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Reviewer: VampSK (Signed) · Date: March 20, 2009 09:40 PM · On: First Night
What a great update! I can't wait to read more!! :)
Reviewer: SmilyKylee (Signed) · Date: March 20, 2009 06:24 PM · On: First Night
ha. LOVE THIS STORY! : P lol
Reviewer: Camimae707 (Signed) · Date: March 20, 2009 02:56 PM · On: First Night
hahaha!!!!!!!!! UpDtE sOoN!1!1!1!1!1!1! LoL
Reviewer: sunsunhot7 (Signed) · Date: March 20, 2009 10:58 AM · On: First Night
I'm glad she's starting to open up a little and I'm glad Rose doesn't hate her. Though if she keeps sitting on Emmett's lap she might be in trouble ;)
Reviewer: cherry (Signed) · Date: March 20, 2009 10:20 AM · On: First Night
that was nice.. i cried.. please please update soon
Reviewer: RedRedRed (Signed) · Date: March 20, 2009 10:08 AM · On: First Night
Great chapter great detail Great lol
Reviewer: Mrs Jasper Hale (Signed) · Date: March 20, 2009 08:26 AM · On: First Night
I love this story. So glad to read an update.
Reviewer: Salanna (Signed) · Date: March 20, 2009 04:33 AM · On: First Day
I think I read about one third on this story when it was originally posted, for some reason I never got to the end. Wonder why because this is really good, enjoyed these three first chapters very much and I will certainly read every single one this time!
Didn't think about it before, but Esme and Carlisle show an immense trust in the maturity and behavior of their children, leaving Bella alone with them during her first day at the house. Considering how immature teenagers can be, and how unsecure Bella is, it wouldn't take more than a few thoughtless words to make her feel unwelcome. I was also a bit suprised at how easily Bella accepted close physical contact with a half-naked, basically unknown man, however nice he might be. It must have been the first time ever she was that close to a man, so perhaps she should have freaked out a bit?
Could you also perhaps try to fix the overlong blank spaces between lines and paragraphs? Less scrolling makes for more fluent reading!
Reviewer: Jaydee (Signed) · Date: March 20, 2009 03:09 AM · On: First Night
aww, I want to be a part of that family! That's it, I've decided that I'm going to have 6 kids too! I can see some of the little changes you've made to the story compared to last time, it was good before, but the extra changes make it even better :) great work!
Reviewer: blacksinglet (Signed) · Date: March 20, 2009 02:32 AM · On: First Night
am really really enjoying this! one of the better fanfics i've read! keep it coming!!!
Reviewer: Jenimafer (Signed) · Date: March 20, 2009 12:26 AM · On: First Night
Awww i forgot how much i love this story ^-^
Reviewer: Chuckles (Signed) · Date: March 19, 2009 09:53 PM · On: First Night
Okay, so when i first found out that you were rewriting the story, i was pretty pissed off. How dare you not update for months and then take away the whole story so we couldn't even reread? Those were my first thoughts, but i dont think i ever really was going to actually start the story over, so im actually glad that you're rewriting. Good luck, and i hope the story turns out the way you want it to!
Reviewer: Kathryn Mason-Sykes (Signed) · Date: March 19, 2009 09:44 PM · On: First Night
I've not read the previously posted version of this story, and I'm excited to see where it goes from here!
Reviewer: missloonylovegood (Signed) · Date: March 19, 2009 08:53 PM · On: First Night
Awww Bella's starting to fit in! :)
Reviewer: Krrristi (Signed) · Date: March 19, 2009 08:46 PM · On: First Night
i really like it a lot, but all the different points-of-view are very hard to follow. i always forget who i'm reading. i would probably stick to two or three for clarity's sake.
Reviewer: Twilightlurrvver (Signed) · Date: March 19, 2009 07:35 PM · On: First Night
OMG super nice!!!!!!!
Reviewer: Autumnmissa (Signed) · Date: March 19, 2009 07:12 PM · On: First Night
I almost wish that I had the other version to compare it too. I liked that one and one of the apreals was all the stuff done and written that I just kept on going, now it feels like it is dragginf when it is clipped so short and I have to wait. Still like the story, just impatient. Thanks again!
Reviewer: mysticsavantpixie58 (Signed) · Date: March 19, 2009 06:56 PM · On: First Night
aaawww! dont stop! please?
Reviewer: iced blood (Signed) · Date: March 19, 2009 06:36 PM · On: First Night
i really hope bella chooses to stay with them! and i love this story!
Reviewer: ConcreteIris (Signed) · Date: March 19, 2009 06:28 PM · On: First Night
I gave a seven, mainly because I liked the origional, but i will give this new version a try also, so it might change. Although i really dont see a difference so far. Unless your making it where he actually married Tany in later chapters.*hint* *hint* *hint*
Reviewer: amom2my3kids (Signed) · Date: March 19, 2009 05:57 PM · On: First Night
Keep it up..
Reviewer: katydid13 (Signed) · Date: March 19, 2009 05:41 PM · On: First Night
Nice chapter!
Reviewer: Dulcinea21bella (Signed) · Date: March 19, 2009 05:10 PM · On: First Night
I love it!
Reviewer: xparawhorextwerdx (Signed) · Date: March 19, 2009 04:53 PM · On: First Night
And I'm falling in love with this story all over again...
Reviewer: amom2my3kids (Signed) · Date: March 18, 2009 04:15 PM · On: First Day
Very good so far, I usually don't like the stories that don't follow the books but this is actually really interesting.
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