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Reviewer: Reader-Megan (Signed)
May 27, 2009 10:47 AM · On:
i feel like i say the same thing everytime i review for each update. i freaking love this story and very much look forward to new chapters. this one was great, amazing, perfect, well-written, beautiful....i can go on and on. thank you.
Reviewer: MotoBella (Signed)
May 27, 2009 10:38 AM · On:
Oh what a happy birthday! A semi-social Edward :-) And I just want to sing, like a kindergartner, "Bella loves Edward!" And I love this story! And looking back over my last two reviews, I obviously have a thing for exclamation points too!!!
Reviewer: jkhjc1019 (Signed)
May 27, 2009 10:38 AM · On:
This is by far one of my favorite fanfics. Your story has great depth to it and I can see everything play out perfectly in my mind. There is never a point where I feel I can take a break. I too love your Alice. She has energy...yes... but isn't a spaz. I also like that the vampires don't have everything together in this instance and it takes Bella to get through to Edward and know what to do. Keep up the good work... I look forward to more postings. Oh and I love the OSU reference!
Reviewer: missloonylovegood (Signed)
May 27, 2009 10:27 AM · On:
Yay! Alice/Edward bond started! *dances around like an idiot* Sorry... I kinda figured it was humans, though Bella was right. I think I guessed it from the way he was made not to drink blood. It would weaken him and make it so he wouldn't want to bite them. Maybe they were working on an antidote or something and thought he would be a good test subject? Passing him on down through the years? Poor guy.
Reviewer: dazzled eyes (Signed)
May 27, 2009 10:24 AM · On:
I love that Edward is feeling more comfortable in touching and talking to Bella. Alice was very patient and persistent in earning Edward's trust to get him downstairs for the party. The Volturi discussion was especially good since Edward asked Alice whether Bella would be okay. I must say Carlisle's care and affection for both Edward and Bella is wonderful too. I wonder what Edward was reading from him at the party.
Reviewer: berrycute105 (Signed)
May 27, 2009 10:22 AM · On:
surely a vampire had to be involved or maybe they were testin some other vampire like him and he changed edward. i dont understand how humans did it unless they took venom from another vampire.ugh i am so lost that is why i need u to update soon PULEAZZES AND THANK YOUS. GREAT CHAPTER AND I CANT WAIT FOR THE REST.
Reviewer: MotoBella (Signed)
May 27, 2009 10:21 AM · On:
Aaaahhh Michelle!!! Evidently there is something majorly wrong with me and computers as I just had to have my third hard drive replaced and not 3 days later send the flipping thing back to Dell for a new mother board (and I don't even know what that is!!!) I've been doing school work at the library like a 12 year old and suffering major B&E withdrawals! But the bright side is that I get to come back to like 4 new chapters! I really intended to review each of them but my impatience got the best of me, as usual! So I'll compromise and do the last two.
I heart this story! Mystery is not something you see very much of in Twilight FanFic and I'm not a mystery kind of girl usually because I just can't seem to make myself care who dunnit...but with this I really, really, really want to know!!! And I totally had a "NUH-UH!" moment when he said it was humans. That was absolutely a total surprise!
And I'm so happy with all their relationship growth and the baby steps have really brought them a long, long way. So exciting. And dancing, so cute! I mean seriously.
Oh no! Tha't shorrible, hopefully everything worked out!
I'm so glad you've gotten a chance to catch up hon, thanks so much for reviewing!
Reviewer: 1216 (Signed)
May 27, 2009 10:13 AM · On:
it will be interesting to see how humans managed to control a vampire, how they developed the serum and if they come back to try it again.. or who else they might have captured. How will the royals deal with the info.. if the Cullens tell them...?
SO MANY QUESTIONS! lol. Great story.
Reviewer: EdwardsBloodType (Signed)
May 27, 2009 10:08 AM · On:
Awww I loved this chapter. It was so sweet and light for a change. When Edward said, Happy Birthday" to her I almost jumped up and down on my chair. I think for a while I sort of saw him as kind of disabled in a way- not being able to understand or respond to normal stimulus. I just wish he would tell B who did this. oh, and I am delighted with your characterization of Alice. She still likes to shop and be exuberant, but you haven't made her an idiot, which is what I get form most fics, even the ones which try to stay canon.
