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Reviewer: nautical (Signed) · Date: June 10, 2009 06:37 AM · On: Chapter 9 - Besieged
I love this twist with Bella not believing Edward. Ah, more angst to come!
Thank you for mentioning Jasper's trick with Edward in the end notes. How brilliant!
Author's Response: Yup, more angsty goodness! I think I'm an angst addict!
I was really excited about my explanation of how they got rid of Edward, but then when I actually wrote it into the story it sounded a bit tacked on. I was so disappointed when I couldn't include it!
Glad you appreciated hearing it
Keep reading!
Reviewer: Cullen Concession (Signed) · Date: June 10, 2009 06:36 AM · On: Chapter 9 - Besieged
Very well written. I truley enjoyed this. Now to build Bella's confidence!
Reviewer: silviababy (Signed) · Date: June 10, 2009 06:34 AM · On: Chapter 9 - Besieged
loved it
Reviewer: MarilagML (Signed) · Date: June 10, 2009 06:24 AM · On: Chapter 9 - Besieged
This is a good chapter. I just wish you show how Edward tried to follow Alice, Jasper and Bella. That could've been 2-3 chapters. Anyway, this is a good chapter.
Author's Response: Yeah, I guess I suffer from a spot of impatience perhaps? After the last chapter, I was in a hurry to get to this one, and there were no major plot points in the intervening time that couldn't comfortably be covered at the start of this chapter.
Possibly I could have gone back and written a chapter to go inbetween, but although it sounds exciting, those three months were pretty repetitive, since Alice and Jasper used exactly the same tactics every time they got rid of Edward, and Bella simply spent the time slipping deeper and deeper into her zombie coma. Not actually that exciting to write. Oh well, if I do a rewrite once I'm finished, I might add a bit there!
Thanks for the review, and I hope you keep reading and enjoying!
Reviewer: Eoin Cullen (Anonymous) · Date: June 10, 2009 06:21 AM · On: Chapter 9 - Besieged
This chapter was great and I loved the different POVs! I really think that the different perspectives made the chapter flow smoothly, like it made it 3-D.
I know that Alice is acting in what she feels is Bella's best interests, but she is really beginning to irritate me. Perhaps her behavior will improve...
I really hope that Bella realizes that Edward truly loves her. We'll see :)
Great chapter of course!
P.S. I love how Jasper used his gift to get rid of Edward. Thanks for the explanation!
Reviewer: Jynxx (Signed) · Date: June 10, 2009 06:11 AM · On: Chapter 9 - Besieged
I like your story a lot. The emotional bonds between them are very strong, you did a good job in communicating that. I do hope Bella will come to truly believe Edward loves her.
Reviewer: witchykitty (Signed) · Date: June 10, 2009 06:09 AM · On: Chapter 9 - Besieged
Poor Bella must be in pretty bad shape to not believe Edward... :(
Reviewer: Autumnmissa (Signed) · Date: June 10, 2009 05:59 AM · On: Chapter 9 - Besieged
The good start to bad times? Bella's denial and guilt sit very bad with me and I wonder what it will take to make it work out. OK, more please!
Reviewer: BeCullen1 (Signed) · Date: June 10, 2009 04:24 AM · On: Chapter 9 - Besieged
I like going back and forth with POV. I also like really long chapters. Great job. This story is great. Keep writing and update again sooe.
Reviewer: Sheeijan (Signed) · Date: June 10, 2009 03:26 AM · On: Chapter 9 - Besieged
Bella's downward spiral is really extreme and scary. I can't help but wonder what would have happened if left to continue. Poor Jasper! He must be exhausted from holding Edward off, trying to help Bella, and trying to get Alice to see sense.
Thank goodness Edward didn't screw up with Bella in the first few seconds of meeting! It could have been another catastrophe.
Thanks for the update!
Reviewer: LordXeenTheGreat (Signed) · Date: June 10, 2009 02:52 AM · On: Chapter 9 - Besieged
nice
Reviewer: helenleiten (Signed) · Date: June 10, 2009 12:57 AM · On: Chapter 9 - Besieged
Love the story...
