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Reviewer: bismarckfairy (Signed) · Date: May 23, 2009 07:17 PM · On: Gregoria & Scars

In chapter 6, when Edward asks Bella where she was last night, she just tells him that she was out. Then Edward asks her, "Out where?" But in this chapter, he just asks, "Out?"

 

Also, I feel awful for Bella. I don't think I've ever read another story where shes in worse shape. And poor, well-meaning Edward is making it much worse.

Reviewer: Dream Painter (Signed) · Date: May 23, 2009 06:49 PM · On: Gregoria & Scars

I love your story, but I just can'y wait untill Bella tells Edward the truth.

Anyway, UPDATE ASAP!

Reviewer: hc4metal (Signed) · Date: May 23, 2009 06:44 PM · On: Gregoria & Scars

Love the story. I like a jealous Edward.



Author's Response:

Yeah, I love a jealous Edward - though I wouldn't say he's really jealous in this chapter. Perhaps a little bit, but he's more just really angry at them for his incorrect assumptions.

Reviewer: Lola84 (Signed) · Date: May 23, 2009 05:51 PM · On: Gregoria & Scars

Cool chapter!  Can't wait for another update... I hope he gets to Bella soon.

Reviewer: dadaptl (Signed) · Date: May 22, 2009 07:30 PM · On: Mortifying & Horrifying

You'r story is amazing, I couldn't stop reading till I got to the last chapter and now I can't wait for more. Thank you!!!

Reviewer: alecjanes (Signed) · Date: May 22, 2009 06:32 AM · On: Mortifying & Horrifying

this nis a good story you should keep writing it.

Reviewer: Whispering_Willow (Signed) · Date: May 21, 2009 02:32 AM · On: Mortifying & Horrifying

Must have more soon please.

This story is amazing =)

Reviewer: Rahveryn (Signed) · Date: May 20, 2009 12:36 PM · On: Mortifying & Horrifying

Gah, Hope she has fun at the concert, and I cannot wait for the Culen's to realise her past.

Reviewer: hc4metal (Signed) · Date: May 18, 2009 07:35 PM · On: Mortifying & Horrifying

Love the story. UPDATE SOON@@@

Reviewer: BethyBoo (Signed) · Date: May 18, 2009 12:57 PM · On: Mortifying & Horrifying

I'm totally in love with your story! It's addicting! It's been randomly popping into my mind since I first came across it! PLEASSSSSE continue writing and please quickly grace us with the next chapter!

Reviewer: TheSnowHasMelted (Signed) · Date: May 17, 2009 09:14 PM · On: Mortifying & Horrifying

 im so excited for the concert, i love the boys!!

by the way, where did you get the name Xavier? it sounds like I've read it somewhere before. maybe in AV or something.

Reviewer: KRo (Signed) · Date: May 17, 2009 08:29 PM · On: Mortifying & Horrifying

Great chapter as always.  I'm glad that most of her classmates didn't see the scars but I will be interested to see if Edward tries to confront her about them.  He is totally going to follow her to the concert so I wonder what will happen there!

Reviewer: obsessive_reader11 (Signed) · Date: May 17, 2009 07:21 PM · On: Mortifying & Horrifying

im soosoosooooo looking forward to the next chapter and more ExB!  this is a really unique story and im fullly digging it!  and, by the way, trev sounds pretty damn sexy.

Reviewer: mrebeccan (Signed) · Date: May 17, 2009 11:40 AM · On: The New Kid

God I am so entranced in this story, thanks for sharing it :)

Can't wait for the next update

Reviewer: Luckyirish (Signed) · Date: May 17, 2009 03:30 AM · On: Mortifying & Horrifying

It just gets better and better... I love all the new carachters they are so cool, excellent chapter, well done!

Reviewer: Cathy (Signed) · Date: May 17, 2009 12:33 AM · On: Mortifying & Horrifying

well now I'm really curious if Edward noticed that there 's something unusual about the scars! I think he was angry at Mike and the other guys who were staring at her chest!

It's really horrible what Laurent and James did to Bella!

I'm looking forward to the next chapter and I'm curious what Edward will think when Bella is away the whole weekend !

Yours, Cathy

Reviewer: RedRedRed (Signed) · Date: May 17, 2009 12:02 AM · On: Mortifying & Horrifying

Hey cool chap =] Awwww wpoor bella at the end

Reviewer: Evi_Cullen (Signed) · Date: May 16, 2009 11:22 PM · On: The New Kid

definatly write more this is good, poor bella. she's so strong. stupid mike and the others, except ang. but bella doesnt even care about just flashing them, more about her scars. the branding? does it say anything or look a certain way? I read this all the way through like tonight, it was great.

 

keep up the good work.

Reviewer: Bella_Cullen884 (Signed) · Date: May 16, 2009 10:22 PM · On: Mortifying & Horrifying

Great chapter. I wonder when Bella and Edward will talk and sort these misunderstandings out.

Please update soon?

Reviewer: Kitten the Wolf (Signed) · Date: May 16, 2009 09:26 PM · On: Mortifying & Horrifying

You should do some more with Edward's point of view. I like it, keep going and update soon.

Author's Response:

Actually, I hadn't planned on it, but the next chapter will be in EPOV. =)

It's actually pretty interesting so far; I've got 4000 words written. I had planned on staying with BPOV, but a few people were asking for Edward's POV. I thought that you could just learn everything through Bella, but seeing Edward's thoughts is interesting, too.

I'm glad you like the story! (:

Reviewer: tri (Signed) · Date: May 16, 2009 08:08 PM · On: Mortifying & Horrifying

thanks for the up date very good chappie ! nice tease with mike  longing for the next up date!

Reviewer: Un0wen (Signed) · Date: May 16, 2009 07:51 PM · On: The New Kid

i like that this Bella appears to have some backbone unlike most of the others. She also isnt always waxing lyrical poetry about Edwards beauty which is frankly a refreshing change. Hopefully this Edward will have to work hard to win this Bella over with more than just his dazzle.

I like how you've taken the scenes from the original and spun them in a totally different but believable way.



Author's Response:

Yes: I definetly like that this Bella is stronger, independant, and doesn't need Edward's support. She's her own person and is not infatuated by Edward. I definetly enjoy writting this, where Bella isn't so dependant and not absolutely infatuated by Edward (rather, she truthfully hates him). I'm enjoying that Edward's falling in love with her, yet she's only hating him more. It's kind of more like a normal relationship where they're slowly getting to know each other, first. I'm glad that you're liking this story :)

Reviewer: kng1986 (Signed) · Date: May 16, 2009 06:09 PM · On: Mortifying & Horrifying

I feel so bad that Bella is petrified of the Cullens all of the time and she doesn't need to be.  I hope somehow  she can relax even for a little while.  I guess Edward wouldn't think it was proper to ask Bella about her scars but I wish he would. 

Reviewer: Twilightlurrvver (Signed) · Date: May 16, 2009 05:23 PM · On: Mortifying & Horrifying

oooh im so glad you updated!! and cant wait for the enxt update!! :P

Reviewer: domisgone (Signed) · Date: May 16, 2009 05:04 PM · On: Mortifying & Horrifying

:) Great update!

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