I'm glad that you combined Bella's issues and the Jake issues in one chapter. Edward taking her to the cliff was monumental and I love how your banner reflects that imperative scene.

I think you did a fantastic job of clearing the air between them and allowing them to move forward.

Great job!

I can't stand this..I love love this story!  Thank you .  Your writing skills are wonderful.. I have laughed,cried and felt all warm and fuzzy with this version of our lovers.

I can't get enough of this story.  It is palpitable love to the max!

Broken and angsty Edward is awesome. I'm really enjoying the drama of this situation. I wonder what it's going to take for Edward to realize that Bella isn't going anywhere.

I'm finding it easier to suspend my beliefs and follow along with story. It's an incredible situation they've gotten themselves into and I can't wait for it to play out, without the extra distractions like Alice and Jacob.

This line had me in hysterics, "That crazy harpy was the last thing he saw before he died." Priceless.

This was another great chapter. It is a bit hard for me to suspend my own beliefs about Bella because they are so severely opposite of this story, but your writing definitely helps.

Great job!

Oh wow. Okay so I read this for the first time last night/ this morning at like 2 am. I was up and I got so excited that you had posted a new chapter that I started reading. I did a review and something happened with the website and well it didn't post. So anyway that's good because now I can spend a little more time praising this chapter. I still feel kinda bad about my minifreak out over the whole "...We're not getting married." thing.  I felt it was better to take time to digest the chapter before coming back and reviewing it the way it deserves. 

So here goes:

I think that the way Edward tries to explain his feelings on the whole change/marriage thing is really good. Obviously he has a slip back here in making a decision such as this one without talking about it with Bella. But they are a work in progress and old habits die hard. I thought that the way you have Bella initially sorta freaking out a little then she calms herself and tries to listen and think about what he is saying before reacting to his statement was awesome. Although she has her minor slipup here as well and almost reverts back to her insecurity she pulls herself out and realizes what she is doing, that was awesome. She also really listens to what he is saying and realizes that she has changed and that yes before this whole mess she really wasn't commited to the marriage/wedding thing but now of course she is sooo ready to be his wife. Problem there she hasn't let him in on that little secret and she acknowledges that fact. Then allowing herself to tease and play with Edward on the whole no marriage no sex thing was just so unbelievably funny. I loved that, she gets him all worked up and then drops the "...no sex" bomb. He was floored! That was priceless!! She is truly an evil woman!! I love her!!! LOL. But it's also funny that when we set out to tease others we sometimes pay a price of our own. And Bella has also knocked herself out of the whole sex equation as well, but I believe that with the pushing of boundaries that they have explored since this whole mess began will definately work in her favor on that front. He is a man after all! (*laughs evilly)

I really have not a clue what she and Alice have going on between them, I am sure if I thought about it long enough I could have some ideas. I would like to think it is a surprise wedding for him but not so sure that would really be a good idea. That kinda goes back to the whole not discussing things with one another issue, I think...maybe...I don't know. Those two, Bella and Alice, could be up to any number of things. It's a total mystery to me! 

And Oh My God, I loved the thought of the Vanquish returning but the thoughts of Edward actually getting to ride the Ducati...UGH! That is beyond sinful!!!! 

I absolutely thought that the lines about neutering Jake and Bella stumbling about his "...dog...bits... parts" was effing hilarious!!! That was just beyond words funny! Now we come to the "talk/conversation". Well first off we had all been discussing the wrath of Mama Bear Esme well here we got to see Papa Bear Charlie and I loved it. I am so glad that you had Charlie go to Jake on his own on Bella's behalf but also indirectly on Edward's as well. I really liked that Charlie acknowledges that their relationship is for real and that Bella's feelings for him are not just that of a frivilous high school romance. Or atleast he acknowledges that they care very deeply for one another and that Jake is making things really hard for Bella. Charlie acknowledging that his pushing Jake on Bella was part of the problem as well was great. I'm glad that Edward got a glimpse of that conversation as well. It has to feel good to know that on some level Charlie has accepted him as part of Bella's life and that he won't be campaigning for Jake any longer. 

I really like the way Bella handled the whole conversation with Jake. I think that it was great that although she was firm with him she wasn't cruel. Although I thought she might have to be there for a second and when she showed him that she wasn't wearing the bracelet any longer I was afraid that would lead to a whole line of arguing from Jake. But Bella handled herself really well and then being brave enough herself to ask for Jake's permission for her change to not break the treaty was awesome! I really didn't see that coming, although I don't know why. Obviously they need his permission to make sure that there is no problems with the pack in the future and also by getting his permission she has allowed him to reach closure on their relationship. She helped him to sever that tie without being cruel and retain their friendship on some level. That is beautiful!

