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Reviewer: sdcullen (Signed) · Date: April 08, 2009 07:39 PM · On: Coming Undone (V)
20 stars!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! *MWAH*
Reviewer: CullenDreamer (Signed) · Date: April 08, 2009 06:19 PM · On: Coming Undone (V)
I've never seen a 17/18 year virgin MORE anxious to perform oral sex than Bella. If blow jobs were an Olympic sport Bella would bring home the gold every time. I mean in fanfic in general, not just in your fan fic. I think I'd pay good money to read a fan fic where Bella was actually hesitant and shy about it, like a freaking average girl with no prior experience. Sorry, sorry...just a little frustrated at fanfic Bella. I am enjoying your fic, love Edward perving on the bra...very nice touch. And the breast foreplay was nice, too often that gets ignored in lemons - so bravo. Looking forward to more. Here's hoping that maybe, just maybe Bella isn't an expert at either fellatio or swallowing on the first time *sigh*
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review and please don't apologize for giving your opinion, especially in my house. It can only make me a better writer. To be fair though, I don't think I've ever written Bella GIVING oral. I'll have to check my other fics but I don't think I have, I think I may have in a dream sequence in my AU fic, but that's an entirely different ball game LOL.
Again, thank you for reading and taking the time to leave a detailed review! Please, stay tuned.
Reviewer: Twilight_obessesed (Signed) · Date: April 08, 2009 05:03 PM · On: Coming Undone (V)
As always great story i read all three today.. loved them... Edward thinking naughty what else could a girl ask for lol. I cant wait to see what happens next
Author's Response: Thank you so much TO! Glad to see you found your way over to this little fic of mine! *MWAH*
Reviewer: snowgood (Signed) · Date: April 08, 2009 04:24 PM · On: Coming Undone (V)
Hehe, pervward! Precious! I am so having fun with this story!
Author's Response: Pervward, heehee! I'm having fun with this too, so I'm glad you are enjoying the ride along with me! *MWAH*
Reviewer: hc4metal (Signed) · Date: April 08, 2009 03:25 PM · On: Coming Undone (V)
Great story. Alice cracks me up - perv all over it - haha
Author's Response: LMAO!! Thank you!
Reviewer: 4ever17 (Signed) · Date: April 08, 2009 03:10 PM · On: Coming Undone (V)
HAIL TO THE PLUNGING BEAST!!! GGGAAAHHH...I WANNA BE BELLA!!!
Author's Response: LMAO!! Thank you very much! Please, stay tuned!!
Reviewer: slg (Signed) · Date: April 08, 2009 02:58 PM · On: Coming Undone (V)
These types of stories are so much fun to read & just the mental images of RP doing all of those things are incredible! This chapter made my day.
Author's Response: Awww thank you! It makes my day that I could make your day! *MWAH*
Reviewer: 4ever17 (Signed) · Date: April 08, 2009 02:55 PM · On: Perversion (V)
MORE MORE MORE!! And Hurry please!
Reviewer: 9twilightlover9 (Signed) · Date: April 08, 2009 02:44 PM · On: Coming Undone (V)
awesome :]
Author's Response: Thank you!
Reviewer: PatzRob (Signed) · Date: April 08, 2009 02:34 PM · On: Coming Undone (V)
I dont have an account on ff.net so i didnt comment there but i loove your this story,show me and testing to pieces! u are talented im an a huuuuge fan!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for coming over here to review!! That really means a lot ot me! *MWAH*
Reviewer: LovesShinyVolvos (Signed) · Date: April 08, 2009 01:52 PM · On: Coming Undone (V)
GAH! Eddie is such a tease! *pouts* AMAZING!...as always
-LovesShinyVolvos
Author's Response: Thank you so much!! *MWAH*
Reviewer: Anazarel (Signed) · Date: April 08, 2009 01:39 PM · On: Coming Undone (V)
Whoa, Edward is a pervert!
ANd very hot, too... Mmm...
