“You really think the sun rises and sets out of Edward’s ass, don’t you? Emmett fulfills the ‘E’ role just fine, so feel free to get lost Edward. We’ll keep Bella, and you can go host Sesame Street and tell them E stands for your Emo ass.” This is the best line ever!!  LOL!!

I thought that the Jake scene was brilliantly written, and I was actually SCARED that you were going to have it all yell-y and stuff, and that woul djust be flat out way too OCC. Great job =]

I've only read up to chapter 2 but I just wanted to say that I love this fic!!!!  I always felt that Edward was too kind and Bella not feeling enough guilt after what happened in Eclipse.  I can't wait to read the rest of the chapters you've written.  I'm so glad I found this fic. :)

Author's Response:

Thank you! I agree, obviously ;)

 

 

I LOVE THIS STORY!! I think I'm just going to forget Meyer's ending for Eclipse and all of Breaking Dawn, and use your story as the proper ending, okay?! THIS is how it shouldve gone! With them WORKING OUT their problems, and BEING HONEST!! Gahh! So good job!

Its kind of confusing with the "being secretive" parts with Alice, cause I keep thinking I missed something earlier, then I realize that you are trying to keep it from us. I hope we find out soon, with very little secretive conversations, cause Im definitely getting confused!

So I love a lot about this story, but I'm just going to mention a few! I LOVE LOVE LOVE Edward and Bella talking about things, and working it out (about freaking time! Why didnt Meyers do that?!?). I loved Charlie defending Bellas choice, I loved Bella fighting for her right to, and then taking care of Edward, and I LOVED Esme and Carlisles reactions when Bella and Edward didnt run off to be stupid (I read that like, 5 times, and laughed every time!)! And thats just to name a few!

So, please update! And update soonnn!! GREAT job so far! And thank you for writing a better ending!

i really dont think Jacob would have gone down that easily.

That was one of the best chapters I have ever read. How you portrayed Edwards thoughts and worries was precisely Edward and the way I imagine him to be!

a surprise wedding.. woohhoooooo

Ok, I have a question. I understand that Bella sees Edward as making a unilateral decision by taking the marriage off the table. As much as his argument is true, Bella now wants to get married for him as well as herself. What I don't get is the meaning behind this line,"That's a shame, because all ends of the bargain are now nullified, That includes the sex." I know the compromise was in order to change her that she would need to marry her. Is she also taking sex off the table as a mild penance for making the decision without a discussion? 

I like that Bella gave Alice instructions to continue with the wedding plans. Rose was so in character as she insisted Bella wear the boots for her safety on the Ducati for the ride to La Push. My only criticism is Bella's use of the derogatory term "dog" when talking about Jacob's "doggy parts." It is so out of character with the book and the friendship that you show here and I know it is AU. 

Charlie's scenes were so great in his conversation with Jake. He said a lot that needed to be said and took his share of the blame in encouraging Jake in his relationship with Bella, but too bad his comments were landing on deaf ears. It was also great that Edward got to hear that before leaving. Bella's thank you and asking Billy to take care of Charlie and Jake when she is gone was a nice touch that shows how much that she cares about all of them.

Jake's responses to Charlie showed how much that he was focusing on what he wanted and not Bella's desires. In his discussion with Bella, Jake was still holding on with wild tenacity. I think Bella held herself properly by taking the blame in leading him on and using him as a boyfriend substitute in case Edward left. Jacob was there for her when she needed him the most and she did clarify that she only loved him like a brother. I am also happy she said that Jake did trick into that kiss and that he apologized. In the end, I liked that she was able to  acknowledge Edward was her life and diffuse Jacob's threat to block her from becoming a vampire. 

I truly love how this chapter hit a lot of key aspects of SM's books that were not addressed. My favorite line in this chapter was Bella's to Edward,"Home is where you are, if you are at the mansion, that's where I'll be."

Author's Response:

"That's a shame, because all ends of the bargain are now nullified, That includes the sex."

