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Reviewer: Red Lace (Signed) · Date: March 09, 2009 03:47 AM · On: The Next Day

I think this chapter worked out well! I really liked the way the connection between Bella and Edward (I'm assuming the basement dweller is Edward, seeing as Bella called him "my vampire") is growing slowly.  I also really like Bella's boldness and surety.  It is very unique that she's taken on the roll of "protector" in your story. I'm very excited to learn more about Edward.   He's a mystery for sure, but I'm also very curious about Bella...will we ever get the chance to find out how her friendship with the Cullens began?  How she found out about their family and came to accept them as vampires?

Thanks so much for writing!  Looking forward to chapter 6!

Author's Response:

Eventually I'll throw in how Bella found out about the Cullens, promise. :)


Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: Nashi (Signed) · Date: March 09, 2009 03:45 AM · On: The Next Day

Aw, so sweet. Eager to see what comes next.

Reviewer: neveryoumind (Signed) · Date: March 09, 2009 03:42 AM · On: The Next Day

So many mentions of "my vampire". We've been privy to Bella's thoughts and her side of this odd and instant connection she's made with Edward and now with this embrace we see a bit more of Edward's own response to that bond. He's fighting with himself, overwhat - I'm sure you'll reveal later on, but he allows himself to feel comfort from her nonetheless. It's really intriguing. I'll be looking forward to reading more from you.

Reviewer: JMCullen (Signed) · Date: March 09, 2009 03:39 AM · On: The Next Day

LOVED LOVED LOVED it!!!!! I absolutely can not wait for more. I'm addicted to this story. Please for my sanity, update soon!!! Lol.

Reviewer: bells123 (Signed) · Date: March 09, 2009 03:39 AM · On: The Next Day

Pass the Kleenexes!  I'm crying with them.  Beautiful as usual.  I love how Bella gave him space to reach out and respond.  And what an amazing response!  

I really like your characterization of Bella.  She annoyed me in the books, but she's much stronger in your story.


Reviewer: Lola84 (Signed) · Date: March 09, 2009 03:37 AM · On: The Next Day

Aww, I'm so glad he's responding so well to her. I wonder when she'll convince him to eat! Can't wait for the next installment. :)

Reviewer: an_edward_chick (Signed) · Date: March 09, 2009 03:35 AM · On: The Exam

I just found this story today, and my heart is breaking for this unnamed vampire whom I assume is Edward.  Your writing is excellent.  Your words really capture the emotions.  It's like I'm down there in the basement with them.  I'm so ready for Edward to speak his first words, so I hope that is coming soon. 

Please update soon and often.

Reviewer: cindysark (Signed) · Date: March 09, 2009 03:33 AM · On: The Next Day

I think I love this story so much because Bella is the strong one and Edward is the weak one and that is something we never see in fanfics. I can't wait to see what develops and am anxiously awaiting the next chapter!

Reviewer: CaptainKirk (Signed) · Date: March 09, 2009 03:32 AM · On: The Next Day

I really liked this chapter! I think that it was a little lighter in tone, and I like the fact that Edward is letting Bella close to him. I also am happy that you are not rushing the story, alot of authors get the story started and then zip through the rest. I really like the pace you have set with this story and I really really really love the suspense! It is driving me crazy! I really hope you update again soon I am so sucked in at this point I can't wait to find out what happens next!

Reviewer: ifelthope (Signed) · Date: March 09, 2009 03:31 AM · On: The Next Day

Okay. I am speechless, and that does not happen very often. This story is amazing! I'm so addicted, I am checking more than once every day, going, "Is the next chapter up yet??"

Your idea is so original and your characterization is amazing. Poor Edward, though. Poor Bella for that matter, all she wants to do is comfort him! 

I also love how, despite lacking Edward's intitial presence, Bella still knew about vampires. That made me squee.

I can't wait for more! Keep updating! :)


Reviewer: Rachel Black (Signed) · Date: March 09, 2009 03:26 AM · On: The Next Day

I'm so happy she made progress with him! I can't wait to find out what happened to him now... all in good time though I'm sure!