Author's Response: LOL! Thank you!!
Reviewer: RobyPattinson (Signed) · Date: April 08, 2009 12:32 PM · On: Coming Undone (V)
The rest, the rest, the rest !!!!!! :D lol really great
Author's Response: LOL! Thank you!
Reviewer: CassLVStwilight (Signed) · Date: April 08, 2009 12:19 PM · On: Coming Undone (V)
LOL great chapter...alice is so funny. love EB
Author's Response: Thank you! I do love Alice!
Reviewer: campbti (Signed) · Date: April 08, 2009 12:17 PM · On: Coming Undone (V)
Excellent. I love how slow this is and very in character. Very nice work, I look forward to more.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! Please, stay tuned!!!
Reviewer: Dulcinea21bella (Signed) · Date: April 08, 2009 11:50 AM · On: Coming Undone (V)
I am so loving this story. I love that he kept her bra!!! They are working they way up!! I am eager for more!!!
Author's Response: LOL! Thanks so much for reading and taking the time to review!! I really do appreciate each and every review.
Thanks again!!! *MWAH*
Reviewer: vampgirl138 (Signed) · Date: April 08, 2009 11:42 AM · On: North of the Border (V)
Woo! Way hot! I love how Alice calls in the middle of everything! lol Great job, can't wait to read more
Author's Response: Thank you so much, vampgirl! I'm glad you are enjoying it!! Please, stay tuned!!!
Reviewer: Phoenix Rising (Signed) · Date: April 08, 2009 10:57 AM · On: Coming Undone (V)
Wow, that chapter was as awesome as getting second base action from Edward. Well, almost as awesome, anyway...very few things could come close to that, to be honest.
LOVED it! I can't wait to read what they do next!
xoxo Sarah
Author's Response: Oh girl, don't worry I agree, nothing would compare to actual second base with real life Edward. Or would it be real dead Edward? You know what I mean LOL! Thanks for reading Sarah! *MWAH*
Reviewer: sassyf (Signed) · Date: April 08, 2009 10:48 AM · On: Coming Undone (V)
LOL! That was great! Can you imagine having an Alice in your life???!!
Author's Response: Thank you sassy! Yeah, I would LOVE to have an Alice watching my back.
Reviewer: lily_zen (Signed) · Date: April 08, 2009 07:46 AM · On: Coming Undone (V)
“Do you honestly think I don’t know that you snatched her bra off of the floor and stuck it in your pocket so you can perv on it later?”
All I have to say to that is, "LOLLLLLLLLLLL."
Very cute. I'm looking forward to more.
Author's Response: LOL, thank you so much!! Please, stay tuned!!
Reviewer: candycane323 (Signed) · Date: April 08, 2009 06:21 AM · On: Coming Undone (V)
Yay yay yay Edward!!!!!!!!!!!! :) And YAY Bella - she is finally getting some! Haha. Very in character writing for everyone - you are great!
Author's Response: Thank you so much, I'm glad you are enjoying the ride! Please, stay tuned!!
Reviewer: IslandWoman221 (Signed) · Date: April 08, 2009 05:40 AM · On: Coming Undone (V)
Delightful. I think I'm enjoying it as much as the characters!
Author's Response: I'm glad that you are!! Thank you for reading and please, stay tuned!!
Reviewer: mzvez (Signed) · Date: April 08, 2009 05:25 AM · On: Coming Undone (V)
Love it!!!! Can't wait for more as usual.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading!! Please, stay tuned!!
Reviewer: Hermia (Signed) · Date: April 08, 2009 05:04 AM · On: Coming Undone (V)
I love the inner pervert in Edward. I really do.
Author's Response: LOL, me too! Thank you for reading and please, stay tuned!!
Reviewer: yihyu (Signed) · Date: April 08, 2009 04:47 AM · On: Coming Undone (V)
great piece. please continue writing although I did not understand why Bella could have two orgasms simply by the friction of Edward's leg.
Author's Response: Thank you for reading!
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