I like your story very much! I think you got Alice quite good !

 

I'm looking forward to the next chapter!

 

Yours, Cathy

wow

Your story is really heartbreaking, actually really scary to read, but I cannot stop reading it.

Keep on writing!

Poor Edward and alice. Having to see what's happening to bella and not being able to stop him.

UPDATES=LOVE!!! PLEASE PLEASE finish this! I'm DYING here! Its moving WAY too slow!!!!

Author's Response:

Sorry for only updating about once a week. I'm a mother to 4 young boys and I just moved to a new house so I'm really busy all the time. I'll try to keep it to at least once a week.

This story makes me really sad which I guess means you're doing a good job.  I would like to see Alice getting a glimpse of how to find Bella, even if they can't get there just yet for some reason.  I hate seeing poor sweet Bella around that monster for any length of time.  Please let Edward kill him soon and make it really, really painful!

I liked the Alice POV with the song as the blocking mechanism.

Awww.  I love this story and get ever so happy when I see it updated.  Can't wait fo rmore!

Awesome chapter!!!! :D

This is a very interesting twist to the story ... I am very scared for Bella ... I couldn't help but cry when James did those things to her. She must be going through hell now! I am curious as to what made you come up with writing this kind of story? The destruction of Bella's innocence... I need to find out what happens next ... this is such a sad story and it is killing me that I have to leave at a point where Bella is in James' hands ... Please update soon !! :(

Author's Response:

Thanks for your review. I like darker stories. The suspense that builds up is better. Don't worry though this story is eventually a love story, so it won't be dark all the time. Sometimes you have to move through the darkness to find the light in your life. : )

Wow!  I can't believe what you're putting poor Bella through.  She may survive this physically (may), but how will she survive it psychologically?  Also, how is no venom entering her bloodstream from James licking all the cuts he's making on her body?  It doesn't take much for the change to start.  That's the part of this story I question.

This is a dark tale, but it's very well written.  I hope Edward finds her soon.  How much more can she take and ever be normal physically and mentally again?

Author's Response:

Thanks for your review. Psychologically, James is beating Bella down. He wants her for his own mate as the ultimate proverbial slap in the face to Edward. He imagines the Cullen's finding them and Bella being so submissive to him that she doesn't want to leave him. I plan to answer all the questions fully but it's a matter of getting it right through whatever POV I'm writing from. As for the venom in Bella's system, James doesn't realize that there is any entering her system and neither does Bella. Ha hasn't factored any of that in. It will become a central part of this story in later chapters.

Please stay with my story. This is chapter 4 after all, and I have planned for at least 12 chapters in this story if not more. I promise things will become clearer as I move through the plot. 

Omg u HAVE to hurry & update! I can't wait til they find his sorry ass! Ppplllleeeaaasssseeee hurry!

Poor Bella, dying to see what happens next...

Poor Edward