 

Okay I think that is all for now on this chapter that I have to say. Wow, that was really long wasn't it? Sorry but there is just so much to say on this story!!! Love ya. Great Job!

 

Author's Response:

I have to start by saying your timing is impeccable. My author ego took a hit and I was huffing and puffing about it, and then this epic review came in and I was all Happy Katie again. For that, and the review, thank you. It's incredibly evident the time and thought you put into your response and it more than makes writing this story worth it.

I had really wanted Bella to waffle about her reaction to Edward's announcement, b'c their new perspective is very very new. She has to stop. pause. and question what he's saying and listen before jumping to conclusions. She did do that..but she still waffled internally. But she got it, and she is teasing Edward a bit, b'c she's comfortable with him. Of course being Bella it kind of bites her in the ass too ;)

I'm so happy you liked the Jake scene. It mildly terrified me for a number of reasons, and honestly I didn't know if I could control Jake. I hadn't actually planned the the treaty issue, it just popped out and seemed perfect. jake could make her life miserable, but by granting his permission, he was choosing to put her happiness first instead. I thought it was a great way of showing that he was in fact giving up, as opposed to him saying so, and then barging in again later, (ala BD).  plus bella gets to go home and say, "guess what i did?!" hehe.

 

Anyways, as I said your review was incredibly timely and thank you for such a lengthy one. i love love love love love love love it!

  - Katie

 

I was crying at the end!! Such a good chapter...Im glad Bella is making the right decision and taking a clean break from jake, although I cant still cant help but feel jakes pain : (...I love this story!!!

Author's Response:

i know, i don't even like jake, and yet i felt bad for him. but it's the healthiest thing for both of them, and neither Edward or Jake will have to live in one another's shadows anymore.

  Thanks for reading!

Yay charlie!!!

This is how I wanted Eclipse to end.  You are a brilliant writer and for goodness sakes....please keep writing. :)

I have to say, I was on pins and needles waiting for this to update, and now I feel a great sense of calm. This chapter was all it needed to be --- to let us know what Edward was thinking (silly daft vampire) to let us in on more of the plans between Alice and Bella (love the orange notebook) and to wrap up the Jake issue. I love that Charlie stepped in. I can't wait for the next chapter, great job and please update soon!

Just for the record, when Rosalie insisted Bella take the boots, I wasn't sure if she meant actual footwear or was using a thinly veiled euphamism for birth control.

I have no idea what's going on with the whole wedding/sex/Alice/secret notebook thing, but . . .

I loved this scene with Jake.  Like, I loved it a million times better than the original.  In the books, Bella never really grew up and started making mature decisions.  She continued to act like a teenager, allowing emotions and hormones to rule her decisions, until after the change (and even then I think it was more Nessie's birth).  This Bella has realized that sometimes, as an adult, you have to face painful, difficult decisions head on.  She made this mess, and she knows that she has to clean it up, even if it isn't easy.  Bravo.

Author's Response:

So I'm trying to respond to reviews from earliest to latest, especially since I'm still behind on the last chapter. However, this made me stop. pause. and respond to this first.

"Just for the record, when Rosalie insisted Bella take the boots, I wasn't sure if she meant actual footwear or was using a thinly veiled euphamism for birth control."

one- because it was meant to be a double entendre. 2- because i'd already referenced Alice's orange obsession from the fic, "Attention Walmart Shoppers," and if you haven't read it..Edward is debating condoms to use to protect Bella from his venom, and the whole damn family gets involved. It's ridiculously hilarious. 3.- i often make inside jokes with myself while i write...and come on, think about it, if Rose had just suggest birth control to Bella, BD would have never happened. So yeah, it was meant to be a bit of a euphemism. I'll admit it. haha.

You're not really meant to know what's going on with Bell/Alice just yet, but if i hadn't addressed it, it would be random as hell when the time comes. I want you all to be able to look back and go, "ooooh..ok..that's how this worked out." though i promise alice isn't planning sexy times for them, b'c that just grosses me out.

 

You're 100% right about being an adult means owning up to your responsibilities. If she's old enough to get married, she's got to be mature enough to let Jake go. That's what this was about.

 

Thanks for reading!

 - Katie

I think I already told you how much I love this story but is never enough.  When I first readed the book of SM, I didn't like the fact that Bella was getting married because she felt like it was the right thing to do even when she didn't want to.  In here, and that's the things I like the most about this story, he's the one making the mature talking.  His old soul is bright in this chapter, he's not 17, he has the life of a granpa!...and he can understand the fact that she doesn't want to get married even when she loves him.  I really liked it.

Finally, I want to thank you for sharing this story with all of us. It is really beautiful.

I'll give you a 9 just because I want to push you. ;)