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Reviewer: Burntcore (Signed) · Date: October 16, 2009 02:57 PM · On: Chapter 18 - Christmas Surprise (v)

OMG that was awesome!  B&E getting it on with Charlie, Sue, Renee & Phil all there and able to hear!  HILARIOUS!


Can't wait for the next chapter!!

B&E REALLY need to talk about their relationship and what's going to happen when her 'contract' is done.

Reviewer: be_my_escape (Signed) · Date: October 16, 2009 01:55 PM · On: Chapter 18 - Christmas Surprise (v)

Great chapter. The wedding was beautiful and Alice's speech was great. Poor Bella, being subjected to dancing and then being caught having sex by her parents, lol. Can't wait to read more. Looking forward to Jasper's proposal. Please update soon.

Reviewer: KiwiEdfan (Signed) · Date: October 16, 2009 01:17 PM · On: Chapter 18 - Christmas Surprise (v)

Ive read this entire story over the past 24 hours.

Im really enjoying it.

Anyone who can bring tears to my eyes over a dang bridesmaid speech, has to be good in my books.

Looking forward to more chapters!

Reviewer: crashed jewel (Signed) · Date: October 16, 2009 01:10 PM · On: Prologue - Unwanted Opportunity

my favorite line: Jessica Stanley, Bella decided, definitely needed to be punched in the face.

 

haha i can't tell you how many times i've thought that at my work with different people!

just found this story and i'm hooked! :)

Reviewer: Bellina (Signed) · Date: October 16, 2009 11:04 AM · On: Chapter 18 - Christmas Surprise (v)

hahaahahahahah, that was almost as funny as the dildo in the airport!

Reviewer: xtwilight3 (Signed) · Date: October 16, 2009 10:31 AM · On: Chapter 18 - Christmas Surprise (v)

great chapter! cant wait for the next update!

Reviewer: Lalaranya (Signed) · Date: October 16, 2009 09:58 AM · On: Prologue - Unwanted Opportunity

oh yeah, just membered, check out the song whatever it takes by leona lewis, it kinda makes me think of what vella might think about the situation about their relationship :)

Reviewer: Lalaranya (Signed) · Date: October 16, 2009 09:57 AM · On: Chapter 18 - Christmas Surprise (v)

omg!!! i was NOT expecting that!!!! omg!!! lol. And if that were me, I would've just said 'okay, we're gonna go out, come back through the door, as if thatwas the first tim we came back, because tht never happened okay?' then i would've just left dragging edward behind and not given them a chance to answer LOL love this! :D

Reviewer: RedRedRed (Signed) · Date: October 16, 2009 09:37 AM · On: Chapter 18 - Christmas Surprise (v)

hey cool chap =] lol as if their parents heard them lol ;p

Reviewer: katydid (Signed) · Date: October 16, 2009 09:31 AM · On: Chapter 1 - A Not-So-Hot Start

Nice, you would think they'd place everything in a box that belonged in the bag.  However, I feel her pain...I always get stopped at security...so, I'm use to them going through my items, waiving a wand over me, having a female feel me up, and standing in the new scanning machine like I'm about to get hosed down due to radioactive contact.  However, one time, the man went through my carry-on with a wand and gloves, I was on my way to see my boyfriend for the weekend.  So, the carry-on had all the needed items for the weekend (including lovely matching underwear).  That man brought each piece out the bag and held it up...after trying not to look around (and turn flaming red), I finally thought, 'at least they're clean and match!'

 

Just started to read, and had to review!

 

Kate

Reviewer: sweetishbubble (Signed) · Date: October 16, 2009 05:19 AM · On: Chapter 18 - Christmas Surprise (v)

loved it!

Reviewer: hchambersmomx3 (Signed) · Date: October 16, 2009 03:44 AM · On: Chapter 18 - Christmas Surprise (v)

That was freaking hilarious

 

Reviewer: Suz (Signed) · Date: October 16, 2009 01:56 AM · On: Chapter 18 - Christmas Surprise (v)

loved it!!!! I'm glad they're back to being Edward and Bella again.....

