I am LOVING this story. I am literally loosing sleep to read what will happen next. I can't seem to put it down. James is going to rear his ugly head pretty soon though. I can feel it. And I love the pace you've set for ExB to fall in love. It makes it that much sweeter when they both realize it & confess it to eachother.

"I waited for him to explain, because he was going to."

Great stuff.

Really a great story.  Mystery, humor, all with personalities in line with original stories.  Well written.

WOW!!! So good. And funny. Whats a snapple? What kind of store sells apple sauce and socks?...So funny.

I have to tell you that I started reading this late last night, and at about four in the morning, I was laughing so hard about Bella telling Edward that he was gay, I almost woke my husband up. You have no idea how funny that is, especially when you don't expect it and stumble upon it at 4 AM. It was like an SNL skit or something. Hilarious. And Edward's response was just classic. I loved it. I'm not finished with the story yet, but I had to tell you thanks for writing this. It's a fun ride. You're a very gifted writer. I especially appreciate your economy in language. You never use superfluous words. You keep your sentences tight and your story focused.  

xoxoxox -addicttwilight2

I REALLY LIKE THE WAY YOU DEVELOPED THE STORY. YOU WERE RIGHT THIS IS MORE REAL

Fun story!  I love the basic idea, and you're carrying it off beautifully!  It means less teen angst, which is refreshing :-)

Awesome chapter!  I adored the ending, with Bella getting her way!  Great work!

oh that was so good, i havent laughed so much for ages! i could just picture alice rolling round the floor laughing when she saw that one coming! going to complicate the romance a bit though?

Ohh, I love it! What a wonderful dark and mysterious side to this Edward. It is so refreshing to read a fanfiction that isnt about teenagers wallowing in misery (sorry to the younger folk out there!)

yaaay!  good ending

It was a wonderful story!  At times violent, intriguing, sweet and emotional - it was great!  Your characters were both familiar and unique!  I loved it!

This was one of my favorite fan fiction chapters of any story ever, and I have read a ton of them. It was creative and genius. There were tons of phrases I wanted to point out that I liked, but I will stick with an early one:

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"I stuck my tongue out, but he didn't take the bait (he never did), and I instead found myself pulled forward in a tight hug. I tried to relax into his body. I loved him so much, but everything was so confusing. Touching him was like setting my entire body on fire--it was too much, too hot. I now realized why it had been so difficult for him to make these transitions in our relationship. It felt so good it was almost painful. The lines between love and lust blurred and it freaked me out.

Edward felt my tension and released me, and I pretended not to see the look of desire that filled his eyes.

Always appropriate, he took my hand and simply grinned, "It's all progress."
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I love the personality and behavior of both your Bella and Edward. I love the way you described her struggles, struggles that hadn't come up before as often, such as distractions and sensitivity to gentle touches. The fact that Edward remained such a "creature of habit" in different ways throughout your story was fun. Your story progressed nicely and it was consistent.

I can go on forever! I loved this chapter and her journal. Great writing.