Awww, he's getting better!  I'm going to miss Basementward, but I'm glad he's getting better.  I want to know what happened to him!   I loved the Charlie speech... so close to canon!  He always did have issues with Emmett!

 

 

Author's Response:

Yes, I love that Charlie has these obvious cannon traits! I think it's pretty hard to write exactly in cannon, so for the most part ,the characters are just embellished from their cannon counterparts (but we can see cannon in all of them, well maybe except the vamp), but charlie is the closest to his cannon character IMO!

Thanks for reviewing!

 - Michelle

The site timed out my login, and I lost the review I was writing for this...argh!!

From basementward to bedroomward is definitely a good thing!  Glad to see his health progressing.  The exhange with Rosalie surprised me a little; I haven't gone back to reread earlier chapters, but I guess I was assuming that Bella would be on reasonably good terms with all of the Cullens in this universe.  Is it the developments with Edward that are bringing on the snippiness, or is Rosalie's character simply true to the Twilight phase of the books?

Another lovely chapter.  Your pacing is perfect and your characters are really well developed.

I loved it. This by far my fav story.

Author's Response:

:o:o THANK YOU!

"And the vamp is still naked."

Hah! Love it.

I actually like that he's moved into a bedroom. And I just loved when he tried to turn his head to look at her.

HE'S GETTING BETTER! WOOHOO! I won't miss him in the basement, I'm far too happy that he's getting fed now! I'm going away for a week and I'll really miss this story, hopefully there will be a nice little update awaiting my arrival ;).

Honestly, I love this story, has to be my very favourite fanfiction ever! I can't wait for him to start talking, and for him to tell them who he is!

Rachel

Author's Response:

I would imagine within the next week there will be a new chapter, so enjoy your trip! And then come back to basementward!

AND WOW! Favorite ever?! That's fucking amazing/awesome/spectacular/etc! I'm SO FLATTERED! THANK YOU!

I'm embarrassing myself. I'll stop.

Thanks for the review :)

- Michelle

very intriguing story! please dont turn it into a soppy bad lemon filled fluff fest!! i have faith!

Author's Response:

I sort of cringe when I say... that this probably won't earn an NC-17/M rating afterall.  That's where I'm leaning right now;

I think that there might be a time and place for lemons, but this story doesn't seem to be that.

I can't say for sure one way or another yet, as I indicate in the chapter 1 author notes, but, right now my heart is telling me there won't be (graphic) lemons.  Maybe an outtake. Bah.

But we'll see... we shall see.

Thanks for reviewing!

- Michelle

That was excellent!  Great chapter!  And yes, I'm happy basementward is upstairs and on the mend! LOL  

 

Great story! :D

love the update and I am glad the vampire is in a comfy bed and getting better! Cannot wait to read what comes next. Thank you!

Author's Response:

Glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for reviewing!

-Michelle

That's the spirit! Every author should be that way. Don't like it, don't read it. Awesome.

 

Anyway! I'll stop bumping up your count with unnessecary ramblings. ^-^ I've got my own stories to update. (Only one validated. I'm sure I'm about to be lynched over that one. @_@ Juggling three huge writing projects and then three smaller side projects do not make for a safe mind.)

Great great great chapter. Color me seriously addicted to your story.

Author's Response:

Gah, THANK YOU! *grins* I'm so glad you're enjoying it!

- Michelle

My biggest question right now is why in the world was Bella still so fearful even after she recognized Jasper?  That was just a bit weird.

But the biggest thing here is [i]he's getting better![/i]  It's sad that he's out of the the basement in one way - I really did enjoy Basementward, but I get the feeling Bella will be a whole heck of a lot more comfortable now.  Come the weekend when she can stay over again at least.  And he reacted to her leaving with more than huddling in a corner further!  He actually had a facial reaction and recognized the difference between his hand when she was there and when she wasn't.  Oh, and someone was nice enough to realize that he was more comfortable, if that's really the right term to use, with his chest protected.  :-)  That makes me all sorts of smiley happy.