I'm confused about him not eating... but then with Bella being human, and him being starved, the urge to kill her must be pretty strong! Ugggh! So many questions, and I can't wait to find out the answer :D.

Reviewer: Platinim13 (Signed) · Date: March 09, 2009 03:24 AM · On: The Next Day

This story is my favorite right now. I absolutely love that all of Bella's good qualities, unconditional caring and self-sacrificing, can be used in such a positive way. And of course, and Edward that is vulnerable but still strong, in his own way, is a perfect compliment. I love the new roles for both of them, and that the new roles haven't changed their fundamental characters.

Reviewer: Shamatt (Signed) · Date: March 09, 2009 03:24 AM · On: The Next Day

I really like this story. I am still not sure where you are taking it but I like that it is a slow process. I can't wait for the next chapter.

Reviewer: littlemissy1503 (Signed) · Date: March 09, 2009 03:21 AM · On: The Next Day

so lovely need more please.

Reviewer: shelby524 (Signed) · Date: March 09, 2009 03:06 AM · On: The Exam

I love this story!!1

Reviewer: Capricorn75 (Signed) · Date: March 09, 2009 02:33 AM · On: The Hunt

I read the first four chapters and need more, asap! So glad this was recommended by OCD. My heart is breaking for Edward.

Reviewer: kms1979 (Signed) · Date: March 08, 2009 04:34 AM · On: The Exam

Oh, broke my heart! I really like how you are writing this. It's kind of sparse if that makes sense, but really works for this story. It's kind of bare which fits the mood of this story. Really strings the tension along.

Author's Response:

Makes sense :)


Someone mentioned that they're being kept in the dark with the characters, and I think that basically sums up exactly what I'm going for.


It seems like.. until the characters can figure anything out, the audience shouldn't figure anything out. :)


Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: kms1979 (Signed) · Date: March 08, 2009 04:11 AM · On: The Basement

Wow. This is really good and really different. I'm totally enthralled!

Reviewer: frenchfinch (Signed) · Date: March 08, 2009 03:24 AM · On: The Exam

Great story. I can't wait to see how it turns out.

Author's Response:

Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: lilroses_89 (Signed) · Date: March 07, 2009 10:01 PM · On: The Exam

Interesting start.

The suspense and intrigue you've created about Edward is immense.

I like Bella's protective instincts for Edward. The little touch with her calling him "my vampire" is endearing.

Author's Response:

Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: houroflead (Signed) · Date: March 07, 2009 09:08 PM · On: The Face

Aw, does he like her already? So much stress on the family but I'm glad Bella's doing it :)

Reviewer: houroflead (Signed) · Date: March 07, 2009 08:52 PM · On: The Basement

Gah, so painful! I loved it, Bella is a sweetheart.

Reviewer: houroflead (Signed) · Date: March 07, 2009 08:35 PM · On: The Hunt

Very interesting start, I really like this premise.  You kept it clean, but effective, great stuff!

Reviewer: Babette (Signed) · Date: March 07, 2009 07:50 PM · On: The Exam

Wow, this is very powerful.  It's interesting that the vampire hasn't even tried to eat Bella.  After all, he is very hungry.  Is he trying to not be a vampire, trying to overcome what he is so he doesn't hurt anyone?  Will you have him speak soon?  I know I'm making the assumption that it is Edward, so I'm really wondering why he isn't wanting to eat Bella?  Or is he, but he is so resolute on not hurting anyone that he is resisting?  Also, the injuries, those have me confused.  I'm looking forward to updates.

Author's Response:

He will speak eventually, I can't say for sure how soon it will be.

He needs to trust Bella a little more than he does at this point for him to attempt to speak to her :)

And why he doesn't want/need to eat Bella will.. also eventually be dealt with, as will his injuries. ;) Sorry, vague.  


Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: gilraen (Signed) · Date: March 07, 2009 05:39 PM · On: The Exam

I enjoyed this immensely, it is well written and thoughtfully draws the reader in. I like the twist to the original canon story. I look forward to more. :)



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