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Reviewer: HeroinAddict (Signed) · Date: April 26, 2009 04:00 AM · On: The Balcony
Holy crap!
Reviewer: HeroinAddict (Signed) · Date: April 26, 2009 03:59 AM · On: The Balcony
Holy crap!
Reviewer: HeroinAddict (Signed) · Date: April 26, 2009 03:58 AM · On: The Balcony
Holy crap!
Reviewer: HeroinAddict (Signed) · Date: April 26, 2009 03:38 AM · On: The Bath
all I can say is WOW!
Reviewer: HeroinAddict (Signed) · Date: April 26, 2009 03:11 AM · On: The Sunset
I could cry, that was good. Now we're getting somewhere!
Reviewer: HeroinAddict (Signed) · Date: April 26, 2009 02:54 AM · On: The Bedroom
Like it still ;)
Reviewer: HeroinAddict (Signed) · Date: April 26, 2009 02:32 AM · On: The Antidote
interesting
Reviewer: HeroinAddict (Signed) · Date: April 26, 2009 02:04 AM · On: The Trial
like it
Reviewer: HeroinAddict (Signed) · Date: April 26, 2009 01:39 AM · On: The Venom
Still loving it!
Reviewer: HeroinAddict (Signed) · Date: April 26, 2009 01:03 AM · On: The Pillow
I'm ready for this story to really start, but I like it so far.
Author's Response: Sorry, it'll stay pretty slow.
It's a story about a vamp's recovery, from the beginning to the end, so I worry that it might continue at a slow pace.
Hope you stick with it -- I'm told the last few chapters have picked up some.
Reviewer: HeroinAddict (Signed) · Date: April 26, 2009 12:47 AM · On: The Next Day
Love it!
Reviewer: HeroinAddict (Signed) · Date: April 26, 2009 12:31 AM · On: The Exam
Still like it;)
Reviewer: HeroinAddict (Signed) · Date: April 25, 2009 11:49 PM · On: The Face
very interesting:)
Reviewer: HeroinAddict (Signed) · Date: April 25, 2009 11:29 PM · On: The Basement
This is exciting so far!
Reviewer: HeroinAddict (Signed) · Date: April 25, 2009 11:11 PM · On: The Hunt
like it so far;)
Reviewer: songster51 (Signed) · Date: April 25, 2009 10:19 PM · On: The Sunset
Oh, sigh, I just loved that last little bit. An almost smile from the non-communicative vamp! He must be starting to feel (omg almost said human!) more normal or what normal used to be before all the bad stuff happened. Still can't wait to hear the velvet voice. I saw 2 hints, one is that he still mind reads that's why he's anticipating their moves. Also, think Bella was almost bitten by someone (James, Laurent ??) six months ago. Another plot twist. This adds a new dimension.
Reviewer: songster51 (Signed) · Date: April 25, 2009 10:01 PM · On: The Bedroom
I'm like yay!!! He's getting better and hopefully we'll get some answers soon. Don't really miss the basement. Never did like basements. Ther usually musty and seem to provide the right environment for creepy crawlies. Yuck. I can't wait for mystery vamp to speak.
Reviewer: earthdragon8705 (Signed) · Date: April 25, 2009 08:55 PM · On: The Hunt
I absolutely LOVE your story and can't wait to see how everything turns out! Keep up the amazing work!
Reviewer: songster51 (Signed) · Date: April 25, 2009 08:52 PM · On: The Trial
I am with you in this. Much of scientific knowledge is gained through trial and error. Just hope Carlisle gets his science right so this poor vampire doesn't have to suffer anymore. A fix may also prevent Charlie from coming to casa Cullen to grab his daughter and take her home, which would probably not be good.
Reviewer: songster51 (Signed) · Date: April 25, 2009 08:33 PM · On: The Venom
Synthetic inhibitor, hmmm, reminds me of a missing amino acid that cause difficulties in digesting certain food items depending on which amino acid is missing. So now we know the what. We hope first for a fix and then for the who and the why.
Reviewer: songster51 (Signed) · Date: April 25, 2009 07:40 PM · On: The Next Day
The description of this traumatized vampire reminded me a bit of the descriptions of concentration camp victims. Such severe trauma causes withdrawal and it can be very hard to reach around the numbness which protects the fragile psyche from further damage. Please don't agonize, you have good instincts. Just keep telling your story.
Reviewer: songster51 (Signed) · Date: April 25, 2009 07:23 PM · On: The Exam
Wow, the poor thing. I am really really really wanting to know what is going on with him. I can't wait to see how you reveal what is going on. His suffering seemed so real that I found myself with tears in my eyes just like Bella. Again, writing is quite good and no typos to cause consternation.
Reviewer: songster51 (Signed) · Date: April 25, 2009 07:05 PM · On: The Face
I am wondering how this poor hungry vamp is resisting Bella's blood. I almost didn't want to stop to review because I want to find out what is going on with him. But, decided I would do the right thing and give you some feedback. Your writing is good, tight and flows well. Impressively, I haven't come across a single typo. I am a bit of a word geek and it messes with my brain when I see them. Will leave you now so I can satisfy my word lust!
Author's Response: Haha, luckily, that's one of the questions that will be answered in the posted chapters!
thanks so much for reviewing each chapter hon, i LOVE when people take the time to do that :)
Hopefully you enjoy what's posted so far (and surely you can find a typo or two eventually!)
- Michelle
Reviewer: songster51 (Signed) · Date: April 25, 2009 06:46 PM · On: The Basement
Bella should just wear a sign that says danger magnet. But, boy, she really likes to put herself in the way of the runaway train, doesn't she. I am pretty sure it's probably a not a good idea to be a tasty human and try to hang out with a strange and starved vampire. What on earth happened to this poor vampire/Edward? Looking forward to the next chapter.
Reviewer: songster51 (Signed) · Date: April 25, 2009 06:42 PM · On: The Hunt
This was an excellent start. I love the vampire stories. Human Twi-folk are nice and all that, but vampirism adds that mythical, fantasy element that takes you away from the hum-drum. Since Edward's name hasn't been mentioned, I am guessing that maybe the mystery vamp is you know who. It also sounds as if conclusion-jumping Bella is about to land herself in some hot water or cold vampire hands as the case may be.
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