One other thing to note - Charlie jumping to conclusions about Emmett and Bella was hilarious.

Oh, and it sounded like there was some incident with Bella and hunting again... Interesting.

Author's Response:

So the scene plays like this: she's loving up on her vamp, and then her vamp starts flipping shit, and then he launches himself at this guy (and she didn't even know he had any energy so she's already like... whoa) and then the guy slams the vampire into the far wall and, although it's jasper, he's holding this freaking out vampire and hurting him and .. the vampire's petrified and bella's all edge and it's just a tense situation that bella wants him out of.

And yes, whoever brought him upstairs took the time to lay him on his stomach, which was really sort of thoughtful of them :)

And he's definitely progressing with Bella, and now that he's healing hopefully it'll go further.

I'm glad you enjoyed this one, thanks for the review!

- Michelle

 

 

Lmao. People really asked if he was still naked? Pervs. XD I can't seen anyone trying to wrangle clothes on him. And even if they did, he may not be strong, but I think he'd be strong enough to rip out fo them. Foreign objects do not amuse basementward! HE IS UNPLEASED! RAWR!

 

I'm going to miss basementward, but I have to admit I can't wait for him to say something to her, and not to put pressure on you but it has to be KING. It has to be just like Angels Singing Awesome. Or Hilarious. Either one. XD

 

Have I told you how much I love this story? Because truely, I do. I've pimped it out to everyone that I know that reads fanfiction. It makes me day to see when you update. I can't wait for the next chapter.

 

-Dances around- EDWARD!

Author's Response:

You'd be surprised how often people ask if he's still naked, or why they don't give him clothes.

Honestly, I have like a 9 year long response saved on MSword depicting the 19 reasons that he can't be clothed yet. I wanted to post all the reasons in the a/n but alas, it would take something away from the chapter ;)

As for his first words -- I'm so nervous about them! Everyone's so excited and gah.. I'm like what... I should put it to a vote.

The girls on the board are all for 'asshat'.

I'm so glad that you're enjoying it enough to pimp it!! Thank you so much!

- Michelle

So...

First I would like to apologise for reviewing so late in the game. Truthfully I've been addicted for quite some time (since chapter three I believe) but school has literally left me unable to make any quality reviews up until now. Needless to say, I didn't want to just fill a review with meaningless babble so I've waited and I CAN WAIT NO LONGER!

I won't say it's brilliant because you already know that. I could search dictionary.com for other words to describe this piece of literary art but I doubt there's a string of words you haven't herd to describe your work.

Since I'm no 18th century savant who can get away with making up new words, I'll have to do my best to express how much I love this fanfic. Buckle up, It's not going to be a quick trip to the local Safeway. more like a snail ride to grandmas house.

Before I forget I want to tell you how this chapter affected me. It was such a breath of fresh air! This entire story has been a lovely series of deep breaths for me but of course this is a monumental step towards Edwards recovery. As I was reading the first wave of emotion came with the forced feeding. I had a feeling we weren't really looking at a true menace when the shadowy figure appeared at the door in the last chapter. Although I was seriously considering it until I decided you wouldn't (or I couldn't accept that you would) do that to Edward. I folded into myself when you were painting the picture of his restraint and the feeding process. It was very well done and I was completely in Bella's state of sheer panic. I knew it was necessary but oh how my heart hurt for Edward. The simple fact that he can only communicate through primal means (thus far) is a really heavy hindrance to his whole healing process and it makes every effort on anyone's part a battle. Special kudos to your portrayal of poor Jasper's shot emotions. I mean I was just so sucked in to his state of mind! I could see the scene playing out in my head and poor poor Jasper just being torn apart inside. I personally think you do a better job of relaying his emotional battles to your reader than Stephenie did. I know Jasper was never the true focus of the twi-saga but regardless, you did an amazing job here.