Finally they got together, but Bella should really start thinking that maby Edward really loves her...
Please update soon...Can't wate!
-Helen
XOXOXOXO
Reviewer: Phoenix Rising (Signed) · Date: June 09, 2009 11:09 PM · On: Chapter 9 - Besieged
Jeez, Bella...Edward told you he loves you even when Alice wasn't there! And you still think he's faking? That girl needs a good slap sometimes, I tell ya. And I'm happy they're back together, at least for now...it'll take time for Bella to believe him, though. And I really liked the JPOV, he's always interesting to hear from.
xoxo Sarah
Reviewer: Cedwardsgirl (Signed) · Date: June 09, 2009 10:06 PM · On: Chapter 9 - Besieged
yay!
Reviewer: Daylen (Signed) · Date: June 09, 2009 10:01 PM · On: Chapter 9 - Besieged
ahh Bella, Bella, Bella... wonder how long it'll be before she realises it's real? What will be the final event that causes it? hehe
Reviewer: artsyfartsy (Signed) · Date: June 07, 2009 07:41 PM · On: Chapter 8 - Taking Sides
oooh angsty goodness! I can't wait for Edward's begging and wooing to begin--make him work for it! This story is so great--thanks for writing it for us to enjoy!
Reviewer: Bkwrm (Signed) · Date: June 07, 2009 05:40 PM · On: Chapter 8 - Taking Sides
Well, some people think Alice overreacted - but if she's certain that Bella's life or sanity are at stake, good for her!
Bella NEEDS someone completely on her side. Frankly, Edward (Canon and AU) gets enough coddling as it is. Especially from Esme and Carlisle.
Sure, they're nice to Bella - but because she was Edward's "mistake" and they want to make HIM feel better. Alice is the one who loves her for her.
Reviewer: xchic (Signed) · Date: June 06, 2009 03:54 PM · On: Chapter 8 - Taking Sides
OOoohh... next chapter, the reencounter!!huho, cant wait. i looove it. update soon, please.
Reviewer: mkeup1 (Signed) · Date: June 05, 2009 01:04 AM · On: Chapter 8 - Taking Sides
Love it, thanks
mkeup1
please get the next posted
Reviewer: Evanescent Wishes (Signed) · Date: June 04, 2009 08:47 PM · On: Chapter 8 - Taking Sides
Burn, Edward, Buuuurn. xD Thanks for this excellent conflict. As you can see, I dislike Edward. =]
Love this story~!
Reviewer: sherylb (Signed) · Date: June 04, 2009 07:52 PM · On: Chapter 8 - Taking Sides
SO SAD!!!!!!!BELLA AND EDWARD ARE BOTH HURTING SO MUCH!!!!!HE IS GOING TO HAVE TO DECLARE HIS LOVE FOR BELLA BEFORE SHE CAN OPEN UP TO HIM AGAIN!
Reviewer: Daylen (Signed) · Date: June 04, 2009 06:04 PM · On: Chapter 8 - Taking Sides
sigh... Edward better have a plan that doesn't involve the word "but" because it won't matter how good his other words are, if Bella hears that one, it'll reset the clock again :S
Alice was on fire! It's so sad to see her torn up on whether she made a bad decision or not - and hopefully she also took some of what she said to Bella to heart for things that really were not within her control.
Reviewer: BeCullen1 (Signed) · Date: June 04, 2009 05:09 PM · On: Chapter 8 - Taking Sides
Nice chapter. Keep writing and update again soon.
Reviewer: sweetness4683 (Signed) · Date: June 04, 2009 03:44 PM · On: Chapter 8 - Taking Sides
Interesting turn! Wasn't expecting! Can't wait for the next chapter!
Reviewer: Psykojinx (Signed) · Date: June 04, 2009 02:08 PM · On: Chapter 8 - Taking Sides
Wow... Alice is being a bitch
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