Finally someone brings up that line! It's one of my favorites in this chapter. Bella is accepting Edward's little bomb from the last chapter, and channeling it into her own plans, to really give him what it is he so desires. Now here's Edward willing to give her whatever she wants, and to be fair what he wants as well, but is giving up what he wants the *most* in the process. So Bella's being a bit snarky and pulling the wool over his eyes, by making a big unilateral decision herself to kind of mess with him. It also shows him she's giving up one of the things she wants the most, so Edward's left scratching his head, and perhaps realizing he should've said "Let's talk about marriage." She's not being vindictive, but playful more than anything, especially since she's not putting on any big sex embargo in the process. She's going to give her man what they both want and enjoy watching him squirm a bit in the process;)

 

You are absolutely right that the doggy parts, if she was calling him a dog, is out of character. It was a joke that apparently can be misinterpreted. In the last chapter, Rose told her she could use them to neuter Jake...well neutering is an animal term and I can't see Bella wanting to talk about Jake's goods, hence her stumbling over referring to them as manly bits...doggy parts..etc. I'll be more careful in the future with the jokes though, so I appreciate you pointing it out.

I want to address more of your review, but dinner is burning. Come on over to the thread, we'll discuss it in detail!

 

Thanks for reviewing!

  - Katie

 

 

Really good, have just read the whole thing so far, and was brilliant.

Excellent chapter, excellent story, I love that you ended things this way between Bella and Jacob, it follows the level of maturity that you have created for Atlas Bella.  I didn't start to hate Jacob until Eclipse, I thought he was a good friend to her in New Moon, an inmature teenager, but that is how he was written, but he had a sweetness about him until Eclipse, you brought that back and I don't hate him as much anymore, I thought it right that Atlas Bella would remember that friendship and let him down easily, afterall she was supposed to be a selfless person.  Great job...can't wait for more!!!

Maybe there are some who won't like this chapter, but I'm not one of them.  I loved it.  This goodbye between Bella and Jacob is even better than the one SM wrote in Eclipse (sorry, SM!).  I find it sort of funny that just when Bella realizes how much she wants to marry Edward he decides to call the whole thing off.  Figures.  I am hoping they talk this through and figure their future out in the next chapter.  I can't wait to see if I'm right.

It is about time you updated! This was a great chapter, and was what I would have expected of j/b if SM had actually allowed her characters to grow.

I loved it, and I think I have an idea what is up Bella's sleeve :-) I hope I'm right!

 

This story is utterly incredible. You've exceeded my every expectation. It's so, so, so much better than the original scenes in Eclipse. So good in fact that it's reduced me to a state of blathering idiocy, and I can only tell you... WOW.

I have a few major things wrong with Twilight canon, as much as I love it. Just one of them was every single scene after the B/J kiss in Eclipse. I'd thought about tackling it myself to wrest it into something believable, but you've taken the thought out of my head and made it SO. MUCH. BETTER. I'm in awe. Seriously. I may just print this out and staple it to the original book, and pretend the rest didn't happen!

 

A few things to note especially. I think Edward's calling off the wedding to make Bella happy is perfect. I never agreed with the way in which they got engaged - Edward's first reaction, to me, is always to give Bella what she wants, and therefore I doubt he would ever have used their wedding as a bargaining chip.

Second, I ADORE what you've done with the Bella/Jacob resolution. Having read the first few chapters, your references to Jake - while completely excellent and humourous and just *true* - made me think you might be tempted to be completely caustic and just untrue to his character. I should've known better. I loathe Jacob's existence as a plot device, but as a character I think he's a good guy, and deserves a happy ending. And this - well this was the best ending he could have gotten, I think. Bella's letting him go, and his letting go of her, was the purest and most unselfish way for them to end their friendship. I'm REALLY glad you didn't go against his good nature and make him all angry wounded wolf boy. What you did was... utterly perfect.

To sum up - incredible. UTTERLY incredible. One of my favourite stories of all time. Please update soon - I can't wait to see where you bring us next. :)