After Bella is home and forced into resting, I came to have a serious issue with Charlie. Understandably, I was again living through Bella and completely furious at his demands for a curfew, nevermind the whole sex talk. It makes perfect sense and it's completely "in character" in my opinion but I still felt that teen angst spilling over the glass. I remember praising Bella's control (something I haven't done since twilight) because, had I been in her shoes, I would have come unglued on my father and anyone else in my path. It was a perfect twist that was so incredibly twilight Bella. I thank you for keeping that spark of her personality! I don't get to see it often even in this sea of quality fanfiction.

Finally I had a mixed emotional wave towards the end of this chapter. I was elated that Alice had some truly good news for a change and that Bella wouldn't have to fight her way back into the Cullen home as I feared. It was great to see the Cullen's treating Edward better too. I'm happy they moved him into a more comfortable environment. I'll admit, the basement was really enjoyable because it felt a bit more private. Almost as if Bella and her vampire had their own little world down there. However, I'm almost positive it was probably similar to the terrible conditions he suffered pre-scape from hell. Well, minus the Bella factor. So, all in all I'm happy with where he ended up. The only problem I'm having with the room is convincing myself that it's not overly done in some fashionable decor that both Alice and Esme would be fond of. I just can't imagine he'd be even slightly comfortable in a room with too much visual stimulation at this point. That's more of a personal problem though. ;D Now, the only thing that bothered me was the evil little cliffhanger. Granted, in this story I think almost every chapter has an unintentional cliffhanger simply because the material is so engaging but the obsessive reader in me was steaming a bit. The calmer half of my personality was so happy that I was still so interested that every chapters' end is painful. That or the phil Collins in the background is getting to me. Either way it's bitter sweet you know? Bravo. Trust that I will be loyally following this fanfic until the very end! I cannot get enough of this story. The pull on my soul is just too great. I have a flair for dramatics, have a mentioned that? Anyway, positively brilliant!

I don't want to risk killing the review system so let me know if you want to hear the rest of my musing on the last nine chapters. Please pardon the wall of text. Thank you so much for writing this story!

Peace & Love,

Folklorn

 

Author's Response:

Okay.. time to tackle this epic review! *cracks knuckle*

I'm elated with the sheer volume of this beast! I'll start my response with: don't apologize! You reviewed! and if I divided this review into 10 parts each section would still be longer than a lot of reviews i get! I'm happy to see that you could no longer wait ;)

Alrighty.. the content part of the review!

I always have the hardest time formulating intelligent responses that don't give anything away.. so forgive me if this is incoherent and dances around topics.

I'm glad you're able to connect with the JPOV. It's possibly my favorite POV to write because I think so much can be done with Jasper and I so rarely see him utilized!

For charlie, I see his point.  She's only spent the night at home once since last monday, and it was tuesday when they had the talk.. that's a bit much for his hs daughter -- I have high hopes that he'll let her spend the weekend with them :)

"The only problem I'm having with the room is convincing myself that it's not overly done in some fashionable decor that both Alice and Esme would be fond of."

So -- funny story -- one of my big things over the last 10 chapters was "is the basement finished?" And on one hand it's like.. Esme and Alice totally would finish the basement without a question.. but then on the other -- would they? No one ever uses it.  So it ends up being left to the imagination save for one little detail -- the floor is concrete.  Now the bedroom, on the other hand, is probably hella decorated.  But -- the vamp was laying on his belly with his eyes closed.. maybe he was having bright color-induced headaches :P But I would guess that the bedroom is relatively decorated.

and cliffhanger? in THIS chapter?  This chapter I tried to end on a hopeful, complete note.  End of the night, end of the basement, if this story was divided into parts we could even say effectively end of pt. 1.  I truly didn't mean to make this a cliffhanger!  shoot.

I think I address almost everything in this review! i hope.. but anyway, lemme wrap it up.

This review was awesome, it was made my night when I just wanted to go to bed, I love it, etc. If you're feeling particularly gushy you're welcome to send any other feedback you have my way, I love it all., ALL OF IT. Yeah.

Okay, thanks again!

- Michelle