i loved that she overheard! Its totally weird of course living in a house of vampires with super hearing and smell, but it totally works. Rosalie is such a little brat! I found myself very annoyed with her during Breaking Dawn and I don't blame Edward for thinking of putting her through a window! Ugh.  I also like how you handle the whole concept of choice with out being preachy. It is Bella's decision and think you show that well. I wish Edward was not so self loathing, but he is what he is! I am sure you have read CF mom's Fractured Hearts, he grows a lot in that story which is SO satisfying =). Can't wait to read more and will def check out in pursuit of normalcy. Have a wonderful day

MS

Author's Response:

Haha, I'm actually cfmom's beta for Fractured Hearts, so I've definitely read that story.  ;)

I'm glad you like how I handled the chap!  ;)

I am dying for an update, please, soon!

Author's Response:

Unfortunately, that's not going to happen any time soon, as this story is on a temporary hiatus until I've completed In Pursuit of Normalcy.  Thanks so much for reading!

I appreciate the way that you handled this event.  Some of the other stories have Edward saying things to her that I know he would not have said to her, being the gentleman he was.  It definitely felt like it was in keeping with how SM portrays the two of them.  Others may like it the other way, but it is easier for me find it believable the way you wrote this.  Thanks, and great job.

Author's Response:

Why thank you so much!  ;)  He does get a bit less... gentlemanly with his language in a later chap, but what Edward would or wouldn't say during the height of passion is all a matter of opinion, of course.  Thanks for reading!  =D

Hi!

I was delighted to discover your story, have really been enjoying fractured hearts by cf mom and saw yours!  Anyway, i thought this was really good. I wrote a similar one myself, have not been brave enough to upload yet but would love your feedback when I do.  I thought it was totally how I would have imagined it, you really captured both of them =) Thanks again! 

Author's Response:

Ah.  :)  Lisa (cfmom) and I beta for each other.  It's a beautiful relationship.  :)  I'm very glad you enjoyed this, and of course I wouldn't mind giving you some feedback.  Just let me know when you upload it!

So I'm curious - Did you find this listed under our series, The Dirty, Horny Girls Chronicles?

Nice, You are such a talented writer.  This story is fantastic.  Will you give us anything in Jacobs POV? 

PS I love In Pursuit of Normalcy, It's the best Jacob/Nessie fic on this sight!(That I've read so far)

I have you in my fav's so I will be checking out everything you write :)

Author's Response:

Wow, thanks for reading and reviewing on all my work!  It's very appreciated!  I'm glad you like this one too, and I plan on picking it back up after I've completed IPoN.  Don't know if there will be anything from Jacob's POV, though, since I believe that very few writers can actually pull off multiple "voices" convincingly, and I'm already pushing it by writing both Edward and Bella.

Again, thanks for reading!

I'm confused about how she can push her tongue into his mouth in this story, and also how in the world he can safely ejaculate venom-laced semen into her....

Overall though I'm amazed at how well you captured Edward's tones and thoughts. I came over here from LJ, where I've kind of DEVOURED In Pursuit of Normalcy over the past 3 days.

Love your writing! It's so hard to find GOOD fanfiction, and yours is great :)

Author's Response:

Thank you so much!  I'm very glad you enjoy my writing!

About the semen thing - I guess you're going to have to take that up with Stephenie Meyer.  I've always wondered that myself, but it's canon, obviously, or there would be no pregnancy.  About her tongue... I'm not sure what your issue is with that - unless you're worried about her cutting her tongue on his teeth?  Lol, honestly, I just didn't think about it being an issue.

Thanks so much for reading!

You got inside Edwards head perfectly, thank you for this chapter, when I read the book it drove me nuts that I didn't know what was being said between Edward and Kaure.

Author's Response:

I'm so glad you thought so!  :D  I was rather proud of that chap, actually.  ;)

i love these stories.

 

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Thanks!  :)

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WHAT DO YOU MEAN THIS STORY IS ON HIATUS?!?! LEAVE US THERE LIKE THAT IS EVEN CRUELLER THAN SM'S STRATEGIC FADE OUTS!!!

Coming back to a bit more sanity - I just read through what you've got written of this fic in a single, breathless sitting. FINALLY! I've read several versions of the honeymoon but this is the first that honestly felt in character for me. This was the Edward and Bella I've grown to love so very much. You've captured their voices beautifully. Particularly Edward's – which is a POV I'm endlessly fascinated with but is rarely done convincingly. You've even managed to give it the feel of someone who is equally conversant with the way people spoke both now and in the past. What I mean is, he has the wonderful mixture of the old and the modern that is such an intriguing part of him.

Oh and you said you were uncertain about the 'talking dirty' thing. Actually, that totally worked for me. There was enough lustful embarrassment that made it flow well. And I for one could totally see him wanting to hear her spell it out – if only because it isn't proper. Let's be honest, there isn't much about sex that is. ;-)

 

I really, really, really hope you'll pick up again with this very, very soon. I'm absolutely enthralled and so delighted to finally have someone write honeymoon smut that WORKS.

 

Now though I feel I have no choice but to go and take a peak at what other fic you've written because you are just too good – even if it is just after three am and I have class in them morning and am certainly going to regret this then.  *g*

Author's Response:

Lol, I just wanted to say thank you for taking the time to leave a well-thought-out review!  It's really very appreciated.  I'm particularly very pleased that you thought I captured Edward's voice - but in all honesty, that's the very reason I had to take a hiatus from this fic.  Edward POV is exhausting when dealing with angsty material.  I just couldn't bring myself to be excited about writing it anymore, so I took a break in order to concentrate on IPoN, but I plan on returning to it after IPoN is completed - which might be a while because according to my outline I still have 18 more chaps after the one I'm currently writing.

Anyway, again, thank you so much for reading and for taking the time to let me know what you think!

Loved this!!!

Author's Response:

I'm so glad!!!  :)

Excellent in-canon writing.  THANK YOU!

Author's Response:

Thank you very much for reading!  :D

Loved this interpretation.  Thank you!!

Author's Response:

Thank you so much!  I"m very glad you enjoyed it!  :)

Another great chapter, especially that Bella is aware that Rosalie main concern is the baby, not her. I hope in future chapters you'll include Edward hearing Nessie's thoughts. Also, I know you're focusing on E+B POV, but interesting events that happened to Jacob between book 2 and three were mentioned only in passing, and I'd like them included, please: 1. The Cullens reactions to Nessie (E. says to B. they all love her, but how did the ones who feared her get over it). 2. Jacob's return home to tell evrybody that he's imprinted on a blood sucking baby. 3. Sam coming to talk to Carlisle after he said he'll kill the whole family.

Author's Response:

Wow, those are all very good suggestions!  However, I hesitate to write more than E & B POVs in one fic.  The reason for this is that it's difficult enough to capture one "voice" that readers are familiar with convincingly, but having to distinguish two voices (which I'm already doing) is even more tricky.  I would also love to see Jacob's "behind-the-scenes" moments, but I'm afraid that would take the focus off of what I'm trying to accomplish with this fic.

Anywho, thank you so much for reading!  I'm so glad you enjoyed it thus far!  :)