Reviewer: romancaholic (Signed) · Date: October 15, 2009 11:44 PM · On: Chapter 18 - Christmas Surprise (v)

What a wonderful wedding.  Alice's speech was so beautiful, I found myself shedding a tear or two.  Bella and Edward trying so hard not to draw attention to themselves.  Bella dancing in stillettos that's a major miracle she stayed upright.  Always good to have a strong arm or two around you to keep you standing whether than spawled on the floor.  Bella should have tried at least a little for the bouquet. Edward got the garter.  Interesting his remark about it might be them some day.  Both replying with Hopefully.  That's a good sign they are on the same page.  Talk about a surprise for Bella and Edward.  Bella said go to Edward's room, no, no one is home, so against a wall next to the room her family are residing.  Talk about ackward, it took a lot of guts for Edward to introduce himself.  I know I would have been totally modified.  I wouldn't have been able to face my parents if that happened.  Both of them have guts just flowing with the flow.  No big deal, not ashamed of what they did, embarrassing yes, Bella didn't let her dad pull any macho punches.  Alice making a big deal about her underwear on the floor, talk about bad timing for that statement.  When they awake, it will be a marvelous Christmas.  Esme is so sweet having them flown to Denver to spend with Bella.  Such a loving and thoughtful woman, she mothers everyone. 

Reviewer: LisaF29 (Signed) · Date: October 15, 2009 10:09 PM · On: Chapter 18 - Christmas Surprise (v)

Great chapter!

Reviewer: PixieTails (Signed) · Date: October 15, 2009 10:02 PM · On: Chapter 18 - Christmas Surprise (v)

*squeals* How embarresing! Oh my gosh. Lol.

I love where this is going. Keep up the great work!!!

Reviewer: chtx (Signed) · Date: October 15, 2009 08:57 PM · On: Chapter 18 - Christmas Surprise (v)

Could you imagine?????  That was too funny.  Thanks for updating so fast.

Reviewer: ekimmuh (Signed) · Date: October 15, 2009 08:45 PM · On: Chapter 18 - Christmas Surprise (v)

Oh how embarressing! lol. Although I kind of guessed the parents were going to show up after reading the title of the chapter.

The wedding and dancing was sweet, and the Edward/Bella dynamic was great as always. Can't wait to read more. :)

Reviewer: jparker160 (Signed) · Date: October 15, 2009 07:26 PM · On: Chapter 18 - Christmas Surprise (v)

HAHAHAHA!!! How freakin embarrassing!!!!  Can't wait for more.......

Reviewer: SammyJo (Signed) · Date: October 15, 2009 07:21 PM · On: Chapter 18 - Christmas Surprise (v)

LOL funny!!!  OMG I could so see that happening.  Great job.

Reviewer: lain16 (Signed) · Date: October 15, 2009 07:12 PM · On: Chapter 18 - Christmas Surprise (v)

great chapter i hope they can reach an understanding about a long term relationship bella seems so unsure all the time

Reviewer: Irritable_Grizzzly (Signed) · Date: October 15, 2009 06:58 PM · On: Chapter 18 - Christmas Surprise (v)

Sheesh. I cannot think of ANYTHING more embarrassing than having your parents listening to you have sex with your hot hockey bf against a wall...errr...what was I saying? Oh yeah. Embarrassment. Right.

Good job! I'm glad that things are finally getting out in the open, but there just seem to be more loose threads hanging and stuff they're not totally dealing with in that "let's see what happens" kind of thing.

I would imagine the fit will be hitting the shan any minute now...

Reviewer: eifeltwr (Signed) · Date: October 15, 2009 06:51 PM · On: Chapter 18 - Christmas Surprise (v)

hahaha....great chapter!!

Reviewer: sherriecherries (Signed) · Date: October 15, 2009 06:43 PM · On: Chapter 18 - Christmas Surprise (v)

holy crap...that would suck....

can't wait for more

Reviewer: iced blood (Signed) · Date: October 15, 2009 06:42 PM · On: Chapter 18 - Christmas Surprise (v)

OMG that must have been so awkward... but i can't wait for alice reaction to jaspers proposal!

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