chapter- I really liked how you wove in the movie scene. Bella's thoughts were great& your description of pre-wolf Jacob was spot-on. Of course Bella would find him cute. And you really made me feel for poor Edward ina houseful of romance!
Also, really good writing with a nice flow. I'm glad you didn't just re-hash the book/movie dialogue, I'm looking forward to seeing where you bring the story!
Reviewer: SuzyQ (Signed) · Date: May 17, 2009 01:01 PM · On: Chapter 10 - Impending Doom
Oh man, I hate it when a good story isn't finished! Can you update soon please? Huh? Huh?! ;)
Reviewer: accsmom (Signed) · Date: May 17, 2009 10:27 AM · On: Chapter 10 - Impending Doom
great chapter...
I think there are many many of us out here that "need medication" because we all would like to a) put edward in our pockets and keep him there and/or b) dry him off with our tounges...
LOVE IT!
Reviewer: achelle131 (Signed) · Date: May 17, 2009 10:12 AM · On: Chapter 10 - Impending Doom
nice way to leave us hanging! I see that you've veered slightly with pace from the books and movie. Makes things more interesting, becuase now we can't really expect what would happen next. Can't wait till your next chapter!
Mariecel
Reviewer: teacher (Signed) · Date: May 17, 2009 07:23 AM · On: Chapter 10 - Impending Doom
of course it has to end there!!!! Update asap!!!
Glad you are feeling better
Reviewer: Lola84 (Signed) · Date: May 17, 2009 06:48 AM · On: Chapter 10 - Impending Doom
I love it.
Reviewer: Lola84 (Signed) · Date: May 17, 2009 04:37 AM · On: Chapter 2 - First Taste
So funny! Hahaha
Reviewer: Lola84 (Signed) · Date: May 17, 2009 04:27 AM · On: Chapter 1 - Aural Stimulation
That was so cool! Hilarious, too...
Reviewer: queenfrizz30 (Signed) · Date: May 17, 2009 01:50 AM · On: Chapter 10 - Impending Doom
loved the Cullen interaction, Edward, Emmette and Carisle along with Alice and Bella made for a very entertaining chapter. I especially loved Bella perving on herself in the mirror. Had me rolling on the floor with laugher.
I can't wait to see what happens when we play meet the parents in the next chapter, I think Edward should have to meet Charlie as well, after all turn about is fair play. Either way I am sure it will be just as great as this chapter, so please don't keep us waiting too long.
Reviewer: Daylen (Signed) · Date: May 17, 2009 01:40 AM · On: Chapter 10 - Impending Doom
This has been so enjoyable so far that I don't really mind if Alice gets to my hair lol
Looking forward to Carlisle and Esme :)
Reviewer: Bella_Cullen884 (Signed) · Date: May 17, 2009 12:45 AM · On: Chapter 10 - Impending Doom
Awesome chapter. Alice is a great person and I know that this outfit she picked out for Bella will knock Edward off his feet. She'll probably think about the underwear Bella is wearing just to make him squirm! lol!
Please update soon?
Reviewer: alexis52 (Signed) · Date: May 17, 2009 12:19 AM · On: Chapter 10 - Impending Doom
please continue!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Reviewer: girls_got_bite (Signed) · Date: May 16, 2009 09:17 PM · On: Chapter 10 - Impending Doom
I like ite playfullness of thier banter with out EMO edward taking over. I was hoping they would be able to spend time alone,er, I mean nearly alone since I am glued to this monitor and don't plan on missing a thing
Reviewer: Ambra (Signed) · Date: May 16, 2009 08:39 PM · On: Chapter 10 - Impending Doom
Good chapter.
Reviewer: Stellarrose (Signed) · Date: May 16, 2009 06:17 PM · On: Chapter 10 - Impending Doom
Whoo-hoo! Can't wait till she meets Esme and Carlisle...and I'm REALLY looking forward to their first day back at school as a couple!
Reviewer: gjmb2000 (Signed) · Date: May 16, 2009 04:27 PM · On: Chapter 10 - Impending Doom
Keep going... This is good
Reviewer: Jamieson (Signed) · Date: May 16, 2009 03:59 PM · On: Chapter 10 - Impending Doom
Hehe, this is a fun romp into AU territory. Although at times it can be a bit repetitive, I like being able to get both their POVs on the events. Looking forward to reading more!
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