Reviewer: vipervixen33 (Signed)
May 27, 2009 10:03 AM · On:
The humans thing shocked me, not going to lie. I was thinking other things. xD And it was really cute how he finally came downstairs. ^_^ Eddie's..growing up? Haha. Keep it coming! =)
Reviewer: giselle (Signed)
May 27, 2009 09:58 AM · On:
Didn't Edward explicitly say it was humans at one point? Or am I just clairvoyant? Anyways, who cares. Really loved this chapter, michelle. I like seeing them both open up to each other a bit. And Edward-braving the rest of the family to be there for Bella's birthday party--so touching.
I liked that she mentioned him comforting her once they were back up in the bedroom. Like Carlisle and Esme, I think the E/B relationship is one of a mutual unlocking, and you've made that unlocking very *literal* here for Edward, but it's nice to get a hint that Edward really is providing something for Bella as well. I'm always for two-sided representations of all of this.
You did an excellent job with Alice in this chapter. I really enjoyed her surity of her visions, even as she struggled to make them a reality. I loved Carlisle's reaction when she said she might have company, and Edward looking at the photos on the staircase is a really nice touch. The Cullens would totally have photos on their staircase. I might steal that. No, I am going to steal that. (Whips out writing notebook)
Anyways, nice all around as usual. The art is cool. Isn't fan art just the bees knees? (Yep, rather than use old slang, I'm going to use REALLY old slang.)
Lastly...why do I suspect that despite the fact that on Bella's birthday, it would be the second, maybe third game of the season and thus not even a conference game, that somehow in your mind, it was the Wolverines that Emmett was watching the Buckeyes beating handily? :) (Although we did lose in '05, so I guess all's fair. Maybe Basementward would like Tressel for a little snack? I'd be happy to pay for his flight to Columbus.)
So.. he said he'd never met vamps, and about half the readers thought 'MUST BE WEREWOLVES' So I figured I'd spell it out, and they're still convinced it's werewolves. Shrug. Can't say I didn't try!
Yes, a lot of people have questioned the one-sidedness of the relationship to this point. I don't actually consider it all that one-sided, but we get to see the other side a little more in this chapter. Sort of works toward this dual-participation relationship that has been lacking just because.. Edward's been incapable of actually behaving in such a manner.
Fan art IS the bees knees! I was so excited when she pmed me, and then it was way beautiful, so I just couldn't resist pimping her drawings out. She has some wide awake ones too :)
I totally imagined them kicking Michigan's ass. You KNOW THEY WERE. Or wait.. maybe michigan was too busy getting their asses kicked by appalachian state? what what??? :)
Reviewer: jilburfm (Signed)
May 27, 2009 09:55 AM · On:
Things I don't love:
* Reviews that get lost in cyberhell.
This I DO love:
* Alice's vision has been a possible outcome of Bella's path that was triggered by her move to Forks. E+B=MtB. And I love that.
* Alice outting Bella's love for Edward to Edward... and the fact that this knowledge totally calms him.
* Floundering Alice. She's adorable. Screw that graceful pixie crap, she's a mess:-)
* That Edward hasn't ever said a word to Alice and when he does for the first time, it's out of concern for Bella. awww moment.
* Emmett's denied fist bump
* Bella's canon-y blouse. snort.
* GAH!!! He stands up to greet her!!! And says, "Happy Birthday, Bella" awww moment.
* That Bella says, "as any normal group of friends would," rather than "family," which I think would normally be expected. I just feel like it means more... this was worded much more eloquently the first time. Damnit. But basically, I said something about the phrase, "Getting to choose your friends but not your family" - and even though the Cullens essentially chose each other, it just makes it sound like they all want to be there rather than some kind of familial obligation.
* It's humans... can we put the werewolf theory to rest now??? Please?
* She finally admits she loves him! Even if only internally!
* That her 18th birthday was her BEST birthday ever, the complete opposite of her canon 18th birthday.
I know I had 3 "awww moments" in my lost review. Now I only have 2. Crapper.
So.. half the reviews are like "you already told us it was humans" and half are like "ummm.. I still think it's werewolves."
There's no hope. NONE.
Things I love:
Ogling shirtless robward. UNG UNG UNG.
I'm glad you rewore this whole bit! But MOOOOOOOOOOHR would've sufficed just as well. I have the best beta ever, I hope you know that. You're the mastah, even if the cullens have fleas. we love them despite their flaws :)
Reviewer: edward-bella70 (Signed)
May 27, 2009 09:52 AM · On:
Of course Bella loves him. Now he just needs to admit it to her! I knew it was humans. I think you said earlier that it wasn't vampires. Great story! Nice to see Edward with the family!
Reviewer: helenleiten (Signed)
May 27, 2009 09:41 AM · On:
You are one amazing writter!! I relly LOVE this story...
