So, I've gone back to my normal method of reviewing for this chapter. Have you seen the behemoth's that I give giselle for Ithaca? Well, here's yours.
Firstly, the image of Edward shuffling his feet like a little boy is much cute. And Bella's comment about Edward maybe manipulating his mommy a bit was gold. You can never know with that boy - I certainly wouldn't put it past him to make 'big eyes' to get his own way. In many ways he really is the 'spoiled youngest' of the Cullens.
Esme is completely 'don't you 'Mother' me, young man!'. She is awesome. She completely runs that household. She's like the discipline parent - Carlisle's like the one who buys them things and is a totally pushover, we all know it.
This bit confused me at first, it took me a few seconds to unravel the proper meaning - "but you are well aware that was all my doing." <- it's the 'that', it threw me for a second. I was waiting for something to follow the 'that' instead of immediately understanding that the 'that' was in reference to the situation. i.e I expected something like 'that it was all my doing'. It's perfectly grammatical and fine the way it is, I just figured you'd want to know. It threw me out and I just had to backtrack for a minute.
"I had fought too hard to rebuild Edward's confidence to let her knock him back down again." - wow, possessive and somewhat bitchy Bella. I'm glad Esme fought back, actually. Because despite what Bella is thinking, it didn't come across as Esme trying to knock his 'confidence' or whatever. They both need a good smack across the head, sometimes.
"I forbid you both from ever doing it again!" - you tell them, Esme. Just curious, what are the consequences if they break this rule?
"Carlisle, sensing discord in his home, came downstairs, hopefully to placate Esme. When he reached us, he took once glance at his wife's face; his eyes grew large, his hands came up in the universal sign of peace, and he backed away slowly until he reached the stairs, and fled back to his office." - this is still the best thing since sliced bread.
"I love you Son" - pretty sure that 'son' isn't capitalized, unlike Dad or Mom.
"My son's being perverts" - You've used a possessive instead of a plural there.
"We’ve been trying this novel concept of communicating lately" - way to smart-mouth Mommy, Edward. 'Novel concept' indeed.
Poor Esme. Eclipse must have been so tough for her, I'm glad she got a chance to let some of that emotion out.
It's hilarious how bowled over Carlisle and Esme were about Edward and Bella behaving rationally for once. You could knock them both over with feathers.
"graduation present for relationship maturity” <- missing a '.' at the end of at sentence.
“It’s not often we get to act like parents to you all, so close your smart mouth and let us enjoy it.” <- Carlisle, you're always Edward's daddy. And I bet that wasn't the first time 'smart-mouth' has been used by him in reference to Edward.
And yeah, Edward didn't need that mental image of his parents role-playing. However, I'm not dirty-minded, so instead I shall wonder if at any point Edward has been grounded by them. The look on his face if they did would probably be hilarious...
Bella finally realizes how good she has it with the Cullens. It took her long enough. In Eclipse I spent half the time wondering why she wasn't leaving Edward for Jacob because all her reactions were pointing towards it...
Yay maturity on the Jake talk front. I'm very glad that their maturity is being shown, not just told...
That said, the marriage thing is certainly an example of 'old' Edward and Bella peaking through.
Okay, now I shall continue any further comments on the thread.