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Reviewer: jmullen1515 (Signed) · Date: May 11, 2009 11:28 AM · On: Road Trip
I like where this story is going- im hooked! please update soon
Reviewer: hc4metal (Signed) · Date: May 11, 2009 10:25 AM · On: Road Trip
Can't wait to see what is going on. I hope Edward is the reason!
Reviewer: PBJilly (Signed) · Date: May 11, 2009 09:13 AM · On: Road Trip
I'm enjoying this! It is a little different having such a loquacious Bella! I can't wait for more chapters.
Jill
Reviewer: gentlereader (Signed) · Date: May 11, 2009 05:28 AM · On: Road Trip
Who the Crap!?@#% Wouldn't she smell Edward in her room, his scent was always so strong.AAAAAAAAAAAGGGGGGGGGGRRRRRRRRRRR Enjoying the read by the way ;-)
Reviewer: monipulator (Signed) · Date: May 11, 2009 04:13 AM · On: Road Trip
can we have the rest? so far it's good.
Reviewer: adipocere (Signed) · Date: May 11, 2009 03:23 AM · On: Road Trip
A nice chapter, one minor error though near the beginning.
“I knew it!” Mike laughed smugly.
After a bought of Angela beating the poor GPS unit that kept telling us to turn when we could see the hotel, we finally arrived.
The phrase would be "after a bout" not after a bought. Just thought you might like to know for future reference.
Author's Response: Thanks for pointing that out! I've corrected that now. :-)
Reviewer: JuliannaOphelia (Signed) · Date: May 11, 2009 03:05 AM · On: Road Trip
haha we all need an in-head friend like that. well written
Reviewer: gentlereader (Signed) · Date: May 08, 2009 12:20 PM · On: A New Day
hhhhmmmmmmm
Reviewer: twilightgirl98 (Signed) · Date: May 03, 2009 05:40 AM · On: A New Day
Are you gonna finish it. Please pretty pretty please. I make you cookies. Not litteraly. PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Author's Response: Mmm cookies...... Don't worry, it's still very much being worked on!
Reviewer: jemimag (Signed) · Date: April 27, 2009 09:53 PM · On: A New Day
Great story! I love a little mystery :) I hope you make Bella just a little less forgiving if it does turn out that Edward is the stalker :)
Reviewer: tillynat (Signed) · Date: April 27, 2009 10:57 AM · On: A New Day
i can't wait for the next installment. i love it so far, LOVE IT
Reviewer: goldeneyedgirl (Signed) · Date: April 27, 2009 03:44 AM · On: A New Day
I'm going to follow this story, I like it so far, I can't wait to see what happens. I'm glad Jacob isn't involved.
Reviewer: Kels1986 (Signed) · Date: April 25, 2009 12:21 PM · On: A New Day
8) I really like this AU beats emo bella any day
Reviewer: shadowxkissed (Signed) · Date: April 25, 2009 10:21 AM · On: Seeing The Light
I like this! I always wondered what it would have been like if Edward really had been watching over Bella in New Moon.
Reviewer: palsyjohn (Signed) · Date: April 25, 2009 09:21 AM · On: A New Day
I like your story. Is Edward going to really be there? Can we just avoid that whole cliff-jumping incident? Keep writing, this is interesting and well-thought out I believe!
Reviewer: InLustWithEC (Signed) · Date: April 25, 2009 07:43 AM · On: A New Day
Hmm, youhave me intrigued. I'm signing up for the long haul.
I like your style of writing and I want to see if it's Edward that has truly come back. If so why? And why is he hiding?
Can't wait for more. I hope you update soon.
Reviewer: InLustWithEC (Signed) · Date: April 25, 2009 07:37 AM · On: Seeing The Light
Very nice beginning. Sad but I'm glad she has Angela. You have made Angela a great friend for Bella, and that is exactly what she needs right now.
I'm on to read your next chapter :)
Reviewer: hc4metal (Signed) · Date: April 25, 2009 07:22 AM · On: A New Day
Love the story, please update. I hope it has a happy ending with Edward.
Reviewer: shelly551 (Signed) · Date: April 25, 2009 07:17 AM · On: A New Day
This is the first chance I have had to read this story and I am hooked. Very nicely done ,I think I am not the only one who has been wondering about that (blank) period during New Moon. I am wondering tho if Edward was not in her room or watching her from a distance ummm. Anyways more please.
Reviewer: Bellinda (Signed) · Date: April 25, 2009 06:48 AM · On: Seeing The Light
I remember when one guy broke my geart few years ago, I was so attached to him then he sudeenly stopped calling as if we never met. I was devastated and crying all the time. Then I realized what if I just pretend that he died, from some accident of some sort. I used it as form of therapy to believe the non reality of the situation. It worked... " thanks to self hypnosis :)
Reviewer: hc4metal (Signed) · Date: April 07, 2009 06:56 PM · On: Seeing The Light
good stuff
Reviewer: EternalDusk (Signed) · Date: April 07, 2009 12:34 PM · On: Seeing The Light
Wow. This was so different! Good job, btw. Very good writing. I like how you dont use the word "I" in every single sentence like some authors do. Nice job, keep 'em coming ! As you get more chapters, people will be more inclined to read them, so just keep on rolling 'em out!
Reviewer: cherry (Signed) · Date: April 07, 2009 06:13 AM · On: Seeing The Light
more, please!
Reviewer: elphabacy35 (Signed) · Date: April 06, 2009 01:23 PM · On: Seeing The Light
This story was mentioned on the Cullenary Coupling forum today, so I thought I would check it out. I really like it so far!
Reviewer: ponygirl (Signed) · Date: April 06, 2009 11:21 AM · On: Seeing The Light
Very nice work, I can't wait to see the rest. (I couldn't wait, and followed the link to the other site to read what you already had written.) You have a much more real Bella than the real one, because let's face it, SM's TW Bella can be severely shallow and unreal.
(Before I'm hanged, I do feel SM matures greatly as an author by the end of the series, and can't wait to see how great she is in ten years! Hopefully she'll let her stories really come to a climax, instead of 400 pages of build-up and everyone just goes home.)
Your Bella is more realistic and I like your story line a lot. However, I do miss Jacob (he's so funny, and this story really needs a pragmatic "normal" sarcastic person of some kind in it.) Will Jacob show up at some time later? Even if just a cameo?
Thanks and keep writing....
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