Please update soon, I can't wate!!
Reviewer: mcape32 (Signed)
May 27, 2009 09:29 AM · On:
I absolutly love this story. I'm sad when i'm done reeading the chapter because it's over. I can't wait for the next chapter. so quite reading this and get busy writing. haha just kidding. Your writing is great. Hopefully Edward will progress more soon.
Reviewer: vampiremama (Signed)
May 27, 2009 09:25 AM · On:
Bella is going to be so mad at Alice when she finds out she spilled the love beans.
Oh and I am sure it was a typo about Alice filling the Ipod with her favorite song. But I pictured 32GB filled with THe Barbie Girl song. Ha Ha.
Reviewer: BellaCara (Signed)
May 27, 2009 09:16 AM · On:
I shook my head and pulled myself away from him. “Positive. Go hunt so we don’t have any birthday mishaps.”
Alice got jokes!
I love it...:)
Reviewer: Daylen (Signed)
May 27, 2009 09:15 AM · On:
So Bella's 'fessed up to herself... Alice 'knows' and it just remains for Edward to connect the dots on his own recovery and feelings and the two of them to go public :)
Alice's internal monologue was hilarious especially when she's trying to school her thoughts - kind of makes me wish for an EPOV on that sequence as well... although I don't know if it'd necessarily be possible for him to make that much sense internally right now.
Without Bella's quiet support, I'm guessing his mind tends to get a little unruly when he's alone.
So what happens the morning after, I wonder?
As far as the human experiments go, I've actually been wondering if the humans somehow created Edward from venom stores? It's been a while, and I don't know that I'll go back over every chapter but I don't recall a reference to the usual bite mark... although it's normally assumed, with human labs involved I thought maybe Edward wasn't the 'first'... and perhaps Alice's history is connected for that matter?
Reviewer: sherylb (Signed)
May 27, 2009 09:02 AM · On:
I already figured it was humans-government????????
Reviewer: princessitavalevale (Signed)
May 27, 2009 09:01 AM · On:
aaw i love this chapter!
bella finally admiting loving him
and edward spending some time with alice and the rest of the cullens! i like it! =)
continue soon pls!
Reviewer: Galathea82 (Signed)
May 27, 2009 08:57 AM · On:
Im reviewing because Im happy!! what a birthday!!! I wish mine where like that about all have the chance to end it sleeping next to Edward wiiiii
Hey I have a question, the fact that Carlisle ask to Aro not to come so soon is not suspicious?? well for the Volturi?
Reviewer: ablissfulday (Signed)
May 27, 2009 08:07 AM · On:
Great party. I'm glad he was comfortable in the living room. It's a step!
Reviewer: AmeliaH (Signed)
May 27, 2009 08:04 AM · On:
When he first said it wasnt Vampires and that he'd never seena vamp before my first thought was warewolves. Dont ask me why I just thought maybe they were trying to find more weaknesses or something! Im very interested in why humans had him and what they were doing. Loving the story! Very original!!
Reviewer: lanamoosh (Signed)
May 27, 2009 08:00 AM · On:
Ahhhhh.. I feel like I'm completely addicted to this story. I've been checking for updates every few hours since the middle of last week. I swear, I was twitchy and in withdrawal!
I'm so glad Bella's bday was lovely. I was a bit worried with her dream and whatnot that the humans or the Volturi or someone was going to crash the party. Instead, it was just right. I know there is party crashing to come, but look how far our Edward has come! I'm so proud of him. I have all the same questions that Bella does about how in the world humans were able to keep Edward (though I'm not surprised it was humans.. I think the other chapters fleshed that out pretty well). I still suspect other vamp interference .. or maybe there's something else supernatural out there. Some kind of religious order interference perhaps?
I feel like I'm my own commercial for your story: Tune in next time for the answers to these questions and more...
Reviewer: Autumnmissa (Signed)
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May 27, 2009 07:57 AM · On:
Have I told you how much I want to cuddle and prtotect Edward too? There is (dare I say it) something nummy about this Edward that makes one want to hold him, cuddle him and give him tiny kisses all over!!!! And turn vampire and kick thier asses...who ever thier asses are. Speaking of that...I still think that or theorize that these humans must have either a vampire to help them or be shaft shiters like down at La Push...Would hate to think that it was them. But maybe thier bitterness made way to get a hold of Edward to do experiments to try and kill them off or make them suffer....OK, please more ASAP...with an Alice pout and an Edward on top...PWEASE?
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